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| abelnoir | Mar 23 2013, 02:57 AM Post #1 |
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CODE [align=center]PLAYER INFORMATION[/align] NAME: Abe CONTACT: kopenend@gmail.com HOW YOU FOUND US: google OTHER CHARACTERS ON THE SITE none RULES CODE: blackbird CREDIT WHERE IT'S DUE: superpower wiki [align=center]CHARACTER INFORMATION[/align] [align=center] ![]() Stephen Amill [/align] BASIC INFORMATION CANON OR ORIGINAL: original AFFILIATION: other FULL NAME: Abel Noir CODENAME: Ghost NICKNAMES: Abe CURRENT AGE: 22 DATE OF BIRTH: March 3 MARITAL STATUS: single SEXUAL ORIENTATION: straight BASE OF OPERATIONS: New York TIME AT INSTITUTE: N/A REGISTERED WITH SHIELD? no HOMETOWN: Moscow Russia KNOWN RELATIVES: Adopted Father: Tristen Collens Adopted Mother: Abigal Noir PHYSICAL APPEARANCE HEIGHT:6'1 BUILD: athletic EYES: blue HAIR: dirty blond DISTINGUISHING MARKS: scars on his back CLOTHING STYLE: Abel likes to wear casual formal clothing UNIFORM: A black padded jacket with a hood on it to hide his face. Black leather gloves, and a faded dark jeans with black puma shoes. On his waist are two holsters for his 9 mm guns and on the back is a sheath for a knife. POWERS GENERAL DESCRIPTION: Imperceptibility Abel can become totally imperceptible, and as such can in no way be detected or communicated with by external forces. He is still physically there and electronics can detect him. However those affected by this power will view him as not existing. They can't seem to physically or mentally touch or perceive Abel, by smell, touch, vision, hearing, etc. This ability does not erase Abel from existence, nor does it put him into another dimension. Instruments and other forms of technology can perceive him. The only thing this effects is the person's mind effectively blocking out every trace of Abel possible. At it's full strength the person may even forget Abel's existence completely. This ability does have a field of effect in which it works. The maximum range is 1 mile. Those on the outer edges will perceive him like a blurry image and his noise will most likely be heard as static. The closer one is to Abel the more powerful the effect becomes. As stated before electronic devices and non living things are not effected by this ability and can still hit him as if he was not using the ability at all. he still shows up on camera as well. Anyone who looks at the camera when he is gone will see him and recognize him. Abel can only hold this for a duration of 1 hour at his max and in combination with his other ability for only 30 minutes. After this it takes at least 15 minutes for him to recover to full strength. Though someone can not touch him if he touches them or hits them the person will be able to perceive him. However this requires a lot of force by Abel such as a punch. Intangibility Abel can move through any object no matter it's mass or density. As long as the object or attack in question is physical in nature he can't be hit by it while this ability remains active. Anything Abel touches when going intangible is also intangible so long as it remains in constant physical contact with him at all times. The longer he stays in an object or the more dense the object is the more tiresome it is for Abel to move through it. So something made of wood would tax Abel a lot more than if he was passing through led. Abel can move through anything physical including liquids, plasma and gases. While he is intangible the effects of these things is not harmful to Abel. So if Abel walks through a toxic substance he does not have to worry about being poisoned. As mentioned before the more dense an object has the more tiresome it is for Abel to go through. The larger the object that Abel is trying to take through with him also has an effect on him. That is a fork is a lot easier to take through with him than a person, and a person is definitely a lot easier than a car. Abel has a limit to how long he can continually stay intangible. The limit is 1 hour and 30 minutes without taking in the strain of the objects he's passing through or holding. This is cut even more when he is using this in conjunction with his Imperceptibility . While intangible Abel is incapable of physically interacting with anything he isn't holding before he goes intangible. That means if he wants to hit some one he has to make at least his arm tangible to do so. General Skills: Abel is a skilled thief and has been trained and honed his skills in lock picking, pick pocketing, slight of hand, and hacking to perfection. This has made him one of the top thieves around without even factoring in his mutant abilities. Abel is a great marksman and trained extensively in mixed martial arts. He has also has taken up parkour as a hobby and has become proficient in this as well. WEAKNESS: As mentioned before Abel's imperceptibility has a one mile radius anyone outside of this can spot him without difficulty. The power also becomes weaker the farther some one is from Abel as well. Abel can still be affected by anything inorganic because this power only works on someones perception. This also means some one with a heightened perception