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| iluvwriting | Mon Aug 1, 2005 8:02 pm Post #1 |
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Ok, this is first attempt at writing a multi-chapter fic, It's about Martha and Jonathan and how they met (I know I know, about a hundred of them have been done before, but mine has a little twist to it, :evil3: ) but I thought I'd try my hand at this and see how it went, hope you enjoy it, here's the first chapter, Love at first sight (yes, I title my chapters, it's kind of an obsession I have) *~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~ Jonathan killed the engine in his truck, got out and attempted to slam the door shut. But instead, he heard the all too familiar clang of it not shutting properly; he whirled around, jaw clenched. He didn’t need this, he’d woken up late and his roommate hadn’t, (like promised the day before), gone to the store to buy something for breakfast. The only thing Jonathan had found remotely close to a breakfast food was an apple, and that he wouldn’t even have time to eat before class. He tossed it in his knapsack and walked into the classroom for his finance course. Once inside he stopped short, he had laid eyes on the most beautiful woman in the world, her hair was the color of a sunset; in contrast, her skin had a supple milky quality to it that made her hair seem so much redder. She had a nice figure with curves in all the right places. She was talking to another student a female Jonathan noted with relief; the other student said something that made the red-head laugh her laugh was so beautiful… “Sir could you please sit down?” a male voice interrupted his thoughts, Jonathan snapped back to reality “Yes?” “Could you please sit down? It’s time for class to start” The male professor said. “Sorry” Jonathan managed to spit out, unfortunately the only empty seat was in the back, on the opposite side of the room as the red head Of all the rotten luck he thought bitterly to himself, thankfully though, he had a pretty good view of her, despite his being on the opposite side of the room. Also, he had mastered the ability to take notes without fully devoting his attention to the teacher, thus his mind was able to wander freely. I wonder if she has a boyfriend, probably, a girl like her is bound to have a guy or two running after her... I wonder what her name is; I have to get it somehow, without my attempt screaming “I’M IN LOVE WITH YOU!”… Maybe I could ask her for directions to my next class, although it isn’t until tomorrow, so she might suspect something’s up... I could “accidentally” bump into her as I’m leaving class, then if she crashes into someone…nah, she could be injured too dangerous; maybe I could ask her if I could borrow her notes, then I’d be able to get her name, and a chance to see her again THAT’S IT! I’ll ask her at the end of class if I can borrow her notes; now let’s just hope I can talk straight while doing so and on and on. Finally the class ended, and Jonathan managed to screw up the courage to talk to her; before he could so however, she began talking to the professor. So Jonathan left the room to let them have a private conversation. Once outside, his mind whirled about in different directions I can’t believe it, I can’t even talk to a girl for heavens sake, I thought I’d left that behind in high school dang it. His thoughts plagued him from every side, but then he had another thought, it was a tiny one, so tiny in fact, that he didn’t fully catch the meaning of the words that came to mind for a moment You can talk to her, just go sit somewhere and wait for her to come out. Jonathan spotted a fountain about 20 feet from the small lecture hall; sprinted to it, put his stuff down on top, got out his apple and took a bite. After all he thought smiling to himself If I can’t make out a single intelligent sound; I might as well have a reason. He sat down, got out his notebook and leafed through it, glancing up every couple of seconds so he didn’t miss the girl’s coming out, and taking a bite out of his apple every now and then. As he was looking through the pages of his notebook he noticed black marker was scribbled all over one page what the heck…? He thought peering at it, then he recognized the writing, it was Nell’s, his ex girlfriend’s signature, Hey Handsome, I hope you have a good date planned for Friday night, see you after the game! Love ya! *Muah!