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Summer of Sin Feedback; August 11, 2015
Topic Started: Aug 11 2015, 10:09 PM (546 Views)
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Dual Crown Contendership
Fatal Four Way Match
Cage Murdock vs Stephen Eversol vs Nathaniel Alexander vs Johnny Amazing
Referee: Tony Clarke
Writer: Sid

Fighting Spirit Championship
Falls Count Anywhere Match
Cody McGinnis © vs Erik Holland
Referee: Domenic Dorsch
Writer: The Other Steve

Honey & Samantha Segment
Writer: Jo

FIW Tag Team Championship
Grudge Match
4R © vs The Summit
Referee: Kristy Arnold
Writer: Steve

Pet Segment
Writer: Jo

Singles Match
Grudge Match
"The Portrait" Darian Gray vs Roy Harlowe
Referee: Richard Kelly
Writer: Nate

Nathaniel Alexander & Kim Coulter Interview
Writers: Nate & Lita

Fighting Spirit Championship Contendership
Best of Seven Finals - Ladder Match
H@VOK vs "Immaculate" Jimmy Steel
Referee: Domenic Dorsch
Writer: Sid

Catherine Segment
Writer: Jo

Undisputed International Championship
Dog Collar Match Match
Bloodbath McGrath © vs Mad Dawg
Referee: Logan Black
Writer: Seph

Hellcats Open Challenge Gauntlet
Final Match for Hellcats Championship
Kim Coulter © vs Winner of Gauntlet
Referee: Mark Deveraux
Writer: Lita

No Holds Barred Match
Grudge Match
Jack Manson vs Neo Carner
Referee: Lester Riggs
Writer: Seph

Rise of a Legend Advertisement
Writer: Jim

Mysterious Light Segment
Writer: ???

Dual Crown Championship
Singles Match
Mungrel © vs Winner of Fatal Four Way
Referee: Tony Clarke
Writer: Sid

OK good news....I purchased a copy of Windows 8 yesterday and got my computer up and running very late last night. With that there are a few things that I haven't gotten to yet. Such as the coming weeks card. I will get on that just as soon as I get back from picking my kids up.
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Haven't read the entire show yet. Steve wouldn't spoil much for me and... I SEE THE HELL WHY!

KEITH WILLIAMS! You sexy son of a bitch! :D

And the close to the show was fantastic! Nathaniel Alexander as Dual Crown Champion is something that I am so thrilled to see! I think he's going to make an incredible DC.

I will read more in full and give better feedback soon. But those are two things that I had to mention. So excited!
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Cage being pinned is BS in my opinion.
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Bit Sausage? Bobo Socks? What? WHAT??? :P

I didn't win but that's okay, I was having fun this week. I kinda felt blah with Blink, just wanted to get her on the card. Pet was fun and I don't care if people didn't like it enough to reply in the feedback...y'all loved it and you're just jealous of how awesome it turned out. lol I also liked writing Terri becoming more and more darker and karazy as the weeks go on. But that's me.

I just read the bits of the Hellcat match I was a part of, sorry. I always thought Freebird rules only applied to titles. Oh well, it wasn't put in as a major screw job over anyone important. :P Not that Blink isn't, just...I didn't put her in to win. In fact I was contemplating at the end of the week to throw in Samantha and Honey just so the gauntlet would be full. I enjoyed Pet's bit with Momo, even if it's gonna get her into trouble later on. Once I figured out the flow of the match and saw that Mercedes was the last entrant I kinda knew Terri wasn't going to win. So I was okay with it, like I said.

I think that's about it.

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This show was... oddly-paced. Interesting decisions made.

I kind of want to do long-form feedback, but I just don't have it in me at the moment. I'll try again later tonight.

Great work getting it up nice and early, glad to see so many full matches. Getting the trains to run on time is a monumental task, especially when trying to herd other people to do it, so I always like to congratulate the team on getting it done.

I'll save everything else for the long-form feedaback.
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Just saying, I rp'd as much as I did to avoid that. Congrats to Nathan, glad he won it and all. Just irked to high hell my guy I've poured alot of work into is losing at every ppv.
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I know I'm probably the last person to be having this discussion, but isn't this only Cage's second PPV match? Wasn't he also a tag team player when he first came in? Didn't he make it all the way to the finals in a Dual Crown contendership series? These are all questions I'm asking because I don't know the answer. :P What I'm saying is, you made it this far in your first couple months with a new character, shouldn't that be enough? I mean it took me over a year to get a tag title shot for Blink and Catherine.
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I haven't read the whole show yet, but I am going to, though. I'll be editing this post with full feedback as soon as I can. Just wanted to say...

WOW! I was pretty surprised when Nathaniel got the win in the four-way because I was convinced it would be Stephen Eversol. And then to see him get the DC was even more shocking to me.

