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| Tom Foster | Feb 11 2013, 04:37 AM Post #1 |
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CODE [align=center]PLAYER INFORMATION[/align] NAME: Thomas Foster CONTACT: gmergual@yahoo.com HOW YOU FOUND US: google OTHER CHARACTERS ON THE SITE none RULES CODE: (by putting the code into this bio, you agree to follow and obey the rules of the site. You also agree to address any concerns the admins PM to you, should they request you fix something to follow the rules) Blackbird CREDIT WHERE IT'S DUE:various random websites on the internet thank you for the power ideas (Links to sites you may have used to compose this bio) [align=center]CHARACTER INFORMATION[/align] ![]() Penn Adgley as Thomas Foster BASIC INFORMATION CANON OR ORIGINAL: Original AFFILIATION: X- Investigations if there accepting new members FULL NAME: Thomas Gabriel Foster CODENAME: Grimms NICKNAMES: Tom, Tommy CURRENT AGE: 20 DATE OF BIRTH: 5th of may MARITAL STATUS: Single SEXUAL ORIENTATION: Heterosexual BASE OF OPERATIONS: Mutant town TIME AT INSTITUTE: none REGISTERED WITH SHIELD? No HOMETOWN: Lower East side, Manhattan KNOWN RELATIVES: Father Kristof Foster(deceased) Mother Anja Foster(deceased) PHYSICAL APPEARANCE Tom is a lean young man weighing at about 130 pounds. His arms and legs are defined with muscle but not enough to be bulky. His hair is black and wavey but kept in a buzz cut at all times, he also has light skin. His eyes are light brown and almost cold looking thought to be caused by his past pains in conflicts involving mutant kind. He walks with his back straight and in a general manner his arms moving opposite the foot he uses. He is not the tallest or the strongest but tom can get out of a sticky situation, taught through his earlier years in school and living in a not so good neighborhood. His basic hand to hand combat as well as parkour like acrobatics help effectively get him from place to place. He is not as nimble and quick as Spiderman but tries to be as agile as possible. Tom’s voice is somewhere in the middle between masculinity and feminine sounding more masculine. When he loses his temper or focuses on a task he tends to withdraw from speaking and focuses on his surroundings deciding on his next option. He wears a silver generic watch at all times so he knows the time and what he has to do, he tries to keep to his scheduled work as best he can. HEIGHT: 5’4 BUILD: Slim EYES: light brown HAIR: black DISTINGUISHING MARKS: none CLOTHING STYLE: Rocker shirts are something he has in abundance . Skulls and black is something Tom favors over other things, he also likes political shirts like communist idealist che guevara and vampire uncle tom. His clothing is usually dark schemes which he likes. He sees his clothes as an extension of his personality and because of that it is usually unique and quirky. UNIFORM: POWERS Sense Absorption Thomas has the power to take one of the 5 senses away with physical touch. This effect doesn’t last forever and wears off after a hour or unless he voluntarily gives the sense back by touching the person and focusing on the word release. He is also limited in only taking one sense at a time and shuffle once. He can take 3 senses and can perform 2 shuffles per hour . Sight absorption With physical contact and words associated with the sense tom is able to take his opponents sense of sight. Tom’s opponent becomes blind temporarily This effect lasts for an hour or if tom decides to give it back even sooner. Hearing absorption With physical contact and words associated with the sense being taken tom is able to take his opponents hearing away. This effect lasts for an hour or if tom decides to give it back sooner. Touch absorption With physical contact and words associated with the sense tom is able to take his opponents sense of feeling. His opponents sense of physical sensation such as touching and pain is taken away. This effect lasts for an hour or if tom decides even sooner. Taste absorption With physical contact and words associated with the sense tom is able to take his opponents sense of taste away. All that his opponent saw sensations in his tongue are now gone. This effect lasts for an hour or if tom decides even sooner. Smell absorption With physical contact and words associated with the sense tom is able to take his opponents sense of smell away. All the wonderful smells his opponents loved are now gone. This effects lasts for an hour or sooner if tom decides. Sense shuffle With physical contact and words associated with the senses tom is able to swap one sense with another. Such as tasting with your body, smelling with your eyes, and seeing with your body. This effect lasts for an hour or sooner if tom decides. GENERAL DESCRIPTION: [2 paragraph minimum. Some powers will be requested for more.] WEAKNESS: In order to steal the sense he must touch the person if he’s kept at a far distance he’s harmless. He has no strength or agility powers so if he is against one of these opponents he has to be crafty or play dead. He’s power are useful but he has no real defense if attacked head on or ambushed he’s a little better than that of a normal human’s being. The person he touches has to be a living organism (not a robot or artificial life). In other words if he comes in conflict with a robot he is useless. He can only steal one sense at a time, meaning he has to touch the