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| BlackMage | May 18 2011, 10:03 PM Post #1 |
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Elemental Bending Champion
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Clan Name: Seiryu Village:Demon Country Main Element: We don't specialize with any elements. Clan Language: Any Shade of Red, or *Placing Inside Asterisks* : Body Language.: Body Language is 93% of all communication. It is the ability to understand body language, as well as using ones body, it's placement, posture, positioning, as well as facial expressions, and things like [touching, hand gestures [not sign language], etc.] To communicate. It's only a Vague, and abstract form of communication. Where Base emotions, and ones intent can be communicated better. But one can't force someone to do something, or read ones mind. Head Leader: Yoshimitsu Seiryu Spoiler: click to toggle Type: Ninjutsu, and Seals. Attire: Clothes: Most prefer to Wear the Clan's Armor Fabric, as for Color their taste are as unique as the member, although all Seiryu Clan members wear their Clans Symbol somewhere on their Person. To show Clan Pride. If they are in missions through they usually where their Symbol behind there Headband. Symbol: ![]() # of RPC Members Allowed: We except all who want to join our Clan. Reputation: The Seiryu clan are Quick and Decisive Fighters. They use whatever will win the quickest, and will readily alter their landscape or their surroundings to throw their opponents of balance. Not all of them are Strategic Fighters though, but those that lack in Strategy make up for it in Raw Stopping power. After all why try being tricky when you're a Tank. But regardless they get the Job done during combat. The Seiryu Clan is one built around Technological and Jutsu superiority. While they can be very Philanthropic to the Citizens of Demon Country and their Kage. Their main goal is the be the best in everything they set out to do. They take in all members, Missing Nin to Regular Shinobi are treated the same and protected the same. If you're looking for Innovation and progress. Look no further, this clan has something for everybody. Clan History:
Radio Tower: It doesn't work past our Clan Grounds, but we have a Jutsu created, Radio Tower. It allows our Communication Devices to work without any Distance Limiters by boosting Radio Waves with in our Clan's border. Kage's Permission Main Source of Income: Farming: They Raise the Spiders near them and farm their potent silk for Armor and Clothes. As well as Farming Metal Hair through the use of Hair Extension Jutsu, and Huge Vats. The hair is collected and used to create unique materials that are used to bring in a huge Income. Item Creation: Their innovative nature allows them to create items that bring them in large amounts of money that rivals their Farms. Special Attributes: The Clan is Very Creative, and excel at making things Are Well rounded Ninja Strengths: Chakra Pool: They have Huge reserves of Chakra which comes in handy when they need to get stuff done. Chakra Manipulation: They are skilled at Manipulating their Chakra, and shaping it to do what they need. Manipulation Skill: Those of the Seiryu tend to be highly skilled in manipulation jutsu such as wire manipulation, hair manipulation, chakra threads, ect. Through rigourous training, there skill in such is slightly better then that of the average shinobi. Shortcomings: Strength: While they are very potent Ninja's boosting the ability to speed up Manipulation has left a good portion of them weaker than your average ninja. Poison Immunity: You'd think that Living near a group of Human child sized Spiders. That they'd have good immunity to poison. But not a lot of them do. Impulsive: A portion of the Seiryu Clan have a problem of doing what ever pops into their mind as a good idea. While they have control over obvious lethal things [such as Punting a God Beast in the Balls with a kunai]; other areas though not so much control. If it sounds fun, profitable, or something that could Boost up their social standing. They'd try practically anything. Rank:[edit_reason]Added built after Kage Arrived, and Jutsu made Fortress, added Our Clans Tower. As well as Clan Language.[/edit_reason] Edited by BlackMage, Jun 2 2011, 07:01 AM.
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| Kagemaru | May 18 2011, 10:22 PM Post #2 |
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Shodaime
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Your special attributes....its another bloodline simply put, and thats a no no. If you honestly got rid of that stuff and just left the app as is you'd be fine, but...the point of attributes are you know simple things like things you accell in like Training and such. Know what I mean? |
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| Mew | May 18 2011, 10:31 PM Post #3 |
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Special Attributes: Common strengths and weaknesses that your clan members share. These cannot be jutsu like, nor can they be special abilities. Simply putting "Chakra Pool - Clan members tend to have high chakra pools" would be an example of an acceptable strength. Steel strength hair, faster manipulation... those seem like clan jutsu and special abilities. But, like what Kage said. Remove the entire spoiler of special attributes. Remove everything after background and its stampable. The special attributes are not free abilities and they never should be anything even remotely close to that Q.Q |
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| BlackMage | May 18 2011, 10:32 PM Post #4 |
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Elemental Bending Champion
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Ks. Changed it to they are good at making stuff [Creative], and Well rounded. |
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| Kagemaru | May 18 2011, 10:34 PM Post #5 |
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Shodaime
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The steel hair is still their. Thats not a strength thats a special ability. Change eeet plox? Like just get rid of it and re-app it as a Special ability for your clan. |
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| Kagemaru | May 18 2011, 10:39 PM Post #6 |
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Shodaime
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While I like your body language strength this bottom portion, no go. The way i'm reading it it lets you control a targets thoughts about you as well as become a lie detector for free. I don't like that to be honest :/ Thats not really acceptable dude. |
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| Mew | May 18 2011, 10:58 PM Post #7 |
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All clan S/W have to be on the RPC's profile or else they dont exist to them. Just making sure that you know @.@ Like Kage says, the steel hair is a special ability, but you can app it for your clan. The body language strength... having a special language you can speak and read is ok. Being able to manipulate and read other people through a mental strength is not. Sorry, it really has to go. If it was just a 'I can pick up other peoples emotions' and only that, it would be fine. Lie detector is a no-go. Manipulation speed... this seems like a jutsu effect, not a strength. |
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| BlackMage | May 18 2011, 11:40 PM Post #8 |
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Elemental Bending Champion
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Ks. Fixed it. [Only saw his Bodly language Post.] Body Language is fixed. With a descriptive example. So that People don't get confused on what it can do. Although it can Convey intent, it's no where able to do anything close to thought control. If a person wants to ignore it, or wouldn't believe / buy it normally then they won't with Body Language. |
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| Mew | May 19 2011, 12:18 AM Post #9 |
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Apocs Smex Slave
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One moooooooooooore thing! Please remove the modifiers from the S/W These are common strengths and weaknesses that people in your clan may have, and are common for your clan They wont have modifiers, they will have modifiers if people choose to take one of these s/w and place them on there profile. -nods- These S/W dont effect the RPC at all whatsoever until there on there profile. Also, once again. Dx What you have for the manipulation strength, isnt a strength. Thats a jutsu effect. If you want a strength in manipulation, its going to be something like this: Manipulation Skill: Those of the Seiryu tend to be highly skilled in manipulation jutsu such as wire manipulation, hair manipulation and even chakra threads. Through rigourous training, there skill in such is slightly better then that of the average shinobi. Without it being a jutsu, something as extreme to what you have now, would be jutsu/enhancement/special ability only. What I have above is what you could get away with with this taken as a strength. Edited by Mew, May 19 2011, 12:18 AM.
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| BlackMage | May 19 2011, 12:49 AM Post #10 |
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Thanks. That's what I was basically going for. Anyways it's all fixed. |
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