That's one thing I wanna say in the feedback here, though; the RP's Lita was putting up with Kim insinuating that she was gonna do something to turn the tide in favor of either Alexander or Eversol honestly had me A) eager to see what happened and B.) wondering just who the hell she was talking about. Awesome writing from Lita with those RP's and definitely great job to everyone involved in both matches. I'm definitely looking forward to seeing what I can do with Alexander from here.
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It's a feedback forum, I'm leaving my irritated feedback. Am I saying I should have won? No. Am I saying I didn't deserve to lose? No. I'm just honestly frustrated, that's all. I tried my best and I failed, am I a sore loser? You're damn right, but that's just me. I'm not trying to create a big fiasco out of it, just venting my frustrations.

In all honesty, this should be about congratulating Nathan, who I told several times throughout the week I honestly could see him winning, I even predicted if it wasn't me it'd have been him.

I'll leave puppy dog and rainbow feedback in a bit.
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I'm gonna try to leave completely honest feedback and really really hope I don't offend anyone with this. If I hurt your feelings or anything I say upsets you, please contact me through PMs or whatever and we can talk about it. I'm really not trying to upset anyone, but just give my reasoning for my decisions in the judging thoughts I gave.

Dual Crown Contendership
Fatal Four Way Match
Cage Murdock vs Stephen Eversol vs Nathaniel Alexander vs Johnny Amazing

I picked Nathaniel to win. No offense to anyone else in the match, but I just felt Nathaniel was the complete package right now. Eversol was a close second, though. Nate and The Other Steve were on par with one another this week, but I just feel like Nate has a tad more on him considering Nathaniel has been around a little bit longer this go-around. One thing in particular I noted to Steve was that I admired how Nate has been one of the best OOC members of the board in that he takes wins and losses so well, always coming to me with ideas on how to keep Nathaniel going regardless of what happens in matches.

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Cage being pinned is BS in my opinion.


I'm gonna fess up here and say that I picked Cage to be pinned. I also said that I'd be fine with Johnny taking the fall if that was how others felt. Personally, I don't think I really liked anything from Cage this cycle. Usually I find him hilariously charming in a bit of a meathead kind of way. This cycle, though, he really came across like a made man with a chip on his shoulder and he's just not that. Also, Nathaniel plays that role better than him at the moment. I'm sorry, Seph. I still love you. :(

Fighting Spirit Championship
Falls Count Anywhere Match
Cody McGinnis © vs Erik Holland

My vote was for this match to be canceled. I was highly annoyed that nobody in this match RPed until the day of deadline. There was two weeks to RP and this was a CHAMPIONSHIP MATCH. Like I told Steve, I would have loved for Johnny to be in this position. It was awesome being in a DC contenders match but I just really don't feel Johnny is ready for that. Getting a chance at the FSC would have been a dream for me with him at this point. So I'm sorry if I'm overreacting to this situation. But yeah. I just know T is capable of so much more than I'm seeing from him here.

Honey & Samantha Segment
I kind of like this whole Honey crushing on Johnny thing, honestly. Hehe.

FIW Tag Team Championship
Grudge Match
4R © vs The Summit

Disappointing that there were no RPs for this. I also pitched this get canceled but I had no real ideas on how other than suggesting Nemesis wreck things like the beast that he is. But I knew it made no sense considering Nemesis has no connection to anyone in this match.

Pet Segment
Oh Pet, you so silly. I do have to admit that I am really enjoying Pet. And so long as Jo remains OK with her being booked as comically as she's written (with some exceptions, of course) then I am perfectly OK with her being as ridiculous as she is.

First Blood Match
Grudge Match
"The Portrait" Darian Gray vs Roy Harlowe

I sided with Roy in this match, honestly. I loved the Darian RP. It was great stuff. However, I felt it the first Roy RP was just as good as that Darian RP. The match RPs that didn't relate to Roy's match were humorous where they intended, so they were nice reads. I wasn't sure if Steve or anyone else was going to include those in their decision.

Nathaniel Alexander & Kim Coulter Interview
I felt like this needed to be in the show. I wrote one with Nate and one with Bleak just to be safe (though there was always that off chance NEITHER would get used). I'm happy with how this came out. The Nathaniel/Kim dynamic is so much fun.

Fighting Spirit Championship Contendership
Best of Seven Finals - Ladder Match
H@VOK vs "Immaculate" Jimmy Steel

Another decision that didn't go the way I decided. Sowries to Wight. You know I love you, but I voted for Steel here. I adored the Steel RP and the change in character that we finally got from him. It's what I was hoping we'd get from Steel by the conclusion of this series. Havok, I don't feel like he's really evolved any during this series. He also seems a bit whiny to me, to be perfectly honest. Still, he's well-written even if I don't care what the actual material.

Catherine Segment
I gotta say, I am really loving less bitchy and more somber Catherine. She's actually readable. Lol. Good stuff.

Theme Song Ad
I just threw this in before the show went up because I thought it'd be a nice little plug for a local band. And since Mad Dawg is from the same city as them, I thought it worked best right before his match.