* it read. Jonathan rolled his eyes, he had forgotten that he’d used that notebook in high school he began to rip the page out, but was interrupted by a voice. “Excuse me.” Jonathan looked up and nearly choked on the bite of apple he’d just taken, it was her there she was, just standing in front of him, like it was something she did every day. “Y-Yes?” Jonathan managed to formulate the words and get them out of his mouth without making himself look or sound like a complete idiot. “I was wondering” the girl, no woman, now that Jonathan was seeing her up close he could tell she wasn’t one of the girls fresh out of high school “if you took notes during Professor Underwood’s class, I think I missed a few points in my notes and I wanted to make sure I had everything.” “Um…” Jonathan nearly had to pinch himself to make sure he wasn’t dreaming “Yeah, I did here.” he closed the notebook and held it out to her. She took the notebook, but gave him a quizzical smile “But you don’t even know my name, how can you be so sure I'll bring it back?” Jonathan paused for a moment, possible responses flying about in his mind; finally he simply said “I prefer to believe in people” actually he mentally corrected himself I’d prefer to believe in us, even though there isn’t even an us to speak of at the moment. “Ok” the woman smiled “Thanks…” she opened the notebook and glanced at his name “…Jonathan, I really appreciate it” she turned to leave. “What’s your name?” Jonathan asked then quickly added “That way I know what to call you when you give me my notebook back.” “Martha,” she said, “My name is Martha Clark.” “Jonathan Kent,” Jonathan stood up picking up his knapsack, “When do you think you’ll be done with my notes?” he asked. “Are you free on Friday? I have some free time then, I could make sure I have everything and give it back to you then.” Please let that qualify as a date! Jonathan begged to himself “Yeah-Yes” he quickly corrected himself “I have nothing going on that night, where should we meet?” “Have you ever gone to the coffee shop on the corner of 49th and Broadway?” she asked. “A couple of times,” Jonathan remembered the nights last year when he’d practically spent the night there cramming for a killer test he’d had the next day. “Is 5:00 good for you?” she asked glancing at her watch. “That time is just fine” Jonathan said. “I have to get going Jonathan,” Martha said “But thank you for the notes” she turned around and left. YES!! Jonathan cheered to himself as he walked in the other direction, but then a thought struck him, making him stop stock still in the middle of the walkway, he hadn’t torn out the page with Nell’s note to him. ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ Martha nearly broke the door to her college dorm as she burst in, excitement pulsing off of her in waves as she searched for her roommate, wanting to tell Teri what had happened ½ hour previously. Finally, Martha found Teri in their small kitchen. “Guess what?” she gasped grinning, still trying to catch her breath. “What?” Teri asked looking at Martha over a glass of apple juice. “I just had a conversation with a really…” Martha sat down opposite Teri, propped her elbows up on the table, balanced her chin on her palms “…really cute guy, he has blond hair, blue eyes, a tan and a tight t-shirt” Martha was nearly giggling like a school girl. Teri looked at her; an eyebrow slowly rising “Don’t you think it’s a bit soon to be…” “It’s been three months Teri” Martha interrupted her room-mate to defend herself “I’m completely over Damian.” “Yet you were crying 2 weeks ago because it was supposed to be your one year anniversary” Teri stated, Martha gave a start, she had thought Teri had been asleep when she finally gave in to quiet tears “Oh, so I was right” Teri remarked casually, “I was just guessing that was the reason.” “I am over Damian.” Martha’s tone of voice left no room for an argument. Teri saw she’d angered Martha and decided to back down” I know you are Marty,” she said softly “I just don’t want to see you get hurt again, that’s all.” “I know Teri” Martha smiled at her best friend. “So, what’s Blondie’s name?” Teri asked. Martha grinned as the memory of her encounter with Jonathan came back “His name is Jonathan, he’s really tall” she said leaning forward, ready to girl talk for hours about him. “How tall?” Teri asked. “Well over 6 feet.” Martha said dreamily. “Oh, he’s the perfect man for you” Teri said sarcastically, then at Martha’s scoff she made amends “I’m sorry Martha, but you’re 5’3. The man’s nearly a foot taller than you, makes it kind of hard to kiss him.” “I don’t think a romantic relationship has to be all about whether it’s easy to kiss the other one or not” Martha got up and took a glass from the cupboard “I think a husband and wife should be able to respect each other” she turned the tap water on and stuck the glass underneath the waters flow “You know, be able to tell what the other one is thinking without a word being said.” “You’re dreaming” Teri said in a matter-of-fact voice “It’s impossible for a marriage to be that perfect.” Martha paused as she took a drink from the now brimming glass, “Time will tell.” |
