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‘Love at First Sight’ -Reveiws; the reveiws of ‘Love at First Sight’
Topic Started: Aug 1 2008, 11:26 PM (376 Views)
Siany-T
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King of Nothing
Story can be found here Here

It's my first MST, what do people think? I appreciate critism in a constructive manner.
Merlin: Thank you.
Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself.
Merlin, Series 2


David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry.
John: Sorry.
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jules14
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It's a pretty good start. Your spelling and grammar need help, but you can get a beta easily to proofread it. I like how you have Jadis, Morgoth, AND Voldemort torturing your characters.
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Siany-T
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Well Voldermort and Mogoth giving her the idea was a little nod towards you and Mac 'cause you two kinda inspired me to try MSTing. Oh and if my spelling and grammar are off it's cause I'm a Black Country Gal and so talk a bit slangish.
Merlin: Thank you.
Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself.
Merlin, Series 2


David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry.
John: Sorry.
Tonight's the Night: Doctor Who Special


Team Demyx - 'cause that is how I roll!
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MackenzieW
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Thanks for the little nod, though you're still misspelling "Voldemort." And a second pair of eyes never hurts anybody. Ari reads over my stuff for me (Thanks, Ari!)
You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot

"Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical)

"Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." —Walt Disney

"I wake in the loneliness of sunrise
When the deep purple heaven turns blue
And start to pray
As I pray each day
That I’ll hear some word from you

I lie in the loneliness of evening
Looking out on a silver-flaked sea
And ask the moon
Oh how soon, how soon
Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella


"Thank you, Lord
You have brought us
Safe to shore
Be our strength and protection ever more.
A Thiarna dean trocaire
A Chriost dean trocaire
A Thiarna dean trocaire
A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder


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Siany-T
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Yep, I will use a beta next chapter, any voluteers? Also sorry about the Voldmort thing, habit I can't shake. No problem on the nod, felt I should really.
Merlin: Thank you.
Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself.
Merlin, Series 2


David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry.
John: Sorry.
Tonight's the Night: Doctor Who Special


Team Demyx - 'cause that is how I roll!
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