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|Mudland [G]; An original drabble.|
|Topic Started: Jun 26 2008, 07:49 PM (277 Views)|
|hekate101||Jun 26 2008, 07:49 PM Post #1|
Home again, home again!
It's just a pointless drabble I wrote for a silly English prompt - Write an original piece about a first ride on a ________. Hey, they didn't say it had to be autobiographical!
Anyway, I just want to know what everybody thinks. Should I continue, or just leave it as is? Abandon it, or try to create a plot? It's rather vague, but as I said, it was for a prompt, and was only meant to be 250 words (is actually almost 350).
|Elf_ears13||Jun 26 2008, 08:31 PM Post #2|
That's really cute! I like the voice you developed. :) I'd definitely continue it if I had some sort of plot to work with, since you have an interesting setting and character already - love the part about walking on hands.
Maybe it could be more of an exposition of the character? A short story expanding from this would certainly be worth the read.
|Eyriana||Jun 26 2008, 10:13 PM Post #3|
floo powder power.
|I agree, what if you turned this into an exposition, maybe a prologue to kind of introduce the character? I certainly love it. It's so developed already, even for such a short passage, and you've got an interesting voice, which is great. I'd love to see where you go with this ;)|
|Pippi||Jun 30 2008, 06:00 AM Post #4|
It made me think of space cowboys. :cad:
I love the fact that it's futuristic, but it still says 'mudcake.'
Shows how maybe in the story the technology can change, but the people can't.
*hopes this isn't pointless*
|hekate101||Jun 30 2008, 06:52 PM Post #5|
Home again, home again!
It isn't pointless at all. That was exactly what I was going for, actually. A sort of futuristic hicktown.
As for an exposition, I think it would be terrific as well. Unfortunately, I really don't know any more about the character than you do. I don't even know if the character is male or female! :hitwall:
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