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| [REVIEW] MST: Melting Ice; Review my first MST please. | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Nov 14 2008, 08:55 PM (459 Views) | |
| Refia | Nov 14 2008, 08:55 PM Post #1 |
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Paying Tribute to the Past
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MST: Melting Ice Read the story here. Images of the sporkers (click the names to see): Sesshoumaru (From the anime/manga "InuYasha") Mia (From the GBA game "Golden Sun") Refia (From the DS game "Final Fantasy III") Toa Ignika (From "Bionicle") So tell me, did I do well with my first MST? I could use some advise. |
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[align=center]“Is God willing to prevent evil, but not able? Then he is not omnipotent. Is he able, but not willing? Then he is malevolent. Is he both able and willing? Then whence cometh evil? Is he neither able nor willing? Then why call him God?” [/align] | |
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| ~Tio~ | Nov 14 2008, 09:19 PM Post #2 |
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Seer of Visions
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Good work, Refie! The ending just cracked me up :lol: The riffs were funny, all of them Refia and Mia seem to have gotten used to new information pretty quick. Which is understandable, 'cause they're both mages who need to learn spells and use them.Also, I love Sesshoumaru and his "This Sesshoumaru" and Ignika. Although at times I think you put it too much in there... I mean, Sesshoumaru and Refia and Mia don't speak always, either, but only Ignika gets a '...' and it becomes boring... But yeah, that's me nitpicking ![]() For the very first MST, it's great Can't believe I'm saying this, 'cause I can't read disgusting unnatural porn, but I look forward to your next one ![]() Keep up the great work! |
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| Fishpaste | Nov 14 2008, 09:31 PM Post #3 |
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Rising Again
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Yep, it's excellent! Erm, can you post some pics of the characters in the story? That would help. Ignika looks freaky, I hope he's nice. It may not have been a lemon but it was still one of the most pointless pieces of writing I ever read. Nothing happened basically! Even the rape got about two sentences. Not that I'm complaining about that but, well, it was the whole point of the story. I like Mia, she seems sweet, I can see her trying to speak up in defence of the slash writers. Anyway, good work, write more! Lits more! Small point, it's 'lit', not 'lighted'. |
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Books contain knowledge. Knowledge is power. Power corrupts. Corruption is a crime. Crime never pays. So, if I keep reading, Im gonna go broke! Proud member of the society for the Protection of Neglected Commas (SPNC) | |
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| AraionaDuBois | Nov 15 2008, 03:03 PM Post #4 |
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Chasing Shadows
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Lol! Love that line. ![]()
This argument remains the same for LotR...it never works. Logic seems to vanish with teenage (and adult horny fanwomen) when writing fanfiction. Those poor characters...great MST though!
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Smashed down the light. I will not rest till I'm king. Valinor's empty now. allied the elves and men they shall be damned. A Dark Passage, Blind Guardian. Now truly I am king of the world. Master of fate Damned shall thy house be. Thou shall not question my power Nor shall thou defy me further. The Steadfast, Blind Guardian. | |
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| Siany-T | Dec 9 2008, 11:57 PM Post #5 |
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King of Nothing
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Well that story seemed a waste of internet space, except it meant you got to do a brilliant first MST Refie. Loved it. Especially the end line.
Lucky him indeed, even though it was impossible and only two lines I think i'm going to have to find some Retcon or Bleeprin. |
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Merlin: Thank you. Arthur: For what? For lying to my father to save your worthless hide? If you ever put me in that situation again, Merlin, I will clap you irons myself. Merlin, Series 2 David: Oh and John. My TARDIS... mine. Say sorry. John: Sorry. Tonight's the Night: Doctor Who Special Team Demyx - 'cause that is how I roll! | |
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Refia and Mia seem to have gotten used to new information pretty quick. Which is understandable, 'cause they're both mages who need to learn spells and use them.Also, I love Sesshoumaru and his "This Sesshoumaru" and Ignika.
Although at times I think you put it too much in there... I mean, Sesshoumaru and Refia and Mia don't speak always, either, but only Ignika gets a '...' and it becomes boring... But yeah, that's me nitpicking 


1:27 AM Jul 11