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| [Approved]Reventin, Gabriel Eletia; Marine Commander | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Oct 22 2011, 08:08 PM (559 Views) | |
| Hyperion | Oct 22 2011, 08:08 PM Post #1 |
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Account Name: Hyperion At A Glance Name: Gabriel Eletia Reventin Alias: "Death Fist", "Golden Boy" Affiliation: Marines Profession: Criminal Apprehension Vessel: N/A Reputation: Commander Age: 32 Gender: Male Race: Human Hometown: Loguetown Appearance Height: 6'9" Weight: 286lbs Physical Description: An imposing figure of behemoth size, Gabriel Eletia Reventin exhibits qualities of such power that merely looking at him is enough to strike fear into the very souls of any normal individual. Standing at just under seven feet tall and weighing in at almost three-hundred and fifty pounds, Gabriel is no average human, his great strength and power evident not only in the bulk of his muscles, but also in the demeanour of his carriage. With skin a shade of white that is almost brown, eyes that seem to pierce your very soul, and hair so flaming it's almost like he's on fire, Gabriel’s intimidation factor is greater than many of the marines of his age, and as such he is looked to for being on the front lines of any battle he participates in, both as a moral boost to his men and an attack against the morale of his enemies. Clothing & Accessories: Gabriel wears several fanciful pieces of clothing, a fur lined coat of fiery red with deep orange flame designs, a purple flexible armless body suit, black flexi pants and a brown leather belt around said flexi pants. ![]() Biography Personality: Some may call Gabriel harsh, but in reality he is more of someone who is very strict and follows the laws to the letter. He does take into consideration circumstances when meting out punishment, but more often than not it is the highest level of punishment suggested for whatever crimes. Other notes about Gabriel is that he prefers to not fight to his fullest unless it is truly needed, simply overwhelming people with his personality and character, he likes to eat spicy foods and likes to drink coarse ale whenever he is not on duty. When he does use his devil fruit Gabriel prefers to use the techniques which offer precision over damage, he prefers techniques that he can direct towards a specific target rather than those that effect an entire area. Should he use the latter techniques though he tries to confine the damage as much as possible, being a firm believer that collateral damage in unacceptable. History: Born in Loguetown and raised in Loguetown, Gabriel wished to become a marine from an early age. He saw them as defenders of justice and all that was good, he saw them as the very people who protected the innocent and meted out punishment to the guilty. He was willing to work and become one of these people and so when he came of an age where he could join the marines he started his career as a mere Choreboy. As a Choreboy his initiative was greatly praised, he always worked his hardest, cleaning, cooking, it didn't matter what job he was given he did his very best, and when finally he came of age he joined the actual forces as a Seaman recruit. It was from this point onwards that he trained and did his duty, becoming stronger and stronger through great dedication, helping the weak and innocent not only when they were threatened by pirates or criminals, but also making good relations with the people in general. He became the poster boy of the marines, a man who not only did his duty but made people feel comfortable around him, and many a lesser subordinate stood in awe of him as he rose higher and higher through the ranks and becoming the marines golden boy. And now he has become a commander, far greater in pure strength than any normal commander, and only staying as he is because he has refused all promotions due to wishing to stay and work with the people he has grown with and loves but given a devil fruit for his services for the marines. Combat Primary Fighting Style Gabriel fights with his fists and refrains from using his devil fruit power unless absolutely necessary, preferring to use simple physical attacks. Weaponry N/A Adventure Log Items N/A Stats 501 Strength: 130 (93+37) Stamina: 130 (93+37) Speed: 130 (93+37) Perception: 111 (93+18) Will: 62 Stat Points Earned: 0/340 Beli Earned: 166,394,400/166,394,400 Sources Traits Stat Altering Traits Specific Devil Fruit (7 Traits): The player has chosen the Magu Magu no mi (the Magma Magma fruit) for this character. Since this fruit is a rank 6 fruit, this fruit costs [6+1] traits. Devil Fruit Name: Magu Magu no Mi (Magma Magma Fruit) Devil Fruit Type: Logia (6th Tier) Devil Fruit Ability: The Magu Magu no Mi gives the user the ability to become, generate, and control Lava. Techniques: 92/248 Magu Magu no Mi (0 Uses) Type: Passive Range: Self Stats: N/A The Magu Magu no Mi gives the user the ability to partially or completely transform into Magma. Initially, the user can transform in time against any attack from an equal or lower speed class. After 250 uses, the user can change the state of their magma/lava to a molten solid. After 500 uses of transformation, the user can transform reflexively while conscious, making them practically immune to physical attacks while awake. After 5,000 uses of transforming the user is able to transform even in their sleep. The magma/lava of this fruit burns at an intensity of 1000 in technical power, and when the user fully transforms, their speed class drops one level. Fury Fist - 5 Branched From: N/A Type: Offensive Range: 10 Meters Stats: N/A By partially changing his arm into magma, Gabriel proceeds to punch forwards with all his might, a large glob of lava separates from his arm if he does not hit someone directly and continues on wards after this. Edited by Majora, Oct 23 2011, 03:27 PM.
