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| Yamamoto Kichirou | Sep 17 2011, 09:08 AM Post #1 |
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Name: Lightning Release: Shock blast Available?: Yes Rank: B Hand Seals: Rabbit → Ox → Mokney → Dog Element: Lightning Classification: Ninjustu Description: After performing the hand seals, the user uses their right hand, and then outstretches their middle and index fingers. After that, yellow lightning blasts out from their finger tips, swarming directly at the enemy. Effects: A shock that would knock them out for two seconds. Range: Long range Name: Lightning Release: Shocking Rain Available?: Yes Rank: C Hand Seals: Bird → Rabbit → Dog → Ram Element: Lightning Classification: Ninjustu Description: When the user is done performing the hand seals, the user snaps their fingers at least three times, as three lightning spears come down to the enemy, aiming for a hit, but really wouldn't cause much damage. Effects: When hit, the enemy's movement will descease, but not really that slow, as long as the user catches up. Range: All except for Close-Range Name: Lightning Release: Static Claws Available?: No Rank: C Hand Seals: Dragon → Rat → Bird → Ram Classification: Ninjustu Description: After performing the hand seals, the user lifts up their hands, as sharp-like nails that are made out of lightning appears from the sky. Effects: When hit by the claws, the enemy would get shocked(BUT STILL ALIVE!) And would leave a burn and a little cut. Range: Close Range Edited by Yamamoto Kichirou, Sep 17 2011, 11:38 AM.
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| MaximumMajin | Sep 17 2011, 11:14 AM Post #2 |
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OK, going in order: 1. I don't think it should be a C-rank technique. Maybe a B rank, but not a C-Rank, as it seems to instantly knock them out, which is also a bit OPed. 2. It's just a short range version of the first one, so I don't think it should be exclusive to you, but it should still be a C-Rank so that's fine. 3. A C-Rank for a technique that just gives a little tingle is a bit much. Maybe a D-Rank would fit better. 4. DENIED~! OK, there are quite a few things wrong with this: 1. It says no where that Rasengan and Chidori both have to be mastered, and it should. 2. Both Rasengan and Chidori will be learned in steps, and are both S-Rank techniques. That would actually push this into either a forbidden, or another S-Rank. 3. Not everyone needs to use the clones to form a Rasengan-and no everyone knows the shadow-clone technique. 4. If you aimed at making this, it should be available to ALL, since it is a bit over-powered and allowing only 1 person to have it is very unfair. and, for all of them, you forgot to add their elements(yeah I know there lightning, but still.) |
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| Yamamoto Kichirou | Sep 17 2011, 11:38 AM Post #3 |
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OH sorry #2 was a mistake ^^; But anyway it's fixed. |
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| MaximumMajin | Sep 17 2011, 01:51 PM Post #4 |
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1. Accepted, added to the database. 2. Accepted, Added to the Database. 3. Feel free to add it to your character's Bio. Closed~ |
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| Yamamoto Kichirou | Sep 17 2011, 01:56 PM Post #5 |
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OK. So I think I should move this to the Justu Database. |
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| MaximumMajin | Sep 17 2011, 02:02 PM Post #6 |
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Nope, you just edit them into the Jutsu Database thread(Take a look to see them). BTW, when I close the topic, I don't want it to be posted in again xD |
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