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| grkgrl88 | Tue Aug 2, 2005 8:10 am Post #2 |
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Good chapter! I like your college versions of Jonathan and Martha. :) |
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| Knight/m | Tue Aug 2, 2005 8:53 am Post #3 |
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A great start…just enough first awkwardness on both their parts to make it a fun read…keep going... :coolyo: |
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| Snarky | Tue Aug 2, 2005 9:56 am Post #4 |
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Ooo, I like the title it's perfect!! :biggrin: |
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| iluvwriting | Wed Aug 3, 2005 2:56 pm Post #5 |
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Thanks for the kind words you guys, I appriciate them, I'm done with the second chapter, I'll post it as soon as I can. |
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| iluvwriting | Fri Aug 5, 2005 1:57 pm Post #6 |
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Hi, it's me again (looks at past sentence and wonders what I've been smoking) but hre's the next chapter, hope you guys enjoy it again, I appriciate the review, they help me keep going Chapter 2: At the coffee shop Part one Friday afternoon finally arrived and Martha raced around her room from her bed to the mirror checking to see which outfit looked best. Finally she went out to the kitchen to let Teri have some input “What do you think Teri?” she slowly spun around in a circle to show off the outfit. She was wearing a new pair of navy blue slacks with a beige sweater. She had brushed her hair until it gleamed, and then pulled half up and back out of her face. She had put minimal makeup on, only mascara and a little lipstick, she also had a simple gold chain around her neck. Teri looked at her, eyes wide “Ok girl, I never want to hear you say that you don’t look good, cause girl…” Teri got up and circled Martha “You look good!” she finished as she finished. “You don’t think I’m too dressed up do you?” Martha asked wringing her hands together. “Nope” Teri said shook her head adamantly but then she slowed and looked at Martha’s head, her lips pursed in thought. “I’d let your hair get tossed in the wind a bit, it looks too perfect.” “Suggestion noted.” Martha said as she let her hair down, then she quickly pulled it back up, straining to look at herself in the bathroom mirror through the open door. Teri rolled her eyes, spun Martha around and said, “Here, let me do it” Martha dropped her hair into Teri’s capable hands and waited as Teri straightened, twisted and all around played with her hair, finally she was finished and said “Done” “Thanks Teri” Martha said glancing at her watch 4:00 “I’m scheduled to meet him at the coffee shop of 49th and Broadway at 5:00.” She said, for lack of anything better to say. “And you got dressed this early?” Teri asked, aghast. “I thought it would take longer” Martha sheepishly admitted. Teri lovingly rolled her eyes at Martha as if to say “only you could think that Marty.” 45 minutes and 3 glasses of water later Martha finally left climbed into her car and drove to the coffee shop. She went inside and looked around for Jonathan, at first she couldn’t find him, then he stood up, he was sitting at a booth by a window, it was semi secluded, quiet enough to study but not completely removed from the rest of the shop. “Martha” he said, motioning her over she walked over and sat down then he sat down. “Here’s your notebook” she handed it to him “Could you read my writing? I know, sometimes even I’ve nearly had to hire a translator to turn my chicken scratches into legible writing.” Jonathan laughed. Martha laughed right along with him, “I was a teacher’s aide during my senior year in high school” she said “I had to grade some of the papers, so I learned how to read chicken scratches really quick.” “That’s good” Jonathan indicated the notebook “Did you find anything interesting?” An eyebrow rose slightly “I just read the notes, why?” “Just wondering” Jonathan quickly put the notebook in his knapsack “Were my notes any help?” “Yes” Martha sounded a bit uncertain, but he figured it was still from her wondering if she found something interesting, so he went on. “You said you were a teacher’s aide in high school, is that what you want to be?” He asked “A teacher?” Martha shook her head “No, actually I’m not sure what I want to be, I honestly just want to have a nice family, a few kids and a loving