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| Topic Started: Feb 5 2013, 02:49 AM (717 Views) | |
| Croc | Feb 5 2013, 02:49 AM Post #1 |
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CODE [align=center]PLAYER INFORMATION[/align] NAME:Shane CONTACT: shaneptd@mail.com HOW YOU FOUND US: Websearched OTHER CHARACTERS ON THE SITENone RULES CODE: Blackbird CREDIT WHERE IT'S DUE: All original though character art by the tv show Grimm. [align=center]CHARACTER INFORMATION[/align] [align=center] [/align]BASIC INFORMATION CANON OR ORIGINAL: Original AFFILIATION: Brotherhood FULL NAME: Bart Mathes CODENAME: Croc NICKNAMES: Gator, Crocidile boy, Scales. CURRENT AGE: 23 DATE OF BIRTH: MARITAL STATUS:None SEXUAL ORIENTATION: Assumed man, His genitals like a lizard reside inside his body. BASE OF OPERATIONS: TIME AT INSTITUTE: None REGISTERED WITH SHIELD? Forced Registration HOMETOWN: New Orleans KNOWN RELATIVES: He ate them. PHYSICAL APPEARANCE HEIGHT:6'3 BUILD: In good physical condition.His weight changes depending on how much or how long ago he has fed. EYES:Reptilian green. HAIR:None. DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Hes a humanoid lizard. CLOTHING STYLE: He prefers overall and wife beaters uncaring for personal hygiene he cant stand shoes or clothing that inhibits him in the water. UNIFORM: A black speed o with a silver brotherhood emblem buckle on his chest. POWERS GENERAL DESCRIPTION: Gator has the relative strength speed and agility of an average man in peak physical condition. Gator's stomach and cells are capable of processing nearly any organic or inorganic material through a series of stomach chambers. These chambers then chemically break down and alter the material and allow him to either digest the material or regurgitate it as a combustible acidic nutrient that can melt most common matter. The muscles in his mouth have the strength to bite down on things with super human amounts of pressure. His cells allow him to shed limbs or regenerate from damage like a lizard as well as his unique mutant ability gives him a nearly unbeatable immune system to disease,bacteria and toxins. He is a living eating machine. Showing an affinity and need for water he can hold his breathe for up to an hour without needing to come up for air. The scales that cover his body are thick and capable of handling most common damage. WEAKNESS: He is susceptible to extreme cold and heat and must be emerged in water to soak his flesh in water at least once a day or he begins to dry out and go in to a comatose like state. He can only regurgitate as much as he has recently eaten in the last hour. After that the digestive process has taken over the material. Though capable of eating nearly anything he can only eat 160 pounds of material every 3 hours or his stomachs will burst being to full. He is also relatively slow when he has recently eaten. His scales are thick and capable of handling a common punch or kick but a good baseball bat hit or gun shot will tear through them. PERSONALITY Croc appears to be a lizard monster, A stereotype he uses as a weapon to keep from getting close to people. He has spent most his life alone or tortured by those that catch him that hes defensive and sarcastic of those he doesn't know. Those that gain his trust and the rare few that can convince him there his friends realize he is quite funny and capable of being gentle. Psychologically though he has eaten people and enemies are quickly counted as food. He is not shy of eating anything that gets in the way of his desire or the Brotherhood having grown up with there stories as his only comfort. He worships Magneto's vision of mutant supremacy and a world where nobody gets treated as he was as a child. HISTORY: PRE-APOCALYPSE Croc grew up deep in the swamps of Louisiana. His father was a cruel hillbilly man by the name of Jub Michals and his mother a christian fanatic. He lived an abusive childhood until puberty when his mutation began. His father began forcing him to fight alligators for the local trash to bet on and locked him in the shed at night while his alcoholic mother drank screaming of demons inside of him. At the age of 15 Gator snapped and all the neighbors found were parts of his parents in an empty log cabin. His legend began then. It is important to note his only comfort during these early years were stories of the Brotherhood and there triumphs against the cruelty of humans. They were his heroes and though they never rescued him men like Magneto kept him going. Croc spent the next 5 years as a local legend terrorizing the swamps of Louisiana only surfacing from the waters to feed on those people who dared to go to far in the swamps. Stories of cannibalistic gator men brought tourists to the swamps in groups though and he was forced in to the sewers of New Orleans. DURING APOCALYPSE He lived through the Apocalypse almost unaware of the upper world in the sewers of New Orleans. His only source of news being what papers survived the trip down in to the tunnels. His sources of food were those workers unfortunate to cross his path and whatever he salvaged from the upper world. His passing did not go unnoticed though as stories continued of missing workers and sewer monsters grew. The evidence he left behind was slim but enough to catch the attention of Shield agents investigating the events. He was captured and brought to a special detention center. POST-APOCALYPSE During his incarceration he took advantage of the rehabilitation earning a high school equivalent education and a better understanding of the world outside the swamps and sewers. He listened to tales of his childhood heroes from other inmates and mutants. He once glimpsed his childhood hero Toad though he did not have the courage to speak with the man. His reclusive and docile nature led to his release to a high security