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| MackenzieW | Sep 24 2008, 06:50 AM Post #1 |
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Title: Unlike Everyone Except For That Sue...and that Sue...and that Sue... Author: MackenzieW Genre: Humor/MST Text Based On: "Unlike Everyone" by krillball6 Rating: T Characters: The gang, Voldemort, House, the Doctor, Lucius, Angsty Cutter Barbie, Pedophile Elrond, Gandalf, Eselin, Arwen Summary: In honor of their one year anniversary, Voldemort decides to return to the Lord of the Rings for the next story. Sam, the inspiration for potterfan2006's pillpoppin', Elrond-loving Sue, proves more annoying than Trac(e)y. She tries to kill herself, ends up in Rivendell and falls in love with Elrond. By the way, she's sixteen. Warnings: Mention of suicide, cutting, clear disregard for Tolkien's rules and work. Pedophilia as Elrond is thousands years old and he's clearly supposed to fall in love with a sixteen-years-old. Narrator: A long, long time ago in a galaxy far, far away Mackenzie: Thats the Star Wars prologue. Narrator: Which one? A New Hope? Mackenzie: Its Star Wars. Not A New Hope Narrator: Sorry. AnywayLast week in your own galaxy, a young fanfiction author and reader decided to spork a badfic. Unfortunately, her friend accidentally said the name of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named. A pack of Death Eaters promptly kidnapped her and her other companions and brought them to their master. Mackenzie: Arent you dead? Voldemort: Shut up. Narrator: He decided that as their punishment, they would be locked up in some remote room in Malfoy Manor and be forced to read badfics for an undetermined amount of time. These poor saps are: Mackenzie, our heroine. Mac: Hey, Moldy-Voldy. Remus Lupin, recently departed werewolf Remus: But Im not a ghost? Sai, the Ronin Warrior of Trust with a fascination with sea life Sai: Ive got my fish now! Quatre, the youngest Gundam pilot Quatre: This isnt good. Erik, the Phantom of the Opera Erik: WillgetrevengeonPhantoms Ange. Octavius, a talking penguin Octavius: You gotta problem with that? And occasionally joined by Jareth, the Goblin King. Jareth: Voldemort and I go way back. Will they get out alive? Mackenzie: I hope so. Only time will tell. Sai, get out of that pool! Youre not training for the London Olympics! Mackenzie yelled, watching her friend swim another lap. She had been unsuccessful in getting him to leave for about an hour now. Sai, come on! Youve been here for half a day. You look like a prune! Well, thats actually a vast improvement, Jareth said, stepping out of the shadows. He ought to stay in. Sai jumped out of the pool. What did you say? he asked the Goblin King. He was breathing heavily and had water dripping everywhere. Jareth remained cool. Got you out of the pool, didnt it? he asked. He turned to Mackenzie. Thats how you get someone to do what you want. Err, thanks, Jareth. But I dont think insulting people is my forte, Mackenzie added. And what do you call what you do in that theater? Im insulting bad writing more than I am people, she replied. Come on, Fish Boy, back to the Remote Room of Doom. You should really come up with a better name for the room. Why? Weve been here a year and thats the name thats stuck, Mackenzie replied. Crap, weve been here a year. The trio entered the room where Quatre and Erik were in a battle on Guitar Hero. Remus was napping and Octavius was playing poker with Legoals and Aragoran. Sai popped in to the bathroom for a quick shower. After all that time in the pool and he goes back into water? Jareth asked. Because if he didnt, hed smell like chlorine. And we dont want to smell that in such close quarters, Erik said, starting his star power on the game. If you can call these close quarters, Jareth responded as Sai stepped back out of the bathroom. That was quick. Well, when you have to be ready for anything, you make everything quick. Good motto, Voldemort said, entering the room. Hello, Prisoners. Hello, Merciful Master, the others responded, flatly. It has come to my attention Ive been holding you as prisoners for a year now, he said. They all clapped. Yes, yes. So, Ive decided to go back a bit for your next assignment. It has something you have done before. The What the Heck? sequel? Quatre asked. Not Middle-earths Last Hope, Mackenzie said. I dont think we could take another fic by Angey. Erik shuddered. Sorry. No, its neither of those. Im holding What the Heck for the opportune time and even Im not that evil, Voldemort said. But you are close, it is a Lord of the Rings fic! Thats what I meant, your first stories came from here. Right, the others responded. Enjoy, Voldemort said, leaving. Quatre and Erik began to clean up their game as the siren went off. Weve got badfic sign! Mackenzie yelled as the bookshelf opened. The group ran through the dank hallway until they reached the theater. After taking their seats, they noticed the backdrop wasnt the shot of SpaceShip Earth in Epcot like Mackenzie had set but a picture of Voldemort with the words, Happy anniversary, written across. He looks scary there, Quatre said. Alright, lets start! Mackenzie typed in the address and nearly shrieked when she saw the story pop up. Uh, Erik? Yes? Remember when you, House, Octavius and I were doing a little side project? Yes. Well, heres the story that inspired it. WHAT? Erik and Octavius yelled before sighing. Mackenzie: Gentlemen and penguin, I give you Unlike Everyone by krillball6 or Jessi. Note from the Author: This is an interesting story, since the plot is very different from most stories in my opinion. Mac: No, it isnt. This is not a Mary-sue Sai: It probably is then. I would never want to fall in love with Lord Elrond (no offense to his fans) I like Legolas much better :)! Mac and Remus: Of course you do! Octavius: Honey, a self-insert is just ONE definition of Mary Sue. And its a subcategory, really. The main definition is a female original character who comes into the fandom and messes it up, usually falling in love with a male canon character even if said character is in a canon relationship. Like someone coming and splitting up Aragorn and Arwen. This story contains mature subject matter, if you can not handle it, please dont read it. I do not own any characters in this story, just Samantha and Jessie, who are my own creations. Sai: With one being a self-insert as Mac called you Jessi. Remus: Lets guess who is the main Sue? Erik: Im starting to hate anyone named Jessica or a derivative thereof. Jessica Stevens, Jessica Giry, this Jessica Edit: Oks All: Huh? I will tell you now that the first few chapters really arent that good since I wrote them when I was like 10. Remus: Then rewrite them or dont post them! I wont change them because it will change the whole story. Erik: Then you should rethink the story. Please bare with the crap-ness because my newest chapters are awesome! Mac: Okay, but by this you know you cant complain when someone reviews that these chapters are crap. Erik: And well be the judge of whats awesome. Summary: A young girl travels to Middle Earth and falls in love with Elrond. Sai: Oh, yes, this isnt a Mary-Sue. *rolls eyes.* Unlike Everyone Oh thank god another day of school is over. I totally hate schoolthese days my life is just, wake up, go to school, come home, do homework then going to bed. I hate life! Samantha was deep in thought after her day at school, so much that she didnt notice her bedroom door right in front of her. Erik: Ooh, Sue pain right off. I like. Bloody hell! Samantha yelled as she ran into her bedroom door. Sam, slightly wobbling, opened the door and walked into her room that she shared with her older sister Jessi What did you do now? Jessie sighed. This had not been the first time Sam had walked into there room with a bump starting to form on her head. I ran into the door, Sam mumbled. Again! Jessie laughed. How could you be so dumb? Sai: A Sue that doesnt have a brain! Just like the others! Mac: So far, krillball, you arent living up to your title. Shut up, Sam said sticking out her tongue. I gonna go for a walk..um...ercan I use your coat? Jareth: You werent wearing one back from school? And why cant you get your own coat? Jessie asked throwing her sister her coat. Maybe because I dont have a job like you! Sorry for being poor, Sam sarcastically said, and with that she was out the door. Quatre: Why doesnt mom or dad pay for a coat? Sai: Because they are meanies who dont love her. Why does she have to be SO picky? What did you do now? I show ya what Ill do, give ya a good snack in the head. All: Huh? Muhahahaha! Sam thought thrusting out her hands and feet in anger, pretending her sister was right in front of her. Erik: Sam, you have problems. She walked along the path going no where really, until she came upon a cookware shop. Normally she would have just passed by the shop but this time something caught her eye. A pair of nice shinny scissors. All: Ooh, shin(n)y! Why am I living anyways? Mac: Because krillball6 got this CRAZY idea to write a fanfiction that was DIFFERENT and yet NOT REALLY SO. My life sucks and I hate it Erik: Look, so your parents wont get you a coat. Report them to child services. Mac: And your older sister teases you. Its what older sisters do. Quatre: And you have to go to school. Guess what? Its the law. So does everybody else. why should I go on? No, what the hell am I thinking. I mean everyones live isnt as easy as pie. Octavius: True dat. I just dont know how to dell with all this pain. Jareth: Well, Im sure a computer brand isnt going to help. Dealing may. If I go on, who would care? All: Uhuh Mac: Look, krillball, you havent really given us much in the way of exposition. Youre just kinda starting with the plot. Its not bad, but this seems to be a character-driven piece and frankly, Sam has no character. If I diedwould anyone cry for me? No.well yesmaybe one day someone will look up and think in the back of their mindisnt someone missing? Sai: And then think No She thought, her vision started to go burly with tears. *All sigh.* Mac: BurlyLarge in bodily size, stout and sturdy. I think you meant blurry. Thats it! I am going to buy those scissors and end all the pain Erik: You know what, this might be more believable than Traceyat least shes shown signs shes not right in her head. She walked into the store and bought the scissors. Sam wanted to die in peace. She wanted to die somewhere that she loved. Mac: Is she going to die under a tree too? If she was going to die, she was going to die in the only place that she felt wanted. Sam walked on, until there were no more cars, streets or houses. She even kept on walking when she met the forest. Mac (Sam): Hi, Forest! Remus (Forest): Hi, Sam! Finally Sam found a place where she would meet mher end. What a perfect place to die. Sitting under a beautiful tree, She thought out loud to no one. Erik: Sopotterfan2006 wasnt original in any way? Mac: Not a lick. Slowly Sam brought the scissors to her wrist. Mac: Well, at least Tracey killed herself a different way. Then she pulled the blade along her skin, feeling the blade go through her skin. She looked as little bubbles of blood started to form at the service of her skin. She kept on cutting, taking out all her pain and sorrow until there was nothing left inside of her. Sam felt the life being drawn out of her. When she peered down at her wrists they were covered in blood, she couldnt even see her palely All: Palely? Mac: Thats honestly a word? skin colour. She felt so week and helpless but most of all she felt happy. Its all coming to an end, I will never have to feel the pain again, She rasped. Gradually her eyes closed and that was the end for Samantha, or so she thought. A/N: Ok everyone reading the story (sorry for interrupting). I am NOT supporting killing yourself. If you feel this way get help. Jareth: Thats a lovely PSA, but I think if you want to portray the seriousness of suicidal thoughts, youd create a character who wanted to off herself due to reasons other than sister was mean, had no coat and school sucks. Elrond and his daughter, Arwen All: Comma. were taking a peaceful walk through the forest when, All: No comma. he saw something in the bush. Remus: Why do they always land in the bushes? Erik: At least Tracey ended up underneath another tree. Arwen stay back, Elrond warned talking step closer to the thing. *All clap.* Erik: Best name for a Sue EVER! What is it father? Arwen asked alarmed. Octavius: She was afraid that thing would jump up, reveal she was her long-lost sister and Elrond would cry that the salvation of Middle-earth had been found! Mac: Point Octavius. Elrond looked closer at the thing and turned it over. He soon realized that it was a she, a young girl from the race of men. Her clothes are strangeI wonder where she came from and how did she get through our guards along the borders? He had so many questions about this strange looking girl, he did not know where to start when she would wake up. All: English, sil vous plait? Father? Arwen asked from behind him. It is a girl from the race of men. Mac: Ah, another person who hasnt gone to the School of Good Dialogue. She appears to be hurt. There are some cuts on her wrists many of them I do not think they were inflicted by swords, Elrond said picking the child up into his arms. Sai: Key word there being child. Just keep that in mind when the lovey-dovey stuff starts. Will you heal her father? Arwen asked doubting that he would day no. All (singing): Day-o! Do say day-o! Daylight come and me wanna go home! Yes Arwen, I will. Though, the wounds are deep and she has lost a lot of blood, Elrond stated. Octavius: Fortunately, the Rivendell Blood Bank was well stocked after the mandatory blood drive the week prior. Sai: Point Octavius. They walked back to there home in silence, wondering who this strange girl was. Remus: Chapters over? Mac: Guess so. *All dash out.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Sep 25 2008, 07:07 AM Post #2 |
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"Sam Wakes Up and Elrond is Both Insensitive and REALLY Creepy." *All return.* Octavius: Another chapter. All: Yep. Mac: This ones entitled Waking Up. Erik: What was the first one called? Mac: Death. Erik: Ahh. (Pretentious) Note from the Author: Ok peoplessome of you did not read wut Gertrude: Good Lord child! We should hit the back button now since you cannot spell such a basic word as what properly! Jareth: Gertrude showing up this early is NOT a good sign. I wrote, this not going exactly like the books or movies. Remus: Then thats called AU. Tones of peoples did not like my first chapter, so I made a few changes. Erik: Then what was the original chapter one like? Octavius: I dont think I want to know. I hope that it is now to your liking but I remind you that I NOT going to change my whole story just because some people dont like it. Mac: Okay, but you should listen if you have a lot of people telling you that somethings wrong. And dont delete the bad anonymous reviews. Quatre: Shes a bad review deleter? Mac: Yes. Please R&R or e-mail me Evanescence. Mac: Oh no, shes a fan of the band too? flames-they will be used to melt the snow outside my window. I would like to thank the reviewers who liked or didnt my story but gave me some ideas to make this story better. Remus: Well, as long as you realize that they werent flames, were good. Thank you very much! These wounds could not have been made by someone else; they look like they were done by herself. Why? Why would someone do this to themselves? Elrond though as he looked at the newly cleaned wounds. He looked closely at the girl, she had foggy blue eyes Jareth: Oh, she came out of her coma for you to see? and dirty blonde hair that went to her shoulders. She was about medium size with pale white skin. The thing he noticed first about her were her eyes and her mouth which, was a natural dark red. Mac: I dont recall anything about elves not having red lips. She is beautiful for a human Sai: Shes also a CHILD! We dont even know her real age nor what school she was in. She could still be in middle school! No! Do not fall for someone so quickly, she could be a spy, a spawn of pure evil. Erik: Shes also a child. You said so yourself. Do not trust a hope, He thought. Mac: Look, Elrond is not a widower. He has hope that hell see Celebrian in Valinor or that shell come back. Hes not going to fall for some child. Father, how is she doing? Arwen asked walking into the room taking a sit Remus (American Southern accent): Well, Ill take myself a sit here beside the girl. She will be fine, though these wounds are interestingdifferent, He stated as he started to wrap the bandages around her wrists. Interesting? Different? What do you mean father? She asked puzzled. These cutsI think she inflicted them on herself, Elrond said looking sadly at the girl. Quatre: What, there is no suicide in Middle-earth? Mac: Im sure thats not the strangest wounds Elrond has seen. He looked up at his daughter to see a look of horror and great sadness. I wonder what happened to this girl to make her do such a thing, Arwen said meekly. Yes, but we must leave her now to get her rest. Arwen, He said taking his daughter in his arms. Yes father, She replied. Samantha opened her blue eyes, Where the hell am I? Erik: How eloquent. Mac: Ugly grey lines, making transitions less awkward. She sat up and looked around the room. The walls were covered in hand painted leaves of different colours, it looked like leaves were growing around the room! There was some furniture made out of a beautiful oak wood, Octavius: Calling the Department of Redundancy Department. though there was not a lot of it- a chair, a bookshelf and a dresser. Quatre: What else does she want? Shes in the healing house, not a spa. Her bed had beautiful sheets that seemed to shimmer in the light with bedposts that were hand carved out of wood. The room was simple enough but it was the most beautiful room that Samantha had ever seen. Wait a minuteIm suppose to be dead, She cried. *Quatre holds up a tissue box.* Thats not something I would have thought someone to say when they first awoke, Elrond said walking into the room, closing the door behind him. Tell me; are those wounds on your wrists there by accident? He questioned. Erik: Way to be sensitive, Elrond. No, Sam quietly said. Pardon me? You need to speak up dear, Elrond joked, trying to lighten up the mood in the room. *All stare* NoI did them, Sam said looking her hands, trying to avoid his eyes. She had to get it off her chest, Sai: To a complete stranger? she had told no one about her thoughts and somewhere deep down she knew she had to. If she had only do it sooner, things would have been different. Why? No wait, do not answer that questionYou do not know me well enough to give me the answer, He smiled, lifting her face until her eyes were staring into his. His gaze is piercingWhat a hunk! Sam thought, mentally slapping herself for her last comment. Others: REMUS! Remus: Im getting them. *Hands out bags.* Maybe when we get better acquainted you will be able to tell me what is wrong Elrond whispered. Yes but..um..who are you? She asked. Mac: Now you ask, genius? Seriously? Elrond chuckled, Yes of course! My name is Elrond lord of Rivendell, and who might you be? My name is Samantha, pleased to meet you! She said extending her hand, But please tell me, what is Rivendell and where is it? I never heard of itI mean where am I? All: Woah! Jareth: A Sue who isnt obsessed with the Lord of the Rings. Mac: Well, at least the Suethor isnt going to pretend to have read the books. You are in Middle Earth of course! Elrond laughed nervously thinking she was joking, the look on her face told him other wise, You do not now what Middle Earth is? NoI come from Earth in the year 2003, She said looking up into his eyes once more. Sai: How does she know its a different year? Elrond looked at her with a puzzled look etched across his face. She does not come from this world. She came back in time, why? I must talk to Gandalf, Jareth: Make up your mind. Does she come from another world or did she go back in time? The two arent mutually inclusive. I must leave you now- rest, He said giving her a kiss on the forehead and with that he was off. Why did I just kiss her forehead? Elrond asked himself. Why did he just kiss my forehead? Samantha wondered. Remus: Why do we care? AN: Sorry this chapter is so short. It IS Christmas eve, give me a brake! Mac: How about I give you a Spell Check for Dummies book instead? Merry Christmas or Merry whatever! Rock on! Until next time. All (Grumbling): Yeah, yeah *All leave.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Sep 26 2008, 06:03 AM Post #3 |
