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Mercedes Blackwell feedback; How is she?
Topic Started: May 27 2015, 07:16 AM (66 Views)
BleakInfinity
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Okay, it's been about a month now that I've been back and this is the first female I've ever RP'd as and the first new character I've had in years. With that in mind, how have I been doing? Thoughts? Suggestions? Cheap insults?
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Lita Maivia
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I love Mercedes. She feels real and someone that I can connect with. She also plays fantastically off of Kim and that's always fun. I feel like you've been doing a good job of getting her involved by really reacting to everything that's thrown her way. By letting the frustration show on her, it makes it easier to sympathize with her and let's her feel like more than just words on a screen.

And as I've said before, she's so fun to write in matches. I love her moveset and style.
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BleakInfinity
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That's super good to hear. I appreciate the feedback. I think I just feel like I haven't found her voice yet. Or like I told Nathan, maybe I'm just too critical of my own work. Lol.
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Digitalwheelin
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I already gave you my feedback in private, but I'll go ahead and say it here as well.

I agree with Lita in that Mercedes seems very real and she is easy to sympathize with because of the way she gets antagonized and shows the frustration because of it. She tries to hide it as best she can from whoever is antagonizing her (as with Nathaniel and Kim) and that makes you, as the reader, connect with her and feel for her.

One thing I really liked that you did in one of your RP's this cycle was have that interaction in her hotel room with the maid. It happened after Kim and Nathaniel berated her and Nathaniel made that joke about hiring her as his maid in his mansion. There was a point where she was talking to the maid and we find out she's been there at the hotel for 5 years, but she didn't let that defeat her and she's still staying strong and providing for her family. Mercedes' reaction and response almost came off like "Okay, even if he's (Nathaniel's) right and things don't pan out for me, it'll be okay." Not that she'd be okay with being a maid, but the fact that she'd be okay in general and it's not demeaning to her. I thought that was really well done and it was a great way to show her mindset without telling us what it is.

Another thing I like that you do in your RP's is include the Spanish language because Mercedes is able to speak it. I always like when handlers incorporate their character's accent or foreign language in it whether it be in describing the way they talk or writing things out phonetically in the way they sound because of their accents. Adam and Dai are the first 2 examples of handlers that both do that with Bloodbath and Billy Walker respectively, and I think that's awesome.

Overall, I'd say you're off to a great start with Mercedes, man. The style in your RP's is great and the content is equally as good, so just keep at it.
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