mental facility where it was believed he could be able to live a life of dignity. Little did they realize he was never content to live in human prisons and despised them for the cruelties of his youth. He spent 3 days in captivity before he devoured his doctor, a nurse and two security guards and ate his way to the sewers and escape. Stories of Magneto and the Brotherhood brought him to Sanctuary where he worked in its waste management for awhile before growing comfortable enough to join at a recruitment center for the Brotherhood. He has since become a devoted member and though relatively unknown in its ranks he is becoming bolder and working to be recognized. Dreaming of the day he will meet Magneto himself and have the courage to speak to one of his heroes properly. SAMPLE RP POST: Croc sat at the edge of the water. His feet dipped in the sewage of New Orleans. He was relaxed as if he were on vacation aboard a cruise ship. The light from the drainage hole was little but there was a smile or a snarl across his lips as his eyes stared out of that and in to the world of humans. They despised them all so and up there in that bright world he was a freak. They rightfully feared him and the clippings he had gathered of his stories proved it. His glory was not that of the Lord Magneto but they were his triumphs and he held pride. He wiped a scaly hand across his jagged teeth and hissed lightly as his reptillian eyes blinked. He had longed to bathe in the song like he had in his childhood. He should have been allowed to. He sang low as his toes and feet rejoiced at the filthy waters current. " Well Momma got them chickens in the coop hut, Yea Momma got them all good and fluffed. She gonna cook them chickens right up. Right on in the pot for me." It was an old song but one of the few he knew helped pass the time before the humans had there parade above. |
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| Alix | Feb 5 2013, 03:11 AM Post #2 |
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Hey Shane, thanks so much for applying! I'm just glancing through things right now, but right off the bat I notice that your sample post is shorter than 200 words-- which is our bare minimum on posts. Even still, for samples we generally like to see a bit more so we can really get a look at your character. Furthermore, I'd like to see more of his personality. Fix those two things and then let me know, and I'll continue reading over everything. Thanks! |
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| Croc | Feb 5 2013, 03:49 AM Post #3 |
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| Toad | Feb 6 2013, 09:55 AM Post #4 |
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Hi, Shane. I just thought I'd point out that the Toad I made here is different than the Toad you might be familiar with from the comics. I think it's a great idea to link them together, since they have a lot in common in terms of their mutations and miserable childhoods, but the timing doesn't match up for Toad to have been Croc's childhood hero. In our continuity, Toad is a little younger than Croc and joined the Brotherhood sometime in the late spring or early summer of 2009. You can read the application here, and feel free to PM me if you have any questions. |
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| Exodus | Feb 6 2013, 04:39 PM Post #5 |
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Hey Shane. I see that you say that you edited it after Alix told you to, but I am going to ask you to do it again. Pretty much all sections need to be fleshed out more. You have a good starting point and I like the character so far, but I'd like to see more detail. For instance, New Orleans was, in the least, hit with a Katrina-like disaster during Apocalypse. He could have survived down in the sewers maybe, but they would have been flooded and/or destroyed by the storms. Also when you are editing, keep in mind what Toad has said. That said, I think you need to reread some of the basic things and edit them. Sexual orientation isn't asking for male or female. It is asking whether he is gay or straight, etc. "He ate them" is not an acceptable answer to known relatives. Base of operations, if he is Brotherhood, should be ________ (you fill in the blank). A black speedo might pass in the comics, but this is XMR, where things are a bit more "live action," so he should probably wear some pants or something. Also, I would like to see a better sample post. That sample does little to show me the character you want to play, except that he likes to chill out and sing occasionally. The sample post is the time that you take to really show off your character. How cool he can be, what he is like, etc. You might write a 1000 words for your sample post, and I wouldn't expect you to do that in every day posting situations, but like I said... I'd expect it out of a sample post where you want to impress us with your character. Flesh your character out a little more. Try to form it up into paragraphs. Say, "Croc can do this and this," and then go on in that same paragraph to tell me the details of that ability, just as an example. The same with his personality and his history, I'd like to see a bit more. This should be fun, so be creative and make me like your character. I'm sorry if I'm asking for a lot to edit, I'm not trying to be an ass. But we like our details here on XMR. I recommend looking at some of the other applications if you need an idea of how you can add in more to yours. Or if you need help, contact me or another staff member and we can help you out. Thanks Shane. :) |
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| Songbird | Feb 11 2013, 01:27 PM Post #6 |
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Moving this app per player request. |
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