may be able to perceive him to some degree though it would still be rather hard. Camera's and other electronic devices can still pick up on him as if he never had this ability. Using this for beyond 1 hour is impossible for Abel because of it's taxing nature on him. This limit is brought down to thirty minutes when he is using this ability in conjunction with his intangibility. This Ability is not passive and requires Abel to concentrate to some degree in order to work, though not a lot. However even if it is not passive it does have side effects that remain active no matter what. This ability makes Abel almost fade into the background and makes it so that he does not ever really have a strong presence. People tend to skip over him and he is easily over shadowed by others because of this. This has caused him to have a harder time fitting in. When Abel is intangible anything that is not physical in nature such as energy and psychic blasts can still affect him. A large enough electric shock can even bring him back to a tangible state lasting up to an hour. Abel can not interact with other things while intangible and must become tangible again in order to affect whatever it is he wants to touch or interact with. PERSONALITY Because of his small presence and the tendency others have to forget him Abel has become very distant. He has also become very socially awkward and shy. When talking to someone Abel usually studders which has led people to think of him as a little slow. Abel is a introvert by nature however he tends to feel more at ease in crowds. This is because he feels like he can connect at least in a superficial way with others this way. One of Abel's favorite hobby's is people watching which has made him more observant than others as well as more perceptive. He has become very good at noticing social ques and the body language of others. Abel doesn't talk often because of his shyness however this does not mean he doesn't think much. He is constantly thinking almost to the point of over thinking. He is obsessed with the idea of changing himself and as a result can be seen reading a new self help book or trying a new thing in an attempt to become something new. Abel loves the out doors and hates being confined in a place for to long and can be seen out doing some kind of sport or even just walking. Abel is a big daydreamer and he can always be seen daydreaming. Though he is a mutant himself and has been persecuted on more than one occasion Able harbors no ill will to non mutants. He sees their fear as more of a fear of the unknown which is born from ignorance. This idea shows just how patient and understanding Abel is when dealing with people. He is even tempered and not really high energy though something that interests him greatly can get him going. Abel feels he is separate from the mutant fight as a whole and doesn't take sides with the brotherhood or xmen. He feels they're both to idealistic which is something Abel hates. He hates people pushing their ideals on him and would rather come to a conclusion by himself. However he has no real qualms about their fight because he feels it is their meaning to life. Abel views life as fundamentally meaningless in that everyone is free to choose their own meaning, and because of this he respects others ideas. However Abel does feel a certain disgust to both sides because of the way they both involve innocents without real concern to their wants. He feels that every one should be free to choose what they want and not be strong armed. To sum up Abel is a free and kind spirit, a bit awkward and low energy but a generally kind person. He views himself as a traveler constantly trying to find the meaning to his own life. And as such welcomes any type of experience good or bad. HISTORY: PRE-APOCALYPSE Abel never knew his birth parents and has never shown a large interest in trying to find them. Instead his first memories where spent at a very strange orphanage which seemed to hold the idea of survival of the fittest up most. Abel never had much time to contemplate this only thinking about it later in life. Instead he had spent those days trying to get by. His naturally small presence helped a lot as he was able to slip in and almost always get a good helping of food. For the most part he was able to avoid the harshness of the adults and the brutality of the older kids. However not all the time was he passed over. When he was noticed it was usually by some jealous older kid who wanted whatever it was that Abel was able to acquire. Which always led to a fight, which tended to get very bloody. In this environment Abel stayed until he was seven and adopted by a Mafia boss. His name was Cole and he had adopted him because his wife could not conceive and wanted very much to have a child. Abel was the choice simply cause the boss was tired and didn't really care about who it was. Much like picking a fish he had chosen Abel because he happened to be the first person. A stroke of luck for Abel however who was taken from rags to riches even if dipped in blood. To him it was miracle of God. He contemplated how he could make his new dad happy and what he could do to be a good son. Though