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"Well, That Puts the Suicide Into Perspective. Perhaps This Should've Been Said IN CHAPTER ONE?" *All return.* Erik: Nearly three chapters in and this is worse than potterfan2006s story. Sai: You mean, the rip-off actually improved on it? Mac: Slightly. Tracey was established as being older, though still TOO young to be Elronds romantic interest though the romance was toned down. Remus: Whats this chapter called? Mac: MemoriesUh oh All: FLASHBACK! (Pretentious) Note From The Author: Hey peoples! Ok, I almost died laughing when I read the reviews of Beguile and ashekalypso. Mac: Both of which have mysteriously disappeared. First of all, in order to have kids- you dont need to be married, I knew that when I was like 5. Remus: True. Mac: But its not so for Elves. Sex equals marriage. Second, I am saying that he broke off the marriage when she left so he is no longer married. Sai: I dont recall that being said. Besides, could it happen? Mac: An elf could remarry, but the only one to do so not only screwed up himself but his kids as well. At least, thats what I got from summaries of the Silm. Also ashekalypso you really disgust me, yes elves are beautiful creatures I am not saying they arent but not everyone will disregard others just because elves are around. All: Huh? Sai: This would be easier to understand if she didnt delete reviews. Every person sees beauty in different ways. Mac: Oh, it was probably a comment about an Elf like Elrond being stunned by the beauty of a young Mannish girl. Which is probably true. Here everyone is saying Elrond is so out of character in my story and here you are basically taking Elrond and dragging him in the dirt. In your review you make him out to be a self-absorbed elf that looks at everyone lower or younger then him as a fly. Erik: But the thing is, he probably wouldnt care how beautiful Samantha is. He liked humans but would probably come off as more aloof nor would he fall in love with her. I really hope you overlook your attitude on him. I would like to thank the reviewer dee because they brought up a good point. When I wrote "Pardon me? You need to speak up dear," Elrond joked. I was meaning that he was trying to lighten up the mood. I feel bad for letting that through and I am deeply sorry if you took it the wrong way. Quatre: But there wasnt only one way to take itElrond was being insensitive. Also, Sam told Elrond so fast about her problem because she was tired of keeping it in herself. Erik: But to trust a stranger is crazy and shows a lack of judgment. I would really like to thank Cristyn Lebeau for they really get what fan- fiction is about. Quatre: Translation: Thanks for praising my work! Making your own stories and if you stayed to the book they would not be original! Remus: But now youre describing original fiction and not fanfiction, where you are a FAN of whatever youre writing about. That means you should respect what the author has crafted. I am really happy that you like my fic- I write for people like you! Also, I hope people stop being stupid and flaming your fic. Erik: It probably deserves it though. And just to let my readers know- I do know what suicide is about, more then any of you will ever know. Sai: Did you try to kill yourself? Remus: More likely she knew someone who knew someone who knew someone who tried to kill themselves because she takes this too lightly to convince us she knows more than we will ever know. Also it is not something fun or cool to write about I know. All: THEN WHY DID YOU? Ok, on with the story. If you dont like it, please dont read. Jareth: Yeah, like we have an option. WARNING: People that are crazy over the LOTR books do not read. Remus: Look, you write fanfiction for fans. Not your fans, though, the fans of these books. Also if you do not like different and/or original idea stories do not read. Octavius: Great, we can read this because it is neither a different nor an original idea story! Remus: Point Octavius. Sorry this note was so long! Please R&R! Thanks! Sam was lying in bed trying to fall asleep, unfortunately she kept on thinking of her life and that was keeping her awake-big time. Mac: You can tell someone very young wrote this. Why did I do it? Why did I try to end my life? She asked herself. Sai: Because you didnt have a coat, your sister was mean to you and you hated school? Because you are ugly and worthless. Everything you do is wrong, even your father thinks so. It has to be true, The little devil inside her head told her. All: DADDY ISSUES! Daddy didnt mean it! He just gets a little over mad sometimes, She said aloud to herself, remembering one of the many times her father yelled at her. Mac: My dad yells at me too. Its called being a parent. Erik: Well, at least he isnt physically abusive. Lets see how bad a parent ten-year-old krillball6 thought this dad was. Flashback-Samantha was only 10 years old...6 years ago Jareth: Bad transitions. Oh my god Jessie, youre SO dumb! Sam laughed after being hit in the head with a pillow. Oh ya sure! Jessie replied sticking out her tongue. Would you two shut up! Your mother and I are trying to sleep and all we can hear is you two laughing your guts out! There Mac: Wrong their, sweetie. father yelled storming into the room. Dad we were just having some fun, if thats ok with you. Its like 7:30 in the night anyway! Sam said coldly. Erik: Way to show some respect. Mac: Perhaps Mom and Dad need to go to bed early so they can wake up early to go to their jobs to pay for the food you eat. Dad has done this too many times. I am not bowing down to him so easily, Jareth: If hes abusive like you say, wouldnt Sam be absolutely terrified? Mac: Possibly, however there are occasions where the victim finally works up the courage to stand up to their abuser and leave. And then they generally go on Oprah to tell their inspirational tale. Sam, what are you doing? Dont get him angrier then he already is! Jessie harshly whispered to her sister. Why you little hideous bitch! Your lucky I let you stay in my house with a face and mind like yours! Her father screamed taking his anger out on a near-by wall. Sai: Lovely. Punching a hole straight through the 5 cm wall. Mac: Thatskinda thin. I think I could break the wall. He left the room leaving a two very scared children be hide. Sam and Jessie just looked at the wall, glad that the wall wasnt them. Sams lip started to tremble and then she burst out into tears. Jessie rushed to her sisters side, taking her in her arms and stroking her hair. Samantha dont listen to those awful things that dad said and says. Dont listen to him, you are a beautiful person, on the outside and inside, Jessie said trying to make her little sister feel better. All: REMUS! *He quickly hands out the bags.* No Jessie- hes right. Everything he says is right, Sam muttered. In the present Jareth: Another bad transition. Mac: WAIT! We finally know how old Sam is! Shes sixteen. At least Tracey had reached the age of consent in America. Everything he said was right, Sam said trying not the let the tears fall. Samantha! What has happened to you! You used to be a strong girl that honestly did not care of what people thought of her. You used to ignore everything you father said about you- along with other people! A voice inside Sam shouted, tying to get Sams self-confidence back. Remus: Honestly, with that man for a father, Im surprised she had any self-confidence to begin with. Sai: Point Remus. Yes but after years of hearing the same thing, one can not help but fall into a pit of questioning, She said finally letting the tears flow freely. Erik: Someones been seeing Dr. Stone as well. She sat there, the rest night rocking back and forth until she succumbed to a sleep which, were haunted by dreams of her past. Dream Mac: Cue the wavy effect! *All wave their hands.* Her father had just yelled at her again, this time just for laughing at a joke to loudly. This is it! I can not take this anymore! Sam screamed inside her head running for her drawer. She pulled out a knife that she kept taped to the top of her drawer in a silk handkerchief. Sam had pulled this knife before only to put it back again. Sai: Whats so special about this knife? Jareth: What? Sai: You wouldnt necessarily just keep a regular steak knife in your drawer wrapped in a handkerchief even if you fear for your life. It has to be special in some way. Mac: Point Sai. This time I will not stop myself, it must happen. There is no life for me, nor is there one for the future, Sam told herself. Octavius: What has Sam been watching? Some bad Lifetime movie? Sam dont do this! You have a life to live for! Dont! Live for your sister! What would she do if you killed herself? Your father, though he does not show it, does care about you! The voice inside her screamed. Mac: Then shes not truly suicidal. The little voice usually tells them to do it. She sat there looking at the knife deciding what to do. One last time she gave into her mind and put the knife back- one last time. Jareth: If she had her own suicide knife, why did she buy scissors in the first chapter? End of dream Mac: Cue the effect! *All wave their arms.* Sam woke up, panting. This was not the first time she had this dream and each time she did she was more disturbed by it. Suddenly there was a knock at the door. Lady Samantha All: COMMA! are you awake? Elrond asked. Mac: Though we do know that English Remus: We know that they shouldnt be able to communicate. Yes Lord Elrond, please come in, Sam said trying to seem normal again. Hello Samantha, please call me Elrond! Elrond said smiling. How are you doing this fine morning? Oh no need to call my Lady, I am far from that! All: Damn straight. Yes though I am doing fine and yourself? She questioned. I am doing well thank you. I am glad you are feeling alright. I thought today I would show you around Rivendell, Elrond suggested. Quatre: You know for someone who just lost a lot of blood, shes recovering quite nicely. Mac: They mustve had a lot of blood in the Rivendell blood bank. Sai: Shared point Mac and Quatre. Oh no! I wouldnt want to be any trouble, She said try to shrug off the idea. Not at all Samantha, I would love too. I was also wondering if I could look at your wounds. Just to see if they are healing nicely, Elrond answered taking off the bandages and looking at the wounds. These wounds are healing up nicely. There should be little scaring, if any, Elrond said All: COMMA! smiling kindly at Sam. Oh, good, Sam said. For today I well request that you forget about everything that has ever caused you pain or sorrow. I want you to have a pleasurable time today, Elrond said not sure of her reaction. Um...ok sure, Sam replied. When are we going to go? As soon as you get dressed Samantha, Elrond said cheerfully. Jareth: Is this the most boring conversation you ever read? Mac: Its up there. Oh! Well in that case as soon as you leave my room I will get dressed, She said lifting an eyebrow. Oh yes of course! Elrond stammered, a flush appearing across his face. Remus: Dear Jonas! Elrond, you are thousands of years olda sixteen year old girl of Men isnt going to turn you into a teenage boy! True to his word, as soon as Samantha was dressed they were out of the palace walking around the grounds. While they were enjoying each others company a messenger that was sent last night by Lord Elrond was well on his way to Gandalf. If all goes well Gandalf should be in Rivendell by tomorrow! The messenger thought happily. All: Random? Sam had just had the best day of her life! Elrond was currently walking Samantha back to her room. She reflected on the day she just had. She learned much about Elrond and his past along with his kids. She learned of the one ring and Sauron. Erik: Because Elrond is just going to tell her of such matters upon her arrival in Rivendell! Mostly, she and Elrond walked around the breath- talking Rivendell talking. She had just spent the last half and hour eating the best dinner she had ever had! Here is your room Samantha. I can only hope that you will have a good sleep, Elrond said opening the door for Samantha. Quatre: Another author who neglects the commas! Why? *Mac comforts Quatre.* Why thank you Elrond! I hope you have a good nights rest also! She smiled closing the door. Today had truly been a good day. She had the best time of her life. Jareth: Gee, think Samantha had a good time? Mac: Dont know. Just glad she spared us. I smiled! I cant believe I did that! I havent smiled like that for years now! Sam thought. Elrond is the best thing that has happened to me! He is a really good person,. And cute too! She said smiling and giggling just thinking of him. *All groan.* Samantha had an easy time falling asleep tonight. Not knowing of the hardships she was to face tomorrow... Mac: Put the wambulance on stand-by! Remus: Oh look, chapters over! *All leave.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Sep 27 2008, 08:11 AM Post #4 |
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"Meet Sam's Evil Twin...Wait, Can You Commit Suicide With a Brush?" *Everyone returns.* Erik: I think this Suethor is giving AnAng Mac: Angey? Erik: A run for her money. Octavius: This also makes Tracey look good. Mac: Come on, The Dream. Sai: ANOTHER ONE? (Pretentious) Note from the author: Hey peoples, I want to thank everyone who reviewed. Mac: Good Jonas. This is the reason why FF.net created the review reply feature. Erik: Well, should be fun for us! Risperidone- Dude, I totally agree with you, you made my day! Dont think that since this is the shortest response thing that your review didnt matter to me. All: Boring. I.H.N- Mac: I LOVE HIM or HER! I only delete reviews that are flames. I hope I dont offend anyone by removing flames; Erik: Newsflash, you seem to have deleted two reviews which pointed out how you were giving canon the middle finger. I love reviews that give me ways to improve my writing skills which, your review did. I know that Elrond is OOC but I like characters to be different then Gertrude: Wrong than. in the original story. I mean for some people, they like it but if I wanted to see the character I would read the books (which I am ironically) Jareth: Then you should know what you are mocking! Mac: Point Jareth. or seer the movies (which I love!! ) Quatre: Looks like someones characters didnt translate. Remus: Also, most fans WANT to see the canon character act the way they do in canon. If Elrond is going to be changed, dont turn a 3000 year old Elf into a teenage boy. Mac: Or sex-addicted pervert. Others: What have YOU been reading?Mac: Dont ask. But you gave me some ideas for the story, with the trusting to All: Wrong too. fast thing. Thanks a lot for the review! You rock!! Aoden Half-elven- Ummmm thanks I guess? You really dissed me a lot, Im sure I disserve it but come on! Im new at this so to speak. Mac: Heres a clue. Its called Spell Check. I mean I have posted a lot of stories but I am always learning so please back off a little bit. Im still happy to get your review though; I like to know what people really think. I think you kind of flamed me but you said some good words at the end so I dont think so... anyways Im babbling... but thanks for the review! Mac: Well, at least she thanked the person. WARNING: This chapter is a little sick and twisted; it is more of a look inside Samanthas head. Erik: Well, that explains everything. Samantha you idiot! You know you cant ignore me forever, so you were happy for a couple days, Im still here. Octavius: That should be followed by an evil laugh. Wheres the evil laugh button? Mac: Thats what we have Erik for. Erik: MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Octavius: Oh. You know it was just a one day thing. Elrond was just all too happy to accept you in his open arms. Sai: True dat. You know why he did that? He felt SORRY for you, a human girl cutting herself. He knew you were in pain and wanted to help and it worked... for only a little while. Im back and Ill never leave you again! All: Erik. Erik: MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I better get a cough drop after this. Mac: Deal. Samantha stared at herself, well it wasnt herself but it was a dark version of her. Quatre: Oh no, she has an evil twin! She wasnt gothic, or anything like that, but her features; her face, hair and even skin were dark Gertrude: Period. Jareth: Care to explain? Her hair was black, her skin looked as if she was in a permanent shadow Remus: Im going to peg that on the blood loss. Mac: Point Remus. and her face had an evil scowl on it with her eyes glaring at her, seeing into her soul. Sam was to say the least, afraid. She had never seen her dark-side, where all her bad thoughts came from. Octavius (sing-song): Someone needs therapy! She always thought they just came out of nowhere, now they had a face to them, a source of evil located within her. Oh, I guess I scared you by the look on your face. Dont worry sister, Quatre: It is her evil twin sister! Mac: Or Jessis one sick person. I will forever be here, in your mind, wasnt I always? Where did your sick little mind turn to when you had no one? Me! You will always turn to me when you need someone. Youre weak! Sai: No wonder she tried to off herself! I didnt turn to you. She tried to sound confident but all that came out was trembling voice. Give it up! You know it would be easier for you if you admitted it to yourself. Remember when you would cry to me and I would answer with kind words? Remus: Yes, because KILL YOURSELF are kind words. KIND words? They were words full of hate! Remus: Freaky. So you do admit that you talked to me. They were yes, but did they not make you feel better. After you cute your-self, didnt you feel better? All the pain seemed to run away with the blood and tears. Remember those days? Yes, She whispered, I want them back but I dont want to cut myself anymore. I dont want to disappoint Lord Elrond. Forget him! Quatre: Im bored. Must we listen to the Sue argue with her evil twin? No, Quatre: Really? Yes, Quatre: SWEET! Sai: Point Quatre. NO I wont! DO IT! Samantha woke up, drenched in sweat, NO! Sai: That was the dream? Others: Bleugh. Mac: Ive had worse nightmares. She looked around the room and she then realized that it was just a dream. Sam pulled the covers close to her body, forming a cocoon and started to cry to herself. *Quatre offers tissues.* I was a fool, I want you back! She sobbed. Ill always be here you know. I love you. All: Now go get something sharp! Her mind screamed at her. Jareth: GO GET SOME HELP! Mac: Point Jareth. Samantha looked around the room, she knew she had to use something here, she would have gone to kitchen...if she knew where that was, but the question was, would Lord Elrond be so careless as to leave something sharp in the room? All: Probably. I hope so, Sam sighed looking around the room. She havent found anything yet and she had looked almost everywhere. She didnt think she was going to find anything, why would elves need sharp objects in their rooms? To brush their hair! She gasped picking up the brush. Mac: You have got to be kidding me. Shes going to cut herself with a brush? She looked at the intricate designs. There were swirls of silver with symbols that she had never seen. She exhaled noisily as she looked at the brush, she knew that it would just give her burns, If anything, Sam mumbled. She took the end of brush and looked closely at it. There were noticeably sharp edges on the handle, normally she wouldnt use it but it was all she had. Well here goes nothing, Mac: I cant watch. *She and Quatre close their eyes. Erik and Jareth munch on popcorn.* Sam brought the brush up to the wrist, pressed hard and pulled. Nothing happened for a few seconds, then blood swiftly flowed form her wrist. She cut herself a few more times then sighed in bliss. She lay down on her bed and cried to herself in a happy manner. Im sorry I ever left you, even if it was only a day or two. Thank you my friend, Sam sat there, bleeding her pain and doubts away. Remus: This is making me uncomfortable. All the movement had re-opened her cuts. Knock, Knock. Lady Samantha may I come in? Lord Elrond asked. Oh shit. Busted, Samantha twisted laughed. All: Wait, huh? Hearing her speak and laugh, Elrond entered her room, Im glad your awake, I was hoping to...Lady Samantha? You... Cut myself yes. You can see! I never would have guessed, She bitterly laughed. Erik: Shes just as rude as Tracey! Suddenly a shadow covered her face and her voice went to a lower key. Did you really think you could stop me from getting to her Elrond? Mac: Oh my Jonas, shes possessed! Buddy (pops in): Quick! Get Fr. Karras! *V-Mail.* Voldemort: Get out or Im keeping you! *Buddy leaves.* Look how easily she came back to me, all the evil in Mordor All: Huh? could not hope to be equal with the evil that flows through these veins! Mac: Oh dear Jonas, is she some sort of super weapon that Sauron wants? Lady Samantha? Lord Elrond gaped. Lord Elrond? Im so sorry! I couldnt help it! Sam cried getting up from the bed. If you mention Mordor, you must truly be evil! Erik: Amen! Sai: Huh, that was short. Voldemort: You want to go straight into the next chapter? *Remus covers Sais mouth.* Mac: No, no. We want our break. It was bad. Quatre: Evil twin. Or something like that. *Doors unlock and they race out.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Sep 28 2008, 05:43 AM Post #5 |
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Resident Time Lady
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"Who Will Elrond Pick? Arwen or the Sue?" *Everyone drudges back into the theater. Quatre looks like he is having a panic attack.* Quatre: I dont want to deal with the evil twin anymore! Dont make me deal with the evil twin! *Okay, scratch that. He IS having a panic attack. Mackenzie whips out his cell phone.* Mac: Hi, Dr. Stone? Oh, no, Eriks fine. Remus is fine too. Im fine. Its Quatre this time. Uh huhNow? Uh, were about to go into aOkay, okay. Fine. *Hangs up.* Quatre, sweetie, youre going to see Dr. Stone. Quatre: No evil twin? Mac: No. *Quatre runs out of the theater as Lucius comes to stare at them.* Lucius: You need a replacement. Mac: Isnt that Houses reward? House: Thanks for reminding me. *Lucius leaves.* Whats this? Erik: Remember For Love of an Elf? House: Dear Jonas Mac: Gandalf Comes. All (flatly): Yay. (Pretentious) Note from the author: Hello again! Its been a LONG time since I updated I know Sai: Really? It only feels like yesterday. but I have been SO busyschool has really sucked the creative-ness right out of me. Well, Im sort of up and running again. Please R&R, it really helps me to get better in writing. House: This isnt the sequel to For Love of an Elf, is it? Mac: What? Oh no, this is the story that inspired it. House: Which is better? Mac: The other one. House: Crap. If you mention Mordor, you must truly be evil! House: Whats that? Mac: The last line from the previous chapter. House: Ah. Arwen! Elrond gasped, he has never heard his daughter speak in such a way. Sai: In all honesty, it makes no sense. Arwen is old enough to know that not everyone who talks about Mordor is evil. Is everyone in the Council going to be evil? Father, cant you see? She is sent her by the dark lord as a spy! Jareth: Id agree, but shes too stupid to be a spy. Mac: Point Jareth. She will try to destroy us! We must send her away! All: YES! Noplease Im sorry! I didnt mean it! It was her talking not me! House: Who? Erik: Sams evil twin. I didnt mean it! Im sorry! Im sorry! Samantha cried rushing into a corner and rocking back and forth. Mac: You know, one of my favorite OCs is Samantha Snape. This one is giving the name Samantha a stigma. Arwen! Leave, now! But ada! Arwen started stepping into the room. Elrond looked disappointedly at his daughter and trying to keep his temper down he stated, Arwen leave now, we will talk about this later. Arwen saw the rage in her fathers eyes and she new what she had done. She did not know why she had acted in such a way it was not like her to judge so quickly. Remus: Its the Sues spell! She looked down and slowly walked over to Samantha. She looked up at her father, her eyes pleading with him to let her say her peace with Samantha. She spoke guiltily and said, Lady Samantha, I am truly sorry, at this time I we do not know if you are who you say you are but I am sorry for the way I have acted, Arwen looked down at the child and Remus: Wondered why she was apologizing to this person. Sai: Point Remus. opened her mouth to say more but her father shook his head and asked her leave once more. Mac: So Elrond is going to pick this nobody teenage girl he just met over his own beloved daughter? Yeah, right. Samantha looked up, her face stained with tears, Im sorry I didnt mean to. It was her! She was the one who said all that. Please believe me! Im sorry! House: Please. Thats what they all say. Lord Elrond felt pity for the creature in front of him. Someone so young should not have to go through this pain, Its alright Samantha, I do not know what came over my daughter. Please, rest now. He said helping her off the floor. Samantha got into the bed and curled up into a ball and fell into a dreamless sleep. Sai: Thank Jonas. Lord Elrond softly shut the door behind and went looking for his daughter. Elrond found his daughter the library All: His daughter is the library? sitting in a chair looking down at her feet. Arwen! There you are. What came over you? Remus: We told you. The Sue. Ada I just dont know. I was passing by when I saw you together and then she spoke. I dont know why but I felt that she was evil. I really dont know why but I did. Mac: Thats because youre a canon character who is fighting the Sue spell. House: Keep fighting! Yes, I know she did not seem like her herself. As she explains it it was her and from what I gather this is another person inside her head, the negative side perhaps. Mac: Makes you wonder what a Middle-earth citizen would think of schizophrenia. I mean, look at Gollum. I am still shocked at how you reacted All: Comma. Arwen. Elrond said looking down at his daughter. Yes, I am sorry father, for what I have done to her. I scared her I just dont know what came over me. I am so sorry, Erik: Is the entire chapter Arwen apologizing over and over again? Please. Its ok now Arwen. Samantha is sleeping and I can only hope that this event will not affect Samantha very much. Yes ada but I must now be off. Good Bye, All: Thats abrupt. Good bye Arwen Just as Arwen left the room, one of Elronds many servants came in, House: He has many servants? Mac: I guess. House: But he or she doesnt deserve a gender identification let alone a name. Yeah. Mac: Point House. My Lord, you have a visitor. Ah, I see. Please send them in, My good friend- Lord Elrond! How are you doing on this fine day? Remus: Does the servant have a split personality too? Gandalf! Elrond said embracing his old friend, I am doing fine and you? Good, good. Now do you mind telling me why I am here? House (Gandalf): Because the Alzheimers is starting to set in. Mac: Point House. Well, you might want to sit down for this Gandalf, Elrond sighed gesturing towards the chairs. He then proceeded to tell Gandalf everything that had happened since Samanthas arrival. I see Elrond. What do you wish to know? Gandalf, is she is she evil? It all makes sense now! Gandalf suddenly shouted. Sai (Gandalf): SHE IS! Elrond gave him a puzzled look but Gandalf continued on, I had a vision about a strange girl coming to our world. House (Gandalf): She was evil. It was shown to me that she was sent to help a man heal his old wounds, Erik: Sauron? Mac: He said man, not Maia. along with her own. As an answer to your question though, no my friend, she is not evil. All: Dammit! But sometimes she seems so wicked, Elrond was truly at a loss of words. He was very confused, for Samantha seemed like a great person that was just going threw a hard time and was very depressed but she sometimes showed a side of her that scared Elrond. She could be so evil at times. Erik: Thats the Sue side. He really did hope that Gandalf was right and that she is not evil. It was strange to Elrond; he had never felt this way about someone he just met, especially an un-known woman. Mac: Ahem, girl. Sai: Point Mac. He cared for her so much already. Come to think of it, he hadnt felt this way since he was with his love of long ago Mac: Celebrian? and that thought alone frightened him. Yes, I know but Elrond you must understand, it is not her. It is a sort of being within her. Samantha is a kind and gentle women by nature. Jareth: You dont even know her! She has just gone through so much in her life that she has created this character inside of her that has absorbed all her hate and grief. It seems that now this dark creature has been released. Erik: Then we must catch it! *All grab butterfly nets.