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Miro Zahir " Minotaurs Profit "; Rushed through Bio, will make my own Template and make it Neat later.
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Neil Aug 2 2010, 08:32 PM Post #1

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Swordsmanship

Combat

Speed

Intelligence

Strength

Magic

Stamina
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Zhor's Basic Information
Zhor's Story
 
Miro's Journel.
Entry yet to be added...

Zhor's Information
 
IC Information
  • Full Name: Miro Zahir
  • Race: Human.
  • Height: Six foot two inches.
  • Weight: One hundred and fifty pounds.
  • Alias(s): Unknown as of now.
  • Age: Unknown as of now.
OOC Information
[Preferred Battle Type ]:Acrobatic.
[Account Name:]: GravityWall

Zhor's Abilities
 
Abilities
ProsSpeed.: Miro is a very secretive man. He is most known of his incredible speed. He had developed this as a child. His name was a rumor among the people of light. Some say that Miro equips the speed and movement of those of the Gods. Others say he was blessed by the gods. The truth is Miro is just very skilled fulled and is able to dodge evade sword strikes with no hesitation.

Keen Senses.: As a young man, Miro has developed an unique ability from meditation. He is able to calm his awareness down, and sense any Vibration among his radius. His sense are equal too of a Dog. This developed skill is not used daily, he is only allowed to use this ability when he is in danger or of curiosity.

Undiscovered Ability.: --


Cons

• Lack of confidence.: Miro is a very shy man and has no support of Conversating in any matter. He has no motivation and with that his confidence is based on what other people and others think otherwise on Miro.

• Lack of Strength. : With mastering the art of Speed and Agility. Miro does not advance in the body art of Muscle. His proficient maneuverer is Stealth and Silent.

Zhor's Arsenal
 
Melee Weapons:Ranged Weapons:
Melee Weapons

  • Hidden Chokuto within his robbed body.
  • Projectile Blades.
  • Undiscovered Weapon.
Ranged Weapons

  • Projectile Blades.
  • Projectile Blades.
  • Undiscovered Weapon.

Zhor's Magic Information
Posted ImageMinotaur of Ova
Summoning Description: With studying the ancient art of Summoning, Miro had obtain the blood of an actual Minotaur that had attacked an near by village not to far from his home. Once the Minotaur was defeated, Miro had traveled to a Grand Master Sorcerer. With proposing gold and proof of the Minotaur dieing, The Sorcerer had granted Miro a contract that was written in ancient scripture. Stating that " Once the bond of he and enemy has shared the consists of battle. He who dies may be resurrected in Summoning to aid he who victor "

Apperance

Facial Features: Miro has a very clean face. His face is very bold and demanding. He has no scars or marks on his face. His eyes are peering Grey. His face is the image of a man who is determined and withstanding.

Torso: Miro supports a leather vest with ancient scripture carvings on it. The rim of the leather vest is lined with Gold. At the mid section of the vest a belt like object holds a family crest their which gives him his name, identity, and respect. Over his vest, he wears a long brown flak that Conceals his chokuto on his back and his Projectile Blades strapped diagonal coming from his right side waist to his left shoulder.

Legs: Miro wears regular slacks that are very light weight and take the color of Black. on his waist line he wears a belt that drapes a red scarf of rag material.

Feet: Over Miro's feet he wears gauzed leather boots, for support when he runs and climbs objects. The boots cover and conceal his knees with harden layers of leather to stop then pain when he falls or get hit in that area.
Edited by Neil, Aug 2 2010, 08:35 PM.
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ScreamingHawk Aug 3 2010, 04:25 PM Post #2

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9/10

Issue
 
Summoning Description: With studying the ancient art of Summoning, Miro had obtain the blood of an actual Minotaur that had attacked an near by village not to far from his home. Once the Minotaur was defeated, Miro had traveled to a Grand Master Sorcerer. With proposing gold and proof of the Minotaur dieing, The Sorcerer had granted Miro a contract that was written in ancient scripture. Stating that " Once the bond of he and enemy has shared the consists of battle. He who dies may be resurrected in Summoning to aid he who victor "


Reason & Solution
 
I can see if a administrator approves of you summoning a minotaur but I mean, really from what Ive been told summons will be within reason, unless you have been approved to do so, summoning a Minotaur is quite overpowered. An Imp might be more of a believable monster to summon or something within that range, overall the bio is grand. Just consult that one piece of information and were good.

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Beebo379 Aug 3 2010, 07:04 PM Post #3

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I like this and all -- But you're a quick character with "5/5 swordsmanship" and a minotaur at your side. That's a little sketchy to me. My take on it is that you're using a minotaur to distract while you sneak around and stab. This is also a hard role to play with a single character. You can't really
-display- where the minotaur is and when you fight someone, they'll just whine about how you have two guys against one.

Also, those "5/5" skills on top don't mean anything. The "Preffered combat Style" isn't answered. We're talking about RP mechanics when we say that. "Acrobatics" isn't a mechanic, it's how you personally fight. We want hit/connect or emote or whatever it might be. Spend a little more time reading the guides and you can make it.
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IEPICLYWIN Aug 4 2010, 02:09 PM Post #4

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Geh.. It needs work. History pl0x.
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Anthony Aug 5 2010, 05:28 AM Post #5

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First of all I love the lay out, and the unnecessary explaining of what you're wearing but the extra time it took to do that could have been put into making the history. I don't know if you forgot about that all together or whatever happened there. The idea for a journal is lovely, and I might just steal it.

Minotaur summon seems to me a little over powered, never the less you seem to have gotten approval on that point. Having a minotaur doesn't really bother me at all even in a fight I would just take it out from a distance and deal with you next, but it seems you're going to have to carry around an admin with you just to confirm with people that its valid. More than a few times you're going to get into a fight with an inexperienced Rper who thinks they know the rules, and their going to tell you that the minotaur is void because its too powerful. Even if they accept that you have the minotaur they're going to withdraw from the fight because they know they'll lose, and there goes 15 minutes of you're life.

So the two things are add a history and just clarify that the minotaur isn't void, everything else is lovely.

Just a side note: The keen senses thing is similar to what I have on my character but it seems more likely that you would hear the things moving rather than feel the vibrations, it would have to be a really big thing moving to even make the slightest of vibrations channel through the ground.
Edited by Anthony, Aug 5 2010, 05:34 AM.
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