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| Rebirth of the Dark Crusader | |
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| Tweet Topic Started: Jun 27 2007, 10:39 AM (85 Views) | |
| Post #1 Jun 27 2007, 10:39 AM | Dark-Crusader |
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The date is June 26, 1583 AD, the Crusader has been dead for 3 years. He died at the old age of 124. He was hated by the English, loved by the Irish, and well known over Europe. (Setting: Ireland June 26, 1583 AD) News reached Ireland of a massive invasion force led by a grand Persian Empire. The king of Ireland called for a Grand Alliance of the Irish, English, and the Scots. The War Pact was signed three days later. The alliance put their heads together and tried to think of a course of action. They all came to the same conclusion. No matter where or when the battle took place they do not have sufficient force to defeat this vicious horde of blood thirsty Persians. But the Irish king, Lord Mon tar the 1st, thought of one "MAN" that would have the sufficient amount of force to turn the tide in battle, but unfortunately the man was dead. Luckily when he expressed his opinion, the English king, Sir Henry the II, told the council of kings of a man of weird happenings in his country. He said his name is Merdin, commonly known to others as Merlin. The kings went to Merdin and explained the situation and asked what he could do for them. Merdin explained that in order to bring back a soul of that magnitude, they would have to journey to the unholy temple a weeks travel away. As well as the blood of the kings. So they went to find the unholy temple. Merdin began mixing potions and other solutions. Finally it was time, in the temple was a stone coffin of great evil. Merdin fused the potions and solutions with the blood of all the kings and closed the coffin. The ground started shaking, and in one quick motion a bolt of lightning struck the coffin from the sky. The coffin opened from the inside. The Crusader rose and stepped out of the coffin, but something was different. Darkness emitted off of him, his eyes were pure white. He asked why he had been summoned from the afterlife. After explaining there situation the Crusader agreed to help, but still he was different. His armor pure Black. His sword emitting dark energy. He is no longer know as the Crusader, but the.......... DARK CRUSADER (Respond to this, tell me what you think, and if you have any adventures you want to see him in respond) |
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| Post #2 Jun 27 2007, 11:37 AM | DaFranker |
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I can see lots of potential there. I haven't read the entirety of the chronicles -- only bits and pieces that looked the most interesting. The style of writing looks a bit unpolished, but maybe that's because you're still experimenting with different writing styles. In any event, having a good and defined style in such short texts is very difficult. I feel that the "Big hero crusader" genre has been too exploited, thouh. It might be easier for yourself if you wrote something more original -- that way, you wouldn't have to keep up with the standards already established for such kind of story while still adding your own touch. |
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