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FIW Weekly Double Shot Supershow Feedback; July 21st, 2015
Topic Started: Jul 21 2015, 10:12 PM (169 Views)
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ReVolt


Singles Match
Roy Harlowe vs Johann Wolff
Referee: Mark Deveraux
Writer: The Other Steve

Singles Match
Maxime Rowley vs “The Portrait” Darian Gray
Referee: Richard Kelly
Writer: Nate

Hellcat Singles Match
Avila vs Siobhán O'Reilly
Referee: Kristy Arnold
Writer: Sid

FIW Fighting Spirit Championship #1 Contendership
Best of Seven SeriesTexas Death Match

H@VOK (3) vs “Immaculate” Jimmy Steel (2)
Referee: Domenic Dorsch
Writer: Sid

Summer of Sin Announcement
Writer: Steve

Singles Match
Mad Dawg vs Quincy Wilson
Referee: Logan Black
Writer: The Other Steve

Main Event
Tag Team Match

The Blood Diamonds (Bloodbath McGrath & Nathaniel Alexander) vs The McConnaigh Brothers
Referee: Tony Clarke
Writer: Steve

Fallout

Singles Match
Gunther Hoffman vs Shaun Wilson
Referee: Domenic Dorsch
Writer:

Pet Segment
Writer: Jo

Singles Match
Johnny Amazing vs Cody McGinnis
Referee: Kristy Arnold
Writer: Nate

Jack & Madison Manson/Neo Carner Segment
Writers: Seph, Steve, & Lita

Singles Match
Stephen J Eversol vs Pyotr Sadovsky Dean Venchenzo
Referee: Logan Black
Writer: Nate

Catherine Segment
Writer: Joe

Note: I tried several times to edit this into the show and it kept clearing out whole show posts. I had to redo the ReVolt portion of the show twice because of it. I tried adding it into different sections of the show and it still just kept wiping out the posts. I posted it as an FIW.com Exclusive in it's own post and it worked fine. So it should really belong at this point of the show.

Six Hellcat Tag Match
Brittany, Mercedes Blackwell & Pet vs. Terri Golde, Samantha Hayes & Honey Rydell
Referee: Mark Deveraux
Writer: Lita

Main Event
Non-Title

Mungrel vs Catherine Neville
Referee: Tony Clarke
Writer: Sid
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Jo
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I know why it wouldn't work, I think it was because of the quote box at the end of it. Sometimes I find in certain threads if I use a quote box in the middle then the rest just doesn't want to appear for some reason. *shrug* So if that weren't there then it should work into the show. Sorry, it had just been a while since I ran into that problem that I forgot it was even a problem otherwise I would have just put quotation marks and centred it to stick it out from the rest.

Yay! Pet wins for team...looks around...Team Pet! lol Didn't see that one coming to be honest. Also, is it my imagimination or did Brittany not get a single hit in until Helena came in? Not that I'm complaining because I think we've ALL seen enough of her, lol, but it was nice as it sort of began pushing away from Terri and Brittany. Plus Terri walking away from the assault was a nice touch. :)

I kinda feel bad forgetting that side of Mungrel during my RPs otherwise a person like Catherine would indeed have gone into some form of detail over it. That he's a sexual deviant and probably a sex offender in nearly every state. lol Still, it was a good match and the ending leaves me hopeful and intrigued. C'mon, Catherine, don't let go of that brass ring! lol

I had fun this RP schedule and while there were times I thought I would've had time to RP with Sadovsky, it actually felt nice just being able to focus on just having fun in the party thread. Even if things got a little mellow toward the end. Like I mentioned before I didn't have a clue as to how Pet's past would play out, like what reason would be big enough that she'd basically give up on life but not to a suicidal level, but playing around here and on her Twitter I kinda have an idea now. Only thing though is who does she trust this to first?

Party on,
Joe.

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Really sorry I didn't leave feedback last week. Had a lot of shit going on, didn't even read the show proper until Saturday. I liked it.

But onto this week's show, I liked it too! My match was well written and I feel like it sold both of the characters while still giving Jimmy the win. That made me feel good. The post-match promo was a cool way to deliver the scheduled final match of the best of seven, too.

Feels like I read something else but I don't know. You guys are all beautiful and have nice skin.
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I can't out-feedback Bleak so I'll leave my own style.

I thought the show had a really good flow to it. The one thing the fedheads are really getting good at is card placement. The Hellcats seem to have their "place" near the top of the card, there's a robust midcard, the main event is solid, and the upper-mid guys are always seen as a constant threat. I like it a lot. The lowbies are very talented as well. And I like the idea of doing tag team matches with higher-card stars even if they aren't necessarily a legit team. Keeps things interesting.