person a second time to perform sense shuffle. PERSONALITY Tom is a person that says what’s on his mind in a life or death situation, where he deems it necessary to say something. If it is something else tom will usually keep it to himself valuing other’s people’s decision and actions. Tom is a do gooder and may jump into a fight for a person he sees as being taken advantage of, this may prove to be a problem because not all things are what it seems. When not working or on errands tom is laying back relaxing in his apartment, reading a book or on his fire escape watching the people below him walking from place to place. Sometimes he would do this for hours making up stories as they go, Ms. Lisa walking to see her boyfriend or Abby buying her kids some milk for breakfast in the morning. When he works he is a totally different person a man isolated, nothing exists but his work. He works tirelessly for hours to get documents up to date or to find some information on a recent case the detective he work for needs. When on the job tom is informal and silent speaking only when he has to. In times of great tension Tom counts down from 5 to calm himself and calculate the task at hand. He may take a few minutes to formulate a plan but usually within a few minutes he find an option where he sees fit. Sometimes he would repeat in his head “I got this” over and over again giving himself empowerment to move forward. HISTORY: PRE-APOCALYPSE [3 paragraph min. (5 full length sentences at least per paragraph) Cut and Paste Histories will NOT be accepted. Read all Game History threads and important notices before adapting history accordingly] Tom was a “good” boy as a child. He did well in school and helped his mom around the house, he would even go to the store for her when she needed something. His parents were German immigrants and were firm believers in independence and tom was the ideal son when it came to this. Growing up in the lower east side wasn’t easier especially for a boy with a German accent. He was taught by his parents about his homeland and to always be proud of his German heritage, being taught German first then English. This didn’t sit well with the “Americans” the other children, they would poke fun of the way he pronounced English words like what ( in German w is v ) , he would always find himself as the odd man out learning to be anti-social and on guard. eventually because of his surrounding his accent diminished. Tom’s father was a quiet man he only spoke to his son when he needed to , he never hugged or told his son he loved him and this made tom awkward when it came to things of showing affection even resentful toward his father. He didn’t know how to show this and acted out because of it. This would often get his parents into arguments his mom screaming at her husband to be a little more “compassionate” His mother was always the compassionate one and would try to talk to tom, get him to express himself, this helped him somewhat when it came to meeting and communicating with other people but it put a strain in his father’s relationship with him. He eventually came to know he was different than the others even more so than he thought previously. His powers manifested when he was jumped going down the wrong neighborhood. He looked at one of the would be beaters and focused on his eyes. The next thing he knew tom was standing up watching the man he focused on reaching out in panic as if he was blind, this made his group run in fear. The boy returned home with minor wounds saying nothing to his parents not knowing what to make of the ordeal. DURING APOCALYPSE (April 7th through April 12th, 2009) [You need to cover what your character was doing during Apocalypse in this section of the application. The summary can be found here: http://z4.invisionfree.com/Xrevolution/ind...?showtopic=4495] Everything that he knew and loved was taken from him when Apocalypse appeared. New York was war torn and a shell of its former self as battles were fought for survival throughout the city. He hid in an abandoned school with several refugees. Something was happening something he did not yet understand but he knew of the pain that came with it. The pain of the lost , the tormented , he had no choice but to wait for the battles to be over so that he could go home but to what? A servant of an unknown deity had appeared and began his rain of terror on new York. His yells spoke of a all knowing god named apocalypse and the purge that was coming to leave only his people behind. War had come to destroy all non believers and spread the wisdom of his lord. New York was ravaged as a band of mutants fought this servant , the lower east side was hit the worst. The stores were burning and building falling to pieces as people hid from the destruction that was unleashed. POST-APOCALYPSE [The board runs on current time. Please see Here for board history. Apocalypse lasted for 1 week, two years ago. What have you been doing since then?] As the world returned to normal tom tried to do the same. People began to care less as mutant town became a haven for gangs and hookers. There was a rise in crime and tom being the do gooder that he is saw this as an opportunity to become a private investigator it suited him fine because he was helping in his own way and he liked it this way. He is currently interning as an assistant for a private detective. He hopes with his hard work and