* Then what must what we do Gandalf? What can we do to help her? That, my friend, is something that I do not know. For now, all we can do is give her love, support and to show her the positives of life. I see you said she was sent here to heal a mans wounds along with her own Who is this man? Erik: Theres the popular Legolas, but he has no woundsunless Thranduil is being an abusive prat again. Mac: Theres Faramir, who has some daddy issues of his own. Remus: What about Boromir? Save him from the Ring? Sai: Take your pick. He is her soul mate, he is the one who, in helping her will help himself in a way. This man is to stay a secret, and all will be reveled in time Elrond, just wait my friend. Ah Gandalf, your always one to talk in riddles and keep secrets. Would you like to see Samantha? House (Gandalf): No, no. Thats okay. With Gandalfs nod of approval Elrond led Gandalf to Samanthas room. Elrond slowly opened the door to reveal the slumbering Samantha. She looks so peaceful like this. It is hard to imagine that this girl is in so much pain, Indeed and if I didnt know better I would say your falling for her Elrond, Gandalf whispered All: COMMA. House: And why does everyone want to turn Elrond into a pedophile? closing the door walking out of the room. A small blush appeared upon the Lords face and Elrond didnt even know why it was there, Gandalf please! Im an old man, I dont even think it is possible for me to love anymore, And that was that, Gandalf said no more and they left it there. Mac: But not for long. House: Chapters over though, right? Mac: Right. But stick around. Who knows what state Quatre is in. |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Sep 29 2008, 06:48 AM Post #6 |
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Resident Time Lady
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"Note: Sam Could ALMOST Pass For An Elf." *Everyone with House marches back into the theater. Sai is carrying Little Goldy with him. Legoals and the newly returned Aragoran fly in behind them.* House: So Quatre needs to take a few chapters off and has a doctors note that says so? I feel Im back in gym class. Ill fake you all some doctors notes. Hey, Im actually a doctor! Ill nick Wilsons pad too! Mac: Thanks, but well be fine. He also needs absolute silence now as well. Why, I dont know. Sai, I see Little Goldy wanted to come back. Its been a while. Sai: Yeah, the little guy was throwing himself against his bowl as I got ready to come in. House: What are the flying things? Mac: Oh, mini-balrogs. Ill explain later. Life Goes On. Muha! Jareth: Pathetic evil laugh. Erik? Erik: Fine. MUAHAHAHAHAHAHA! Jareth: Thanks. A new chapter! Please R&R, feedback rocks! LOL. *All groan.* WARNING: People that are crazy over the LOTR books do not read. Remus: Ahh, still giving the fans you are supposedly writing for the middle finger. Lovely. Also, if you think that a person must stay true to the books like they are the bible please do not read. I ignore some of the rules that are in the books to make my story work, if you dont like then dont read. Mac: Look, you dont have to follow everything like it happened in the book. However, we want to recognize the characters we know. And you have to realize that just because you introduced this new character, it doesnt mean canon goes bye-bye. It means you have to figure out how she changes canon. Leave now if you must, thanks for your time *House and Erik check the door. They sit back down.* Erik: Nope, still locked. All: Damn. To My Reviewers Agent Alexandra Paris: Thanks for your reviews! Im glad your Gertrude: Wrong youre! House: Oh, Gertrude, Ive missed you. enjoying my story. Sorry it took so long for my update, I know I suck. Erik: Yes, but not in the way you think. Thank you for your kind works, I may not be a fantasist Others: Ah, what? Mac: Someone who writes fantasies. Others: Ahh. writer but I try my best. Thank you very much! Aoden Half-elven: I did not mean to offend you. I did thank you for your review. You did say some helpful things. I guess I just feel that you were a little mean. But yet again you made a point, I need to toughen up a bit. Thank you and Im sorry if I offended you, I liked reading your reviews. Thanks again. Recap All: Seriously? Elrond slowly opened the door to reveal the slumbering Samantha. She looks so peaceful like this. It is hard to imagine that this girl is in so much pain, Indeed and if I didnt know better I would say your falling for her Elrond, Gandalf whispered closing the door walking out of the room. A small blush appeared upon the Lords face and Elrond didnt even know why it was there, Gandalf please! Im an old man, I dont even think it is possible for me to love anymore, And that was that, Gandalf said no more and they left it there. House: We sporked this already! Mac: Look, krillball, its not like its been a week since the last episode so you need that Last time on whatever Your readers can just hit the damn back button to reread it. House: Point Mac. On With The Story Sam woke up feeling a familiar sting coming from her arms. She sighed pulling her sleeves and rolled over screaming into her pillow. I fucking hate this shit, She sighed in her pillow. Sai: I fucking hate your cursing. Sam decided to go back to sleep just before a maid came into her room. My Lady Samantha! Still abed at this hour! Well I never, She laughed opening the closet and looking through the clothes, Lord Elrond requests your presence at breakfast. House: Elrond, seriously? This is a girl who youve you brought back from death only for her to cut herself again and lose more blood. I think she needs to rest and get food in herin bed! Oh really? Sam said raising an eyebrow, And just who are you? I see it only far that I know your name if you know mine, The maid took out a dress and put it on the chair, My name my Lady? My name is Eselin. (A/N: I have no clue how to spell this name, I thought of it in my head, it is pronounced E-c-lin, if anyone thinks they know how to spell it please tell me. I think Tolkien would be rolling over in his grave if he saw they way I was killing his beautiful elfish names. Thanks) Erik: Err, is it really Elvish? Mac: Ill check. Itll most likely be Sindarin. I highly doubt many people use Quenya anymore. I cant find it and from what I can tell, lin isnt a female Sindar or Quenyan ending. That is such a beautiful name All: Comma. Eselin. I wish I had a name like that! My name is so common Samantha, I hate it! Mac: I like it. Sai: Me too. Erik: Youre just agreeing with her. Remus: Its a pretty name, we both agree with her. Mac: We could call you by a Sindar translation of your name, Lethril. I wish it was like Violet or Raven or something like that. Sam sighed. Jareth: You mean something more Sueish. Mac: Since shes so big on being original, shes probably using this to show how un-Sueish her Sue is. Well my Lady, to me your name is unusual. I have never heard a name like that before but thank you. I have never thought my name was anything special. Eselin said walked over to Samantha, Now if you would please get out of bed my Lady, I would like you to get dressed so I can do your hair, Samantha sighed, through off her covers and got out of bed. She rubbed her eyes and took off her night gowned and changed into the dress laid out for her, You know Eselin I would hope that would call me Sam from now on, my Lady is too formal for me. And you know what? You have a gift! I love this dress. Eselin smiled and blushed, YesSam. Thank you very much but I did not do anything, I mean I just picked out the dress. Eselin looked over the dress. She had to emit *Men snicker while Mac sighs.* Mac: Admit, krillball, admit. that Sam did look very nice in the dress. It was a long pale blue dress that reached the floor. House: Hey, didnt Tracey wear a blue dress when she arrived in Rivendell? Mac: I think so The blue brought out the colour of her eyes and hair more. The neckline did not go down too far and showed some cleavage but left plenty to the imagination. The upper part of the dress was tight fitting but once the fabric reached the waste the dress became loose and flowed around Sams legs. The sleeves were tight until they reached her hands were the fabrics poured away from her hands, creating a mystical look. Sai: Lovely. Why do these authors always think we want to know what their characters are wearing? Mac: Because they want to wear it. Well I think I look great! Thank you Eselin! Sam was about to walk out the door when she heard Eselin speak. Oh no my dear, you hair still needs to be done. I couldnt let you face My Lord looking like that! Your hair is a mess. Come, sit, let me brush your hair and braid it. Samantha sighed and took a sit by the mirror next to Eselin. 10 Minutes Later Mac: Thats it? Shes been in bed for days now and theres been no mention of her brushing her before. Shes probably all tangles. Well I must say I have worked my magic. You look lovely Sam! Eselin said smiling. Erik (Eselin): Well, as lovely as I could get Ilook beautiful, Sam said looking at herself in the mirror. I think that you could almost pass as an elf, Eselin laughed, Well you best be off, I will see you later on in the day, Thanks! Um Eselin, could you take me to where breakfast is? I would totally get lost if I went on my own, Eselin grinned, Yes of course I will Sam! Follow me Erik: They sound like two teenagers. House: Well, one is. Later On At Breakfast Jareth: Transitions, transitions. Here we are Sam, have a good time, Sam looked in on all the people seated for breakfast and sighed under her breath, I dont think I can do this, She looked up at Eselins retreating form, Cant I just go with you? Sam heard Eselin laugh and wave her hand good bye before disappearing behind a wall. Sai: She didnt hear the cries of Freedom! though. House: You know, for a bunch of people whove never seen Braveheart, you quote that one line a lot. Mac: Its funny and fits. Shit. Well here I go, As soon as Sam walked into the room she wanted to die. Everyone was looking at her and she felt herself blush. She saw Lord Elrond look at her and he seemed to stop moving. What had she done, she knew this was a bad idea. Finally Lord Elrond got up and escorted her to her set. Remus: So she is a Barbie doll! Mac: Point Remus. Im sorry for just sitting there when you came in; I dont know what came over me. You look very beautiful Samantha. *Everyone clutches their stomachs.* House: Remus! Remus: Im getting the bags, Im getting the bags. If I didnt know any better I would have thought that you were an elf, Elrond said pulling out Sams chair. Sai: FunnyEselin said the very same thing. House: Im guessing its VERY IMPORTANT we remember that Sam could ALMOST pass for an ELF. Mac: Point House. Its alright Lord Elrond. Thank you but I dont think I could look like an elf, elves are too beautiful and angelic, Sam said blushing sitting down and pulling in her chair. Sam looked beside where Lord Elrond sat and saw an old man sitting there. He reminded her of her grandfather who had passed away a few years ago from a heart attack. Remus: Why does Gandalf always get a grandfather description? She had never really gotten over his death, she was very close to him and she had never been the same since he died. She also talked to him about her problems and often Jessie and her slept over at her grandfathers to get away for a while. She become very depressed after his death and stayed that way to this day. She had never got to talk to anyone about his death; it was like he never died. Sai: WE GET IT! Sam saw the man look up at her, smile, turn to Lord Elrond and whisper something into his ear. Elrond smiled and looked up at her. Lady Samantha this is my dear friend Gandalf. He is here to help you through your demons. All: Exorcism! We will soon start sessions where Gandalf and I will help you talk about your problems and try to solve them. Mac: So wait, she had to go to Middle-earth for a THERAPY session? Sai: Point Mac. Will you be fine with this? Yes, I guess. Nice to meet you Gandalf, my name is Samantha, if you dont already know that, Sam said shyly holding out her hand. Like wise my child, Gandalf said taking her hand and shaking it. For the next hour Samantha ate breakfast and talked to Lord Elrond, Gandalf and other random elves. She was scared to think out what would be said in the sessions she would have with Gandalf and Lord Elrond. Would they really be able to help her? Was that even possible? She hoped she could be normal but at the same time she would miss being depressed. Being depressed was who she was, without thatwho was she? Mac: A Barbie doll. Sam wanted Lord Elrond and Gandalf to help her, without them, she didnt know if she would live her full life Little Goldy: *Bubbles question mark and rubs his head with his fin.* Sai: I know, little buddy. House: Is this over? Mac: Yep! House: Good! *All leave.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Sep 30 2008, 06:14 AM Post #7 |
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"Gandalf Would Not Be Amused by a 16 years old Acting Like a Toddler." *Everyone, minus Quatre, troop back to their places.* House: Do these mini-balrogs have to keep coming with us? Mac: Yes, Dr. Stone says that Quatre needs time where NOTHING reminds him of our sporkings. Thats why Voldemort keeps letting him go to Hyde Park. Erik: Besides, weve gotten these critters mostly trained. And youre not a Sue or a Suethor, so youre fine. Hello all. All: Hi. Another chaptersorry for the delay, god it does take me forever to update . Sai: Oh, I wish. Remus: Yes, but then Voldemort would just find something else to torture us with. Sai: True. Oh ya, I wanted to say something to my reviewers: CeleryBunch: Thank you for your kind review. Sorry for the wait . I know, I totally suck. Eleniel of the Stars: I thought Sam was quite niceveryinteresting but nice! All: No. lol Elrond is cool, but I changed him in this fic to be even cooler . All: AhhWait, what? Well, here we go! Btw, I do not own any LOTR characters cause they belong to Tolkien. House: Who is probably rolling in his grave. Mac: Someone on another site made a suggestion that we could save the energy crisis by hooking up a generator to Tolkien due to all the badfic out there. I do, however, own Jessi, Sam (and their family) and Eselin. Yet againis that how you write her name? Sai: I dont know. Shes your character. Umm, right? Its pronounced E-c-lin Mac: Ecklie? Remus: And she hasnt been watching CSI reruns lately. Erik: Wow. Sam was randomly walking around after breakfast. Remus: Cue the traveling music. *Octavius plays it* Lord Elrond told her to relax before they had their first session. Gandalf said he would find her when they needed her, how the hell was he going to do that; she didnt know where she was! Erik: Then she found a big sign with a map on it and a red dot reading You are here. Sai: Point Erik. She was inside a building, she knew that. House: Shes a genius! She cried out in frustration, All these bloody hallways look the same! How does anyone know where theyre going? I feel like a bloody idiot, All: You are. Over the years one gets to know their way around there home, Gertrude: Wrong their. Sam, not knowing someone was behind her, jumped and spun around. Oh, its just you Eselin. You scared the crap out of me! Eselin walked up to join Sam looking puzzled, What? Sam sighed One day I have to sit down with these elves and teach them sayings. All: NO! Mac: The Elves do not need your idea of sayings. You just startled me is all. So what are you up too? Currently nothing, Ive done my duties for the morning, Sam nodded, So youre on a brake? All: Wrong spelling. Eselin nodded, I guess you could call it that, Sam thought for a moment. Well, since we both have nothing to do, do you want to hang out? Hang out? Eselin asked. Jareth: RUN AWAY! Sam sighed her reply, It means to spend time together and have some fun, Eselin started to walk; Sam took this as a yes to her question. Erik: No, she was trying to escape. Sam I have the most perfect place we can go to. Its a really nice view of a waterfall, I love to sit by there and think. For some reason no one goes there, Ive never once met anyone there. Mac: Maybe its an Orc hangout. Jareth: We can only hope. Youre going to share this place with me? Sam was taken back, she hardly knew Eselin and she was going to take her to a secret area. Yes, for some reason I feel like I can trust you. Remus: Bad idea. Ive never really connected with someone like I have with you, Sam was silent. Whats going here? Why is she being so kind? No one at home ever trusted me; if they did they never said it or acted like they did. I met Eselin this morning, yet its like we are already good friends. Im so confused Sam shook her head. Wow, Im kina shocked. I mean, I dont know you that well. How can you trust me? Sam lifted her head to look at Eselins back. But I think I know what you are talking about. I think I can trust you, I feel that I can. Im glad Eselin turned around and smiled at Sam, Here, follow me. Keep your head down though; these branches go pretty low, Sams Pov Mac: Ugh! Dear Authors, When you read a book, do you see this? No? Wow, shocking. Dont do it! Love, Me. I looked around and all I saw were trees. House: BRILLIANT DESCRIPTION! Remus: GIVE HER A NOBEL PRIZE! Mac: Shared Point House and Remus. It was creepy in a way, almost no light got in so it was very dark, it looked like I was walking to my doom. All: We wish. I stayed close behind Eselin, I didnt want to loose her. Gertrude: Why cant anyone spell lose right anymore? *Smacks ruler. Guys flinch* Babies. I blinked as I saw light up ahead. Were almost there, see that light, it leads into the clearing, It was like I was walking into another world, I left the dark scary place into a beautiful, open and secluded haven. My mouth hung open as I studied the area. It was medium size Jareth: How did she know it was medium sized? Did it come with a size tag? with a small waterfall coming from a mountain side. Gertrude: One word. I went to the water side and looked at the water, it was sparking from the sun and so clear that I could see the bottom. I looked to where the water drained away and saw Eselin sitting on a circle of rocks. I got up and joined her. This place is amazing. I cant believe no one goes here, Eselin nodded. Yes, it is quite strange. But I guess it adds to the beauty, no one goes here, so nature grows as it should, Sai: Hey, think no one goes there? Mac: Gee, I dont know. I looked around and bent over to pick a couple of flowers. I have never seen flowers like these. Theyre beautiful, I twirled the flower around in my fingers. The stem was a dark green, there were little grey flowers growing off the stem. It was only the size of my middle finger, what was strangest though was that at the top of flower a series of red leaves grew up. It was weird yet beautiful at the same time. Mac: Yeah, anyone get that? Others: No. Eselin bent down and picked a flower as well. Yes She spoke. I agree, I have only seen these flowers here. Sai: This dialogue is so stilted. I looked up, man this place is getting weirder and weirder. Remus: Curiouser and curiouser. So Sam, I heard that you will be having sessions with Gandalf and Lord Elrond? I sighed, she had to reunion a prefect moment. Yes. It was a simple answer, I was hoping that Eselin would take that as a hint and change the subject no such luck. Are you looking forward to these sessions? House: Would you? I looked at the ground. I wish I could run away right now. Well yes and no. By the look on Eselins face I could tell she wanted me to continue. I want to get over my problems, and be normal. House: Normalcy is overrated. Mac: I think you need to stop being a Sue. Erik: Thatll take a miracleOr a major rewrite. Others: Miracle. But on the other hand, I want to keep my depression. I hoped she would be satisfied with that answer, I didnt want to scare away my new friend. Oh, We spent the next few minutes in silence before I got up and said that we should go back, Eselin agreed with me. Once we got back we went out separate ways. Eselin had to go back to work caring for others and what not. I walked around the halls getting lost, was I going to do this the whole time I was here? I hope not. After a few minutes my feet started to hurt so I sat down, took off my shoes and rubbed my feet. My Lady, what in the world are you doing? I blushed and looked up to see Gandalf. I frowned and put on my best baby voice, My feet hurt Gandalf, I pouted. All: REMUS! *He quickly hands out the bags.