Undisputed International Championship
Dog Collar Match Match
Bloodbath McGrath © vs Mad Dawg

I'm shocked to see Bloodbath win. It's who I voted for because I just love Bloodbath and Adam's writing almost always impresses me even to this day. However, I had a bad feeling that his number was up considering how on his game Marc has been with Mad Dawg lately. I'm glad to see this doesn't look like it's over.

Hellcats Open Challenge Gauntlet
Final Match for Hellcats Championship
Kim Coulter © vs Winner of Gauntlet

Wow, this match took longer to write than I was anticipating. Still, it was a lot of fun to write all things considered. Everyone that RPed really put in a good effort with their girls so I was glad to see everything that I saw coming from this match. The Tea Party intrigues me and Adam does so good with Helena. If there was more content with this, the Tea Party probably would have ended up bulldozing quite a few people, honestly. At least, Helena might have. I liked what I saw from Helena enough to give her two victories in the gauntlet and enjoyed having Brittany as the first victim of the Tea Party. In the end, it has been Mercedes that has been the most impressive to me. Bleak does a great job with this character and I'm honestly surprised at how well he's doing with her. I don't think I ever would have guessed Bleak being interested in playing a female competitor and doing as well as he does with her. So I was glad that my vote for her to be the gauntlet winner was supported by enough people for it to happen. Amazed that Kim was given the win to retain her title but glad to see it. I don't think Bleak and I have done nearly enough with Mercedes and Kim yet, so I'm looking forward to that.

No Holds Barred Match
Grudge Match
Jack Manson vs Neo Carner

Damn you, Neo Carner. Honestly, this victory was deserved. I wanted Jack to win just based on the storyline and Neo being such an asshole. But Seph didn't slack even with Steve's computer problems and Seph has put so much into this angle. It's a great pay off for him, I believe.

AND KEITH F'IN WILLIAMS!!!! Kyle got a hold of me a while back and made mention of potential sleazy sightings but I never dreamed it would be this soon. I honestly thought it was something that he was just idly considering and might not even come to be. But dang! I am thrilled to have Kyle back and even more thrilled that it's Keith Williams! This is going to be good.

Mysterious Light Segment
Who... the funk? Why does it feel like Jim to me? Lol.

Dual Crown Championship
Singles Match
Mungrel © vs Nathaniel Alexander

When I voted for Nate to win the four-way, I also made the vote for him to win the whole shebang. As I said above, Nathaniel is just DC-ready. I think he's got a great character, he feels comfortable in this gimmick, and Nate has a fantastic attitude that makes him so easy to book angle into. I love that he doesn't mind Nathaniel looking like a fool. That's one thing heels don't seem to be comfortable with these days, for some reason. Nathaniel is one of those rare heels that can look a fool one minute and then be a total beast the next. I've also been dying for some fresh blood into the DC picture so I'm glad to see this accomplished.

I had high praise for Mungrel as well. Mun has a similar attitude as Nate, honestly. Never once have I encountered any kind of issues with Mun in terms of booking for his characters. He's so easy-going and regardless of what situation he's into, he generally manages to RP to the same level and seems just focused on making sure people are entertained by what he puts out. It's one of the reasons Mungrel is one of my favorites despite Mun having a slight tendency to show up late to the game. Lol. I'm a tad sad that Xtreme Kitten didn't return but I can't stay upset when it's Keith Williams underneath. Lol.


All in all, I thought it was a fantastic show, folks! I had two losses but I managed to retain a title. It could always be worse, can't it? Lol. Big thanks to everyone who helped us with this show, big thanks to anyone who pitched in on segments, and great job to everyone who RPed for their matches. There was so much good stuff this cycle and I am having fun with literally everything I'm involved in. You guys rock!
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You, madam, have offended me. Just...lemme get my kitty paw glove. What? Doesn't everyone have a pair? I bought them so I could know how to properly portray Roxie wearing them. ...anyway, no I like the way Pet is. She's like the female Mungrel half the time. Sure she likes to win but mostly she just wants to have fun and flirt with Momo. Though I do smell a confrontation between Pet and Dean over Momo only with Momo not really caring. lol I do like this side of Catherine being a little more down to earth since she's got a helluva lot more to worry about than just her career. Honey and Samantha are always a thrill to write especially as an insider-outsider look at Terri's downward spiral. Also, the scene to me just seemed like some high school hallway before Prom. Now we just need Johnny to reciprocate. :) Then Brittany can get on his case about who he spends time with. lol
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So where's my head.

Just feel a little bummed coming out of SOS with Neo only being successful. I feel like the more time I spend on my other characters the more time I'm just wasting when they continue to consistently lose and lose and lose. It's discouraging and only makes me wanna work with myself because it's the only time I can get myself going towards something. Cage taking the pin is just a sprinkle on top of the shit cake I've been eating in life as of late, and I guess I just felt like it was the straw that broke the camel's back.

But in all honesty, Nathan deserves the win. He's been hitting on all eight cylinders, he's active, and he's a huge contributor to the site, couldn't have been a more deserving win. Bummed Mungrel wasn't around much going into the cycle, would have been a blast to RP against him again back and forth.

