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| ‘Love at First Sight’ -Reveiws; the reveiws of ‘Love at First Sight’ | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Aug 1 2008, 11:26 PM (376 Views) | |
| Siany-T | Aug 1 2008, 11:26 PM Post #1 |
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King of Nothing
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Story can be found here Here It's my first MST, what do people think? I appreciate critism in a constructive manner. |
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Merlin: Thank you. Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself. Merlin, Series 2 David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry. John: Sorry. Tonight's the Night: Doctor Who Special Team Demyx - 'cause that is how I roll! | |
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| jules14 | Aug 2 2008, 12:18 AM Post #2 |
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(Wo)man on a Mission
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It's a pretty good start. Your spelling and grammar need help, but you can get a beta easily to proofread it. I like how you have Jadis, Morgoth, AND Voldemort torturing your characters. |
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| Siany-T | Aug 9 2008, 04:09 PM Post #3 |
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King of Nothing
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Well Voldermort and Mogoth giving her the idea was a little nod towards you and Mac 'cause you two kinda inspired me to try MSTing. Oh and if my spelling and grammar are off it's cause I'm a Black Country Gal and so talk a bit slangish. |
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Merlin: Thank you. Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself. Merlin, Series 2 David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry. John: Sorry. Tonight's the Night: Doctor Who Special Team Demyx - 'cause that is how I roll! | |
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| MackenzieW | Aug 9 2008, 10:28 PM Post #4 |
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Resident Time Lady
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Thanks for the little nod, though you're still misspelling "Voldemort." And a second pair of eyes never hurts anybody. Ari reads over my stuff for me (Thanks, Ari!) |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." —Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That I’ll hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| Siany-T | Aug 10 2008, 01:35 AM Post #5 |
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King of Nothing
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Yep, I will use a beta next chapter, any voluteers? Also sorry about the Voldmort thing, habit I can't shake. No problem on the nod, felt I should really. |
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Merlin: Thank you. Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself. Merlin, Series 2 David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry. John: Sorry. Tonight's the Night: Doctor Who Special Team Demyx - 'cause that is how I roll! | |
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