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Tuesday ReVolt Feedback
Topic Started: Nov 30 2016, 12:10 AM (297 Views)
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Promos: Craig, Bleak, Nate, Lita & Otaku
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Just about in time, with seconds to spare. I always knew this was going to be a bit of a rush job because of the change in deadline and I don't know how many know, I work in a college here in the UK looking after our faith schools provision and this week is Ofsted. Ofsted means a government inspection, which happens every few years and basically judges how good/outstanding/adequate/room for improvement you are. Because my provision is offsite, they WILL want to see it at some point this week and that causes its own problems. Not so much a problem for teaching reasons, more the culture. It's not uncommon to hear a threat of Saturday detentions across the tannoy (boarding schools) and things like that. So it's meant late nights working till 8pm yesterday and today, hence almost missing the 'on time' promise.

Well done all for coming through the board downtime, thanks to Lita for updating via NeonGIW and Wight for allowing that. If that sort of thing does happen that would be the place to go or the FIW twitter account.

Fantastic fun this week in the Wildcard team thread. As a rule I personally don’t really enjoy or ‘get’ the big gathering roleplays but that one was good fun. Thanks to Otaku, Nate and Matt.

I don’t do this often but I just want to take time out to highlight one roleplay I REALLY enjoyed, the ‘Creepily Kind Words’ rp featuring the Lords (Zombie particularly) and Johnny Amazing. Wight asked last week about some feedback on his characters as they were doing well and sadly I didn’t get around to PMing that over mostly due to the downtime. For me, they don’t seem like ‘wrestling’ characters and that’s their appeal. They come off more like characters in Lucifer or something like that. Of course we need the wrestling characters to counter balance them but the Lords have become a big highlight for me to look out for. The dialogue with Jericho and Zombie is just so cool, it’s something to savour.

I'll leave it there for now, thoughts?
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Good show guys and it's awesome you got the card up on time,Big props for that just don't over due your selfs guys.I have one question though,Did me and my team win our tag match?Sorry just the finish and wording has me a bit confused is all.It was fun doing the thread with everyone and thanks to all of my opponents this week too.Fun times and good stuff all around.I got a plan for kira that i'm going to edge on week after week till he goes off the cliff so to speak.More creativity and fun should pop up with this metamorphosis he's going through.I hope i can do some stuff with Danuwaanalihi too just need to think about some backstory or character thing to do with him.Good job everyone and lets kill it this coming week too!
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Kira eliminated Father Jakob Pike but was later eliminated himself by Gustav David Richlen, although his team (Nathaniel Alexander) won the match overall as the sole survivor.
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ok thank you for clearing everything up for me.
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See Darian, that's what would've happened if you and Dream went one on one. I'd put you on Dream Street, baby!

I'm at work so I haven't read the entire show, but I wanted to get that out first.
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Great show as usual. Thanks to Craig for getting everything up for us with everything happening around him.

Sorry to everyone involved that I didn't write any matches this week. I keep forgetting that they are abbreviated except for pay-per-views. I'll try to remember that and come through next week.

I also wanted to add that it was nothing personal that I didn't contribute to the group rp thread for the main event. I got a couple of pm's from folks who felt I was being difficult and that just wasn't the case. Jakob Pike just isn't the character to do that as he believes everyone is tainted, vile etc. Even his fellow wrestlers. Kind of the reason he also didn't get involved in the Halloween threads. I did read the thread for the team I was on this week and it was awesome. You all did a great job.

Greats to our new Rising Champion. I hope you have a long reign.
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Great job, Craig. Even if you weren't so busy one day is a hell of a feat in getting the show done and up. :) I did want to put in a segment for Colin, get that ball rolling, but I wasn't certain how his app process was going and didn't want to assume. Oh well, my fault for not inquiring. :) --Resolved for now. What I get for waiting until the end of the day to sign in. :D

I had a fun time writing up Crystal's RP bringing in a little more of her parental relationships. Not to mention starting out on her new attire. Which, :doh: ,I know I said I'd get to but it was a far busier week than I thought even with the downtime and couldn't get into researching anything for her. I found a new theme for her and just listened to that more than I thought about the entrance. In short; I procrastinated. So new goal; end of the year! lol

Second RP, the one in response to Helena, came off as confusing to me. Even with the edits I made afterward. I hate it when you have an idea but can't write right away and when you can everything comes out as a jumbled mess. So apologies there. So while I was uncertain of her chances, I'm at least glad she got the victory*. Yes, big asterisk. :P The Pike bit was cool too coming to Courtney and such. So all in all, a lot to write about. :)
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Leucippides,Nov 29 2016
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Great job, Craig. Even if you weren't so busy one day is a hell of a feat in getting the show done and up. :) I did want to put in a segment for Colin, get that ball rolling, but I wasn't certain how his app process was going and didn't want to assume. Oh well, my fault for not inquiring. :) --Resolved for now. What I get for waiting until the end of the day to sign in. :D