* Gandalfs face was so priceless! I almost broke out of my baby act to piss myself laughing; I could hardly keep it in. Sai: I bet Gandalf isnt amused. Ah, yes. Now, if you would please come with my Lady, we will start your first session, I decided to keep my baby acting up. It was just so fun to freak people out! But my feet hurt, I dun wanna get up, I wined. Mac: Oh my Jonas, shes more annoying than Melody! And she was eight! Or five! Gandalf looked at me puzzled. Can you carry my shoes for me, Pwease? A giggled as he took my shoes and offered his hand to me. Tank you! Yes, welllets go, Erik (Gandalf): This is going to be harder than I thought. I couldnt help it, I totally broke down and laughed my ass off as we walked down the halls. In a few second I had tears streaming down my face. I told Gandalf about my whole act and I even got him chuckling! Go me! All (flatly): Woo. We stopped in front of Lord Elronds study so I could put on my shoes. I sighed, Here we go, I looked up to Gandalf as if he would say Dont worry, you can leave, and I could happily skip away. But he didnt say anything, he just gave me a reassuring pat on the back. I opened the door to the study and my mood immediately changed, it went from a playful mood to a depressed serious mood. It was scary how I could do that. House: Actually, thats usual for a teenaged female. Mac: Its called mood swings. Get used to them. Ah Sam, I assume you know why youre here, Elrond said. Really? I totally forgot Captain Obvious! Usual Sporkers: Thats Legolas! I nodded, Yes Lord Elrond, No need to be so formal Sam, I shrugged my shoulders and sat down in this big leather like chair. Remus: They have pleather in Middle-earth? Erik: Point Remus. Lord Elrond and Gandalf stared at me intently, You can talk about whatever you want to Sam. Lets start with something easy. Gandalf started. How was your day? Elrond finished, wow that was creepy. All: What? It was good. After breakfast I got to talk to Eselin for a while, it was nice, Elrond smiled, Im glad your making friends, Well she seems interesting, I really connected with her for some reason. Gandalf looked at me square in the eyes, How are you feeling Sam? Ass, he HAD to bring up the feeling thing I looked at my feet Mac: I wish she would cut back on the cursing. Well Ive been ok. Its really nice here, Elrond looked at me nodding. Do you miss your family I visibly froze. Did I miss my family, I didnt know. I looked up at Lord Elrond and Gandalf. I didnt know what to say, I just sat there looking like an ass. Well? Gandalf looked at me, my eyes widened. Grandpa? I could see him in Gandalfs face. *All facepalm* I cursed silently when I realized that I said that last part out loud. Great work Sam What? I sighed, I guess I might as well tell them about my grandpa. Im sorry Gandalf, but for a second there you looked like my grandpa They were silent, maybe I wouldnt have to explain anything! Care to tell us about your grandfather Gertrude: Where is the punctuation? WHERE? Mac: Im starting to see why the first few chapters of For the Love of an Elf were so bad if she was potterfan2006s beta. Thanks a lot Elrond! I sighed, I hoped that my chair would eat me. Yet again, no such luck. Well, I guess I should finally talk about this to someone, I looked up to see if I should continue - they both nodded. Well I guess Ive had a lot of rage and sorrow bottled up inside of me relating to my grandfather. It all started when he died several years ago. I was really close to him; he was the only one that I could relate too that would talk to me. Erik: Mac, I think someone needs to be introduced to the dictionary again. Mac: I think she meant to say I was related to that would talk to me. I spent hours just talking to him. When he died I felt like I was alone in the world. I didnt even get to go to his funeral; my family didnt want to go Sai: Wow, caring family. I begged for them to let us go Flashback All: UGH! Sam why are you all dressed up? You going somewhere? I looked down at what I was wearing. I put on my black formal dress. I spent half and hour looking at myself in the mirror. I wanted to be perfect; I needed to honor my grandfathers memory. Ya, were going to a funeralgrandpas funeral. I thought we would have left by nowI trailed off. The funeral is in an hour Sam My sister looked down, Were not going My mouth dropped. I could not believe this. Wwhy? Dad is too tired and mom doesnt want to goshe said she never really knew her father. She didnt the point in going. Mac: Hold on. If she didnt really know her father, then why did her kids know him? In my experience, someone who is estranged with their parents arent all Hey Dad, wanna watch my kids? I could tell Jessi was trying to be nice but I couldnt take it. My eyes started to sting. I took in a big breath; my sister looked at me frowning, she felt bad for me. Mom! Dad! I heard muffled replies and I ran to them. There they were, sitting and watching T.V. I freaked. Why arent we going to grandpas funeral? They turned to me and chuckledthey chuckled! You look nice hunny, My mom giggled. Sai: Some hit the sauce. Remus: Point Sai. Mom answer my question! We dont feel like it, My dad said coolly. We have to go! Please, please! We need to go! No, My dad glared holes through my head. Please! NO But daddy NO! I ran over in front of my father and wet down on my knees, Daddyplease! NO! I could see the rage growing in his eyes, I knew he was going to blow up but I could not give up. Daddy, Ill do anything, please! Just walk there, My mom said never taking her eyes away from the T.V. Ya sure mom, the drive takes an hour, it would take me 4 hours to walk there. I dont even know the way I said no god damn it. We dont want to go. Shut up and leave us alone! My dad looked ready to kill but I couldnt give up, I loved my grandpa. Erik: Is there someone else in the family you could call? Daddy plea I never got a chance to finish what I was saying. I felt the side of my face and looked down at my hand - blood. He punched mehis own child. I looked up at my father, gaping at him. Next time you want to bug me, fuck off and dont or this is happen, All: Bwah? House: Dad didnt so well in his English lessons. He was so cold. Tears fell down my face mixing with my blood. I held my face as I walked away. I could faintly hear them behind me talking. My mom as first to speak, You shouldnt have done that. Dont want childrens aid on our ass. The little bitch deserved it, I feel to the floor, surrounded by my own blood and tears. End Of Flashback All: Yay! My sister found me later and cleaned me up. I was out for two days after thatmy dad beat me every once and a while, it got worse every time I took in a deep breath and looked up at Lord Elrond and Gandalf. The looked veryconcerned? That is disgusting; a father should never hit a child. A child should never be hit! I could see Elrond shaking, was he sad or angry? House: He was dancing. I agree. Gandalf looked at me then at Elrond. He coughed then said something to Elrond in a language I didnt understand. I looked at Elrond and he stopped shaking and sighed. This was so weird. Gandalf turned towards me. How did your grandpas death affect you Sam? Well I was really sad for a long time. I guess thats when I first got depressed and I never really got out of it. It just kept on getting worse, I stopped talking to people. I didnt want to get close to people, I thought they would betray me or die Mac: Im surprised her teachers didnt pick up on it. They are trained to do so. One of my teachers got concerned when I was really perky early in the morning and then went back to being quiet and sleepy. It turned out it was me coming off an allergy medicine and I was returning to my usually non-morning person self. I guess I still feel the same way. Since I came here Ive been trying really hard to try and be outing going and make friends but a part of me is still hesitant of getting hurt. I see. Elrond paused. Everyone gets hurt sometimes; its what makes us stronger. If you continue to be afraid of what might be you will never get to live life Youll let unknown loved ones walk right by you. You need to let this fear go, if you do, your life will change in ways you never could have imagined. Gandalf looked at me with a knowing glint in his eye. What was he smoking? Sai: We dont know. House: But we want some. Mac: Please. I mentally giggled when I remember seeing him with his pipe, one day Ill have to ask him if its weed or tobacco or something that I have never heard of. I nodded I know its holding me back. I need to let go but its so hard to bring down walls that were build so long ago, their cemented in my heart, One day you will learn to forget what was programmed in your head. House: Probably not. But youll know to do the opposite of it. Sai: Point House. One day you will be set free, Remus: Of being a Sue? Gandalf, how do you know this? What if Im stuck like this forever? Octavius: Well, then youre fucked. Mac: Octavius! Octavius: What, its not like Quatres here. Mac: I know, but Ive had enough cursing in the narrative. Believe me child. Everything will become clear soon, I huffed. You did not answer my question I glared friendly All: Oxymoron! at Gandalf. There was a few moments of silence then finally Elrond told me I could go. I think that is enough for today. Shall we have another session tomorrow Sam? I sighed getting up from my chair. I bent over and did some stretches. I guess. Tomorrow can we have a five minute brake, *Mac hits her head.* my limbs are killing me. I shouldnt sit so long, Elrond laughed a little as he got up, I agree Authors Pov *All scream. Mini-balrogs shoot fire out.* Mac: SAI! Get the fire extinguisher! *Sai does so and puts out the fire.* Sam stood up and walked towards the door, she stopped and turned back towards Elrond and Gandalf. Thank you, you have no clue how much I appreciate this, She smiled then quickly turned around hiding her tears. *Silence. Then:* Octavius: Oh right, Quatre has the tissue box. Elrond walked up behind her, Ill see you at dinner He shut the door behind her as she left. Ill see you at dinner? What kind of thing is that to say? All: Lame. Gandalf snickered quietly as he put his hand around Elrond shoulder. Do not worry my friend. Gandalf, I feel different around this girlits wrong, All: YES! Its is not wrong to love, Jareth: In this case, yes, it is. No it is not but she cannot know my feelings for her for I am sure of them myself. I cannot trust a hope, All: Uhhwhat? Holy crapthis was LONG! House: We noticed. You better appreciate it people! All: ErrNo. Please R&Reven if its a I love it or I hate it lol Mac: However, if you say I hate it, shell bitch at you. Erik: Point Mac. House: Oh, chapters over. By the way, if those are mini-balrogs, what is that? *Points to a large spider on the theater wall. Mackenzie yells and runs out of the theater. Sai and Remus chase after her while the others follow at a leisurely pace.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 1 2008, 06:21 AM Post #8 |
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"Sue v The Mirror. Guess Who Wins?" *Lucius and a few other Death Eaters enter the theatre, followed by Mackenzie, using Remus as a human shield. The others, minus Quatre, follow her.* Sai: So, what is that? Mac: You know how every time someone misspells the name of a canon character in Lord of the Rings, a mini-balrog is born? Sai: Yes, we have two of them. Mac: Well, likewise, every time someone misspells the name of a canon character in Harry Potter, a mini-Aragog is born. Sai: So, who is that then? Remus (realizing): Its Blaise Zabaini. *Lucius and the others get the spider.* Lucius: Well handle this. Oh, and House wont be joining you. Cuddy said weve been taking up too much of his time. So, youre one sporker short. Doctor (walking in): No, they arent. Im willing to fill in. Lucius: You scare me. *They leave and the doors lock.* Mac: Okay, next chapterThe Aftermath Hey readers! Im updating! All (flatly): Yay. cough I know it was a long waitit always is but I dont like to force myself into writing, when Im in the mood I write, if Im not I dont write. Mac: So there. Hmmm Gotta love my excuses eh? Doctor: No, I dont. sigh Here are some responses to the reviews I got for the last chapter. Sai: Joy. CeleryBunch- Yay I updated! Woohoo, someone danced for my story . I am really beginning to wonder what they do smoke. Erik: So are we. I must do a humor chapter or sub-story on that subject. lds-sunshinegrl- Thank you very much for your review, it made me feel so great! sigh Yes I know Im horrible at spelling/grammarthank god for spell check or I dont how anyone would be able to understand my writing . Mac: She USES Spell Check? Heres your update! SenoraHojaverde- Thank you and I agree with your opinion. LOL Dont tell the people to hurt themselvesjust cause their idiots Just because of your review I made a promise to myself, I will NEVER give up on this! All: DAMN IT! Jareth: Put her on the list. Erik: On it. hugs I updated for you . Ok, there we go! Well here is the new chapter. I would really appreciate it if you guys could R&R, it always makes my day. . Sams Pov. All: Ugh. My mind was blank as I walked to my room. After a few wrong turns and such I got to my room Erik: But you just walked into your room. Are you that dumb? and flopped down on the bed. Wow, that wentwell? I dont how to describe that experience. Im surprised I let out that much. I guess I trust Elrond and Gandalf. I walked around my room and looked out my window. I blinked as the whole room seemed to dim in colour. I looked around; the room appeared to get smaller. Doctor: Someone is claustrophobic. Whats going on? I walked over to my mirror and looked at my face, it looked grey and evil. Sai: The evil twin is back. Doctor: Oh, is this what drove Quatre insane? Mac: Yep. You trust too easily my friend No! She came back. Go away Erik (Smeagol): And never come back! You dont mean that do you? You need me to give you advice. I whimpered as I looked at my face glaring back at me. Why did she come back, what does she want with me? Sai: She wants your soul. Im getting better, I dont need you I wanted to sound strong, but I instead sounded weak and frightened. How are you getting better? Youre becoming weak! All: We know. Mac: I need to host a class on how to write dialogue. Trusting and making friends with people you dont even know. They will betray you! You still need me, you always will. I gripped the table as tears ran down my face, pooling around my fingers. They will not do that to me! They are my friends, they care for me! I was screaming now, I couldnt see what I was doing, my tears blurred my vision. The Doctor: I didnt realize Sister of Mine would turn into an evil twin. Mac: Point Doctor. Sai: Chances shell break the mirror? Jareth: High. I heard her snicker at me and I looked at myself in the mirror, my face was contorted in a maniacal grin. You will never learn will you? Most would abandon you now but I promise you, I will be here to help you pick up the pieces. When your friends crush you I will be the only one left, I will be the only one here for you. I screamed and punched the face laughing at me. Jareth: See. I looked down at my hand and saw red; I fell to the ground cradling my hand as the laughter faded to the back my mind. No, they will be here for me. Ill prove you wrong! I rocked back and forth hoping that the bleeding would stop. Mac: Apply pressure and left it above your head. What if someone finds me! Oh god, I need to clean this up! I looked down at my hand. I was about to get up and clean up the mess when I heard a knock at the door. Mac: Candy gram! Erik: Room service! I silently cursed the world and stayed on the floor, hoping they would go away. Mac: Singing telegram! Erik: Housekeeping! They knocked again and came in the room, Erik: I come in anyway? I come in anyway. Remus: We need to keep him away from Family Guy. damn I have should bad luck. I looked up as I heard someone gasp. Sam! What happened? Are you ok? Eselin ran towards me and looked around. I I didnt know what to say. I didnt want to lie to my new friend, but I didnt want to scare her away. I was, a little angry, after my session with Gandalf and Lord Elrond. I came back here and sort of punched my mirror Mac (Eselin): I guess those sessions arent working then? Remus: Point Mac. She looked at me with shock and some disbelief. Sam I didnt think I was hitting the mirror that hard, I didnt want to brake it nor did I want to cut my hand up. My, lets get you cleaned up. Come, we must go to the healers Eselin helped me up and started to lead me towards the door but I shivered and stopped. No, no Eselin. I dont want to go to the healers I saw the look on her face, god I hate lieing to her. Mac: Jonas, I hate your writing. Doctor: Good thing Quatres on rest, hed go crazy looking at all the neglected commas. I dont want Lord Elrond or Gandalf to stop the sessions with me just because I got a little disturbed by this session. Sai: If anything, Id think theyd step up the sessions. Eselin thought for a moment, I see your point. Ill clean you up the best I can but I wont be able to hide your injury for dinner, Eselin walked me over to the washroom and cleaned out my cut. Trying to ignore my pain I hiss out my next words, Im not going to dinner. I really dont feel like it, just tell Elrond I regretfully can not come because I feel ill. Doctor: Oh because thats not going to set off alarm bells. Erik: Point Doctor. She sighed but nodded. I will try to do my best Sam. Thanks I looked down at my hand, Oh crap! Look at that thing! I poked at it with my other hand. I didnt feel much, my hand had gone numb. Octavius: Im going to guess thats not a good thing. Blood was still pouring out of the numerous cuts and some skin was grossly hanging off my hand. All: Eww. I agree, this is a very nasty cut. Are you sure you dont want to go to healers? She was pleading with me; I agreed with her, I needed the healers. I didnt want word getting back to Elrond, he couldnt find out what happened. I cant do that, I dont want Elrond to think bad of me. I looked at her seriously, Please Eselin, do not tell him the truth, She grimced as she removed some skin, I understand but if this get dangerously invected, All: INVECTED? you must go to the healers, I sulked, Fine, Ill go and get you some bandages and dinner. While Im gone keep pressure on the wound, Remus: Well at least someone went to First Aid class. I nodded and sat on the floor when she left. My hand kept on bleeding and I got a little light headed, I was about to fall asleep when Eselin came in my room. She put down a mirror and my dinner coming over with some green stuff and bandages. You got a mirror for me? She nodded and smiled, I happened to see one on the way, She winked but her smile some faded to a look of worry. Youve lost a lot of blood. Are you ok? Feeling sleepy? Mac: Im surprised this girl still has blood left to lose. I faked a smile and shook my head, I feel fine, I feel like I can run for 30 minutes! Sai (Eselin): If youre not going to take this seriously and have that attitude, Im going to leave. She laughed away her worries Mac: I wouldnt be laughing. Id haul her ass down to the healers. and wrapped up my hand after she put on the weird green looking stuff. Now, change this every once and a while and if it heals nicely tonight leave it open for a bit. Ok I will. Thank you very much She pulled back the covers and helped me into my bed. She gave me my dinner, Ill clean up the glass and put in the new mirror for you, Thank you Eselin, you didnt have to do any of this for me and I really appreciate it. Youre such a great friend, Eselin tried to hide her blush but I saw it and smiled, How did you get to know so much anyways? All: The maids know everything. Well, my mother was brilliant and knew so much information, I still dont know how she knew so much! Doctor: She was psychic. I have always looked up to her and I am trying to follow in her example. I nodded, I understood what that felt like. Ive known someone that I wish I could be more like; someone strong and smart. All: Your grandfather? I started to eat my dinner as Eselin cleaned up the glass and put up the new mirror. I thanked her once again when she left. I had eaten my full and pushed I tray to the side. So, what to do now? I looked down at my hand and winced, this is gonna take a while to heal. How am I supposed to avoid Elrond and Gandalf noticing my hand? I heard a knock at the door and assuming it was Eselin coming to check on me I told them to come in. Hello Sam, I came to check up on you, Eselin said you werent feeling very well Elrond said. I quickly hid my hand under the covers praying he wouldnt notice. I sighed, Poop Mac: Youve already cursed more than a drunken sailor, why stop now? Besides, there are other things to say than something that makes you sound like a two-years-old. Excuse me? He asked coming up to my bed. I laughed it off, Never mind that. Thank you for checking up on me, Im fine now though. I think Im just randomly sick. Dont worry about me Sai: Worry about all the missing punctuation. Elrond didnt get my hint to leave; he pulled up a chair and sat beside me. Are you sure? I wasworried when I didnt see you at dinner. Sorry I didnt mean to worry you, I felt bad and smiled up at him. He cared for me, I was sure of it. Im fine now, but I should be getting my rest, Yet again, he did not get my hint. Well, if you will allow me, I would let to check you out myself. He stopped for a moment, Just to make sure youre in good health Doctor: Anyone else reading some innuendo here? Others: Yes. Doctor: Good. I nodded, anything to get him out of the room. I looked down at my sheets and waited for him to leave. He stared to me intensely and played around with my face; poking and looking at different things. Erik: Some examination. Hm, good. Now let me see your wrists. I might as well see how your scars look, Before the information ran through my brain he pulled back the covers and gasped. Sam! What happened? He gently grabbed my hand and brought it into his lap. Octavius: Bad thoughts, bad thoughts Sai: Wheres the bleepka? Mac: I dont know. But I need it. Shit Remus: And the chapters over. *Everyone leaves.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 2 2008, 06:35 AM Post #9 |
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Resident Time Lady
