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Ifrit Xious
Tweet Topic Started: Aug 3 2010, 06:16 PM (186 Views)
final-cloud Aug 3 2010, 06:16 PM Post #1

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[OOC Information]:
Habbo Name: final-cloud
Style of RP Combat: Hit/Connect

[IC Information]:
Character Appearance:
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Character Name: Ifrit Xious
Character Race: Human
Character Gender: Male
Character Age: 23
Eye Color: Green
Hair Color: Brown
Character Height: 6'4
Character Weight: 185 [Muscle]
Character Clothing: Blacksmith clothing, or Farmer Clothing
Character Occupation: Blacksmith

Natural Abilities:
Very strong
Fast
Stealthy

Character Weaknesses:
Cannot block from above
Can't block axes

Magical Abilities:
None

Likes:
Books
Quiet people
Blades
Fighting
Cold

Dislikes:
Obnoxious people
Theives
Heat

Personality:
Ifrit usually keeps ot himself, rarley talks to anyone. He considers himself as a loner, nothing more. When he is out in town, he is usually buying books, clothing etc. Other than that, he is usually hidden.

Equipment/Items:
Small Dagger

Background/History:

At age 5, his mother died from a disease, he lived with his father on a farm, where he worked hard everyday. At age 13, his father left, and never came back. Ifrit was on his own, tending the farm, and trying to earn money. When he turned 18. he got tired of working on the farm, packed up his things, and left. He met up with a blacksmith, who trained Ifrit in making weapons. Ifrit knew then, thats what he wanted to do. He is 23 now, ana living in Ascalon, He is the blacksmith there, and gets some business.
Edited by final-cloud, Aug 7 2010, 09:48 PM.
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ScreamingHawk Aug 3 2010, 06:26 PM Post #2

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Review (Before Fixed)

5/10

Issue
 

Natural Abilities: Very strong, Fast, Stealthy
Character Weaknesses: Ice
Magical Abilities: Fire, Heal
Equipment/Items: Long Sword, Wristblade, 250 gold, Armor
Background/History:
At age 5, he would get into many fights with people he didn't like. A kid made fun of his family, and Ifrit ran up to him, and litterally beat the snot out of him. He was alone most of his life, due to his family being dead by a fire Ifrit started. Ifrit blames himself all the time for the accidental fire. It all started when he found out he could control fire. At age 15, he was walking down a path in a forest, when a guy ran up to him and demanded gold. Ifrit grabbed his blade, and took the mans head off. That was when he found out, he loved to kill... At age 20, he went on a killing spree, killing gang members, and and theives. He killed an innocent man, accidently when he ment to slay a theif. He spent 3 years in prison, until a man came to him, asking him to join their guild.


Reason & Solution
 

Ice isn't a very good weakness, Honestly that's a shit weakness, were talking about like.. You can't fight due to your arm was chopped off by some murdering scum. Heal and Fire are the next issues, keep them at a low power level and we can be fine. 250 gold are you serious, first off we start with NO gold as of like ANY, as far as I'm concerned you can't just get gold randomly, and for the weapons, you have to buy them once the RP opens. ALSO the biggest Issue... The roleplay frowns upon fighting and murdering, so if you think your going to do that, I'm totally going to put a big VOID stamp on this Here is what you need to do...

+ Fix your Weakness.
+ Remove the Gold.
+ Make it so we know your power of magic is low.


Could use some more detail but other than that, Approved.
Edited by ScreamingHawk, Aug 3 2010, 06:41 PM.
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Beebo379 Aug 3 2010, 06:29 PM Post #3

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No healing. -- Period.
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IEPICLYWIN Aug 4 2010, 02:10 PM Post #4

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I like it but needs more detail pl0x.
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Anthony Aug 5 2010, 05:10 AM Post #5

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Cliche character but thats fine. What the bio needs is a lot of detail, as a magical ability "fire" just isn't good enough. No body will know what you mean by "fire" you have to elaborate. So we know you arn't going to be able to burn the whole forest down with a flick of you're wrist.

You're history is, strange to say the least but then again strange people make Rps interesting. You're history is screaming "Ima go kill every freggin' person I see" and as hawk pointed out, you can't go around killing anyone, even if they are thieves. It's a serious Rp so you have to think logically, self defence, threat on something you love, revenge (serious revenge he killed you're brother, you kill him. Not he stole from me so i knifed him). Not just that you saw him stealing.
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final-cloud Aug 7 2010, 02:00 PM Post #6

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I redone the whole thing.
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Untoldstory Aug 7 2010, 07:10 PM Post #7

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Why do you all think people will roleplay extremely destructive magic with a flick of their wrist. It's a stereotype, if you ask me.
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final-cloud Aug 7 2010, 07:32 PM Post #8

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Aug 7 2010, 07:10 PM
Why do you all think people will roleplay extremely destructive magic with a flick of their wrist. It's a stereotype, if you ask me.
Oh crap, i accidently reported you lol, my bad. I ment to say, ">_> Well, I took the magic out, I kinda don't want it." Mybad man.
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Anthony Aug 8 2010, 04:06 PM Post #9

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Aug 7 2010, 07:10 PM
Why do you all think people will roleplay extremely destructive magic with a flick of their wrist. It's a stereotype, if you ask me.
Kind of because a lot of people get carried away with magic not to say you or anyone in particular but once that happens, the rp has gone to shit. That's all there is to it. It's not a stereotype and I don't think you used the term properly, but it's because a lot of new comvers not all like to have distructive powers.
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