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Shot at a Lullaby; 2 Attempts
Topic Started: Jun 17 2007, 10:20 PM (132 Views)
Zandyne
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("Clear Night" - First Attempt)
Payers drifting in the wind
Light beaming from the high skyline
Don't mind this sunless time
The moon is watching over your sleeping bed
Dreaming, Dreaming of fantasies when your eyes shut
Sleep soundly little one, the night is your immortal friend
The sun's just beyond the horizon*
(repeat tune with humming)


("Winter Snow" - Second Attempt)
Snowflakes dancing gracefully in the air
Watch them, delicate glass butterflies
Catch them with a guardian's great care
This kind winter sprite's beautiful allies

Marvel at the sun that glints off cold wings
Fluttering with glee and benevolent joy
Spiraling, swirling, glistening aurora rings
Each of these tiny goddesses is coy

Let these pearl treasures return home
For if each child was to keep the little fae
Mother earth would feel quietly alone
Relinquish her child so she won't fade away



I have no idea if this is in the right catagory as this is intended for use in a fanfic I'm writing, but it can easily stand on its own, so I'll just put it here (hopefully that's ok).
Ok what this is for is Snowflakes and Specimens, but I have no idea how to write lullabies. I tried listening to some soft-tunes and an UBER music box to try and get something lullaby-esque but I don't know..... Some feedback or suggestions would be great.
First one has no rhyme, and second has a A-B-A-B rhyme-scheme (school is out so I don't care what the official name of that sort of poetic writing is called).
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i like them. its really beautiful how you write.
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Zandyne
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thank you! Out of curiosity, which sounds more like a lullaby?
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Ryusuke
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Those poems are very nice. :D

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Out of curiosity, which sounds more like a lullaby?

Hmm...the first one kinda does. The second one sounds like something one of my characters would say. :lol: j/k Can't really give you a big explanation for it, sorry. O.o It's just how the flow is, I guess.
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