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"More Daddy Angst." *Everyone returnsincluding Quatre.* Mac: Are you okay? Quatre: Yes. Dr. Stone says Im ready to return. Mac: Okay, but if you feel it gets too tough, let me know. Sai: Oh stop babying him. Octavius: I have to agree with Sea World. Mac: Shut up. The Aftermath Continued. Woot! An update! All: Boo. I have a lot of ideas for this fic I just need to write more often! blush *All facepalm* I hope I didnt go to fast in this chapter, if I did tell me and I will try to slow it down. Im really happy cause I got a lot of the reviews for the last chapter. I want to thank everyone who reviewed cause you guys rock! Jareth: Break out the list. *Erik takes out pad and pencil.* loves-winged-dark-angel Thanks, Im trying to! Sai: Trying to what? Mac: I dont know and I dont care enough to look it up. I hope you like this chapter! Eleniel of the Stars Thanks a lot! hugs Ya I know, the first chapter isnt that well done. Quatre: Tell us about it. Im glad someone other then me (so now I know Im not making it up) thinks that Ive improved. All: Err Agent Alexandra Paris sweat drop Ya sorry, heres another update! - Meekah Greenleaf Thank you! Have fun reading! lds-sunshinegrl LOL I never looked at it like that! Thats totally awesome! Muhahahaha! Sai: Cut it out with the evil laugh! I like Eselin too, she rocks! Erik: You know what? She does. Id rather read a story about her. Not written by you since youd just turn her into an emo whiny brat of a teenager, like you are. I hope this didnt take too long for you. Thanks again sniff I love you guys! All: We hate you. Please R&R cause Id really appreciate it. Enjoy the chapter! Sams Pov. Mac: You know, I hold out hope that one day, this Sams POV leads to a lovely tale about Samwise Gamgee and the Shire. Shit I cannot fucking believe it! Remus: I cannot believe youre still fucking cursing. Sam, what happened! Gertrude: Question mark, not exclamation point. Its a interrogative sentence, not exclamatory. Elrond started to unwrap my hand, This is why you did not come to dinner, It was a statement, not a question. Mac: Thanks for telling us. I mean, if you cant work the question mark key, we need to know. Sai: Point Mac. I didnt know what to say, he looked disappointed and concerned at the same time. Elrond I just looked at him, what should I say? Erik: I need help? He frowned while looking at my hand, Eselin did a good job at wrapping your hand but shes not a healer, Like me; Gertrude: Semicolon misuse! he wanted to say it I know, his mouth twitched as though he wanted to continue. He was disappointed that I didnt go to him. Hes the doctorand my friend. I understand how he feels and why he feels that way. All: Brav-o. I turned my head away, I know. I turned back to see Elronds eyes. God those eyes they held such pain. He was in pain because of me. Jareth: You know what, I dont think so. He had a lot of other things to be in pain over rather than a sixteen year old with mental problems. Elrond, Im sorry. I know I should have gone to you because youre my friend and you are a healer. It would have been wiser to go to you, He put down my newly exposed hand, he never broke eye contact once, Gertrude: We need to have a dialogue-formatting boot camp. Others: Yeah. It would have been. If you know this then why did you not come to me, Quatre: What do you have against question marks? I wasI am ashamed. I let my feelings get the better of me, I acted like a child. I didnt want you know how stupid I was. I could feel the tears well up behind my eyes as I tried to blink them away. *Quatre holds up tissue box.* I didnt want to lose you, Ok wait a minute that sounded too romantic. Erik: No, you think? Jareth: And end sarcasm. Youre a great friend, I cant lose that, All: Period. The tears were threatening to fall, damn Im weak. When will these tears stop? He just sat there looking into my eyes. Please dont leave me, please dont! Sam, do you not trust me enough to come to me when you need help? All: No. Mac: No offense, she just dropped into Middle-earth from an abusive family. Two weeks with you isnt going to make her the most trusting person in the world. I shook my head, Thats not it Elrond! I trust you, I trust Gandalf and I trust Eselin. Thats 3 people! Octavius: She can count! Sai: Good for her! I dont trust easily Elrond but believe me I trust you. Its not trust, Im just scared that your opinion of me will lessen because of my stupidity. Erik: Valid point. Elrond took my good hand into his grasp, Sam, nothing will make me think lesser of you, He smiled. I just wish that in the future you will come to me if something happens. *Remus hands out sappy sickness bags.* I smiled and blinked away my tears, I promise Elrond, *Quatre sniffs.* Mac: Did you forget your sign? Quatre: Yes. Now lets go to the healers Sai: But you ARE a healer! Why cant you do it? and I will properly clean and wrap your hand. Eselin did a good job but if you left it like this you will be permanently scarred. Remus: And we cant have ourselves a scarred heroine. Youve lost a lot of blood and there is a lot of severed skin, Ew, that just gross, He helped me out of bed and he walked me to the healers. He spent a few minutes re-cleaning my wound (which really freaking hurt!) Sai: Thank you, Captain Obvious. and wrapped it up. He walked me back to my room and told me to get some sleep. Thank you Elrond, I gave him a hug and he was off. Wow, he didnt ask how this happened, Im so lucky! And right on cue the door opened. Erik: The PPC? Jareth: We wish. Oh yes, tomorrow we will be talking about why this happened, Quatre: Thats what therapy is for! I expect you to be at breakfast tomorrow. Good night, I groaned lucky me! I rolled over and for the first time in a while I fell into a dreamless sleep. Mac: Thank Jonas! We dont have to read about it! The Next Day at Breakfast Gertrude: Heres a novel thought. Writing a proper transition sentence or scene in the narrative rather than this title card. I got dressed (with the help of Eselin) and went to breakfast. I sat in between Elrond and Gandalf. Gandalf gave me some strange looks along with everyone else in the room. I just wanted to die! Octavius: Please do. I kept my head down and I tried not to talk to anyone. Arwen came to sit beside her father but she came over to me first. Good morning Sam, She bowed a little, How are you? I looked up a bit, Im fine I guess, Just sit down, go away. Actually she is not fine, it seems she injured her hand yesterday, Gandalf said merrily. I turned my head and glared, he just tried not to laugh. Stupid happy Gandalf with his stupid big mouth. Quatre: Thats not nice. Hes trying to help you from some Jonas-forsaken reason. Mac: Point Quatre. Oh my! Sam let me see! I deeply sighed and showed her my banged hand. What did you do? I cant tell her the truththinkthink! I put my hand back down on my lap, Well it was my fault really. I went for a jog and tripped. I slid across the ground and it really did damage to my hand That was the gayest excuse ever! Erik: The gay community called. They want their word back. She so did not buy it. Mac: You so are dating your own work and you dont realize it. By wording things in terms and ways that are predominately used by your generation, you alienate other readers. She eyed me for a second then smiled, I never knew jogging could be so dangerous. Make sure to be careful next time! She walked away and took her place beside her father. I dont quite know but I think I just made an ass out of myself. *All clap.* Jareth: Brilliant observation. I sighed again and continued to silently eat my breakfast. A Few hours Later I walked into the room where Elrond and Gandalf were already waiting. They asked me to sit down and how I was doing and such. Then Elrond asked me to tell him what happened to my hand. I retold the story of her being in the mirror and then me hitting it. I did my best to sound sane if thats even possible. All: No. After I was done my tale they just sat there looking at me, not saying anything. I know what I did was stupid. I just wanted her to go away. I didnt want her to haunt me anymore more. She ruined my life; I was always sad and moody. I was never myself I havent been in a long time. Ive been so winy and bitchy lately, thats not who I want to be. Sai: Of course. That would erase any character you have at all. Mac: Point Sai. Elrond nodded, I see. There seems to be a pattern with this identity within you. She appears when you need her the most. Mac: There is a medical term for it. Disassociation. She needs to see a LICENSED professional. You just need to find other ways of coping with things without using her. I guess that makes sense, Gandalf continued on for Elrond, When you are feeling stressed or you are in mental or physical pain you need to talk to someone, preferably Lord Elrond or myself. You also need to try to be more positive in general, Ill try, Erik: Anyone else picturing her crossing her fingers behind her back? Mac: Yes. Is there anything you feel you need to talk about now? Are there any problems from your past or present? Elrond asked. Sai: Well theres opening a can of worms! We sat there in silence for a few minutes before I looked up, Do you think my daddy loves me? I spoke so quietly that I didnt even think Elrond heard me. He seemed taken back by my question, Of course he does, Then why did he never show it? He never once said I love you, neither did my mom. I mean, the day before I died he tried to hit me, Jareth: Angst ahoy! Mac: ASSUME THE POSITION! I looked down ashamed, it was my fault. I was scared but I looked up at Elrond and Gandalf, they both had unreadable expressions. Tell us, Quatre: Stray comma! what happened, Gandalf whispered. Using a soft regretful tone I told them what happened. Flashback One Day before Sam left Earth Mac: Do I need to make a comment about how? Guys: No. Sam wanna go to the mall? Jessi asked. I twirled around in my chair to face her, But Im on the computer I pouted and crossed my arms. Octavius: So? She laughed, You can have the computer when we get back, Erik: Sister has some sense. But Jessi, I dont have any money, Jessi got up and walked over to me, Dont worry, I can pay for ya, But what are we going to buy, Mac: How about some question marks? She helped me up and we walked to the door together. I dunno. God you ask too many questions, She put on her coat and turned around, Dad! Were going to the mall! We heard foot steps coming from downstairs, Why? Cause we wanna shop, dont worry, Im paying for everything, I looked down and poked my sister, Can we just go now? Your not going anywhere looking like that Sam! My dad said walking over to me. All: Hoo-boy. *Put on their helmets.* Why, shes not wearing anything bad. Its a freaking tank-top dad! Quatre: Is that it? Doesnt she need pants? If so, Dad has a legit case. Jessi! I pulled at her arm, I just wanted to get out of here. Jessi, you ungrateful I couldnt take it! Why was he yelling at Jessi? She was doing nothing wrong! Remus: She is the one talking back. Why daddy, why! No dad! Shes not! Youre just being an asshole! *All facepalm* As soon as the words came out of mouth I regretted them. The next thing I knew my dad was coming at me with his fist in the air. He swung but missed cause Jessi pushed me out of the way. He screamed with rage. Jessi pulled me outside and we ran to the mall, never stopping to look back once. Sai: Wow, they have some stamina. Jareth: Or the mall is around the corner. End of Flashback And my daddy always said I was an ugly, worthless and an ungrateful girl. He told me that I was mistake and that he wished I was never born. I believe him, I am ugly on the inside and out. Im such an idiot, I started to cryhe said I was weak too hes right. I can never stop crying. Damn this body, why do I show emotions so easily? Sai: Youre humanish. Thats not true, you are a wonderful person. And youre not ugly youre beautiful, like the sun that shines down upon us all, *All hold stomachs as Remus quickly hands out bags.* Remus: That one blindsided us. My head shot up, Elrond thought I was beautiful? I blushed, Thank you, thank you both. We sat there for a few more minutes in silence then finally Gandalf spoke. Well, I think its about time we went our separate ways. Mac: Great! Can Sams go through Orthanc by any chance? Or Mordor? I got up out of my sit and bowed slightly to them, Thanks again! Ill see you at dinner! Narrators Pov. All: WHY? And that was how life went for Sam for the next few weeks. She had been making great progress. Mac: Is this a set up for a Quatre: dun dun DUN! She was starting to believe herself more and become more positive. The person inside Sam had not returned and her dreams were peaceful as of late. Sam started to discover herself, but something was holding her back All: dun dun DUN! Quatre: That wasnt so bad. Mac: Glad to hear that, sweetie. *Everyone left.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 3 2008, 07:29 AM Post #10 |
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Resident Time Lady
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*Warning: May make you throw up.* *Everyone returns, Sai decides to bring in Little Goldy.* Sai: Looks like someones missed the badfic. Jonas knows why *Mackenzie opens the internet and another fish comes flying out at her.* Jareth: What the? Mac: Oh, my alter ego got Super Poked. A friend threw a fish at her. Me. Whatever. Here, keep it with Little Goldy. Sai: Its a she. *He plops her in* Quatre: I dont want to know how you know that. Mac: AnywayThe Beginning of it All. Part One. Well heres another update! All: Boo. Yes, it is LONG overdue! Oh well, I try my best. I would love to be on of those people who like update every other day but sadly, thats not gonna happen . Anyways, I LOVED the reviews I got for this chapter. I feel SO loved! All: Oh crap. Elle- Oh my gosh you are too kind! Thank you SO much! Ill try to keep improving and Ill also try to slow down and be consistent. Its just really hard when I have this great stuff in mind for future chapters I want to get their fast . Mac: Well, when you do stuff fast, you make mistakes. Like using the wrong there. Sami- Well thanks for taking you time to read this anyways. I do agree with you though, Elrond is out of character All: No duh. but for the story I have in mind he has to be. Sai: Yeah, most people like to see their favorite characters act, you know, like themselves. So Im not bothered by that fact very much. Octavius: Apparently. Thanks for leaving a review though. Remus: Why do I have a feeling theres an unwritten bitch? galawyn- Thanks! Youre too kind. Ill try to please you. I did a bit of a time jump in this chapter and thats just for you . *All groan* BueatyRoxs06- Well, when I got your review I decided that I needed to update on the weekend (which Im doing). So please dont go mad ok? - potterfan2006- Erik, Mac and Octavius: AHHHH! *Little Goldy bubbles AH!* Wow, you remind me so much of myself. Erik, Mac and Octavius: We know. Thank you so much for your kind review. It made me smile reading it. Yes, I have this all planned out, I have a whole word document set aside just for my plot line. I keep changing it to try to make it better for you guys. Im glad that someone can relate to my character. Sai: Amazingly as shes clearly a Mary Sue. Who can relate to that? Mac: Other teenagers? If I ever do need any help youll be one of the first I come to. All: Dont! Thank you very much! Im honored . Ok well thats it! Without future delay, heres chapter 10! All (flatly): Yay. Sams Pov. I stood outside on my balcony looking out over the elves below me. Mac (singing): Dont cry for me Argentina! I sighed in content and let my head bow down. My eyes soon closed and I just let the suns rays soak into my skin. Its been a couple months since my last major incident. *Theatre shakes.* My hand has healed up quite nicely. I opened my eyes and looked down at my hand. No scaring. Lord Elrond said I was lucky to have my hand in perfect condition. It was still a little tender but basically it was fine. My Lady? A muffled voice asked. I smiled and jogged to my door. I embraced Eselin as soon as it opened. Hello my friend! How many times have I told you to just call me Sam? I asked leading her into my bedroom. She looked around then said, Sam, I cannot call you by your name while out in the halls. Its just not proper. Sai: Im sure the staff though wouldnt call her My Lady. There was probably another title to be used. I rolled my eyes and sighed as I sat down on my bed. Eselin busied herself by doing some random cleaning, not like the room needed it. But Eselin really, weve known each other for so long. We should be able to call each other whatever we want wherever we want, I said raising a finger to my lips. Quatre: Why is she shushing her friend? She laughed whole heartedly. Funny, she only laughed when she was in my presence stupid rules. Sam thats not possible. Do you know what would happen? Everything would fall apart! Mac: Yeah, I somehow doubt that. There are rules for a reason; maids cannot be treated like real people. Erik: I dont believe thats how elves worked. Why would we take orders anymore, many would get too high and mighty. Mac: But youre Elves. You guys are already kinda high and mighty. I dont think theres such a hierocracy in the Elven realms. Yet again I rolled my eyes. I guess I just dont understand the ways of maids, I feel back on my bed and giggled. Eselin walked over to me and gave me a hard yet friendly look. She smirked then went back to her work. What are you planning on doing today Sam? She asked. I watched her for a moment before responding. Erik (Sam): The usual. Whine about how pathetic I am, cut myself, whine some more, let myself be treated by Elrond so he can boost my self confidence. You? Sai: Point Erik. Well I have my meeting with Elrond and Gandalf soon, Eselin knew about why I went to see Elrond and Gandalf everyday but she was kind enough not to pry. I sat up and saw her nod. Good, those seasons are going well I presume? Quatre (Sam): Oh yes. Winter is particularly rough sometimes, but I absolutely love summer! Mac: Point Quatre. I nodded and she smiled at me. She walked over to the bed and took my hand in hers. Im glad Sam, Well that was weird; she hadnt done that inwell ever. Well I must be going now. Ill see you at dinner, She and I had made a habit of eating on our own outside. Mac (Elves): Fine, be cliquey! Elrond didnt seem to mind and I liked it a lot better then being inside with everyone else. I still hate large crowds of people; I get so nervous and freaked out. Jareth: Really? This hasnt been mentioned or seen before. She left and I got up and changed into my usual clothing which consisted of a white shirt and loose pants. Remus: I dont think the people of Middle-earth wore pants. Breeches maybe, pants no. So why are you all special? *Erik opens mouth* Dont, I know. Shes the Mary Sue. I wore dresses only when Eselin made me. Usually it was on special occasions. Narrators Pov. All: UGH! Sam stepped out of her room and closed the door behind her. She walked carefully through the halls since she didnt know exactly where she was going. Jareth: What? Does Elrond change the rooms around on her? She had to rack her memory to remember. Finally, after what seemed like hours, she knocked on Elronds door. The door opened for her and she went inside. Hello Samantha, Gandalf said All: Comma. already seated. She nodded in his direction then turned to Elrond who had just shut the door. Morning Elrond, She said. He welcomed her Octavius (Elrond): Took you long enough. then they both sat down. Now how are things? Elrond asked her. Ok I guess, She sifted nervously in her chair. A sigh was heard and Sam lowered her gaze. You cut yourself again, didnt you. Gandalf stated. Sam nodded and sunk back into her chair. Octavius: I told you, it was in the daily agenda! Mac: I dont think therapy is working so much. May we see them? Elrond asked gently. He looked at her with a compassionate gaze. She hadnt cut for a few weeks now and he was interested as to why she decided to cut herself now. All: Ahh! Sam got up and pulled the side of her pants down. All: On her upper thigh there were several red cuts. Most had dried blood still on them. She sighed and pulled her pants back up and sat down once again. Elrond nearly blushed for did not expect Sam to expose herself like that. Mac: Most wouldnt. Usually she cut on her arms; this was the first he had seen on her legs. Why? Elrond asked. There was a hitch and waver in his voice. Sams head slowly looked up. She always became quiet in these meetings. Sai: But isnt the point of therapy for her to talk? Mac: You would think. Because I missed the feeling. Cutting is so comforting to me. She whispered. All other eyebrows in the room were raised. Remus: Not ours. Mac: Actually makes sense. Erik: Surprisingly. Can you elaborate? Gandalf asked. Well I missed the feeling of bleeding. I missed feeling the blood run from my body. I wanted to feel the stinging pain again. I wanted She fell silent once again. Sai: Almost there. Dont they also cut to feel control? Mac: I think thats eating disorders. Did she influence you in any way? Elrond asked leaning forward. Sams head fell down. No, I havent heard her since the incident with my hand, She quietly answered. Her mouth opened and she soon found her voice, I miss her. Quatre: I dont. Gandalf coughed and Elrond nearly got up. His legs twitched but he forced himself to sit back. And why is that? Because she was comforting in a way, without her what am I? Without cutting what am I? Her voice started to rise in volume. Without being depressed who am I? I dont remember a time when I was always happy so I dont remember how to act like that on a daily basis. When Im depressed I can always be sad, I can lean on that for support. If I let go then, She paused and sniffed back her tears, Then Ill be naked and alone. Ill have no one to help me anymore, She wrapped her arms around herself and bent down. She was half sitting and half rolled up in a ball. Jareth: Anyone feeling sorry for the Sue? Others: No, not really. Elrond quickly got up and sat down beside Sam. Without thinking he wrapped his arms around her and just held her in a comforting embrace. All: REMUS! Remus: Why me? Gandalf tried not to smirk. They looked like lovers comforting one another. They looked perfect *All lose their lunch* Sam, Im here for you, He had forgotten about Gandalfs presence. Ill always be here for you when you need me and even when you dont. *All moan and groan before throwing up again* Ill stand beside you and help you whenever I can, His voice became horse with emotion. Sai: Stop it! Stop it! Mac: PLEASE! *Remus tries to restock them quickly.* Please let me be the one to help you. Let me be the one to take away all your fears, He whispered into her hair. *All are now dry heaving. Mac is lying against Sai, who is pale. Quatre is near collapse. Erik has his mask off and no one cares.* Remus: Jonas I wish I was still dead. Fish: *Bubble weakly.* Sam bent forward and snuggled into Elrond. They stayed like that for a while, Sam crying and Elrond trying not to. *Quatre holds tissue box.* Quatre: I cant lift it. Mac: Come over here. *He cuddles next to her. Octavius falls on the floor. He had passed out on Quatre.* Finally it was Elrond who spoke. Besides Samantha, youre a wonderful person. Youre kind, caring and what everyone should be. All conscious: NO! Fish: *Bubble NO!* I admire you and I, Elrond cut himself off before he said something foolish. And I think you will do fine without her. Youre strong and I know that you will make it through this without her. Sam slowly allowed her body to straighten out. But she loves me; I cant just let her go. Mac: This is so wrong on so many levels. She shook her head and grasped her arm and squeezed. Shes the only one that loves me. She said so, so many times! House: Newsflash. People lieAre you guys okay? Others: No She was screaming now and Elrond winced at the pain in his sensitive ears. He didnt know what to say. His first reaction was to scream out that he loved her as well but he couldnt. He couldnt love her in that way. That kind of love brought him pain and suffering. It was over now but he couldnt open up his heart to another again. It was wrongwasnt it? Gandalf wisely chose this moment to make his presence known again. There are many that love you Samantha but they have just not shown it yet. He paused and fingered his beard. Or they just do not know it themselves yet, All: HINT HINT! Elrond internally froze. It cannot be, He thought. Jareth (Elrond): Im not a pedophile! Sam embraced Elrond and cried the rest of her tears. He just held her once again and they enjoyed the silence that soon came to the room. House: Okay, I think we should Quatre: Wait, pretentious words from our author Others: *Groan* Ok that was short but Im planning on updating again soon. Fish: *Bubble &@*!$**!!* House: The fish just censored themselves. Sai: OddI didnt know Little Goldy knew such language. Like really soon for me. Now please R&R! All: No. House: Okay, grab the penguin. The rest of you are getting fluids NOW! *House ushers them out of the theater with his cane* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 5 2008, 10:30 PM Post #11 |
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Resident Time Lady