The LLLLLLLLLLLADDER match next week should be fucking boss. I love the evolution of Jimmy Steel from jobber to Coulter Crew fukboi, but I want to see him become his own man. The pop's gonna be ridiculous.

Tag team main event was great although I'm sad I lost, it was dirty as fuck so the McConnaighs were well protected and the Blood Diamonds also looked really good. Pair that with the really good and interesting twist to next week's ME and it all went down really well. I guess I really missed Steve's booking is all; that he tends to make sure everybody looks good in a certain way whether they win or lose. Would love some more interactions between Kim's guys and my boys though. That visual of Owen yanking Kim off the apron, THEN catching her is funny as fuck to me.
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Felt good to take a break this week, needed to recharge the ol' motor and it's been a hard time. But I just wrote a promo and I feel great, I think I got a lot in the noodle this week and going to write up some award winners.

Show was stellar, very nice from start to finish. Bummed to lose to Johann, but the Nazi got me. Oh well. On to he next one. Roy will have better luck in the future!

Liked the Blood Diamonds this week, they're a team to get behind.

More Sadovsky, I want him nice and built up so Cage can take him out >____>


Really had fun doing the segment with Lita and Steve, after though I felt I could have done more, but I felt like with the time we had left we could continue to build up the feud. Would love to hear to hear people's thoughts on it, really I would.

As for the Darian Gray spot, it was messed up...again. >_> This is the second time this spot has been messed up. XD Which has led me to believe I'm just gonna have to write it myself to get it done right. No harm, no foul, we all got lots going on.
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Willie,Jul 21 2015
11:03 PM
I can't out-feedback Bleak so I'll leave my own style.

I think Nate and Marc are the tag team champions of feedback, to be honest but I appreciate that. Haha.

I really had fun with the party thread this past week and it was good to give Mercedes, Pet and Brittany a chance to interact a lot and to give each character more depth do that was really fun. I'm trying to make Mercedes a character who's in the middle because Brittany and Pet are so different. So Mercedes is a happy medium. She can get drunk and make dirty jokes every once in a while but still knows her limits.

Onto the feedback.

Roy vs. Wolff
This one was a little bit of a challenge for me to write just cause I wasn't too familiar with writing the characters but in the end I liked the way the finish turned out and hope that everyone else (especially the handlers) liked it too. I like the intensity between Roy and Darian that's starting to flare up and 4R is just so easily hateable.

Max Rowley vs Darian Gray
Nate did a good job with this one and I've told him this before but his commentary is really good. I think he's one of the best when it comes to writing commentary and this match was no exception. I was glad seeing Darian Gray pick up the win this week again.

Avila vs Siobhán O'Reilly
I really like the Siobhán O'Reilly character so I hope that we see more of her in the future. But this was a good win for Avila and short and sweet.

H@vok vs. Jimmy Steel
I'm really happy we get to see a 7th match between these two. There was no other way that it could've ended so I'm excited that we have this announced for Summer of Sin. I liked the Ethan Adams promo also, that built up the anticipation of the announcement as well.

Mad Dawg vs Quincy Wilson
This match was a ton of fun to write. I was able to throw in some MMA and that was great to work with from a writing standpoint and cause I like the competitive nature of Quincy. The Bloodbath/Mad Dawg feud is pretty intense and I'm happy that Eversol is now tagging with Mad Dawg this week. It should be fun.

The Blood Diamonds (Bloodbath McGrath & Nathaniel Alexander) vs The McConnaigh Brothers
Steve did a great job with this one. The way he put together the psychology of the match and the fact that he mentioned Eversol in with Coulter's Crew was really great to read. The McConnaigh boys still looked really, really strong and the Jack Manson promo was awesome to set up next week's tag match. I had no idea Eversol would make an appearance there but it was awesome. Great job to Steve.

Gunther Hoffman vs Shaun Wilson
This was another match that I had fun writing, especially the Shaun Wilson character who has a great move set. 4R are such awful characters but I love to hate them. I hope that I pulled it off enough to put some heat on them and allow Shaun Wilson to actually play the face in this match,

Pet segment
Pet has become one of my favorite characters. The fact that Mercedes is friends with her definitely helps but the things she says just always make me laugh in a good way. Good segment.

Johnny Amazing vs Cody McGinnis
Another great job by Nate on this one. Again, he had great commentary and the flow of the match was good. I was glad to see Johnny pick up the win again and the interference by Erik Holland was a surprise but a good one.