Darian winning doesn't bug me in the slightest, I told him straight out he deserved the win after that stellar RP he released. I've helped Matt a lot with his character and this feud he helped me bring a different side of Roy out, although with the loss he's taken two steps back instead of forward and I'm a little curious to see where I take him because I honestly have no idea how much is left in the tank for Roy. But Darian, I'm damn proud of.

Momo is injured, Momo is done(for now as a competitor...>_>) I'm done trying to compete in the Hellcat Division, you guy's all understand women a lot better than I do and it just isn't my game right now, too many of you hitting on all cylinders and I'm spinning my wheels on an empty tank of gas for her type of RPs. It was a fun experience and I'd join again any day down the line, just ain't for me right now. Great match though, Lita always out does herself.

Keith Williams being back is something I've desperately try to get happen since 2013, I've bugged, and bugged, and bugged Kyle and I think none of it worked, I think Lita making goo goo eyes and graphics for Keith really put the nail in the coffin and made Kyle break, because that bastard never budged for me :P I'm really excited to see where Neo's going and can't wait to see him do great things with The Revenants.

Cody won! >_> Keep winning. Neo wants that FSC to make himself Grand Slam Champion, and that Bare Foot Lego Match ain't going to write itself.

The arrest angle was a brilliant move that salvaged everybody and made them all look tougher coming out of it.

I had fun writing Bloodbath match, it was fun because it was just brutal and aggressive. I hope to see Mad Dawg bounce back and get a rematch though, he hella deserves one with how close he was to winning the contest.
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Quick address to Seph thinking Cage taking the fall was BS. When it came down to it someone had to take the fall and you all did a tremendous job RPing for this match. For me it came down to who would it be less damaging to take the fall. Jo hit it right on the head in my reasoning. Cage has been here for the least amount of time and has accomplished so much in such little time. I felt like him taking the fall wouldn't tarnish the name he has made for himself up to this point.




And now for some individual feedback. Don't believe we've missed anyone and by we I mean me and a couple of my behind the scenes advisors. If there is anything at all you have questions about please feel free to ask. I'd be happy to try and elaborate on anything at all.

OK so here is some handler feedback and I’ll cover some characters as I do so. I did have some feedback from my backstage crew which I have incooperated.

Adam – Not a whole lot to say about Adam. Bloodbath McGrath is ACES in my book and I definitely see him as a main event player. Helena is on the rise and I’m glad to see Adam bring her back as she is a vital part of the Hellcat division. The only critiques that both myself and the others that provided me feedback could see is that you tend to favor one character over the other. That and sometimes fairly close to deadline you pile on a bunch of RP’s. We’d really like to see an even balance between the characters and a bit more on the steady flow of RP’s to allow a back and forth with your opponents.

Bran – Something has been different with Bran since I’ve taken over as fed head. Before I took over Bran was the work horse of FIW and one of if not THEE hardest working members of the roster. So it’s been kind of a shock that he’s be amiss lately and it was quite disappointing to see him no show for the PPV. Overall, we feel Quincy is solid character and comes off as the perfect ‘slimeball’. There really isn’t a whole lot to say in regards to RP feedback with the exception of sometimes sloppy grammar.

To be honest I was hoping that Quincy winning the FSC would be the shot in the arm that Bran needed for things to take off once again. While he remained fairly consistent, you could tell that at times his head just wasn’t in it. His loss of the title just before the PPV wasn’t a slight to him in the least bit and I really hope to see him battling to regain the FSC and continue to elevate Quincy through the ranks.

Jo – I have to say that I have a hard time with Jo’s characters. It’s not that he writes them bad because I think he is probably one of the best writers we have in FIW. I just don’t get his character’s though I have grown fond of Pet and have always had a place for Pyotr in my heart. :P One of the pieces of feedback I got was that it is felt that Jo slips into “anime writer” mode. Having his characters react like they’re in anime rather than “real life”. Which very well could be where the disconnect comes from for me as I do not and never have followed anime.

Another problem I run into is the amount of characters Jo has. I think it’s great he has all the characters and he seems to have a clear idea for each of them (more so the females than Pyotr  ). But when he’s requested that only two be booked at a time, it is hard to keep a rotation while pushing a feud or even trying to get one of them into a title scene. I’d really like to see Jo take a more active role in how and when his characters are booked, so that we are paying attention to the characters that Jo wants attention paid to at the present moment.

Lita – I think in all of the time I’ve been in e-fedding, I don’t know anyone who has given nearly as much thought into every aspect of their characters being as, Lita. I think one of the best things said about her in the feedback I received was that if you stripped away all the colors and names that you’d know exactly which character she was roleplaying with. Each character has its own identity and voice and she conveys that extremely well in her RP’s. With all that said I think Johnny was probably the hardest for her to get up and running with and I know the feedback I received also echoed that. Johnny is starting to find his place and I would really like to see him get involved in a solid program that can continue to establish him as the star I know he will be.