husband, I’m here in college because my dad wanted me to get a degree.” She grinned wickedly “Now, as payback, I’m not trying to decide what I want a degree in.” “I think it’s good that you’re getting a college education. Even if you’re not sure what you want to do, it prepares you for the challenges of life whether you have a career at home or in the workforce.” Jonathan said “I think that too” Martha replied, “I guess I wasn’t clear enough, the thing is, my father is a lawyer, he wants me to be a lawyer also, problem is….” “…You don’t want to be one” Jonathan finished her sentence with her. “Exactly” she said. “Why not?” he asked “I’m 22, and my father has spent a good 17 years of my 22 years in that office of his, I don’t want to be cooped up in some stuffy old office for the rest of my life.” “Completely understandable” Jonathan agreed then he held up a $10 “Want something? I was going to get a cup.” “Black, please, Martha started digging in her purse for money “I have the money to buy it though”. “No need” Jonathan said “I’ll buy” he got up before she could argue and went over to the counter. A few minutes later he finally came back with two full cups “Here you go” he said setting it down in front of her “but be careful, it’s really hot” “I’ll wait for it to cool down” Martha said, then asked “well what are you getting a degree in? Mr. College Education?” she teased. “I haven’t decided yet either. I just need something which will let me get a simple job in about any field.” Jonathan said, hoping she’d be satisfied with his vague answer. She wasn’t. “A simple job” Martha took a careful sip from her cup of coffee “Sounds like you’re not asking for much out of life.” “Actually, I have to take over my family’s…business” Jonathan heisted but then went on, “So, it’s not really important for me to have a degree in a specific field.” “What business is your family in?” she asked. “Uhhh Agriculture development” Jonathan said nervously. “Your family owns a farm?” Martha saw through the disguised job title in an instant. “Yeah” Jonathan said shifting uncomfortably in his seat. “Sounds interesting, I bet you’re really good with animals.” Martha said smiling at him. Jonathan gave a small smile back, “Yeah, I am,” he said. “Do you have any horses?” Martha asked then by way of an explanation she admitted “I ride horses, my father bought me a horse for my 13th birthday I still have her, her name is Delilah.” “We have 2 horses; their names are Joker and Harrison.” Jonathan said. “I’d love to come out and meet them sometime.” Martha said. The words spilled out before she could stop them. Jonathan was a little surprised by her directness but replied, “That could be arranged.” 2 hours and 4 conversation topic changes later Jonathan checked his watch “I have to go Martha, I need to be at my job here on campus early tomorrow morning” he said getting up. “Well, my roommate is probably starting wondering if I’m still alive or not, so I’d better be going too” Martha also got up. “I’ll see you in class on Monday.” Jonathan left the coffee shop. “Bye” Martha said, and also left. The instant she got back to her dorm room; she went searching for Teri, and finally found her, in the bathroom, putting make-up on. “What’s the occasion?” Martha asked as she watched Teri put blush on. “I have a date” Teri stated the obvious. “Well Duh!” Martha laughed. “Who’s it with?” “His name is Gabe; he’s in my Creative Writing 109 class.” Teri put earrings on. “Ooooo” Martha admired the earrings, paying more attention to them for a moment then she was to her blond roommate. “Can I borrow those sometime? I love them!” “Sure” Teri pulled her hair up out of her face and tied it with a ribbon “Just make sure I know about it before you run off with these things dangling from your ear lobes” “Ok thanks” Martha said. “How was your date with Blondie?” Teri asked Martha blushed as she thought back over the past 2 hours “It was great!” she gushed “We talked about so much, our degrees, I told him about Delilah, and we talked about our favorite books and….” Suddenly, the door bell rang, cutting Martha off mid-sentence. “That’s probably Gabe” Teri said “Could you please get it?” She started to put some lipstick on. “Sure” Martha said, went to the door and opened it; sure enough there he was, with light brown hair and warm blue eyes. “Does Teri Jameson live here?” he asked. “Yeah, she does” Martha held the door open for him “Come on in” she said “You must be Gabe.” “Yes, I’m Gabe, and you are?” he asked. “Teri’s roommate Martha” Martha stuck out her hand. Gabe took it “Nice to meet you Martha” he said politely. “It’s nice to meet you too Gabe” Martha replied. Teri came out of the bathroom in a breeze “Hi Gabe” she said smiling from ear to ear “I’m ready” Gabe looked at her “Wow” he said taking in Teri, from her outfit, to her make-upped face “You look really pretty” he told her. Teri’s cheeks were pink, but it wasn’t just because she was wearing blush, “Thank you Gabe” she said “You look really nice too.” “We should get going” Gabe said “We don’t want to be late.” Teri left calling behind her “Bye Martha, we can talk after I get back.” |