Jack Manson and Neo segment
Well, holy shit. Now I hate Neo a little bit too. Really great segment to all involved cause that was masterfully done and now I'm interested to see where their feud goes now that Neo has attacked Madison.

Stephen J. Eversol vs Dean Venchenzo
Well, looks like Nate was 3 for 3 now. I had joked about calling Eversol "Shooter" or "The Shooter" and he went ahead and put it in there which was great. I really liked the back and forth between Eversol and Dean and the respect that they showed for one another. Chip clamoring for Kim the entire time was hilarious too. Good job, Nate.

Catherine segment
Really liked it and it set up the week for more RPs and gives more depth to Catherine

Brittany, Mercedes Blackwell & Pet vs. Terri Golde, Samantha Hayes
This one was really fun to read with all that was going on. From Helena coming down to the announcer's booth and choosing not to speak, to Pet being the underdog and being able to get the win. Good stuff. I liked how Pet being an amateur like almost falling off the top turnbuckle is being shown. The aftermath with the Helena beat down was super awesome too. Great job as always, Lita.

Mungrel vs Catherine Neville
That was a great win for Catherine and that ending was just great. I like the fact that all of the characters still in contention for the DC appeared and then the grin by Mungrel knowing he's being hunted by everyone else was great to see too. Great job, Sid.

Overall this was a really good show this week and it sets things up nicely now that we're coming closer to Summer of Sin.

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All I can say is the show was flipping amazing!

Also the reason I don't leave feedback is because... I suck at it.
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I really liked my match, it was well written in the context that it was meaty in the action department and when it was over I didn't feel like there should have been more. That's always good, so good on you Bleak.

Pain, feed the backs of the many who want it. Just say what you liked and why you liked it, that's feedback :P
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Pain, feed the backs of the many who want it. Just say what you liked and why you liked it, that's feedback :P

Even a simple thank you to the writers would suffice. You don't have to get all wordy like some of these guys do. I'm horrible at articulating my feedback like so many others around here are capable of.
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You'll have to excuse me for short feedback.. No internet til Friday so i'm typin this from my phone. Anyways this was definitely a fun show, bit surprised to see both4R members get the win. Great job by Bleak on both matches especially with getting heat for 4R. Also enjoyed the Quincy/Dawg match, had a number of great spots dspecially woth the MMA spot.
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Mad Dawg's Accomplishments

Dual Crown Champion
(2/12/16 - 9/24/16)

2X FIW Undisputed International Champion
(1/29/12 - 5/27/12)
(10/13/15 - 1/8/16)

Finisher of the Year 2011 - The Mauler
(Runner-Up) Feud of the Year 2011
(Runner-Up) Heel of the Year 2011
Storyline of the Month (Apr '11, June '11, Sept '11, Nov. '11, June '12)
Match of the Month (Feb. '12, June '12)

"Big Bad" Bobby Sanchez' Accomplishments

FIW Undisputed International Championship
(5/12/13 - 9/1/13)

2012 FIW Grand Prix Champion

Storyline of the Month (May '12)
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The show was awesome this week! It was a bit tough for me writing 3 matches, but I don't think I have room to complain when Sid has practically been writing half the show for the last couple weeks and then Lita wrote exactly half the show a few weeks ago. Lol. Anyway, on to the feedback!

ReVolt

Roy Harlowe vs. Johann Wolff
I really liked the pacing of this match, the quick pinfall attempts made it seem like they were both eager to put it away quickly and it added a good sense of drama to the match as well. It was really good psychology from Bleak for this match. I also enjoyed the finish at the end with Darian coming in and attacking Roy with the picture. I thought it got Darian's viciousness over after the last time he did that to Ramsi.

Maxime Rowley vs. “The Portrait” Darian Gray
I wrote this match last after writing Dean/Stephen and Johnny/Cody and I think doing that made it the hardest one to write. I've written both Max and Darian before, but by the time I got to this match, I was fairly drained mentally, so it was a bit tough. One thing I wanted to showcase was the size and weight difference between the two, and the way Max had to basically use his speed advantage to try and get some moves in. Hopefully both Skell and Matt are okay with the way I wrote their characters in this match.

Avila vs. Siobhán O'Reilly
This was a nice, short match that got both Siobhán and Avila over really well. It started off very fast paced with a lot of big moves right from the start, which isn't a bad thing, I don't think. Really good match from Sid. Like The Other Steve said, I like the Siobhán character a lot.

H@VOK (3) vs. “Immaculate” Jimmy Steel (2)/Summer of Sin Announcement
I wasn't sure where this whole thing was gonna go but I'm glad we get to see it spill into Summer of Sin. I thought that was a perfect ending for that match and the match itself was awesome. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing the final match in this series because I think both Wight and Marc have been doing a helluva job with the RP's for this and keeping it going.

