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Luna and Silver Moon: The Reviews; Post your thoughts here
Topic Started: Aug 31 2008, 02:17 PM (767 Views)
MackenzieW
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Legolas needs some girl to teach him archery? Wouldn't he have been trained by his father's military? Oh wait, logic. Sorry, you'd think after doing this for so long I'd have stopped thinking. Good riffs, bad story.
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"Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." —Walt Disney

"I wake in the loneliness of sunrise
When the deep purple heaven turns blue
And start to pray
As I pray each day
That I’ll hear some word from you

I lie in the loneliness of evening
Looking out on a silver-flaked sea
And ask the moon
Oh how soon, how soon
Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella


"Thank you, Lord
You have brought us
Safe to shore
Be our strength and protection ever more.
A Thiarna dean trocaire
A Chriost dean trocaire
A Thiarna dean trocaire
A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder


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Siany-T
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I want the Legolas! *Sounds of a scuffle* Sorry my inner fangirl escpaed. She got excited by the fact Legolas was called 'the Legolas'. That was such a stupid mistake.

I was nearly crying at the 'archery' lesson which was really a ploy to get Legolas's top off since I've been learning archery for a while now and we start by shooting, then the teacher tells each of us how to improve ect. Stupid ploy to make Legolas take his top off.


Great MST though, you definatly want to get some sick bags. They are a must have when you are stuck MSTing, oh and a phycatrist (sorry about the spelling).
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AraionaDuBois
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When I saw the Legolas, I was like 'hey! It's The Doctor without the Doctor!' Sad eh?
Smashed down the light. I will not rest till I'm king. Valinor's empty now. allied the elves and men they shall be damned. A Dark Passage, Blind Guardian.

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~Tio~
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Good work, Din :) I enjoyed the story. And you're using quite rare charcters for sporkers :) Well, I'm kinda in a hurry now, so maybe I'll give a more proper review later.

Keep up the good work!
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AraionaDuBois
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Brilliant new chapter! :)
Smashed down the light. I will not rest till I'm king. Valinor's empty now. allied the elves and men they shall be damned. A Dark Passage, Blind Guardian.

Now truly I am king of the world. Master of fate Damned shall thy house be. Thou shall not question my power Nor shall thou defy me further. The Steadfast, Blind Guardian.
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Rhysmel
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Brilliant MSTing. This story is a lot more sappy than the above average rubber tree. :rolleyes:
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Mathonwy
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Dulin yelled, ready to punch back. But Legolas was much faster and a better fighter, so soon Dulin was on the ground, out.

Idril (flatly): Wow. What an amazing fight scene. I am on the edge of my seat with excitement. The adrenal-
Tuor: Sorry dear, but you really can't do sarcasm.

I was expecting the rape to be the low point of this chapter, and it did indeed suck on many levels. But EragonsGirlfriend's gifts at describing action are pushing this scene hard ...

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“Well I see the prince doesn’t have good manners because you didn’t answer me. So to make up, hand over MY perfect little wench.”
It didn’t take much for the archers to fire at Dulin. He didn’t see it coming and got hit with 5 arrows. He then clasped, dead.

Tuor: I know he deserved it, but it's still a bit cruel to kill someone who poses no threat whatsoever.

Wow - zero-tolerance policing policy from Thranduil there!
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Siany-T
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Ooo a new chapter. *Reads and smashes head off table* ow that hurt more than I was expecting.


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Umm, s-sure,” I said, taken back, my heart pounding. He smiled, stood next to me and started to measure and cut. I quietly helped him, Silver watching both of us, almost jealous.

All:  :blink:
Idril: Jealous of ...what?
Tuor: No-one go there, alright? Just don't go there.


For the love of all that is Holy, she did not just.... Eurg.


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I jogged back to my room, ripping off my working clothes once I had gotten inside. Ripping off my dress, I ripped off my nightgown


That girl has a problem with taking clothes off I see, she always rips them off.


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I picked out my best dress. It was a dark amethyst and had a lavender trim. It was one of those elegant gowns that drag on the floor unless you pick it up. The sleeves were down to my elbow but then fanned out a bit going down to my wrist.

Dinendir: Always a bad sign when you describe clothes more than anything else. The name of another author springs to mind...
Tuor: Who?
Dinendir: For the sake of your sanity, I'm not saying.


Surely you don't mean the She-Demon, Angey? They are lucky you didn't say It's name.

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“Of course if that is ok with you first,”


One of many Modern Day Teenager!Legolas quotes.

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He stuck out his arm.


'Elbowing her in the stomach'. I think the phrase she was actually looking for was 'he offered her his arm' or similar.

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I slapped his hand, but he tackled me to the ground,


I was hoping the ground wasn't actually there and they fell over a cliff but no such luck.

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I finally had enough and kneed him in the balls. He winced and rolled off of me. I knocked him out with a kick

Idril: Why didn't she do that in the first place? Or even better, why didn't she fade away? This girl confuses me like no other.
Turin: She was probably enjoying it really. The whore.


Exactly what I was thinking. 'finally had enough'? So she was enjoying it to begin with then? Oh and another example of modern language being used incorrectly. Even in the narrative the language should not be modern slang.

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Tuor: Rape victims don't normally admit what happened to them, do they?
Faramir: Not to my knowledge, but then, she's not normal.

