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CYOA: A Series of Scientific Events; Because I felt like doing one
Topic Started: Mar 12 2012, 09:18 AM (12,915 Views)
spiritomb108
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A, NEW RECORD!!
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Cedi Fonei
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>_> Seriously Naku, whining that you aren't getting much attention will only make people WANT to avoid you. That or give you constructive critisism so that you may learn HOW to make people more interested in your topics. I'd like to try the later.

To be honest, your CYOA seems... uninteresting to me. It seems as if you put very little effort into it, whereas other CYOAs have more detail put into their descriptions of what's going on. For instance, the FIRST post of your CYOA is literally nothing more than "I was on a plane and it crashed, now I'm in a jungle and what looks like there's a ship in the ocean". WHAT does the jungle look like? WHAT plane were you on? WHY were you even on a plane in the first place, WHY did your it crash? It's little details like those that engage a reader.

By the way, B. I'd rather take my time and not die than possibly injure myself heavily. >_>
Edited by Cedi Fonei, Mar 12 2012, 05:48 PM.
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Retro
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I'm pretty sure A has won, so let get going! Also, Naku, do not into my CYOA and complain about people not being in yours. I mean it. They are COMPLETELY unrelated...




A. Flying leap from the slide.

As you stand and think about how to clear the fence, you hear something approaching. Looking round, you see the truck setting off. Realising that they will soon be ahead again, you run towards the fence.

As you approach it, you see the now empty slide, and take your chances. Turning slightly, you push yourself into a sprint. You slid slightly as you step on, but manage to keep your balance. As you reach the top, you hold your breath and pray that you will make it, as you throw yourself off the top, and fly towards the fence.

You manage to clear the fence, but instantly fill with regret and fear as you see a familiar person stand in your "Landing zone". You land on top of him with a loud thud, and both roll into the road. You swear under you're breath as you push yourself up onto your knees. Looking round, you see the man is on his feet already. You begin to wonder if he even flinched, but your thoughts are cut short as the truck sounds it's horn. You look round, and realise that you are kneeling in the road, and the truck is still going...

A. Sit there and hope it stops
B. Try and run out the way
C. Flatten to the ground and hope it goes over you.
D. Admit it's "Brown Trousers Time"
Edited by Retro, Mar 12 2012, 05:49 PM.
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Rising Amaterasu
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B. Make a mad dash for it!
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Cedi Fonei
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Gee, what option is LEAST likely to include death? How about B, "GET THE CRAP OUTTA THERE"?
Edited by Cedi Fonei, Mar 12 2012, 05:52 PM.
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abadlex
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B. C is a long shot and A is asking for death. D is for amusement only...
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Hatsune Candy
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Anyone with common sense would do B.
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Kumakaori
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Mar 12 2012, 05:48 PM
I'm pretty sure A has won, so let get going! Also, Naku, do not into my CYOA and complain about people not being in yours. I mean it. They are COMPLETELY unrelated...
=o= for srs. z^z...

Also. C. HIT THE DECK!. (oh wait, this is a truck I thought it was an airplane... somehow >>;. This can't end well....)
Edited by Kumakaori, Mar 12 2012, 07:10 PM.
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Don Jentleman
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D would make a fine joke in more ways than one, but it's time to Bust a move!
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Retro
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I'll not as to where you got an airplane from Kuma XD




B. Bust-A-Move Try and run out the way.

You don't even need to think twice about this one. You jump up to your feet, and start running out the way. But as you start running, you feel a sharp pain in your ankle, and you fall to your knees. As you push yourself back to your feet, you look up helplessly to see the truck slam on the brakes, and spin to the side. You shut your eyes as it closes in.......




"LOOK OUT!!!"

You feel something impact into the side of you, as you are thrown to the side. You open your eyes to see the truck fly past, screeching to a halt, throwing most of the chairs off the side, as well as Mark, who gave out a comical scream as he flew through the air. Looking to the side, you see the man from before straightening up, and cracking his back. You try to make out who it is, but the sun is making it hard to see their face.

"Ah come on Mark, you're supposed to keep them ON the truck!" They call over, with a laugh. "And bring one over here, your friends got a sprained ankle"

You watch as they turn and head into the park. You sit and watch for a second, before an oh so familiar kick grabs your attention. Turning round, you can't help but laugh at Marks knees, which are now grass and blood stained.

"Oh shut up you! At least I didn't take a flying leap onto the events host!" he jokes, as he sits next to you on the path. "At least all the chairs are unpacked" he said, as he gestured to the pile of chairs in the road. "Where shall we go now?"


A. To the lab!
B. Find the mystery man
Edited by Retro, Mar 12 2012, 08:28 PM.
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