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"They'll Throw Anyone a Ball Nowadays" *Everyone returns, arms laden with water bottles.* Mac: I dont think this is what House meant by plenty of fluids and rest Lucius: Shut up and do the story. Mac: Meanie. *Lucius leaves.* Sai: Lets just get started. Mac: Fine. Preparing for a Ball...oh good Jonas! A/N: Ya, I just realized that my little star things dont show upso Im putting A/N instead. Mac: Aww, youre no longer speshul. Anyway! I told you guys I would update really soon, is this soon enough? . Erik: Unfortunately. Quatre: Stray period! And oh my gosh! Im getting such great reviews! I think Im going to cry! Jareth: So am I! To my reviewers: *All Groan* potterfan2006- I know I already replied to your review but I wanted to give you some mention this chapter. Youre really too kind. Mac: And a bit uncreative. Erik: What are you talking about? Trac(e)y is worlds better than Sam! Mac: True. I feel so lucky to have you reading my fic! Thanks SO much! hugs BueatyRoxs06- lol Thanks. For some reason I wanted to keep writing today. This is like a first for me, 2 updates in 2 days. Wow! Sai: Boo. lol Fan? I have fans? Oh my I think I will start to cry. Mac: Oh dont act surprised. You never wrote this for fans of the work. If you did, you wouldnt tell them to stop reading. Thank you very much and tell the same to your friend. I want you both to get a hug hugs - -Sams Pov.- Weve been sitting in silence for the past 10 minutes. Jareth: Glad to know someone was timing it. Elronds arms are around me and I cant help but snuggle into his warm embrace. *All clutch their stomachs as Remus tries to hand out the bags.* Hes a true friend you know. Hes helped me so much and keeps on giving. *All drink their water.* Quatre: Muststayhydrated. He says Im worth something, he says I can be something without her. You know what? I believe him. For the first time in a while I see the light. Sai: Wonderful...HEAD TOWARD IT! Mac: Point Sai. I know it sounds gay and very clich but its true. I opened my eyes and sat up. My puffy red eyes looked into Elronds watery ones. I swear he lit up. Erik: Well, he would have to be on something to be attracted to that. Sai: Point Erik. I smiled at him and hugged him. I threw my arms around his neck and felt the light engulf me. I grinned and suddenly everything made sense to me. Mac (Sam): I was a jerky Mary Sue with mental problems. I sat back and Elrond stayed where he was. He really looked like he way going to cry, I wanted to make him feel better. I was scared to leave her, I started. I was afraid to be on my own because I havent made my own decisions for a while, shes always made them. Mac: But she isnt some other entity. Shes you. I felt about 10 times lighter already. I swear I could feel her leaving my body she wasnt ever going to come back, right? I want to do this. Im going to do this, Elrond picked up my hand in his own and smiled down at me. What a beautiful smile *All lose their lunch again.* -Elronds Pov.- She looks so amazing right now. So confident, I think she can really do this. Her eyes are shinning and her body seems free after being weighed down for so long. I think the pain is finally leaving her. Im not going to cut myself anymore. Ill find different ways to cope with my emotions, She sounds so sure of herself and Im so proud. I dont need her anymore. She smiled up at me and my heart melted. But Ill need your help to find myself again, She said looking at me first then at Gandalf. Gandalf, I nearly forgot that he was here. Erik (Gandalf): Yeah, now you remember me. Bastards. Well do everything we can for you, I found myself saying. Sai: What, is Elrond now a ventriloquists dummy? She nodded and smiled. She backed up from me a little and lowered her head. I havent been myself for so long. Im a little scared I wont like what I find. What if Im truly a horrible person on the inside? Mac: Itll be an improvement over little Miss Psychotic. She sounded scared and weak again. Youre a great person on the inside, I said All: COMMA! squeezing the hand that was still in my grasp. But dont you worry; you will find yourself once again. Gandalf then spoke, You will be Samantha once again just Samantha, no one else. Sai: But how do they know who Samantha really is? Theyve only known her as a disturbed teenager with daddy issues. It will take time but you will learn what it is like to be free. Free of your pain and of your fears. You will become who you were and who you are meant to be. I found my voice once again, And you will be a great person. Erik: Shove it, Not!Elrond. I smiled down at her and felt tears at the back of my eyes. I was so happy for her; she seemed so ready to take that final step in becoming her true self. Remus: Well, lets give her a gold star then! -Sams Pov.- Everything sounded like such a soap opera at that moment but it fit. Everything felt so righteven my hand in Elronds. I ignored that fact Quatre: I wish we could. and kept on speaking. I was scared to become myself, I think I still am but I know with you two, I can do anything. With your guidance I will step out into the world and finally live on my own. Ya, I decided, way too soap opera-ish. Remus: Actually, its more redundant. Youve restated the same thing several times over. I felt tears coming out of my eyes and a confused look flashed over my face. Jareth: You felt a confused look? These were not tears of pain or despair, they were tears of joy. I cant remember the last time I cried out of joy. This is my big breakthrough I guess so Im damn well allowed to cry. Sai: Are we? Once again I hugged Elrond. I snuggled into his neck and sighed in happiness. Nothing could go wrong right now. Octavius: Well, now thats just invoking Murphys Law. We eventually pulled away and Elrond went back to his original seat. Now if you like, we could keep having these sessions on a weekly basis just in case. If you feel you need any help please come and talk to Lord Elrond or I. Other then that, well try and help you discover yourself once again. Gandalf said with a smile. Mac: Yes, you said that already, Gandalf. Remus: I think someones getting senile. Yes, discover myself. Along the way I had someone lost myself to her. Erik: Wait, did you pay someone to give yourself to this other personality who lives in the mirror? Mac: Hey, guys, think she wants to discover herself? She had taken over my body and mind and for the first time in a while I was breathing freely. I was seeing things in the way they were meant to be seen. I was truly free in everything sense of the word. All: WE GET IT! MOVE ON! I got up and walked over to Gandalf. Thank you both for helping me. Ill continue to talk to you if and when I need it. I looked at both of them then gave Gandalf a big hug. I giggled a little when his beard touched my skin. It was ticklish. We pulled apart and I looked at Elrond once again. I gave him another hug then bowed to both of them. Walking over to the door I gave them both one final wave and was out the door. I shut it behind me and looked around the hallway. It looked so different now, so light and cheerful. Before all I could see was the dark and dreary part of it. Jareth: Maybe the sun was hitting it now? Now I could really appreciate it for what it really was. Octavius: A hallway? Would this be the same for everything now? Remus: If it is, please keep it to yourself. Thanks. I hope so, that would be cool. A re-discovery of everything I know, I said to myself as I walked down the halls to my room. -A Few Hours Later- Ok so I found out Elronds throwing this ball thing. Its for me although no one knows it smart Elrond. Mac: The hell? She gets a BALL? This is Middle-earth, not Far, Far Away! He knows that Im not comfortable around people yet. This is how over conversation went just a few minutes ago. *Theater shakes* -Flashback- Gertrude: You already set this up. You dont need it! Use italics. Lady Samantha? Elrond asked through my door. I smiled and opened my door. Yes my Lord? I guess this was the same thing Eselin was talking about; we have to use proper titles in the halls. He stepped into my room and closed the door behind him. I had to move back and sit on my bed, his presence was too much for me at times. He stood where he was and kindly looked down at me. In light of your new discovery, there is to be a ball in your honor, I froze. A ball means lots of people and me wearing a dress. My face fell and since Elrond noticed this so he quickly continued. Now only a few select people will know this for. I know you hate crowds of people around you. This ball is formally known as the ball for my sons All: Apostrophe. return. Even though they arrived a week ago we will present it as a ball for them, Mac: What, you throw a ball every time Elladan and Elrohir come back from patrol? I smiled a little, clever Elrond. Elrond, why havent I seen your sons at all? I asked. Erik: Because you were psychotic? It was true. I knew nothing of his sons, I knew he had them since Arwen had talked about them but other then that I knew nothing of them. Sai: Hey, do you know nothing about them? I looked to his face and he just chuckled. Well, to tell you the truth I wanted to delay your meeting. You see, my sons are a bit of trouble makers. I nodded. Mac: Oh Jonas, not the Elrohir and Elladan are the George and Fred Weasley of Middle-earth plotline. Again. Thats what Arwen told me as well. Though I know it is better if you meet them as soon as possible. So at the ball tonight there is going to be a private room where you can stay if you like. Octavius (Elrond): And be all anti-social. Well just talk about you behind your back. Arwen will be in there as well along with myself and Gandalf. The twins will be present for a while until they want go to the main room were the ball is being held, Octavius (Elrond): Theyre social and dont want us to talk about them behind their backs. Relief washed over my face. So I didnt need to all proper and be around lots of people. Thank god. That sounds very, I tried searching for a word he might know, Neat. When is the ball? I asked. In a few hours. Mac: Wow. Talk about your short notice. Eselin will be here shortly to help you prepare, He said already walking out the door, Oh, and I expect you to be wearing a dress, He left no room for argument since he just walked out and shut the door behind him. Shit, I pouted and folded my arms across my chest. I hate dresses, Remus and Mac: Of course you do! -End of Flashback- So here I am sitting on my bed waiting for Eselin to come and help me get ready. Theres nothing else to do. At that moment I heard a knock at the door. I grumbled and walked over. Who is it? I asked as sweetly as I could. Eselin my Lady, Lord Elrond sent me. I sighed and let her in, the first thing I said was, Im not wearing a dress. Eselin glared a little. You will wear a dress, my Lord commands it, Wow was that Star Wars or what? All: No. Please Eselin? I really dont want to wear one! I pouted and sat back on the bed. Erik: Good to see that breakthrough didnt destroy the petulant brat part of Sam. Mac: Ladies and gentlemen, the real Samantha. Jareth: Point Mac. Dont worry Sam, She said as she closed the door. I have a special dress for you. I put it in your closet while you were at your meeting with lord Elrond and Gandalf. She moved over to the closet, By the way, how did that go? It went really well. Ive made such great progress that I only have to have one session every week, I said happily. Eselin turned around and smirked, I knew this ball wasnt for the twins. This ball is celebrating your success isnt it? Sai: Because Middle-earth gives a damn. I blushed but nodded meekly. Ya, Mac: Y-E-A-H! Thats how you spell Yeah, idiot. Use Spell Check! thats what Elrond said, Eselin walked over to me with a dress and I closed my eyes, I dont want to see it, I wined. Mac: W-H-I-N-E-D. She huffed and I peeked out. Is it to your liking Sam? She asked me. I nearly fell over, Its beautiful! I blinked in amassment. It looked more like a wizards robes then anything else. All: Uhwhat? It was tight fitting at the top but got looser and more flowing the father down it went. The neck line wasnt too low but it would show off enough. Remus and Mac: Of course it would. The colour was the best though; it was a dark blood red. All: AUGH! RED! I grinned and flew off the bed. I wanna try it on! Mac: I wanna hear you sound older than five! Eselin laughed at my childish antics and handed me the dress. Be careful, She warned. I nodded and ran into a separate room joined to mine. I guess you could call it the bathroom. It had a tub and a toilet type thing. Mac: Funny. I always imagined Rivendell having outhouses. Remus: I always imagined that Elves didnt use the toilet. Anyways, I threw off my clothes and carefully put on the dress. I walked out and ask Eselin to do up the bottom on the back. I literary All: *Snerk.* Mac: Literally! just pulled the dress on over my head but there was a button at the back to pull the fabric tightly against my chest. Sai: How convenient. You look outstanding Sam. When I saw this dress I knew that it was made for you, She said patting my back. I walked over the mirror and gasped. I do look beautiful. This was a first; I was saying something positive about myself. There was one thing I didnt like about it though; it showed off my breasts just a little too much. All: Oh come on. Mac: Stop pretending you dont want the world to see your breasts. Correction, stop pretending you dont want ELROND to see your breasts. I pulled up the top part and Eselin laughed. Theres no need for that Sam. That is a modest dress, I blushed and turned back to Eselin. Thank you my friend, I said jogging up to her and giving her a big hug. We embraced for a few moments. Enough of that Sam, youll ruin your dress. Now, She gestured to a chair in front of my desk and mirror, Time to do your hair. -30 Minutes Later- A half an hour! Mac: Holy crap, you wrote a transition! LOSE THE FUCKING TITLE CARD! Thats how long it took me to do my hair! Thats insane! Its beautiful! Ok, so my mouth was reacting on its own. My hair was done in a traditional elf pony tail. Remus: What the heck is that? What was that you may ask? *Remus looks to both sides, scared.* Well there were two small braids on the sides of my head that met together at the back. My hair was held up by something and braided at the top but left to hang loosely near the bottom. Mac: Oh, so it looks like how Legolas wears it. Thank you so much Eselin. I really cant thank you enough, I got up and hugged her once again. No need Sam. This is my duty, Erik (Eselin): Im just putting up with you, bitch. Well youre awesome at it. Besides you should get some praise once and a while, I said waving a hand in the air. She smiled at me then bowed. I must take my leave now and inform Lord Elrond that you are ready. She walked to the door then stopped and turned to look at me, Good luck tonight Sam. Have fun with the twins, She winked at me then walked out. Jareth: Good Jonas, is this Sue going to go through Elronds entire family? Sai: Please dont put those thoughts in my head. Mac: Please? I laughed and shook my head. Now it was time to wait once again. I walked over to my balcony and leaned against the railing. Mac (singing): The truth is I never left you! I smiled and looked around. It was the perfect temperature out here. Come to think of it, everything was perfect here. Remus (relieved): Shes not in Rivendell. Shes in heaven. I sighed and shook my head, no wonder I felt so down. When everything around you is so perfect and you are not, one cannot help but feel left out and alone. Time must have flown by because the next thing I knew someone was knocking at my door. Elves were so polite. At home people would have just walked in how nice. Mac: Actually, NORMAL humans knock. I walked to the door, Yes? Eselin said you were ready Lady Samantha. Is this correct? No need to be so proper Lord Elrond, I giggled and opened the door. I let my eyes fall to the ground; I didnt want to see his reaction. I heard a gasp and saw his hands fall to his side out of the corner of my eye. A few moments later, You look, He paused and I got the courage to look into his eyes. Angelic, He finished. All: OH PLEASE! Both our eyes held astonishment, Thank you my Lord, I managed to squeak out. He looked very good as well, the best I had ever seen him. He held out his arm to me. My Lady? He asked. I gave him the arm closest to him and we made our way down the hall. This is going to be a long night I sighed mentally. Jareth: And we are going to have to read ALL about it. Quatre: Pretentious Notes from the Author! Sai: Again? A/N: Ok, you people better enjoy this because this is a very rare thing . Please R&R, it really does make my day - All: No. *Doors unlock and they gather the empty water bottles, trooping out.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 7 2008, 07:20 AM Post #12 |
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"There's a Ball and Elrond Gets Jealous When Sam Dances With Fred...I mean Elladan." *Everyone troops in.* Sai: I think Little Goldy is in love. Mac: Aww. Sai: But hes too young to be in love. Hes little! Erik: Not anymore. Hes grown quite big not having to compete for food with your other fish. Arent they jealous? Mac: Little Pinky is little too. And a perfect match. Sai: I guess. Well, back to this. Erik: You know, this is making me wish Trac(e)y. I never realized how good we had it with her. Mac: Me neither. The Ball Part One. A/N- Holy crap! Im updating again! This is seriously a new thing for me. All: Really? Three chapters in about a week? Wow! Feel lucky people! Mac: That sends more chills down my spine than if Dirty Harry told me to feel lucky. Lol But oh my gosh! Ive gotten SUCH great reviews! I love you all! Erik: We hate you all. BueatyRoxs06 Thank you very much Lisa. I feel so loved by you! Youre the awesome one! Thank you for reviewing! Erik: PS: Lisa, learn to spell beauty. Thanks. potterfan2006 Thank you. And you better let me know, I cant wait to read it! Erik: Oh, Trac(e)y! How we miss you! And if you really need one Ill be happy to beta read for you. Mac: Dont take her up on it! Better then nothing me thinks. Erik and Mac: No! Take nothing! Mac: Wait, if I remember, potterfan2006 wasnt so great and not even Lady A could help her. Erik: But still Anyways, thanks for the review!DMH1973 lol I so agree! Poor Elrond! I promise I wont lose focus! I hope you like the new chapter! Thanks for taking the time to review! galawyn hehehehe Thanks, someones obsessed with my story. Sai: GET HELP! Woot! I hope this is soon enough? Thank you very much for reviewing, I realty appreciate it. Messy Elle Oh my gosh! Thank you SO much! I dont know how I do it to tell you the truth Although, I dont think I did that well on this chapter to tell you the truth. *All groan* Youre like the first person to like what Ive done with Elrond lol So many hate me for it so thanks! Mac: And yet you havent gotten the hint. Aww, have fun with the math (I hate math bah!). Thanks for reviewing hun:) Nemi Jade Thanks. And thank you very much for taking the time to review my story. I hope you enjoy this next chapter. And now off to the storyI really hope you people like the new chapter! -Sams Pov.- Mac: Hate it already. We were walking in an unknown part of the building. I looked at the walls and gasped. They were so elaborately decorated. Elrond noticed this - he notices everything doesnt he? This is the main part of the building. Its built for special occasions. Remus: Then why is it the main part? Wouldnt the main part be where you did everything? I nodded but was still in awe of it all. It really is beautiful, I said. I took my arm away from Elrond and walked over to the wall. Slowly my fingers rise to the wall and I felt the fabric over it. It looked like a rose and leaf wall paper yet it had texture like a painting. Its amazing; Ive never seen anything like it, I didnt think you would since this is elfish material, He smiled kindly was beckoned me to him. Erik (Elrond): And its very delicate. Please dont touch. Thanks. I smiled and happily complied. Once my arm was in his we set off again. We spent another few minutes walking then we finally made our way to two large doors. Two guards stood outside the doors and with a nod of Elronds head they began to open the doors. Sai: Because with the growing threat of Sauron, the guards are going to be opening doors rather than patrolling the boarders. He leaned over to me and whispered into my ear. There will be many people in this first room but do not worry, we will soon be off into a little private room, He re-adjusted our arms in a more comforting yet formal matter and smiled at me. My knees went weak and all I could do was nod. When we entered the room the first thing I heard was complete silence then murmuring. Remus (Elf 1): Is Elrond all right? Why is he entering in with that child? Mac (Elf 2): I dont know. Maybe shes Aragorns illegitimate daughter(regular) CRAP! Remus: Rule 34? Mac: Rule 34. I didnt want to embarrass Elrond so I walked as elegantly as I could. I looked no one in the eyes and my head was erect and alert. I suppose I must have looked royal with the type of dress I was wearing and my attitude. Quatre: No, you just came off as a snob. I mentally snorted at myself; I was acting like such a prick. Sai: Oh, she knew it. I think that makes it worst. Elrond, I was doing this for Elrond, not myself. I felt so nervous knowing that numerous elves were looking at Elrond and I. Elrond politely nodded and addressed some elves. Other then that we stopped for nothing no conversations, thank god! Soon Elrond led me to a smaller section of the hall. It turned into a hallway and we passed another set of guards. Whats the need for all these guards? I asked. Elrond gave me a soft smile. To keep guests from wondering around my house, Mac: That doesnt sound like ElrondFits this story. I nodded in understanding and he continued. It also makes my guests more comfortable knowing that they have protection. Why do you ask? I blushed a little lowering my head. Nothing really, I looked up and saw another pair of guards eyeing me. My Lord, I added. He raised his eyebrows but said nothing. I looked at him from the corner of my eye and mentally sighed. Did I like Elrond? All: Yes. No way! All: Liar. He was an awesome friendso nice and handsome. In his own way he also very loving, you could look into his eyes and see the love and adoration he had for you. When we first met Ill admit that I had a crush on Elrond. The thing is, I usually have a crush on someone when I first meet them. All: Mac: I think you need to talk to Dr. Gandalf about that. Theyre new and exciting for me. When I get to know them my crush fades away for they are not what I want. I thought the same had happened with Elrond. We became friends and those feelings and thoughts went away. Jareth: I hope so. Elrond smiled at me again and gave my hand a reassuring squeeze. My hand tingled and my stomach tightened. I soon knew the truth I liked Lord Elrond. Jareth: Well, that hope was short-lived. What the hell? I cant like him! Erik: Of course you cant. Thats wrong; hes like a billion years older then me! Mac: Ehclose enough. It would never work out between us so why the hell did I like him? Remus: The author wrote it so. My head knows this but my heart doesnt seem to listen. Remus: Neither does the author. I then began to rhyme off different reasons as to why we would never be together, All: RHYME OFF? Erik: Old. Mac: Gold! Sai: Psycho! All: Uhh Mac: I guess this is the point where I confess I was told I have the inability to rhyme. trying to get my heart to understand my heads logic. Hes a Lord and I am a commoner, people could never accept us. Sai: I think it would be more the fact HES STILL MARRIED! Hes immortal while I am mortal, Ill grow old and die but he wont. Mac: Oh please, krillball will find some deus ex machina to get around that. Needless to say he doesnt like me back! Octavius: Hey, Krillball, listen to your character! I sighed and hung my head, thankfully Elrond did nothing. At that moment we stood in front of an arch. I looked on in amassment *All laugh* Mac: Amazement. for I had no clue how it was staying up. It wasnt made out of rock yet it was clearly supporting the ceiling. Magic, I whispered to myself as we passed under. I allowed my head and eyes follow it as we walked away. Elrond coughed slight and I turned my attention in front of us. Arwen, Hey! I said. She turned around and I waved to her. She walked up to me and embraced me. Yes, she did hate me when I first got here but we have grown close through the past few months. Mac and Remus: Of course you have! I wouldnt say she was a friend, not just yet. A lot of things about her did annoy me but I didnt hold it against her that was just the way she was. Sai: Like being canonical? Mac: Wait till you make a move on her married father. Lady Samantha. We have been waiting your arrival. She said while she smiled kindly at me. She turned to her father and hugged him as well. She started a conversation with him and I slipped away. I looked around and saw Gandalf. I happily jogged over to him and gave him a huge hug. Gandalf, Im so glad youre here! How are you? I found that I had already missed his presence in the few hours I had been away from him. Sai: I think if you get too attached to your therapist, you need to find a new one. To me, he would always be family. He was so much like my grandfather it wasnt even funny. Octavius: Good, because we arent laughing. I couldnt allow myself to love him yet but I think were getting very close. Mac: What? Is she going to fall in love with every male she comes across? Remus: She does have daddy issues. Im doing very well my child. How are you doing? I hope this isnt too much for you, He said. Mac: JESUS IS THERE? Guys: MACKENZIE! Mac: Sorry. I shook my head. No, Im alright. I made it through the hardest part, the hall full of people. It was really nerve racking but Im here now so its all good, Gandalf smiled and sat down patting the seat next to him. I gladly sat down and crossed my legs. I looked over at him and he took out his pipe and lit it. He soon was puffing out rings of smoke. Gandalf, that stuff is bad for you, Remus: This PSA brought to you bya formerly suicidal Mary Sue! So you have told me. I like it and theres nothing else to it. Besides, it provides entertainment, He said making shapes with the smoke. I shook my head and used to hand to destroy the smoke figures. He frowned at me and I grinned. Quatre (Sam): Im still a brat! Jareth (Gandalf): And you wonder why I smoke? So when am I going to meet Lord Elronds sons. How will I even know who they are? I asked looking around the room. Believe me, youll know who they are, He sighed. Theyll prance in here and make a big show out of it too. Mac: The SOMBER sons of Elrond? And they will almost look exactly the same, He folded his arms across his chest and grumbled. Calm Gandalf, Im sure theyre not that bad, He gave me a look, Oh just take another puff of your weed, Pipe weed milady, pipe weed, Mac: Hit that bong! Fine, fine whatever, I lightly slapped him in the arm. There was nothing left to say so we sat in a comfortable silence for a few minutes. -A Few Minutes Later- *Octavius plays the ticking clock noise* -Narrators Pov.