Marc – Another one I have a hard time finding anything to say about. One thing that was pointed out was that sometimes Marc writes things long winded which takes away from his RP’s. I had some time to reflect on that and I can see where the person providing the feedback was coming from. In all we feel that maybe if you just tried to simplify what you were saying a bit that your promos would flow a little better. I absolutely love the Mad Dawg character. Jimmy Steel I still think needs some fine tuning but is establishing himself nicely.

I was a bit disappointed to see no RP from 4R for the PPV but that one I think I can kind of put on myself too as I knew I was spreading you thin booking all of your characters in important feuds going into the PPV. Then again it wasn’t like you had much to work with considering your opponents didn’t RP either.

Matt (cookingood) – I was very happy to see Darian come back as when he was here before he showed so much promise. This feud with Roy was good for him and I am interested to see where Darian goes from here. The consensus in feedback was for Matt to continue developing distinct personality of which the dark vanity angle is working quite well.

Nate – I said it earlier about Bran being the work horse of the roster. Nate has firmly taken that role by the horns. I have absolutely nothing critical to say about him. Hence why he is our Dual Crown Champion. He knows his character and conveys it well in his RP’s. All I can say is keep up the good work. I can certainly see a fruitful DC reign for you.

Steve – Really anything I can say I’ve already said for Nate. Steve is another one of our work horses and knows his character’s voice extremely well. In all honesty, it was a huge tossup between Eversol and Alexander on who won the DC. Keep up the good work and you’ll have your shot.

Seph – Seph is another one of the RP’ers around here that has a firm grasp on writing and getting his characters over. One of the things that was observed for feedback and I have to agree but I also know life can get busy which may be why Seph and others have this common issue. But things tend to get dropped at the last second RP wise in a flood. I don’t think it’s a huge deal though as I said for Adam earlier, it would be nice to see more back and forth RP’s throughout week.

Another critique that was offered was that his characters come off sounding the same. This isn’t something that stood out to me but at the same time I felt that it was worthy enough to mention. Because if one person is seeing it, then it is likely that others may be seeing it as well. That is with the exception of Momo who clearly stands out from the rest of his characters.

Finally, we think that Seph could work on selling his opponents better. It often comes off with most of your characters that you trash them and tell them you are going to win but rarely put them over at all in your RP’s. In the end just giving your opponent a little bit of a rub not only gives your character more validity in beating them but can also make your opponent look good in the process. I mean if you beat someone you just told was the worst ever and didn’t build up at all. What would your character have achieved in beating someone that bad?

Tamarcus – When he is committed he is really good with Shaun and if he gave it his all I could even see him as a UIC or even DC contender. But that just isn’t something we’ve seen this time around. Honestly, it’s disappointing but I know he’s been plagued with some real life stuff. So with that I don’t really fault him too much. Until further notice from Tamarcus I will not be booking Shaun as he hasn’t even been on the board in about a month.

Skell - Honestly, I have a hard time hopping on the Max Rowley train that others have hopped on. I don’t know what it is about the character but I just don’t get him. Skell is a great writer but the Max Rowley character just falls flat for me and I just cannot place my finger on why. The addition of Siobhan to the roster was a nice one as I feel if given the proper attention from Skell she could tear up the Hellcat division. I love that character.

Skell is another that has been plagued with some real life stuff hence why he hasn’t been around much lately. Though when he is around it’s often noticed that his stuff comes in a bit late in the week. I’d really like to see more variation of when stuff comes in rather than the day of deadline, if not just before deadline.

Jason (T, Pain) – I’ve said it before and I’m starting to see improvement in that Jason is starting to give his RP’s more substance. He started off kind of rough but after feeling things out I think he came to his own and even impressed me and the judges enough to give him a shot at the FSC. I hope he takes the ball and rolls with it. I think my biggest issue with Jason is that a lot of the time his RP’s go up pretty close to dead line making it feel like bombing. Only other thing I can point out is just being more mindful of grammar when writing.

Wight – Without giving Wight a virtual hand job….Wight as long as I’ve known him has a strong grasp on writing and characterization. Which isn’t surprising considering he’s a published author. I have nothing bad to say about him and think that where his characters go is really only a matter of where he wants them to go.

Will – I’ve known Will for a long time and in that time he has come leaps and bounds with his writing and character development. I think that his biggest faults are trying to take on too many characters while also having a busy personal life. If Will was to focus on one, maybe two characters we could see him running near the upper part of the roster. When you have so many characters and you want them to rotate, much like I said with Jo, as a booker it is hard to find a place for them while trying to find a place for each of the other characters as well.

Mun: – Hands down Mun is one of my favorite writers to read as I always get a good chuckle out of his work. At times the grammar is off but I think the content of the writing and the humor often over shadows that for me. My biggest issue with Mun is that most always his RP’s go up like a minute before the deadline and honestly it comes across as intentional which isn’t fair to his opponents. Mun is a three time Dual Crown champion, there is no disputing that he has what it takes to be at the top of FIW. I’d just like to see him interact more with his opponents and give them a chance to work off of him.