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| rianne1974 | Fri Aug 5, 2005 4:55 pm Post #7 |
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:clap: Well done!!!ILW, I think you have a very imaginative mind. I like the way you have laid out the story too. keep going.. I really enjoyed it... :D |
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| Carrie01 | Fri Aug 5, 2005 6:54 pm Post #8 |
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This is really good ILW. I can't wait for the next installment. I just love the way you are developing the story line. :clap: :clap: :clap: |
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| Knight/m | Fri Aug 5, 2005 7:49 pm Post #9 |
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Martha and I would get along great cuz we both take our coffee black...:coffee: :coolyo: I love this line “Uhhh agriculture development” that is great :LOL: … I saw a resume once that stated “I’m the CEO of my company”…under further inquiry she was a housewife…you got love ingenuity… :LOL: Are you going to go into any deep conversations between Martha & Jonathan about there hope & dreams for there future etc…???? A good update :coolyo: ...keep it going… :P: |
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| grkgrl88 | Sat Aug 6, 2005 1:40 pm Post #10 |
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Good chapter. I liked "agriculture development" too. :) And Teri's date, Gabe....does he have a familar last name, or is it just a coincidence? :p |
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| iluvwriting | Sun Aug 7, 2005 6:17 pm Post #11 |
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I edited the 2nd chapter a little, I changed the title from At the coffee shop to At the coffee shop part one. |
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| iluvwriting | Mon Aug 8, 2005 12:25 pm Post #12 |
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Ok here's the next chapter hope you guys enjoy it! grkgrl88: I wish I could tell you the answer to that! I really do, but if I say anything I'll be giving my twist away! Chapter three: Another Date. The next chance Teri and Martha got to talk was on Sunday “Hey Martha, do you still want to talk about your date with Blondie?” Teri asked as Martha grabbed her favorite cereal and poured a bowl. Martha nodded enthusiastically “Yeah” she grinned “But you have to tell me about your date with Gabe.” Teri nodded a bit hesitantly “O-ok” she said. “What’s wrong?” she asked, noticing the hesitancy in Teri’s voice. “Nothing” Teri was quick to answer, too quick. “Something’s wrong” Martha said. “I know there is, what is it?” “It’s nothing you’d understand” Teri said “I’m not trying to be rude Martha, really I’m not it’s just something I need to sort out myself.” “Did something happen between you and Gabe?” Martha asked. “I don’t want to talk about it.” Teri snapped. “Okay, okay” Martha backed off and ate her cereal; she finished and put the bowl in the sink “Teri” she began quietly “If you ever want…” “I know.” Teri snapped, then she sighed, “I’m sorry Martha; I’m just not in a very good mood right now.” “I understand.” Martha said, then left the kitchen, leaving Teri alone with her troubled thoughts. The next day, Teri was nearly back to her exuberant self again. Martha was glad; she had been worried about her friend. “Teri, I’ve got to go to my finance class ok?” Martha poked her head into her friend’s room. “Ok Martha, I’ll see you later tonight at dinner, I have a class at 4:00” Teri looked up from her book “Whoa, a bit dressed up to be going to class aren’t you?” she said. Martha looked down at the green business suit she was wearing “It’s not that dressy” she said. Teri shrugged “Ok, suit yourself, no pun intended” she chuckled at her own joke. “Har har har” Martha laughed sarcastically at Teri’s joke and left. Martha got to the small lecture hall early, she liked it that way, she prepared better if there were less people to distract her. She had just finished the heading for her notes, when she felt someone tap her shoulder; she looked behind her to come face to face with whom Teri affectionately called “Blondie”. “Hello Jonathan.” Martha smiled at him and glanced around as if trying to escape, in reality she was checking to see