determination he can someday become like the man he works for. Tom through his past pains has grown to be a stronger person. He has a strong sense of justice and helps people in need when he can. He has even learned to control his powers better . He longs for his parents at times him feeling he never got to say goodbye or really connect with his father. When in this mood he withdraws from people and dwells in his sadness. Tom through by himself has grown up to be independent having his own apartment in what people like to call mutant town. It not a mansion but tom is happy with himself having a fire escape and a small tv to call his own. This reminds him of his mom and her boasting of him, making him feel a moment of joy. The Purifiers Mutant town was attacked by a group of extremist preaching something about the lord and killing or maiming any mutant in sight. This was enough to get tom to turn tail and run, he could do nothing to stop the crazed lunatics trying to kill him or his people but he tried his best to keep a low profile and save as many people as he could. As Mutant town was shielded by the world around them quite literally tom kept to the roofs trying to make sense of it all. As time passed and things returned to normal tom was confident in his new abilities to help people. He had saved a little girl from the would be marauders and a young man from utter doom, it gave him a sense of purpose to help these people in need. He was happy he was finally of use to people beside himself he thought his parents would be proud. As the little girl layer against a wall frightened with both arms around herself like a baby in the womb he felt there was no other way but to catch the mob’s attention by yelling. It didn’t take a lot to get the mob going and he ran as he could as they gave chase before sliding under a car and infiltrating successfully out of sight… It was all in a day’s work The Skrulls Tom was out of town when the skrulls infiltrated new York . He was sent on a “special mission” to his boss’s hometown in Pennsylvania to pick up a pair of khaki’s … Admittingly this had been the first time tom was told to go out of town for a pair of pants but his boss was very specific in what he liked and for some reason he like pants from Pennsylvania. By the time tom came back everything was back to normal and his boss was waiting for his 5 pairs of pants. His thicked mustached boss seemed pleased and tom was never brought aware of what transpired as he was gone. Detective Johnson a tall pudgy man weighing at about 200 and 5’8 looked like something out an old spaghetti western his skin was tan colored and his mustache curled. If you didn’t know any better you would’ve sworn he was from Texas. SAMPLE RP POST: [at least 200 words- though more would be favorable. MUST be as the character you are applying for. No cut and paste from non-related sites. No full bold or colored dialogue.] Tom yawned into the screen of his laptop another long night… Detective Johnson was on a big case and needed tom to stick around for a few extra hours, he was on an interesting case on a mutant suspected of eating dogs. He wanted more information on the specifics what types of dogs were taken; he even wanted to know what kind of food the dogs ate. Tom had a headache from all the information he had to do of the family’s animals he thought of their cute little wags and playful banter oh the cruelty of it all... Detective Johnson had started to pace back and forth in front of his desk stoping only to rub his chin. He had been talking about the case he was on and told tom to record any clues and strange things he found so that he what to look into. Tom had been typing his findings , organizing the best way he could nodding at his boss typing into his labtop after a few minutes answering yes in recognition , so his boss knew he was listening. Tom spoke calm and formal as he spoke all he had written on the paper. His boss spoke out in a stern voice rubbing his chin “hm.. was that all that I said seems about right”, “yes sir would you like me to read it again sir?” He looked up from his laptop waiting for a reply “no that’s good kiddo now go home and get some rest ill take it from here ill expect a copy of that in the morning” The detective nodded toward the young man as he turned his gaze toward the window brushing his chin in a thought provoking gaze “ Are you sure sir” Tom eyes began to feel heavy as he stopped typing, rest sounded good to him as he closed his laptop and nodded in approval . “I’ll see you tomorrow then sir bright and early” “you know it” |
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| Betsy Braddock | Feb 11 2013, 06:48 PM Post #2 |