- Samantha got up and walked over to a table with food on it. She hummed as she looked at her selection. She had never seen this kind of food before and wasnt sure if she liked it. Timidly she picked up something like looked at like egg roll. Instead of taking a small bite she popped it in her mouth and chewed. A grin spread across her face. This is good, She whispered to herself. Elrond stealthily walked up behind her. Im glad you like it, He said into her ear. Erik (Elrond): But that was a wax decoration. Sai: Point Erik. Sam jumped and her hand flew to her chest. Jesus, She turned around and blushed. Mac: HE IS THERE! Guys: MACKENZIE! Mac: Sorry. Im sorry my Lord, I didnt know you were there, Quite alright Lady Samantha, He said. She looked into his eyes and saw them sparkling. She grinned and opened her mouth to say something but was caught off. Hello everyone! The fun has arrived! Jareth: You heard the voice. The fun has arrived! *Disco ball drops.* Everyone in the room excluding Sam groaned. I assume your Elladan and Elrohir? She asked looking at the two. Why yes my lady. I am the great Elladan, He said proudly. Oh, and this is Elrohir, He mumbled as an after thought. Elrohir frowned. What do you mean Oh, and this is Elrohir, my brother? I am far greater then you, He growled giving his brother a menacing look. All: Uh oh. *Put on their helmets.* Elrond quickly jogged up to them and put a hand on their shoulders. Now now, this a celebration, not a fighting arena. And please, behave yourselves? He whispered the last part. This is Lady Samantha, He gestured towards her and she walked forward. Pleased to meet you my lady, Elrohir bowed and took her hand in his. He kissed it gently and released her. She giggled and blushed. Elladan rolled his eyes and also bowed to Samantha. Ive been looking forward to meeting you, father has been talking about you so much, He was cut off by a look from Elrond. *All facepalm* A small blush had appeared across his face and Sam let herself stare at his face for a moment. She was brought back into reality when she was swooped into Elladans arms. All: Why are you standing her while the party is outside? He asked dragging her away. Jareth: I thought you WERE the party? Elladan! Elrohir hissed. What are you doing? Im taking her for a dance brother, to show her a good time, Sam was flushed with excitement. She looked back at Elrond and waved her good byes; her fear of people momentarily gone. Mac: Okay, who spiked the punch? Remus: Whoops. While they were walking back towards the dancing area Sam started up a conversation. You know, you really look a lot like your father and sister, She said. Yes, Ive heard that before, He sighed and clasped her hand. Remus (Elladan): I dont know why people are always surprised I look like my relatives. Come, dance with me? She was shocked but let herself be lead to wherever he wanted her. Yes, She breathed out. She admired his face in the soft light. He reminded her so much of Elrond. She wished that be would be this bold but he never would be. He was always so hard and stern, it was hard to make him actfree and alive. All: Really? Mac: You havent shown him being all stern except when Arwen wasnt fawning over the Sue. She wished that he had a free spirit like Elladan. Elladan looked down at her and seemed to know what she was thinking, He did, long ago. He was more like us a long time ago. All: The hell? Mac: They cant read minds! He was care free and usually didnt think about his actions. Then a great pain filled his life and he turned into the elf you see before you. Jareth: From what Ive heard, several great pains have filled this Elfs life. Sams face fell and she went into deep thought. Although, if youre lucky, he will show you glimpses of his true self. I wish he were more like you though, She whispered. Elladan grinned proudly as they walked into the packed room. Stay here, He ordered her. Sam looked at his retreating form. Then she met the eyes of another, and another, and another. Many were looking at her and whispering. Erik (Elf 2): Oh, now she deigns us with her presence. Prick. Mac: Hey, I was Elf 2! She frowned but stayed where she was. Her legs seemed to twitch in an attempt to start walking away but her mind would not let her body move. Elladan soon came back and she smiled at him. He took her in his arms. Ignore them and listen to the music, let it fill your body, She nodded and closed her eyes. The music was a slow and sensuous one. *All bang their heads on the backs of the chairs in front of them* He guided her around the room and she placed her head in the crock of his neck. Soon the people and noise faded away. It was just her and Elladan. Sam was having so much fun. How could everyone not adore this elf? He was handsome and loving. Yes he wanted to have some fun but didnt everyone? She sighed and snuggled into his arms, why couldnt Elrond be like this. *Remus hands out the bags.* Erik: Did someone bring the water? Mac: We kept some from last time. *Hands them out.* -Elronds Pov.- Gandalf, I whispered harshly. I never should have let them come here, Sai: Your sons? My friend, he just took her for a dance, Gandalf said. I looked up at his bewildered face. Yes, but she doesnt like crowds! I bet you she is about to burst into tears. I added. I shouldnt have just let her go. Mac: Hes acting like shes a four years-old at pre-school for the first time! Erik: Point Mac. I shook my head. She looked to be enjoying herself when she left. If I didnt know better Id say you were jealous, Gandalf said to me. He talked softly; I guess he didnt want to irate me further. My gaze pierced his. That cannot be, Im an elf! Not some human that cannot control his emotions. I spat. Mac: Hey, Elrond, need I remind you that you ARE half-human? Gandalf glared down at me and I sighed in defeat. I must go find her, just to make sure she is ok, Gandalf nodded and I was off. I started to jog down the halls. Samantha, I whispered to myself. Why was I so worried about her? She was grown; she could take care of herself couldnt she? Quatre: Well, she has tried to off herself a few times and only had a major breakthrough that afternoon My hands started to shake, why was I so worried about her being with my son? Nothing would happen. I shook my head and slowed as I reached the dance hall. I leaned against the wall and my eyes searched the crowds. My eyes found my son but Samantha wasnt with him. There was a young elf in his arms. I smirked, they looked good together. She had her head in his neck, they looked so comfortable. Wait, I said to myself. That was no elf, she was human. Jareth: Oh, right, that thing were supposed to remember from a few chapters ago Octavius: Sam could ALMOST pass as an elf. Right. My face paled. No, oh no, Were they together? No thats not possible, she wouldnt give herself away so quickly! But they lookedI could feel tears welling up in my eyes. *Quatre holds up tissue box* Why am I so affected by this! So shes with another? Why do I care, I do not feel for her. I familiar feeling crept into my heart as I leaned away from the wall. No, She was just a friend, a lost soul I helpedI did not like her. It is not possible! My heart will forever belong to another. Mac: YeahYOUR WIFE. Who is WAITING for YOU in Valinor! I spent the next few minutes watching them. I knew what I needed to do. My face hardened and I stalked my way over to them. My face looked angry and I was on a mission. *Mac hits her head on the back of the keyboard.* Remus: Me next. Erik: Then me. Elladan, Lady Samantha, I said in a whispered. Any louder and the whole room would have heard the hurt in my voice. I tried my best to hide my emotions but I almost melted when I saw Samantha look up at me in joy. Joy she had because of Elladan. Mirth was clearly set in her eyes and I wished I caused that. She looked flushed too. I looked to Elladan and he smirked like he knew what I was feeling. I almost glared at him but forced a smile. Elrond? I heard her ask me. Once again I started to melt as I turned to her. A/N- Well I hoped you liked it! All: No. Please R&R! Oh and Elladans/Elrohirs personalitys are probably off Mac: They arent off. Theyre stolen off Fred and George Weasley. Bitch. but I wanted them to be this wayso sorry? lol Erik: Look, stop apologizing. We wont give you as much flack if you just admit you dont give a damn about these characters instead of pretending youre seriously a fan of the Lord of the Rings. Elrond was a bit too emotional in this chapter and he was acting like a human not a elf but hay Sai: Are we in a barn? Im the author here and I wanted him to get all flustered. lol ![]() *All groan and just leave.* I cant stand her, really I cant, Mackenzie said, walking into the Remote Room of Doom. The house elf had brought up their dinner already, probably ice cold by now. She walked over and found some bacon on a plate. Here minis, she called. Legoals and Aragoran perked right up off their mat. The two rushed at her, grabbing the bacon with expert maneuvers. Good boys! You didnt bite me this time! she said. Oh, I wish I could set you on the Sue were dealing with now. The mini-balrogs growled in response, taking more bacon from Mackenzies hand. I wish we could sic them on her as well, Erik said. And we thought Trac(e)y was bad. Several screams erupted through Malfoy Manor. I guess Voldemort isnt in a good mood, Quatre said, lying down on his bed. Great, were probably going to have to do another chapter then. Sai grabbed his plate. Im going to eat before he decides that! The door opened and a flustered teenage girl darted into the room. Mackenzie studied hera girl trying to be average but dressed in beautiful clothes, bearing an air of importance. Who are you? Remus asked. Im Tracey, she replied. I was supposed to be having lunch with Elrond, Legolas, Elladan and Elrohir but now Im here! TRACEY! Mackenzie and Erik yelled, hugging the girl. It is so good to see you! Umm, thanks? Were dealing with your predecessor, Samantha, Erik said, and we realize you werent so bad. Oh, it would be so great to read another of your chapters. You were just funny bad, Mackenzie added. Erik, show her out. Maybe shell convince potterfan2006 to write another chapter. Erik nodded and chauffeured a confused Trac(e)y out of the room. She grabbed a plate, suddenly in a very good mood. |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 8 2008, 07:52 AM Post #13 |
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"Pedophilia Ahoy!" *Everyone returns to the theater.* Sai: I wonder how those Sues got into the manor? Jareth: Dont know. But it was fun to torture them. Mac: Im just glad to have seen Trac(e)y again. Oh well, back to Sam. The Ball Part Two. A/N- Hey peoples! Sorry for the shortness of the chapter but schools almost done! Woot! I feel like doing a jig Anyways, thank you SO much for your reviews. I swear Im gonna cry I feel so loved. Theyve helped me a lot too.BueatyRoxs06 Thanks. You entertain me lol Heres the next chapter! potterfan2006 Oh wow I totally forgot to e-mail youoops Still need help? Thanks for the review! Nemi Jade Awwwww! Heres a hugand another chapter:D Erik: STOP ENCOURAGING HER! Gwen - Thank you so much for the review. To be honest I was confusing myself last chapter. I tried to keep it in one tense in this chapter, please tell me how I did. Sai: She changed tenses and the theater didnt shake? Mac: It broke. Sai: Oh. I understand what you are saying about the 3rd-pov and one chapter Ill try. I just wanted this chapter to be in Sams pov so that there was more of a connection to you, the readers. Thank you SO much for the advice! galawyn Teehee! Thank you! Sorry this chapter took a little long. And wow, I just noticed that I got 2 reviews from you! Youre so awesome:D:D:D:D The Last Temptation of Homer Mac: BATTLING BARD! Oh my gosh I love this name! Thanks for the review:D Mac: She praised this? What? Well thats it. So many! Hehehe, anyways, heres the new chapter. -Sams Pov.- Im having such an amazing time with Elladan. Hes seems like such a kind and caring elf. I know that well grow to be great friends. Sai: Oh, just friends? My hands are being held in his and my face is in the crook of his neck. Im hot all over but thats to be expected isnt it? The dance floor is always hot. Soon I hear a familiar voice and I turn with a smile plastered on my face. Elrond? Im so happy that Elronds here. Maybe hes here to dance with me? Father Elladan seems hesitant. I look closer and find out why; Elrond does not look pleased at all. Mac (Queen Victoria): We are not amused. My Lord I find myself asking him whats wrong. He completely ignores me and turns to Elladan. Son, His voice is as hard as steal and they seem to have a whole conversation with their eyes. You are only friends? His face does not change yet his whole body seems to relax. I look to Elladan and he simply nods. Only friends, Elladan lets my hands slip out of his grasp. Erik: He seems so calm. Id think hed freak out about Dad being jealous he is dancing with a CHILD! He backs away from me and bows. Jareth: Wait, why is this being written in present tense when the rest of the story has been in past tense. Taking my hand in his own All: COMMA! he kisses it gently. My lady that was a wonderful dance, I much enjoy our time together. Now if Im not mistaken there is someone else who wishes to dance with you. I slowly turn to face Elrond. He smiles gently down at me and my knees go weak. Elladan gives me a gentle push towards him and I stubble into Elronds grasp. All: STUBBLE? Mac: Stumble. He whispers something into his fathers ear and walks off. Elrond? I have no clue what just went on. I give him a puzzled look and he just chuckles. His chest seems to rumble with mirth. For some reason everything is happening very slowly and I forget to breathe. Sai: Oh please, let her asphyxiate. He takes my hands in his and I smile at the foreign warm feeling entering my skin. I take few breaths and my chest heaves with effort. His arm muscles seem to twitch as he pulls me close. He smells like a forest, strong yet comforting. Quatre: A forest. Really? I guess Ill never find out what went between them Mac: What? What he said to Elladan? Remus: What happened between Elrond and the forest? Sai: What went between the arms? Because youre currently there May I have this dance? His voice is lower then I remember it. Erik: Thats because youre pressed to his chest. Everyones voice is lower when heard through ones chest. I open my mouth to respond but only a squeak comes out. I clear my throat and try again. You dont need to ask my Lord, At that moment a slow song starts and I look over to see Elladans grinning face. I remind myself to thank him later. I press myself into Elrond and look up into his eyes. Im in a state of shook the Lord Elrond was dancing with me, a mere commoner! Mac: Be more surprised hes dancing with you, a mere child. A healthy blush appears on my face and I bury my head into his neck in an attempt to hide it. I sigh blissfully into him as he moves one of his hands to my lower back. Goosebumps appear on my skin and I resist the urge to kiss his perfect neck. *All look at Remus, who has already taken out his own bag.* Remus: Get your own. Mac: Fine. Octavius, check the water! We end up staying like that for the next few songs and just like with Elladan we ignore everyone. Erik (Elf 3): Fine. Be that way. See if we care. Im personally in heaven. Mac: IT IS HEAVEN! SO JESUS IS TOTALLY THERE! Guys: MACKENZIE! Mac: Sorry. My heart is thumping so hard in my chest that I think that even Elrond can feel it. I love the fact that Im in his arms. He makes me feel so loved. For some reason when Im with him I feel like Im important and wanted. I dont know if I should tell him that I like him because it may ruin what we have. I also think that I may love him *All throw up.* Thats weird for me to say, that I love someone, but I think its true. Ive never felt so strongly for someone. Whenever I see him I get a funny feeling in my stomach and it spreads to the rest of my body. I just want him to be happy and when hes sad I feel an urge to make he feel better. I dont know, I cant explain it Ive never been good with words. All: No, youre kidding? We part and I imminently feel a loss. My body twitches as if to reach out for him again but my mind stops my body. Elrond looks down upon me with those eyesI shiver. Are you cold my lady? So formal? I remember that we are near people; he has to be that way. Mac: No Jareth: Give up. Please. No, Im fine my lord. I say simply. I dont want him to look into it too much. My lady, would you join me outside? He asks. Elrond holds his hand out to me and a smile is set on his face. I nod and gently grasp his hand. As soon as my skin touches his I get hot. I dont know why my body is responding to him like this. Sai: Its because you are both radiating heat, idiot. I suddenly feel very nervous. Im going to say something really stupid arent I? Erik: Most likely. And then were going to laugh. We soon reach outside. Were on a sort of patio with stone benches and flowers all around. Theyre all so beautifully outlined in moonlight. I sit down on a bench near some white roses and he follows my lead. *All raise up bags.* Why are we out here Elrond? Since were out of the hearing range of the other elves I figure we can start talking more casual. Im not trying to push for answers; I just want to make some casual conversation. Remus: Then start with Lovely night, isnt it? He frowns but answers my question. Well, I thought it would be nice to get away from everyone else. I know you dont like groups of peopleand its nice out here. Was I wrong in bringing you here? I think I can feel my heart cracking at the not so hidden pain in his voice. Octavius: This is painful for us! No, no of course not Elrond. I wave him off, And really, I was having an amazing time. I didnt really notice everyone else, I smile and blush while my hand made its way to his leg. All: BAD HAND! Now its Elrond turn to blush. He clears his throat, Well thats good. Im glad youre enjoying yourself Sam. I cant help but smile but soon it fades damn my brain for thinking too much, Uh, Elrond, can I tell you something? I take my hand off his leg and rub my temples. Oh no! Stop right there missy! His face goes serious and his back straightens, he means business. Yes, of course you can tell me anything, Well, Im scared, Sam, stop it before you dig your hole too deep! I dont want to tell you, it may screw up what we have, I start to shake and I have to look down. Elrond takes his hand and lifts my chin up. I stare into his eyestheres no going back now, Ive steeled my fate. Mac: Well, I guess that could be worse than sealing your fate. Please Sam; nothing you can say will change what we have. Our bond is deeper then words, My breathing starts to go faster, what does he mean by that? Sai: It means were going to be sick. Jareth: I think I already am. Does he like me back? How can I even tell him I like him! Well Elrond, I I paused trying to put the words together. I I have the words but they wont come out. I think that I may I cannot say it! I think I love you, Mac: CUE THE PATRIDGE FAMILY! A lone tear (TH) falls from my eye. Ive screwed up, I can tell by the look on his face. Were through; hell never talk to me again! Octavius: We can only hope. Erik: But we know hoping doesnt do too much. Hell leave me now and never look back. I know, What? Thats all he can after Ive like poured my heart out to him? I know this and I love you too. Ok, time to faint Sai: Time to barf! *They do so.* Quatre: Pretentious words from the Author! A/N Well there it is! Please R&R. It only takes a few seconds but it really makes me feel good ![]() Mac: Not if we review, sweetie. *Doors unlock.* Erik: I need to play. Mac: Ooh, are you taking requests? Erik: Die, Rora, Die, Die? Mac: Please? *All leave.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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| MackenzieW | Oct 10 2008, 08:58 AM Post #14 |