Mad Dawg vs. Quincy Wilson
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JH: Quincy Wilson is possessed, he could’ve broken Mad Dawg’s arm!

CM: Pretty sweet, huh?

JH: Not really

CM: Pansy!


That part made me laugh. This was a really good match with good heel psychology from Mad Dawg and I like that it showed even more of Quincy's mean-streak and viciousness. That's one thing I've always liked about the character aside from the RP's that Bran puts up for him. The MMA spots in this match were awesome to see, especially being a big MMA fan myself. The finish with Bloodbath coming in and interfering on Quincy's behalf was a nice touch as well. It'll be interesting to see how things go in the tag match with Blood Diamonds vs Mad Dawg and Stephen Eversol after what happened in this show.

The Blood Diamonds (Bloodbath McGrath & Nathaniel Alexander) vs. The McConnaigh Brothers
I had a lot of fun RP"ing with Adam for this match. I tried to put over Alexander's manipulative side and him basically trying to blackmail Bloodbath was a way to toy with his head and manipulate him to help Alexander in this match. Unfortunately for Alexander, it didn't quite work that way, but at least they still worked together pretty well to get the win in this match. And the beat down afterward was great as well. I like the swerve with the upcoming tag match having an effect on Nathaniel and Stephen's chances in the DC tournament, that was a nice touch and I'm looking forward to RP'ing for that especially with everything going on for both characters.

Fallout

Gunther Hoffman vs. Shaun Wilson
Match #3 from Bleak that turned out just as good as the rest on this show. I really enjoyed reading this match. Much like the Harlowe/Wolff match, the quick pinfall attempts in this match made it seem like both men were eager to put this one away quickly. Chip's constant hatred toward 4R was a fun to read too. The Other Steve said I'm good with the commentary in my matches, but I think he's just as good with it. Overall this match was a really fun read.

Pet Segment
This was a nice change of pace from the other Pet segments that we've seen before. I liked that this one was more comedy-based in a way than anything else. The bit with Pet scurrying away at the end reminded me of a cartoon when a character gets caught doing something they're not supposed to and they rush off with smoke coming from behind them. Lol.

Johnny Amazing vs. Cody McGinnis
Just like last week, I tried using some lesser used moves that Johnny had in his moveset and also tried to get Cody's insanity over and his viciousness as well. I think that worked well leading into the finish for the match. Hopefully Lita and T both liked this match. I had a lot of fun with it because it was easy to get a grasp of both competitors' styles, especially because I've written both of them before.

Jack & Madison Manson/Neo Carner Segment
Wow, this segment was awesome. The way Neo started off hidden from view and then went after Madison seemed almost like a movie villain to me. I'm really liking where this stuff is going between Jack and Neo and I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes from here.

Stephen J Eversol vs. Dean Venchenzo
This was the Battle of the Steve's. Lol. One thing The Other Steve requested was for me to incorporate his new nickname into either the action of the commentary for this match, so I did that as best I could. Hopefully both Steve's enjoyed this match. I also tried to make it as competitive as I could and tried to also showcase how both guys pretty much know the other's moves and such well enough to counter and whatnot.

Catherine Segment
I like the way the history between Catherine and Brittany continues to come up and this segment reinforced that. It'll be interesting to see what happens from here with that whole story. 'Nother good segment from Jo.

Brittany, Mercedes Blackwell & Pet vs. Terri Golde, Samantha Hayes & Honey Rydell
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CM: I could make a joke, but… oh, hell! I would love to see how the three function on my unit!

JH: I think the fans can literally hear me face-palming right now, Chip.


That's another part that made me laugh out loud. I love when writers portray Chip in an overly exaggerated Jerry Lawler sort of way. The match itself was great too. I really like what's been happening with the Hellcats division and I'm definitely looking forward to seeing more. The interaction in the Party thread had me laughing too with the jokes between Mercedes and Pet. Good stuff and I can't wait to see more.

Mungrel vs. Catherine Neville
I wasn't expecting Nathaniel to make an appearance in this match at all, let alone the rest of the DC tournament competitors. I liked the way this match all played out and the intrusion of those competitors made it really cool to read as well. I agree that the closing shot of everyone eyeing the Dual Crown titles and then Mungrel realizing that and smirking was a great way to end the show. Overall this was an awesome match and the aftermath made it that much better. And not just cause Nathaniel was involved :P Lol. Great stuff, and I'm definitely looking forward to next week.
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