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Nemesis & Desmond Crowley Feedback
Topic Started: Mar 2 2015, 03:24 AM (119 Views)
Sidewinder
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Yeah, sure, why not.

Not to sound arrogant, but I'm not particularly looking for praise.

I'm more interested in people's opinions on them.

For better or for worse.

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Bump.
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Willie
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I love Nemesis. Honest to goodness. I really dig mindless, silent monsters.
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I wish I had feedback to give. I feel bad that I don't.

Honestly, I like Nemesis a lot. He's very well written. Typically, I really dig silent monster types (just like Will above). However, I am dying to see more interaction from him with other characters. The silent monster gimmick is so tough to keep fresh after a while. It's cool he's got Desmond so that helps a lot, but it also adds a slight disconnect with the character.

I don't want any of this taken too negatively because I'm not sure it's such a major issue that it's going to affect him any time in the immediate future. However, I would just suggest keeping it on the radar for the future.

I think if Nemesis ever does develop his own voice, it has the potential to be terrifyingly awesome. I totally understand making the monster be his own voice can go extremely sour and ruin a character (that is why I would never tell you to definitely do it) however I have confidence with your writing that you could make it an amazing change to an already well-written character.
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Willie
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I do like Desmond Crowley a lot too. He feels like Father James Mitchell, the Sinister Minister to me. Although I would like to see him accompany Nemesis to ringside rather than just being his mouthpiece.
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