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"By Continuing, You Absolve MackenzieW of Any Resulting Physical, Emotional and/or Psychological Trauma." *All return with a new stock of water bottles.* Sai: Well, here we are. Another day, another chapter. Jareth: The daily grind of prisoners. Erik: I think Id rather the chain gang. Mac: Come on guys. For Ariel. Sai: The Little Mermaid? Mac: No, thats the chapter title. A/N- Another chapter! This one is a bit short but at least I updated! Im hoping to get more writing done once my final exams are done (thats like in a couple days yay!). Here are my replies to the reviews I got for chapter 13 I LOVE YOU GUYS! All: WE HATE YOU! galawyn Oh my gosh thank you so much! I totally love your reviews; they make me feel SO nice! Heres your update hun! potterfan2006 Hello there! I did send you an e-mail but Im not sure if you received it did you? Well anyways, heres another chapter just for you ![]() BueatyRoxs06 Hehehehehe hands you some tissue- Quatre: Thats my job! Dont cry hunny. Hope you enjoy this chapter. Eliriel Well I agree with youmy beginning chapters sucked but I have come a long way from there. Mac: No, not really. Those chapters were from when I was about 10, I would rewrite them but then it would change my story completely. Erik: You mean, possibly make it better? But I will take some of your advice, Ill keep writing no matter what. I do this for myself, if others enjoy my work then, hey, thats even better. Mac: Oh, I hate the I do this for myself. If you do for yourself, why post it in public forum looking for reviews? Jareth: Why do you write? Mac: Compulsion. Sai: Seriously. She feels the need to write, to create a story. Thank you for your reviews regardless. Barbara Neal Well thank you very much! Im glad youve started to read again. Heres another update for you, hope you enjoy it! dancing stars Thank you for your comment about Elrond. I like him being different from what he is really supposed to be. I hope you like the new chapter! lds-sunshinegrl Muhahahahaha I love the end to that chapterand this one too! Heres another update for you. Ariel I think I may cry, youre like the first one to stand up for me! Sai: Oh Jonas. She probably said something like Its her story, leave her alone you meanies! hugs- Oh my god I think I may love you. Thank you SO much for the kind words and the defense This chapter is dedicated to you!All: Ahh! Well thats it for reviewers my, there is SO many of them! On with the chapter! -Sams Pov.- Ok so here I am, acting like a fish out of water, waiting for my brain to actually process what Elrond has just told me. You know and you love me too? It sounded obvious and gay Mac (sighs): Gay, according to my BFF dictionary.com, is defined as: having or showing a merry, lively mood. Or, indicating or supporting homosexual interests or issues is the sixth and last definition. but I couldnt think of anything else to say. Our eyes lock and I reach up to touch his cheek. Just before my skin touches his, he opens his mouth to speak. I hesitate but I let my arm fall to my side. Yes, I love you so much Sam, He moves closer to me and embraces me. I swear Im melting into his robes. Youre one of the closet friends Ive ever had. Erik: Seriously? Not Gandalf? Not Erestor? Not Glorfindel? Not Celebrian? Not that king whose name escapes me? Hold up! Wait a minute a friend? I can hear the needle coming off the record. Mac: Okay, Ill give krillball credit. Thats a good line. Jareth: Hey Angey! Thats how you portray cinematic elements in words! You love me as a friend? It was a question but it came out as a statement. My voice is flat because my emotions are flowing out of me. How could I be such a fool to think that a Lord could love me? How could I? Sai: Youre a Sue. Theyre supposed to love you. Dont worry, its not entirely your fault. Of course, what did you think I meant? He asked me. *Theatre shakes* Mac: They fixed it? He pulled away from me; confusion was clearly set on his face, yet there was something hidden in his eyes. What did he not want me to know? I tried searching for an answer but my anger overcame me. You know what, never mind. Just leave me be, I gave him the coldest glare I could muster and just walked away. As soon as I was out of the eyes sight of the rest of the elves I began to run, to where I didnt know. I just let my feet take me. How could I be such a fool? How could I give into my emotions like that? I had been so controlled but that was long ago. All: Like when? Mac: Oh I hope this doesnt mean shes going to cut herself again. Long ago I did not feel like a normal human begin, I was just walking around without a soul. Now I have a soul but I also have pain. Is this all life is pain? If so, I do not want it. Jareth: Great shes suicidal again. -Narrators Pov.- Unknowingly Sam let her feet carry her to the gardens. She had been here many times but now she saw it in a new light. She gently sat herself on the bench and sighed. How could I be such a fool? Her voice sounds broken. *Theater shakes again.* Mac: I hate people who cant pick a tense and STICK TO IT! She sounds angry yet too tired to care anymore. To some she may be over reacting but ask yourself this, what would you do if your spirit was just taped back together then, without warning, someone decided to rip apart the tape that held it together? She is falling apart. Her old wounds are only freshly healed. Her fragile mind cant handle a blow like this. All: WE GET IT! MOVE ON! You know that Im always here for you Her voice fades into the back of Sams brain. Quatre: NOT THE EVIL TWIN! Remus: Quatre, son, calm down! She pushes her back, No, I do not need you, not now, not ever. Elrond taught me that, She finds that her own voice is fading maybe it was all a lie? Suddenly she hears footsteps. She doesnt turn knowing who is behind her. She had just opened her heart to love only for it to be destroyed by this man, this elf. Samantha, did I say something wrong? Elrond came to rest beside her. Sam didnt respond, she kept her eyes busy by looking at the numerous flowers. Sam? Rising she made her way to a beautiful light blue flower. Its petals were soft and long. Finally she got the courage to speak. This flower has been nurtured by the earth to become what it has. Its beautiful but it doesnt realize its true beauty yet. Mac: Why are you waxing poetic? It is still venerable and needs to the earth to give it strength. She turns to Elrond and looks into his eyes. She holds out the flower in the palm of her hand. Slowly the flower starts to fade in colour. Dust soon that was all thatis left in her hand. Erik: Umm, how did she do that? Mac: Now she has speshul powers? An eerie breeze blows past them blowing the remains of the flower away. A lone tear falls from her eye. Without the earth to make it strong it dies. It loves the earth but does the earth love it? There are so many other flowers and the garden isnt disturbed by its demise. Sai: I wonder where she stole this fromCompared to what shes written before, this is downright eloquent. Elrond continues to stare into her eyes. Can it be? Does she Sam feels bold and walks up to him. This is gonna be stupid, What? Sam looks up into his eyes one last time before reaching up and grabbing his head. She brings his lips down to hers and closes her eyes. She had never kissed a boy beforeShe allows her body to take over as she moves her lips with his. She almost winces at the force in which she kisses him. There will surely be bruises later. Soon her hand falls from behind his head to his neck. Moaning,she presses her body into him. *All quickly grab bags and throw up. Octavius hands out water bottles.* At first Elrond didnt know what was going on, finally he gives in and kisses her back. His arms encircle her in a protecting way. He knows that this is what he was missing; this is what they both need. They both need each other to live and function properly. All: OH PLEASE! Mac: HELLO PEDOPHILIA! After some time Sam pulls away gasping for breath. Her body is still tingling from the contact she just had. Im sorry, Her hand flies to her lips. You idiot! Her eyes widened in fear. Please forgive me, Sam, His arms still hold her to him. Bending down he whispers in her ear gently, Never regret what just happened. Her own lips move to his ears. Speaking in a soft voice she worries about waking up to find that this is a dream. I love youI need you, Nodding he pulls away, And I love you, His eyes close and his lips meet hers. Always Around them more flowers bloom, it is almost as if Middle Earth is celebrating their new found relationship. Erik (Middle-earth): Are you kidding? This is a happy time for both of them. This was all planned though - her depression, her coming to Middle Earth. The planner, however, is not happy. He wants Sam for himself. Jareth: Oh for crying out loud! Who wants Sam now? Legolas? Aragorn? Elladan? Gandalf? Mac: Heh, look, we were kidding about Sauron all those chapters ago. Octavius: You dont think? Mac: Hes a Maia. He would have the power to do so. He burns with rage and vows to have his love for himself. For now, he waits for his moment to strike. Quatre: dun dun DUN! Now, some Pretentious Words from our Author! *Golf claps* A/N- Well I want to know what you guys think of this chapter. I tried writing it differently and I'm not sure if it's good or not. Erik: Well, theres the tense changes Quatre: The pedophilia Sai: The metaphors Im pretty sure you stole off something else Please give me your thoughts! Thanks for reading! All: Yeah, yeah. *Doors open and they all exit.* |
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"The Story of Celebrian As Told By Krillball" *All file back into the theater.* Mac: Why Warrick? I ask you, why? Erik: I dont know. I am neither Gary Doudan nor CBS. Mac: This sucks. Erik: I know. Now lets go on. Mac: Fine. The Past. A/N: Well I just came back from being at my cottage (with no technology or internet/phone at all I nearly died!) Erik: HORRORS! and I got to see all these lovely reviews! Thank you all SO much! I know some of you didnt like the new writing style, I will admit Im still uncomfortable with it. Ill do one more chapter with it. Oh yes, sorry for the late update but as I said I had no technology, just my book of paper Now here are my responses to the reviews I got I love you all!potterfan2006 Well I agree with you, I dont like this style that much but Im glad you noticed a difference. lol Hope you like this chapters style a little better (Ive had some time to practice) Mac: You know I feel that if you want to experiment with a new style, write a separate storya one-shot. The only time I feel a style should change during a story is if you write such a long one, you just naturally mature into the style. galawyn Thank you VERY much! Tell your friends they rock and thanks too. Youre such an awesome reviewer! -salutes back- Heres your chapter! ElvenPwner Youre too kind! I hope you like this chapter as well. lds-sunshinegrl I agree! I really liked the last paragraph too. I hope you like this chapter. Oh and youll all find out who this planner is soon I think lol Jareth: You think? Youre the author! DMH1973 LOL Random I love it! Have fun with this one. Ariel Again you rock so much! I think I may just cry. You make me feel SO good. I write for people like you. Most of reviewers make me want to write! I LOVE YOU ALL! Octavius: Do we need to say it? Remus: By now, I think our hate for them is well-known. I hope this chapter is posted soon enough for you. I pray youll enjoy it because your opinion means so much to me. Mac: No wonder she gets all whiney when someone says it sucks. Fair Maiden Wow thank you for reviewing and for your comments. The whole 'A mentally disturbed girl falls into Middle Earth.' thing made me laugh my ass off. Mac: Funny, it did us too but probably for some other reason. Your review really rocked! Im sorry I didnt update really fast damn cottage (although I had so much funI love you cottage! Lol). I really hope you enjoy this chapter. Ice Queen Estella Ohhhh Elle! hugs- Thank you SO much hun! Im updating dont you worry, I say you start doing the same thing ;P Love ya lots girly! And with these wordson with the chapter! All (flatly): Yay. - Sams Pov. - For the past few weeks Ive been very busy. Right now everything in my life is falling into place. I havent cut myself even though Ive thought about it many times. Im now learning what its like to live a normal life. Quatre: Well, normal for Middle-earth. It probably wont help when you go back to Earth. Mac: Shes Elronds twu wuv. She aint going back. Sai: Point Mac. Its interesting to say the least. Im starting to grow stronger; at least thats what Elrond is saying and I guess I almost agree with him. Elrond ah my lovely Elrond. We have been getting along so well. Yes weve only been an item for a short period of time but its been amazing. I love him so much and I love being with him even more. We havent let anyone know about us being together yet. Its just not the right time. Erik: I dont think itll ever be the right time. Besides, it would add a lot of unneeded stress to our lives. I remember the conversation with Elrond clearly; we were sitting in our garden - as we now like to call it and having a casual conversation when I popped the questionno not that question. - Flashback in Narrators Pov.- All: Oy. Mac: Look, pick a narrator and stick to it. Elrond this is so wonderful Sam says All: Comma. referring to their picnic lunch. Currently they are sitting under a tree in the wonderful shade it provides. They sit nearly touching each other but are ready to fly away at a moments notice just in case someone is to see them. I agree my love, Elrond looks down lovingly at the love of his life. More correctly the second love of my life Mac: Thank Jonas! An acknowledgment of Celebrian! Elrond itches to tell his love of his past life but is hesitant. Sh e deserves to know and this is the best time. She is relaxed and calm, do it Elrond! 321 His mouth twitches and slowly opens. Sam unknowingly cuts him off. Elrond I need to ask you something. We havent really talked about it before but I think we need to have a serious conversation about it. He freezes not knowing what will come next. Willing himself to physically relax he speaks. Yes my dear, anything you need to ask I will answer. A hand finds itself on her shoulder to rub it gently and lovingly. Sam turns her head and looks up into his eyes. Her own eyes hold strength and unknown wisdom in their depths. She uses her hand to rub his cheek. Slowly she removes her hand. Elrond, why can we not tell everyone about us? Erik: Lessee. Hes many millennia older than you and youre sixteen. Its called pedophilia no matter what world you are in. Why can no one else know about our love? She is dead serious, there are no tears eyes nor will there be any. Quatre: Aww. *Sadly puts down his tissue box* Sam smiles sadly wanting to know the true reason. Elrond sighs. How can I tell her this? Theres so much to inform her Sam, promise me youll just let me get this all out. Please dont interrupt for I will tell you the whole story in due time. She nods and he continues, For now it is best to keep our relationship a secret because if everyone else finds out there will be so many questions and concerns. Itll put so much stress on both of us; you dont need that right now. Sai: Yes, Sam told us about that before the POV change. Sam nods in understanding but she opens her mouth. Elrond interrupts her, Im not finished. Also, many will not accept our relationship. You see, love for elves is extremely different then love for humans. Sai: I think someone has been doing research! Kudos to her! It seems that now a days, humans love many and get married even more. Mac: And kudos taken away. Im not sure if hes talking about divorce or remarrying due to a spouse dying. This is not the way of elves. When we marry we marry for life. Mac: Tolkien was Catholic. He wouldve believed all his creatures married for life. Even if our other half dies we do not re-marry. It startles me that I could love again but I will not fight it. Sai (Elrond): Despite what happened the last time. But lets not dwell on that! Other elves will not see it the way that I do and think I have betrayed my first wife. Mac: I think Celebrian will think so too. Man, is she going to be pissed when you get to Valinor! Octavius: Point Mac. He takes a deep breath and turns away from Sam. This is a painful thing to bring up but I will tell you about my ex wife Remus: Ex-wife sounds like you divorced her. Late wife. That might be better. it is only fair, you should know, Mac: Stray quotation mark! Do you wish to know everything about her? Sai (Sam): Well, not everything. Just give me the Readers Digest version of it. He looks back only for a moment to see Sam nod. Clasping his hands together he looks far off into the sky. Erik: Im going to call paragraph break. Mac: Agreed. My ex wife, her name was Celebrian which means silver queen. She was beautiful and she loved me. We were wed in the year 109 of the Third Age. Soon after our twin sons and Arwen were born. He stops for a moment and pushed the tears back - he has never talked about his wife willingly. In the year 2509 All: COMMA. Celebrian was traveling to see her parents in Lothlorien when she was attacked. She was poisoned by an Orcs arrow then tortured I do not know how she survived it but she did. Our sons found her and brought her back to me. Mac: Which greatly affected them so they dont act like Fred and George Weasley. I healed her physical wounds easily but I could never heal her mental wounds. She was forever troubled by her memories and fears of what could happen to her. Celebrian found that she could no longer find joy in living in Middle Earth. A year later in 2510 she started to fade. Remus: So youre going to kill her for sure then? LATE WIFE! I remember when I held her hand, asking her to come back to me. She smiled up at me and told me to accept her fate for she already had. She said she could only be in peace by dieing. Gertrude: Dying. Elves should never know the pain of deathI almost faded myself but my children kept me alive. They needed me to keep from fading. My sons went mad and killed many Orcs trying to find retribution for their mother's torment then death. Its been the hardest time in my life. Mac: And his daughter went to live with her mothers people at the time too. Sam moves so that she can see his face. She cringes at the tears running down his face. His eyes seem so hallow, so empty. His eyes are not emptythey are filled with pain. Jareth: Okay, choose one: are they empty or are they full? Mac: And no, the answer doesnt designate you a pessimistic or optimistic. She kisses his brow softly not knowing how to comfort him. Elrond sighs in the comforting embrace but forces himself to continue on, to drain himself of his secret thoughts. I know this why I cared so much about you. From the beginning you reminded me so much of my late wife Remus: FINALLY! that I could not bring myself to let you go. I held you close in the hopes that I could correct my wrong and save you, keep you alive. And I did, I did something for you that I could not do for my ex wife. It makes me feel better that I could save one of you, I saved one of my true loves. Octavius: Oh barf. But now do you understand why we must not let anyone know? I am betraying the elfin Sai: Elven. way by just thinking of you. I am betraying my beautiful Celebrian, Quatre: Im starting to think hes hung up on his wife still. He pauses, But in a sense I do not think I am for she would want me to be happy. I think she would want this if she were looking down at me now. Once again he pauses to collect his thoughts. It would be best if we keep our relationship a secret until we know that we will work out. I think we should tell everyone of us right before we get married, if we ever do. Sai: Well, dont have sex for a long time then. Mac: Please! I dont want to have to use a bag today! It will be sudden but then they shall have to accept it. They are my people, they will accept it, Finally Elrond brings himself to look down at Sam. He realizes that they are both crying. They both reach in for a hug and stay like that for a few minutes. Sam is the first one to pull away and speak, I understand my love, I understand completely. She moves up to whisper in his ear. And if Celebrian knew what was going on I have a feeling she would be so happy for you. Your ex Remus: LATE! wife sounds like an amazing elf. It saddens me on how she had to leave this world. I wish I could have met her, She pulls back and chuckles lightly, But then again I would never have gotten to be with you my love. Mac: Dont wanna use a bag. Dont wanna use a bag She looks up at him and smiles. Gertrude: New paragraph. Thank you for answering me. Thank you for sharing your pain with me, its the least I could let you do. I also thank you for saving me. I shall never be able to repay you, She crushes herself into his arms All: Oww. and cries happily. *Quatre sighs and holds up tissue box.* A few moments pass, And Elrond, She whispers, We will be getting married one day. We will - I just know it, - End of Flashback now in Sams Pov.- Sai: The entire thing was in a flashback? Mac: This is sucky writing. We ended up staying like for a while. Now I look at myself in the mirror, Im going to another ball with my love. Jareth: I cant see Elrond throwing multiple balls. Mac: Once again, Imladris is not Far, Far Away! This time Im getting to know his children better. It freaks me out knowing that I will be their mother at some point. Sai: Im sure theyre more than freaked out. I hear a few knocks at my door; my love summons me to him. Im coming Elrond keep your pants on! I jump up and happily run to my door. What? A confused face is the first thing I see. Ah I love my childish humor; I guess Ill need to tone it down for him. What do you think? Sai: Leave him alone. Hows that? [/B ]A/N: There was the chapter! Please review and also give a vote to keep or not to keep the new stylethat is the question Mac: Can we vote on keeping the story or not? Thanks for reading. I love feedback! Oh yes, for this chapter I did my research *All gasp and clutch their chests.* thank god I have tones of Tolkiens books to get this info. All: STRAY PERIOD! from. Now I know that Celebrian sailed to the Undying Lands in 2510 but for this story to work she must have died. Mac: But did you consider what her dying would do? Elrond wouldnt be able to see her every again unless he too died and went to the Halls of Mandos. Her parents wouldnt be able to see herimagine Galadriel and Celeborns grief at that. Elrohir and Elladan wouldnt have been able to see her again. Arwen wouldvebut thats not the point! Erik: You done ranting? *Mac nods.* Good. It also adds some interesting plot twists. So, sorry out there to all the die hard Tolkien fans but I had to change some things. Quatre: Lets get this straight: You didnt HAVE to change some things, you NEEDED to change some things to have the story you WANTED to work. Erik: Point Quatre. Lets get out of here. *All leave.* |
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You are the music while the music lasts--T.S. Eliot "Stop the damn texting and pick up a book!"--Grandmama, "The Addams Family" (Musical) "Tomorrow will be better for as long as America keeps alive the ideals of freedom and a better life." Walt Disney "I wake in the loneliness of sunrise When the deep purple heaven turns blue And start to pray As I pray each day That Ill hear some word from you I lie in the loneliness of evening Looking out on a silver-flaked sea And ask the moon Oh how soon, how soon Will my love come home to me"--"Loneliness of Evening," Cinderella "Thank you, Lord You have brought us Safe to shore Be our strength and protection ever more. A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire A Thiarna dean trocaire A Chriost dean trocaire"--Heartland, as performed by Celtic Thunder I'm writing a novel! A Guide to Fanfiction for Dummies! My Little Corner I'm on Book Country! | |
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