Sid - When it comes to match writing, judging, and storyline planning, Sid is the biggest work horse in all of FIW. He is my saving grace at times and I can't say enough good things about him as a contributor in FIW. He is a phenomenal RP'er and I really hope that we can find something for Nemesis to gain some ground and start his path of destruction and collecting titles along the way.
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Ya know I roleplayed some this weekend, and the Bergeronsmade it into July. Maybe I could get some ffeedback too? :P

Also, congratulations to Nathan. Alexander has been one of the best heels in the fed since he came here, he's come a long way from feuding with Dez and Sean James and shooting Jim O'Brien in the face with a staple gun when he was the Death Angel on TNT.

Ryan - you're my dude, bro.
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<option style="color:black">THE ROUGAROU</option>
<option> Name: </option>
<option>"The Rougarou" Silas Bergeron</option>
<option>Height:</option>
<option>6'6"</option>
<option>Weight:</option>
<option>296 lbs.</option>
<option>Hometown:</option>
<option>The Bayou</option>
<option>Entrance Music:</option>
<option>Led Zeppelin - 'When The Levee Breaks'</option>
<option>Wrestling Style:</option>
<option>Methodical Powerhouse</option>
<option>Signature Moves:</option>
<option> - Sword of Damocles </option>
<option> - Chokeslam </option>
<option> - Bayou Leg Sweep </option>
<option>Finishing Moves:</option>
<option> - Swamp Drop Brainbuster</option>
<option> - Honey Island Swamp Lock </option>
<option>Title History:</option>
<option> - 1x Fighting Spirit Champion</option>
<option>Other Cool Stuff:</option>
<option> - 2014 1st Runner Up, FIW Roleplay of the Year (Family Reunion)</option>
<option> - 2014 FIW Segment of the Year (The Rougarou Cometh)</option>
<option> - 2014 1st Runner Up, FIW Feud of the Year (vs. Mr. GEIST/Deacon DEATH)</option>
<option> - 2014 FIW Duo of the Year (w/ Butch Babineaux)</option>
<option> - 2014 1st Runner Up, FIW Newcomer of the Year</option>
<option> - 2014 & 2015 FIW Manager of the Year (Butch Babineaux)</option>
<option> </option>
<option> Now do you believe in The Rougarou? </option>
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<center><select style="font-family: Tahoma; font-size: 8pt; background-color: cadetblue; font-weight: bold; color:black">
<option style="color:black">#SWAGOLITION</option>
<option> Name: </option>
<option>"The Condemned" Lucas Bergeron</option>
<option>Height:</option>
<option>6'4½"</option>
<option>Weight:</option>
<option>235 lbs.</option>
<option>Hometown:</option>
<option>Kandiyohi, Minnesota</option>
<option>Entrance Music:</option>
<option>Black Sabbath - 'Hole in the Sky'</option>
<option>Wrestling Style:</option>
<option>Athletic - Strong Style - Brawler</option>
<option>Signature Moves:</option>
<option> - Exploder Suplex </option>
<option> - Powerbomb </option>
<option> - German Suplex </option>
<option>Finishing Moves:</option>
<option> - The Manhattan Project</option>
<option> - Honey Island Swamp Lock </option>
<option>Title History:</option>
<option> - n/a </option>
<option>Other Cool Stuff:</option>
<option> - 2015 FIW ReVolt Match of the Year (vs. Nemesis, 6/6/15)</option>
<option> - 2015 FIW Feud of the Year (vs. Nemesis)</option>
<option> - 2015 FIW Babyface of the Year</option>
<option> - 2015 FIW Duo of the Year (w/ The Rougarou)</option>
<option> </option>
<option> Just Give The Lunatic A Chance... </option>
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<option style="color:black">THE MAN IN BLACK</option>
<option> Name: </option>
<option>Jim O'Brien </option>
<option>Height:</option>
<option>6'7"</option>
<option>Weight:</option>
<option>290 lbs.</option>
<option>Hometown:</option>
<option>Grant's Lick, Kentucky</option>
<option>Entrance Music:</option>
<option>Motörhead - 'Line in the Sand'</option>
<option>Wrestling Style:</option>
<option>Strong Style Powerhouse</option>
<option>Signature Moves:</option>
<option> - Belly-to-Belly Suplex</option>
<option> - Saito Suplex </option>
<option> - Jackknife Powerbomb </option>
<option> - Hells Bells-plex</option>
<option>Finishing Moves:</option>
<option> - Hells Bells</option>
<option> - F-Bomb</option>
<option>Title History:</option>
<option> - 2x Fighting Spirit Champion </option>
<option> - 1x co-holder of the FIW Tag Team Championships of the World (w/ Jorge O'Brien)</option>
<option> - 1x Ultimate Endurance Champion</option>
<option> - 1x Spirit Of Honour Champion</option>
<option> - 3x Dual Crown Champion</option>
<option> Other Cool Stuff: </option>
<option> - 2015 FIW Hall of Fame inductee</option>
<option> - 2004 TNT Superstar Of The Year</option>
<option> - 2004 Feud Of The Year (w/ Silent Rage)</option>
<option> - 2004 Match Of The Year participant (vs. Silent Rage @ FIW Genocide)
<option> - 2005 1st Runner-Up, TNT Superstar Of The Year</option>
<option> - 2005 Co-Match Of The Year participant (vs. Silent Rage @ FIW Anarchy In The UK)</option>
<option> - 2008 & 2012 Lady Luck Tournament Champion </option>
<option> - 2008 Grand Prix Tournament Champion</option>
<option> - 2008 Match of the Year participant (vs. Liam Mortell vs. Kiyoshi Nakahata @ FIW Summer of Sin) </option>
<option> - 2008 1st Runner-Up, FIW Feud of the Year participant (vs. Ash Koopa)</option>
<option> - 2008 1st Runner-Up, FIW (Face/Heel/Tweener) Turn of the Year</option>
<option> - 2009 ReVolt Match Of The Year participant (vs. Ethan Adams @ ReVolt Against The Champions X)</option>
<option> - 2009 FIW Tag Team Of The Year (The O'Brien Clan, w/ Jorge O'Brien)</option>
<option> - 2009 FIW Duo Of The Year (w/ Kendra O'Brien)</option>
<option> - April 2012 Superstar of the Month</option>
<option> - April 2012 Storyline of the Month ("Dirty Deeds...")</option>
<option> - May 2012 Superstar of the Month</option>
<option> - May 2012 Match of the Month participant (vs. Damien Holburn @ FIW Deadlock)</option>
<option> - July 2012 Co-Match of the Month participant (vs. Mad Dawg @ FIW ReVolt (07/01/12)</option>
<option> </option>
<option> So yeah, Jim was awesome. :-D </option>
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Jimmy Jimbo,Aug 11 2015
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Ya know I roleplayed some this weekend, and the Bergeronsmade it into July. Maybe I could get some ffeedback too? :P