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| Hyperion | Oct 22 2011, 08:08 PM Post #2 |
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Beta Event |
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| Majora | Oct 22 2011, 09:59 PM Post #3 |
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I'd suggest adding more to your personality. A solid paragraph at least. Also, add in the history how he got his devil fruit powers. |
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| Hyperion | Oct 22 2011, 10:23 PM Post #4 |
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Done |
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| Strider Xan | Oct 22 2011, 10:34 PM Post #5 |
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Okay, your DF marks the first Logia coming into the system and it's a very straightforward one too, having no quirky abilities attached to it like the Suna Suna for instance, so I was looking to make a template out of this one. I attributed the rules to make something about Logia fruits and their elemental transformations. As far as your DF tech goes, I'm writing one that can be used as a template for any that follow: Magu Magu no Mi (0 Uses) Type: Passive Range: Self Stats: N/A The Magu Magu no Mi gives the user the ability to partially or completely transform into Magma. Initially, the user can transform in time against any attack from an equal or lower speed class. After 250 uses, the user can change the state of their magma/lava to a molten solid. After 500 uses of transformation, the user can transform reflexively while conscious, making them practically immune to physical attacks while awake. After 5,000 uses of transforming the user is able to transform even in their sleep. The magma/lava of this fruit burns at an intensity of 1000 in technical power, and when the user fully transforms, they speed class drops one level. The above tech would replace your "Magu Transformation" tech, and assimilates your "Lava Golem" tech. Transforming into your element as a Logia isn't the same as transforming as a Zoan. The zoan has you transforming into a new form, the logia transforms you into a new matter. Any additions to strength, stamina, speed or accuracy alone would come from the element more than how you decide to form the element. As far as techs go, any ideas which are [manoeuvre + DF power] simply write up the manoeuvre, and then add on the DF tech, which in your case adds a whopping 1000 to technical power. For instance, at the moment your Fury Fist tech is just a punch, so it will be in the 4-7 range. You then use the DF tech and simply RP spreading out lava at the end of your punch. If you actually hit the enemy with your fist first, the Tech Power is 1004-1007, if you just hit them with the spray of your lava it is 1000. The only time using your DF warrants a new tech is if you use it in a method that isn't covered by the DF tech, such as trying to make it behave out of natural realms (e.g. Akainu's "Ryusei Kazan" in which he rains fist-shaped lava plumes). Edited by Strider Xan, Oct 22 2011, 10:55 PM.
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| Hyperion | Oct 22 2011, 11:01 PM Post #6 |
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Done~ |
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| Strider Xan | Oct 23 2011, 02:42 PM Post #7 |
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Count this as a psuedo approval. I'm not at my computer to make this an acutal approval. |
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| Hyperion | Oct 23 2011, 02:52 PM Post #8 |
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Kay~ |
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| Majora | Oct 23 2011, 03:26 PM Post #9 |
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Congratulations! Your character profile has been fully approved. Check the signature template to represent this newly approved character in your signature. All the best! |
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