Legolas’s eyes widened and he cursed. He snuggled me further and placed his chin on top of my head. “Where is he now?”
I pulled my arm from my chest and pointed around the corner. He nodded and tightened his grip around me. I smiled and wrapped my arms around him, resting my head on his chest.


Rape victims also normally don't like to be touched. They pretty much definatly wouldn't start snuggling up to other males.

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Legolas looked at me and raised an eyebrow, asking me if he could beat him up, only without words.


I highly doubt Legolas would ask for permission to 'beat him up'. He would either fight him with, you know a sword or something, or have called the Palace Guards to arrest the thing.

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"How dare you prince boy!! First you steal my lover and now you beat me, now how is that princely behavior?!” Dulin yelled


Try calling Legolas 'prince boy' to his face. I dare you. Although I do cheer him on the last part. It most certainly is not princely behaviour.

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I could fell other elves ready to kill Dulin if he tried anything. I smiled lightly, but didn’t open my eyes. Legolas didn’t answer him. I see you’ve brought others? He smiled and nodded. Silver snarled but didn’t jump on Dulin.


Huh? Oh wait more physco-communication only not itlaicised so we can tell.

Great MST Dinedir.
Merlin: Thank you.
Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself.
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John: Sorry.
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Fishpaste
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So what is Silvers actual point? He's supposed to be there as a protecter but when It actually needs him, he's at home.

Another great chapter! Although I do complain about the wait, this story is far too good to wait for. Urgh, bad rape scene, even worse comfort scene and horrid action. This is either a really good troll or a spectacular sue.
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Dinendir
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So what is Silvers actual point? He's supposed to be there as a protecter but when It actually needs him, he's at home.


Well in the next chapter he becomes Legolas and Luna's mount/pack pony. Not exactly what you'd expect from a 'protector'.

And yeah, sorry for the wait. I'll try and be quicker with the next one.

Thanks for the reviews everyone.
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Fishpaste
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*sigh* A pony. Really a strong and respected posistion Silver.
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Fishpaste
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Yay! Update! Honestly, they're travelling through one of the most hostile places im ME and all they get attacked by are giant bunnies and five orcs? Impossible. Plis Mirkwood was dark and dangerous at that point.

Why does Legolas know about the ring? And pleeeaaassseee don't tell me she's going to come with the Fellowship. That would be too much.
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Mathonwy
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And pleeeaaassseee don't tell me she's going to come with the Fellowship. That would be too much.

I dunno. With EragonsGirlfriend's unique narrative approach - almost totally ignoring the journey to focus on Luna and Leggy's night-time snuggles - this could provide a fascinating new perspective on the quest. Can you imagine them going through Moria?

We sleep in a tomb tonight. Boline, or something like that. Creepy! Legolas and I lie entwined in a corner of the room, rubbing our noses together and giggling.

"I love you!" gasps Legolas.

"I love you!" I reply.

"I love you more!"

"No, I love YOU more!"

We kiss softly and sweetly, while the stars wheel overhead. If there were any stars. Which there aren't, because we're underground. Uh, yeah.

The next day we walk a bit further. That night, we sleep in a tree. Cool!

"I love you loads!"

"I love you loads and loads and loads!"

We embrace passionately. I frown suddenly. Where's Gandalf got to? Has he wandered off somewhere?
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Dinendir
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And pleeeaaassseee don't tell me she's going to come with the Fellowship. That would be too much.


Don't worry. There's only one chapter left now; the story stops when they're at Rivendell.

And Mathonwy- that would be more than I could take.
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MackenzieW
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Faramir: Thranduil lived in a CAVE system, dammit. He didn't have a castle.


Just like every Suethor believes Elrond is a king and therefore he, Thranduil, Celeborn and Galadriel prance about in crowns, they also know that kings live in castles. So Thranduil must live in castle!

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We should make it there in six days.” I nodded, as he rolled up the map.

Faramir: Six weeks would be a little more accurate.


You want them to look at a map and figure it out? Please, Rivendell is always a hop, skip and a jump away from Mirkwood. That's why Legolas, Elladan, Elrohir and Haldir are best friends who hang out all the time. [/sarcasm]

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Are you my mummy?


AHHH! Sorry, but that is one of the scariest sentences ever since "The Empty Child" and "The Doctor Dances."

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Before we go for the day, do you mind if I bath?”

Faramir: Oh, come on. Us rangers went for weeks without a bath!
Dinendir: And so did the fellowship. If the hero of the story can survive being a little unclean, I'm sure you can to.


At least she mentions her character bathing! Most have these girls joining the Fellowship and trudging along but still smelling wonderful to whoever is supposed to be attracted to them. See Boromir and Jess. He still smells lavendar on her despite the fact she hasn't bathed in weeks, was just rescued by Eomer from Orcs and has been riding.
You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot

"Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical)

"Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." —Walt Disney

"I wake in the loneliness of sunrise
When the deep purple heaven turns blue
And start to pray
As I pray each day
That I’ll hear some word from you

I lie in the loneliness of evening
Looking out on a silver-flaked sea
And ask the moon
Oh how soon, how soon
Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella


"Thank you, Lord
You have brought us
Safe to shore
Be our strength and protection ever more.
A Thiarna dean trocaire
A Chriost dean trocaire
A Thiarna dean trocaire
A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder


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