I love Lucas. He's adorable and quirky and such a loveable character. He feels real. As in real messed up. I like reading that and getting to know more about him and playing a part in helping to fix him as much as he can be fixed at this stage in his life.
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So, I get to follow Lita and Steve? That's not fair. Haha.

First of all, I appreciate the kind words Steve said and the fact that he took time to leave feedback for each handler, it's a big help. I'm happy he and Lita both said that my characters are entertaining and I hope everyone else find them to be entertaining as well.

I thought the PPV was fantastic! Just like Lita, I had no real problem with having Eversol eat the pin and thought that's exactly what was going to happen anyway. But I liked Steve's booking and Eversol not taking the pin does give me some stuff to RP with in regards to the Nathaniel-Eversol rivalry.

Even if Eversol lost the fatal-four way, I had a ton of fun RP'ing on this cycle. I had fun going back and forth with Seph as Cage. I agree with Jo in that Cage is still somewhat new and definitely see the character getting to the DC at some point. He's already come a long way in a short time.

FSC match

I actually had a ton of fun writing this match. I know it was a bit disappointing there was a lack of RPs until the very end but I hope that the match itself was still entertaining. I was able to use some old attitude era-influenced spots for it and a little bit of comedy as well.

I do think this division probably needs a bit of a shakeup though and would love to see some of the other competitors move up and feud over this title.

Honey-Samantha segment

I always like the segments Jo has for his characters. This one was funny and I like the Johnny crush too.

Tag Match

Sucks we didn't get any RP's for this one but coming up with the arrest angle was really cool to see in keeping the feud going and keeping the characters from looking weak or anything. The FIW.com thing about the four wrestling being arrested was a nice touch. But being a Niner fan, I half assumed it was one of our players. :P

Pet-Katalina segment

Pet has really come a long way and I've been really entertained by her a lot. Her rap RP was clever and the fact that it was clumsy made it really fit, in my opinion. It's also been really fun having her become such good friends with Mercedes too. I've gotta hear more about this glass of juice and it being balances on an ass. Haha.

First blood match

Nate did a great job with this one. As I always state, his ability to make the commentary flow with the match is awesome. His commentary is great and something I keep striving for in my own writing. The way he writes Chip is a lot like Bobby Heenan, which is awesome.

Kim-Nathaniel segment

I'm such a fan of both of these characters, which is why I'm glad my characters are now in feuds with them. It' fun to RP with or against them. They remind me of the asshole Quarterback and the bitchy head cheerleader but with the volume turned up, if that makes any sense. Good segment that gave us a taste of what was to come.


FSC Number One contender

I really didn't know what to expect here since I feel like both competitors sort of disappeared the last few weeks. It happens sometimes but it left me wondering who would win. I thought it could have gone either way, but I am a fan of both characters.


Blodbath vs Mad Dawg

Bloodbath looked like an absolute monster here. I liked how Kim had to basically make him stop. I hope to see Bloodbath hunting for the DC too at some point. I'm a big fan of the character and am glad that we're going to see more from he and Mad Dawg as well.