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Hey Thomas, thanks for applying as XMR! If you wish to be known as Thomas out of character, that’s fine, otherwise give us something else in the player information to know you by :) Okay, there are a lot of interesting ideas in this app but we need to see a lot more attention to detail paid in a few areas and you also need to be very careful about your spelling and grammar, as there are a lot of typos floating around this app. 1. Scrambler is the name of a villain in XMR and indeed the larger Marvel canon world and while it was a long time ago, he was NPC’d here as the bad guy for a plot. As such, I’d recommend changing the codename. 2. Powers. These are interesting, but they would be VERY hard to play in game, they require a lot of cooperation in some aspects, but then in other areas they don’t make sense. Taking away senses would work as long as you get the full agreement of the player beforehand, but I do not see why he would get the boosts. Why does taking away someone’s sight make him super strong? It might make sense if taking sight gave him improved sight. Powers have to make sense, it’s boring sometimes, but it’s how we try and make things fair. Please make ‘feeling’ a little more specific as well. This is a very broad sense in terms of application, so you need to be a LOT more specific about it and the terms you use. Referencing the sense as ‘touch’ would probably help, but I need to see a lot more attention applied here either way. You also need to state how long his boosts last for and how long, if indeed you keep the powers, the person he has touched are deprived of their sense. Again, with the sense shuffle you need a lot of cooperation with players here if you’re going to do this to PCs. Again, you need to be specific and detail exactly what senses he can shuffle around, how long for, etc. Weaknesses need to be a little more in depth, but really if you just add if he has any sort of defence – or lack of one – then that’ll do. 3. Personality is okay, but it’s rife with typos and you need to separate each paragraph with a blank line. Please be careful with your grammar. 4. History is again, okay up to a point but full of typos. The purpose of the Apocalypse section is to focus on the world event, not his bad home life. This is mainly an issue because he lives in NYC, so the fact War attacked and a few days later there was a Hurricane Sandy type event, needs to take a bit more prominence. If you are going to use dialogue in your history, make sure you separate the dialogue out – new line for a new speaker, basically. Post Apoc needs to be a bit more encompassing of site wide plots, like the Purifiers and the Skrulls if he was still in NYC for them, as they would be hard to miss. You can find all the deets in the site history thread. 5. Your sample, while it meets the minimum for the site, needs to show us a bit more of the character as we don't see much here. I also get what you’re doing with the helping out as a detective – private or NYPD by the way? – but it is sort of cheating around the banned element of being a private investigator, so justify this being in his history a little better as well and we’ll allow it as a potential handspring into XFI, if Alix and Jamie’s players are good with another body. I know this seems like a lot of work to do and I don’t mean to slam or be mean with anything I say. Right now things just need going through, more clarification and a good run through a word processor. If you need help you can ask me or another member of staff (please click staff duties list in the side bar) or please just post a response when you’re done. Thanks! |
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| Tom Foster | Feb 16 2013, 05:45 AM Post #3 |
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| Betsy Braddock | Feb 18 2013, 11:11 PM Post #4 |
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Sorry for the delay; I've been on vacation. I'll be honest; while there are still a lot of weak areas, content wise, your grammar and overall formatting is pretty bad. You need to do what I asked and go through this application and make sure it meets an appropriate standard for a site such as this. Your referencing of the Purifiers and the Skrulls is confused; if you cannot understand these events from reading the site history and game threads, then please contact me via PM and I will explain. Your RP sample is still lacking. Again, if you use dialogue, a new line for each speaker, with a line break between. Read accepted apps and game threads to help you; you're more than welcome to do this. I am sorry if this seems harsh, but right now I am a little worried that you'll be able to keep up with the level of this site, so I need to see a bigger push. Please contact me or another staff member and we will help you. Thanks. |
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| Betsy Braddock | Feb 27 2013, 06:17 PM Post #5 |
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Is this still being worked on? Please edit/respond or contact a member of staff by March 6th or this will be moved to denied due to inactivity. |
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| Tom Foster | Mar 4 2013, 12:15 AM Post #6 |
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Hey sorry for the late reply school starting to pick up the application being worked on so rejoice ill have it done soon |
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| Betsy Braddock | Mar 11 2013, 05:56 PM Post #7 |
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Thomas, I need to bump this again. I understand school can be very busy, but if you cannot work on your app, will you be able to play? At this time I think the site might be too high level and fast paced for you, but if you can get this app into shape by Friday then we will give you a chance. |
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| Betsy Braddock | Mar 17 2013, 03:42 PM Post #8 |
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Moved to denied through lack of activity. |
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