I had a fun time writing up Crystal's RP bringing in a little more of her parental relationships. Not to mention starting out on her new attire. Which, :doh: ,I know I said I'd get to but it was a far busier week than I thought even with the downtime and couldn't get into researching anything for her. I found a new theme for her and just listened to that more than I thought about the entrance. In short; I procrastinated. So new goal; end of the year! lol

Second RP, the one in response to Helena, came off as confusing to me. Even with the edits I made afterward. I hate it when you have an idea but can't write right away and when you can everything comes out as a jumbled mess. So apologies there. So while I was uncertain of her chances, I'm at least glad she got the victory*. Yes, big asterisk. :P The Pike bit was cool too coming to Courtney and such. So all in all, a lot to write about. :)

I love the relationship stuff you are putting in your rp's. I dig characters that have personal backstories that they aren't afraid to share. It makes them real living, breathing people.
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Read the show and thanks for the feedback. I don't really think of my characters so much as "wrestling characters" or otherwise. I just try to write complex, three dimensional figures no matter what purpose I'm writing for. Whether that's someone serious like Cruz or wacky like Ghostly Warrior. It helps me know how they'll react in any given situation, gives me stuff for then to do when matches or storylines don't work out how I wanted, and keeps them easy to play. It's the entire psychological basis for the survey at the end of the FIW applications; it's unlikely anyone gives a shit what your wrestlers favorite movie is, but it's important for YOU to know as the writer.

Does Vi have heat with Helena? Did I miss something?
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Man, Orion Olorid is losing mad face to the Coulter Crew. Vicious game changer there. I love seeing the whole Jerico/Harley thing playing out, and even though there were short results this week, they were still fun reads. Also, I'm stoked to defend a title. Being new to E-Feds and wrestling in general, I'm still feeling my way around the very different style of roleplay in an E-Fed (opposed to the freeform stuff I'm used to doing on play by post forums), but it's super cool and fun.
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Man, Orion Olorid is losing mad face to the Coulter Crew. Vicious game changer there. I love seeing the whole Jerico/Harley thing playing out, and even though there were short results this week, they were still fun reads. Also, I'm stoked to defend a title. Being new to E-Feds and wrestling in general, I'm still feeling my way around the very different style of roleplay in an E-Fed (opposed to the freeform stuff I'm used to doing on play by post forums), but it's super cool and fun.

You are doing great and I am very happy for you. It's awesome you are representing the Rising Championship and I look forward to seeing more from you! :)
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Does Vi have heat with Helena? Did I miss something?

I’ve got the names mixed up, I’ll switch that around.

Only a couple of promos this week, which is to be expected really as it’s the post-PPV edition of ReVolt. All good stuff added to angles.

Two spots I forgot to include in my haste in the Wildcard match have left me annoyed. The first was Darian bringing a chair into play at Richlen & Dream vs. Darian & Nathaniel only for it not be used. Later Dream has the opportunity to pick it up and use it but chooses not to, playing off Hayden’s roleplays, and some form of interaction between Kim and Kirito.

Congratulations to the new Rising Champion. Title histories will be updated at some point over the next couple of days.

Booking feedback, writing feedback, always welcome. Particularly for new characters. Booking seems to be flowing, I don’t really give it that much thought because things just follow on. The Hellcats tag this match is just a continuation of Shaelin defeating Paris in the 4-way and Olivia’s close loss against Sakura. The intergender six-person match (remembered Hikou was male) is an example of a match too good not to book. Lita, Crys, Hayden, Dai, Wight and Adam all in one match? Yes, please. Had to do it.

On a sensitive issue, if at any point anybody feels I’m unnecessarily pushing my own characters or taking liberties, get in touch immediately. Even as I was writing the Wildcard match and Clay scored an elimination followed by some focus on commentary I was thinking ‘this might not go down well’. I’ve got a pretty good handle on where I am in the hierarchy and pecking order in terms of roleplays so I’m not completely out of touch. I snookered myself this week with Xenia, that admittedly was poor booking, not so much for the match itself as not thinking about potential outcomes. Xenia seems to be unbeaten yet so I didn’t want her to lose here when it could mean something later on, April just lost at Deadlock and I didn’t want to beat the Ninja Blood’s for a match focused more on their opponents as they establish themselves, hence a bit of a rubbish finish.

All in all, not bad really, considering the board downtime and busyness. If anybody has spot ideas for the Rumble, let me know. I’ve got a couple brewing but the more the merrier.

Thanks all
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Honestly I'd say you're doing quite well in regards to your characters (your booking gets a Fantastic!). I know the tag match was a bit of a struggle, but you've done well so far and there's no worry of booking yourself ahead of others. I've got no complaints.

I will, however, apologize for the lack of Marilyn promo this week. I got so caught up in telling Dream's story that I ended up neglecting her. I can safely say that won't be a problem this week, so there's some good news.

That Coulter Crew promo was straight brutal, especially in regards to The Dream. It's more material to work with in establishing this new chapter of The Dream, but man, those words hurt. I felt sad for Dream.