if anyone else was in the classroom. Nope, they were alone, well except for the professor, but he didn’t really count. “Hi Martha,” he smiled back, making her insides turn to butter. “I enjoyed our conversation last Friday.” “So did I.” Martha put her pen down turned to face him. Then Jonathan got nervous, he shuffled his feet and kept clearing his throat as he spoke, “I umm was uhhh wondering if you’d like to have another conversation this Friday night.” Martha blushed an even deeper shade of pink as she realized Jonathan was asking her out. “I’d love to Jonathan,” she said. Jonathan opened his mouth to say something, looking disappointed, as if she’d said no. Then he realized that she’d accepted. “Y-you would?” he stammered, surprised she’d accepted so quickly, heck he was surprised she’d accepted at all. “I’d love to go.” she repeated. “I thought we could go to dinner and then for a walk in the park” He looked at her through lowered eyelashes; it was all Martha could do not to melt into a puddle of goo. “That sounds really nice Jonathan,” she said “What time should I meet you where?” “5:30 at your at your dorm.” Jonathan said. “Oh, Jonathan, I don’t mind meeting you at the restaurant.” She politely refused. “I want to pick you up” Jonathan said, then flushed a bit at his forwardness. “Ok, my dorm is all the way on the east side of campus.” Martha turned to an empty page in her notebook, ripped it out and scribbled her address on it “Here” she said, then wrote the phone number down also “If you need directions call this number.” “Okay.” Jonathan said taking the sheet from her. “Thanks” “I’ll see you Friday.” Jonathan said folding it up and putting it in his back pocket. “Yeah, I’ll see you then.” Martha smiled at him; he smiled back and then breathlessly made his way to the other side of the classroom. A few minutes later, the class was half filled, Martha was talking to the professor and Jonathan was talking to the guy who sat next to him, Jonathan however, couldn’t keep his eyes off of Martha, finally Paul asked him what was going on. “Well,” Jonathan lowered his voice “I have a date with her Friday night.” “What are you, some kind of suck up?” Paul asked. “No.” Jonathan was confused, “Why?” I’m so screwed if Professor Underwood is her Uncle or something, no make that her grandfather. He thought. “She’s the class note taker; she could put in a few good words for you if you’re dating her,” Paul said. Jonathan’s eyes widened as he heard Paul speak. “She’s the note taker?” he asked, surprised. “Yeah.” Paul said then he realized that this was news to Jonathan “You didn’t know that?” Jonathan shook his head. “No.” “Well, she’s the note taker.” Paul shrugged. “oh and about your date on Friday, good luck; I heard she broke up with her old boyfriend a few months ago, I’m actually surprised she hadn’t been dating anyone before now, your lucky, she’s a real looker.” Jonathan felt a twinge of jealousy, as Paul mentioned how pretty Martha was what am I thinking? He questioned himself as the professor got up and Martha hurried back to her seat after flashing him a beautiful smile. I’m not her boyfriend; wish I was though. The internal struggle continued all during class as he took brief notes. “Martha,” Jonathan walked up to her after class, “I actually need to borrow your notes now.” She laughed gently “Now isn’t that ironic?” then handed the notebook to him, “just give it back to me when you pick me up on Friday” “Ok.” Jonathan grinned at her then turned away. “Jonathan,” she called to him, he turned. “Yeah?” he said as she smiled at him. “I’m really looking forward to our conversation Friday.” She said then flashed him another smile. “See you then, I’ve got to go.” “Bye.” Jonathan said then turned and left. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ “Teri!” Martha called once inside her dorm “Teri?” Oh yeah, she has class Martha remembered when she didn’t find her room-mate. Then Martha found a note in the kitchen “Martha” she read it out loud “I’ll bring Pizza back for dinner, don’t cook anything, Gabe’s buying so you don’t need to pay me back-Teri.” An hour later, Teri came in with 2 steaming boxes of pizza. “Teri, guess what?” Martha nearly bowled Teri over in her rush to tell her the news. “Abraham Lincoln was in your class today?” Teri asked. Martha raised an eyebrow “what the…?” she said. Teri shrugged, “You said guess.” She said. Martha rolled her eyes then grinned as she said, “Jonathan asked me out.” “And you said…” Teri let her sentence hang as she put the pizza’s down on the counter and opened one. “Ahhhhhh,” Teri breathed in the pizza’s rising steam. “Are you nuts?” Martha asked, “of course I said yes.” “I’m not surprised.” Teri said as she got a