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| Topic Started: May 23 2014, 05:10 AM (100 Views) | |
| zorbax | May 23 2014, 05:10 AM Post #1 |
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Full Name: Kylar Mathews Nickname: Kylar Race: human Age: 16 Identifiable Gender: male Class: Shapeshifter Details of Powers: He can change shape giving himself the abilities of monsters he sees whether it be something simple like having 3 heads such as Cerberus, or something mighty such as breathing dragons fire. Anything he does use is limited by his size unless he changes size. He can grow as big as a double wide trailer or as small as a cat. He can harden himself via scales, stone like shell, or thick hide. He also finds it difficult to keep changes longer than 10 minutes. He has to see whatever it is in action for about 5 minutes to incorporate it into his body. Characterization: Physical Description: He is quite the average guy. He is around 5 foot 9 in height, and weighs around 147 pounds. He has short black hair and about the only thing that stands out about him is is black eyes. He has no real distinguishing scars or much of anything like that. He often wears his school uniform which is black and has not too much special about it....it is a uniform it looks like the next one. Spoiler: click to toggle Personality: He tends to be easily frightened especially by his own ability. Which does not help as when he gets scared he develops this clawed hand as if some kind of safety mechanism that frightens him worse and can sometimes cause him to change more. He can be kind of timid and meek simply cause he is not used to talking to people most having been afraid of his transformations as much as him. He has been called things like monster most of his life and hearing things like that tends to make him depressed and you can see his features droop as if becoming sort of slime like. Which of course if he notices speeds up the process turning him effectively into a slime monster He has never stood up for himself but he can start to seem less meek when one of his friends is in danger or some other person is being bullied. He trys confronting this persons problem and gets scared but he seems cold like a killer during this time-not aided by his hand transforming into a clawed monstrosity- which only frightens him more and he will start looking like a feral beast. He has a complete devotion to his friends and will try to protect them at most any cost even if he goes full on monster just to do it. Background: Spoiler: click to toggle
Edited by zorbax, May 23 2014, 05:53 AM.
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| DarkDragon | May 23 2014, 09:12 AM Post #2 |
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Ok, so I'm gonna sound a bit harsh here for this, so be prepared. Now to the fun part. The powers need to be edited. They don't really seem to have a limit on what he can turn into, even with the ten minute limit, turning into a dragon right off the bat because he saw one is kinda op, don't ya think? Perhaps a basic amount of creatures he could retain, then later be exposed to more permanent shape-shifts or something. He trys confronting this persons problem and gets scared but he seems cold like a killer during this time-not aided by his hand transforming into a clawed monstrosity- which only frightens him more and he will start looking like a feral beast. The description is iffy. Get that you want to make him timid and try to make him act tough if people get bullied, but the point is, it needs to be reworded, I had to read it a lot to understand it. Cold Killer wouldn't probably be the right wording for trying to act tough. Some edits need to made towards powers and personality. Turning yourself into a monster more by scaring yourself also sounds a bit iffy too. The fact that it could possibly happen often would just cause issues, along with you getting scared easily from your personality. Growing up on Hayashi seems fine, but needs work as well. You also don't mention what happens after 5. If you grew up on Hayashi, what did you do for other years? Where did he get this school uniform? (Unless you mean Hayashi's uniform, which I can ask about.) Also, could you perhaps describe the uniform instead of saying "Hey look at this." Edited by DarkDragon, May 23 2014, 09:15 AM.
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