Hellcat gauntlet

What a great match this was! I know I probably sound like a broken record at this point, but Lita just does such a great job in writing the Hellcats and giving them all time to "get their shit in" that I always look forward to reading her matches. I really like the new Tea Party stable as well, the Hellcat division is on fire.

I didn't know what to expect after the Hellcats had all come to fight this past week. Everyone put out quality stuff so I'm super happy to see that Mercedes is the one who made it to face Kim. I'm so glad that people seem to be fans of the character. I really like the decision here seeing Kim retain is probably best to keep Mercedes eager to beat Kim and to actually have the feud grow so that it isn't simple a case of Mercedes getting her revenge so quickly. I look forward to all of the awful things Kim will do to Mercedes in the near future haha. The angry little fan girl was a nice touch.

Neo vs Jack

I really wanted Jack to kick Neo's ass just cause Neo is such an asshole but the match was nice and brutal the way I liked and the XK/Keith Williams was a cool reveal. I really hate Neo for all of the right reasons as he really is great heel. Probably the biggest one next to Nathaniel, at the moment.

Mysterious Lights

I thought that might be Nemesis but I'm guess it's somebody else all together. Sounds awesome to me. The more, the merrier.

DC title match

The match was intense and had me on the edge of my seat, good stuff. I told Nate all week that I felt like if there were going to be a title change that I felt Alexander as champ is the logical choice. He had been built as this monster who was just wreaking havoc on everyone so much that I felt that was the best choice.

Would I had been disappointed with the win? Of course not. But Nate really deserved it and I'm happy that he finally got it. He's been working his ass off as Alexander for almost two years now, if you count NGIW too so it really is great that he finally reached the DC. I'm looking forward to continuing the feud between he and Eversol as well.

Great show to everyone who contributed and thank you for all of the positive feedback that I received so far. I hope to continue entertaining you all haha.
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Ya know I roleplayed some this weekend, and the Bergeronsmade it into July. Maybe I could get some ffeedback too? :P

Like I told you the other day, I liked it and am really interested in seeing his crush on Brittany grow. I felt bad for Lucas when she left cause Roy needed her. I'm interested in where that goes from here.
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Kudos to Nate on the big win.

Long live the League.

*returns to the ether from whence he came*
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Long live the League.

To The League!
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Loved the show overall and I'd like to apologize for the last minuet RP's. I kinda just put everything on the side while at a friends house and basically just had an RP sitting there unfinished on Docs.
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I was gonna give that detailed feedback but most of what I was going to say has already been said by Lita and Steve, and the confusion I had about some of the decisions seems a lot clearer now that it's been explained. The only thing I can add is that I probably would've stripped the tag champs of their titles for no-showing a title match, even if their opponents didn't show either. But I tend to be a harsh mistress.

If there's any advice I can give to folks like Seph and Jo it's that more bookable characters does not necessarily equal better. You end up overtaxing yourself and... uh... flooding the market with your work, so to speak. That's why (in Seph's case) they can start to sound same-y or (in Joe's case) they can slip back into that hyper-unrealistic bent that rubs a lot of judges the wrong way. Months ago I had considered bringing Ghostly Warrior in as an actual wrestler, for example, but the more I thought about it the more I realized Havok was doing a fine job of filling the role Warrior would fill and it's better to have him around to accentuate who/what Havok is than spreading that concept out so thin.

At the same time I also get the desire to have a bunch of your characters doing cool shit in the fed so you feel like they're an active part of the game and not just ancillary people nobody really knows about except you and your biggest fans. NGIW recently did a thing with jobbers who basically only won if the other guy no-showed. I think Slam! had something similar back in the day? If you're comfortable making your peace with characters not winning that might be a good way to showcase them, help out with the fed when booking cards (oh no! So-and-So's been on a big losing streak lately; let's throw them a soft pitch with these jobbers to keep their morale up) and there's nothing to say you can't elevate them later like a certain Mr. Dern. It also frees you up of feeling like success in competition is the only reason to write something for a show (not that I'm suggesting that's an issue; I just know it has been for me) so that you can write silly fluff pieces or dumb jokes or whatever without feeling like you're letting yourself down or not living up to your potential.

Now that NGIW's closed again (and for the forseeable future) I'd like to do a little helping out around here. First and foremost on my list of Things To Do is updating the "Wighty's RP Clinic" thingy to be more concise and more in keeping with today's sensibilities instead of the ones from years ago. Steve, if you need me for anything throw me a word. I might even land hand to write a match now and then... though admitedly it would be rather sparingly.

Anyhow, I feel like in the end this show has been a good 'reset button'. A lot of stories have been put away, a lot of new chapters have been opened, and moving forward I think FIW is going to forge a more clear direction for itself.

Looking forward to it.
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Fo fo fo lyfeeeeee.

*too sweets Neo, doesn't too sweet Mjolnir, too sweets Lita, too sweets Steve, too sweets Little Jimmy*

It's good to be back. And at Summer of Stache no less. We're here to run the show, boys and girls. The Revenants are takin' ovaaaaa.
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