pizza cutter out and started cutting the pizza. “But-you-” Martha stammered, confused. “Martha” Teri’s tone was patient, as if Martha were a child who couldn’t learn that two plus two does equal four “My attention span is that of a 3-year-old…” “It’s practically non-existent” Martha finished the sentence with Teri as Teri lifted a piece up and started to eat. “Whatever happened to plates?” Martha asked as she opened the cupboard and took two plates out. “They weren’t out, so I didn’t use them.” Teri’s logic seemed to make perfect sense to her. Martha rolled her eyes and placed a plate on the counter and grabbed a few pieces of pizza. “So why did Gabe buy the pizza?” she asked as she took a bite out of one. “He just offered too, I’m not sure why, but Gabe is really sweet, I really like him.” Teri’s eyes grew soft as she thought about him. Martha smiled to herself as she thought and she says I think about Jonathan too much. |
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| Carrie01 | Mon Aug 8, 2005 2:49 pm Post #13 |
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Oh, you are doing this sooooo well!! I like the part when Jonathan is so nervous asking her out and the puddle of goo line is wonderful. I get the feeling that Gabe is going to be trouble!! You have got to write the next chapter because, even though I know how their romance ends ( :lovers: ), you are writing the back story so well I just want to know what happens next!! :clap: :clap: :clap: |
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| Carrie01 | Mon Aug 8, 2005 2:50 pm Post #14 |
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Oh, you are doing this sooooo well!! I like the part when Jonathan is so nervous asking her out and the puddle of goo line is wonderful. I get the feeling that Gabe is going to be trouble!! You have got to write the next chapter because, even though I know how their romance ends ( :lovers: ), you are writing the back story so well I just want to know what happens next!! :clap: :clap: :clap: |
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| Knight/m | Mon Aug 8, 2005 3:31 pm Post #15 |
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Good update :coolyo: …but now I’m intrigue with Terri & Gabe *he couldn’t be :scratchhead: could it… wonders and then that would mean… :o oh my is it…* |
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| iluvwriting | Tue Aug 9, 2005 11:26 am Post #16 |
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ok, it'll be a while until the next chapter because I may have lost the story, the disk may have gone bad or something, I'm trying to get onto it right now, but it may be a while until the next chapter. |
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| grkgrl88 | Tue Aug 9, 2005 1:02 pm Post #17 |
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Another good chapter! I like that Jonathan was nervous talking to Martha, too.
Then I'll just have to wait. :) I hope nothing too bad happened with the disk. |
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| iluvwriting | Tue Aug 9, 2005 2:29 pm Post #18 |
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it's official,. I have to type the 4th chapter over again, I can't get onto the story and I've tried a million times, the only bad part is I had all the chapter titles, credits and and the very last chapter on it, so I'll have to re-write a lot of stuff, I'll have the 4th chapter up as soon as I can. |
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| Carrie01 | Tue Aug 9, 2005 2:33 pm Post #19 |
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Protector of Jonathan's Legacy
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Oh, that is terrible. Something similar has happened to me and it was so frustrating losing all your good ideas and thoughts and worrying that you might not be able to remember them. I am so sorry. Although I am eager to read the next chapter I will try and be patient. I hope that it isn't as bad a situation as you think and that you will be able to retrieve something. Good luck. |
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| Renee | Tue Aug 9, 2005 2:34 pm Post #20 |
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Don't mess with JS
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Aw, poor Jessie. What a pain in the neck. :grouphug: I hope the rewrites go smoothly. I haven't had much time just to read fanfiction lately, but from what I can tell just by skimming, you're doing a nice job with this. The twists so far are good, and I like the part where Jonathan tries to think how he can get her name without yelling, "I'M IN LOVE WITH YOU!" :D |
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