The wildcard match kinda went how I thought it would, with Dream and Gus as the last two for their team. I couldn't really fault Pike for not showing since it wouldn't fit the character, but I was sad Hansel and Black Tom didn't show up to the group promo. Dream being the last guy was nice, though Nathaniel picking up the win took the wind out of my sails as I thought Dream could pull a miracle, but alas. He did pin a former Dual Crown champ though, so expect Dream to brag about that.


Less of a "woe is me" and more curiosity, is there something I can do with my promos for Dream? I wanna say he hasn't really picked up a win since B&F and lost a lot of close ones, and I'm just curious if there's something I can work on as a writer to improve.
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First just wanted to Craig is the man for putting the show up on time with everything he's got going on.

This was a damn good show considering the board being down for several days last week and the holiday and all. I really enjoyed reading it. The way The Crews was booked was completely unexpected but completely awesome to see them united like that again. From the opening promo to the Kim and Kirito promo. It was cool seeing Kim pissed off and on a rampage again.

I really didn't expect the Crew to attack Johnny like that and didn't expect Eversol to get that number 20 spot. The way it was written was perfect. Keeps Johnny from losing a match and gets heat on the Crew.

I had fun in the championship exchange thread. It was a small little idea that popped into my head to have Eversol ask to buy the title. I'm glad it went down the way it did if it helped fuel the promos this week.

Working against Johnny was super fun. I'm always nervous having to compete against Lita but it was a welcome challenge. Everything between them created heat between them and further complicated the Eversol/Brittany saga which is awesome.

I like the Jericho and Harley story. It's different and different is good.

Congrats to Freakshow on the title win. That character is unfolding nicely.

Glad to see Nathaniel Alexander already making an impact with being the lone survivor as well.

Good show. I'm excited for the RPs to come this week.
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Honestly I'd say you're doing quite well in regards to your characters (your booking gets a Fantastic!). I know the tag match was a bit of a struggle, but you've done well so far and there's no worry of booking yourself ahead of others. I've got no complaints.

I will, however, apologize for the lack of Marilyn promo this week. I got so caught up in telling Dream's story that I ended up neglecting her. I can safely say that won't be a problem this week, so there's some good news.

That Coulter Crew promo was straight brutal, especially in regards to The Dream. It's more material to work with in establishing this new chapter of The Dream, but man, those words hurt. I felt sad for Dream.

The wildcard match kinda went how I thought it would, with Dream and Gus as the last two for their team. I couldn't really fault Pike for not showing since it wouldn't fit the character, but I was sad Hansel and Black Tom didn't show up to the group promo. Dream being the last guy was nice, though Nathaniel picking up the win took the wind out of my sails as I thought Dream could pull a miracle, but alas. He did pin a former Dual Crown champ though, so expect Dream to brag about that.


Less of a "woe is me" and more curiosity, is there something I can do with my promos for Dream? I wanna say he hasn't really picked up a win since B&F and lost a lot of close ones, and I'm just curious if there's something I can work on as a writer to improve.

I really can't say there's anything that you need to improve on for your promos or otherwise. That is in my humble opinion. I don't see you doing anything to hurt your character. There are so many quality people working against each other, you included, that judging comes down to splitting hairs. I know that doesn't really help in terms of what you asked but I wanted to throw some positive vibes your way.
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Great show and wonderful showing by all! Thanks for giving this guy something highly entertaining week after week. Best thing is everyone is firing on all cylinders! Keep it up yall! Mighty highly impressed!
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As everyone has said so far, big thanks to Craig for putting the show together and putting the card up immediately after despite having a lot on his plate as it is. Craig is the man.

The show was absolutely bad ass this week. I liked that the matches were short results because it made it easier to read through rather quickly and it still provided a lot to work with for RP’s for this new cycle.

The opening promo from Kim was great and I liked the way it highlighted everybody in the Coulter Crew. Orion coming out to “spoil their fun” was awesome too; it’s always fun seeing someone from the Crew get put in their place. Lol.

The mini promo to give “screen time” to the Eversol/Brittany angle was a nice touch as well. I think that’s the first instance of Nathaniel being shown in any sort of connection to it, albeit as a bystander still. As I’d mentioned before, it’ll be fun if he gets pushed further into it to get his reaction to seeing Eversol with Brittany.

Congrats to Freakshow on winning the Rising championship. It sucks to see Cody lose the title cause I’m such a big fan of his, but it’ll be interesting to see how he bounces back from that loss and I’m definitely looking forward to seeing how Freakshow moves forward with the title.

The promo with the Coulter Crew attacking Johnny to get their way was awesome. It kinda reminded me of the nWo stuff when they’d go on a rampage attacking practically everybody on the roster just to get whatever it is that they wanted. I’m looking forward to seeing how Johnny gets his comeuppance against the Coulter Crew, especially with the whole drama between Brittany and Eversol. I have no doubt he’ll use that attack as fodder to prove his point to Brittany that Eversol is no good. Lol.

I didn’t expect Alexander to be the sole survivor in that 10-man elimination match. That was a pleasant surprise and it gives me a lot to work with as far as RP’s go. I think I would have had a lot to work with regardless, but getting the W certainly helps. Lol. The Crew is looking stronger than ever! Let’s see what happens when the other shoe drops. Lol.
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