it became clear that his father never really cared much for him. Instead his love was turned to his new foster mother Abigal. A very beautiful russian woman who cared for Abel like he was always her son. From the moment he met her she was fawning on him and acting like a mother should. she had already set up a room and enrolled him in school. She even took the time to help tutor him when it was clear he was behind in school. She was always supportive and became the only person to stand up for him when his dad and his friends would make fun of him for his stuttering. Abel quickly learned how horrible his fathers temper was when he hit her because of this. As a result Abel learned to keep quiet about such things in an attempt to spare her from more pain. Still she would keep having bruises which only served to anger Abel. This continued for a few years when at age 13 when his anger exploded. After a rather heavy night of drinking his dad came back in a particularly sore mood. He quickly got to fighting and in front of Abel raised his hand against Abigal, enraged Abel flew at his father who hit him hard. It was a brutal beating until Abel accidentally activated for his first time his intangibility causing his father's fist to fly through the wall. During this time the now hysterical Abigal stabbed him with a knife in front of wide eyed Abel. The scene caused Abel to run out of the house onto the street of Moscow. Now homeless Abel wondered around starving until he met a bum named Tristen who was a mutant and a school teacher before being fired. The bum allowed Abel to follow him though he didn't say much. He taught Abel how to pick pocket and steal in order to get food. To Abel Tristen was a father. It was Tristen who taught him how to control his temper and accept those for who they are. Tristen continued to school Abel so that he would be able to one day apply for a college. When Abel was 16 however Tristen died due to disease leaving Abel alone once again on the streets. By now however Abel with the help of Tristen had began to control his power more. He used this new found control to steal from banks and stores eventually being able to buy an apartment. After a year though of stealing he was caught on tape by a store owner and eventually tracked down by the police. Soon he was sent to jail but it was not long before the local mafia family picked him up. The valued his skills and thought that he could be of use. He spent a number of years in their care learning better how to steal and began learning mixed martial arts by his fellow members. It was around this time he started to learn how to parkour as well which he picked up by watching a video online. By age eighteen though he had gotten sick of this life and decided that he wanted to try a new one. He saw an opportunity in America and fled Russia in order to find a better life. It was easy enough for him to get past all the security checkpoints with his abilities but when he was in America he found that not being a true citizen would prove difficult for his plans. He had no money either because he spent all the money he did have on the plane ticket to America. With no real work experience and education save for the one given by Tristen and the few years in between of schooling Abel began stealing once more. Soon he had enough money to buy a cheap flat in New York where he lived for a while. DURING APOCALYPSE It happened fast for Abel who had not really been paying any real attention to the mutant affairs. He knew of the sides and had even been approached by the brotherhood, and the xmen but at age 18 Abel didn't care about much let alone the fate of the world. He had gotten a job as a thief for hire known in the underworld for his excellency and for the most part had been living the high life. So on April 7th Abel's world was rocked severely as the horsemen began their ride. His first clue that the world was going to waste was on the news when he heard the news of Pakistan falling which though was alarming seemed be of no concern to him. However not ten minutes later did he see the carnage outside his building. At first Abel contemplated just staying his room and riding out whatever weird acid trip this was but soon found he couldn't. Mostly because of the fact that the wall of his apartment had been destroyed. It was at this moment he saw the horseman in front of him. However almost instinctively he activated his imperceptibility which seemed enough to fool the horseman at least a little. Abel quickly escaped the building running from roof to roof trying his hardest to get distance between him and the monster. Eventually he was away from the epicenter but was soon faced with another problem. He was now on the streets without any real protection and to tired to use his abilities which he had been using for nearly the whole time. For a while Abel took shelter in the sewers which had not been damaged to much. Avoiding fights if he could in order to stay alive. Figuring that he'd let the whole thing blow over. Only going up to try to scavenge some food and supplies here and there. He also found a few non mutant families who weren't enslaved bringing them down to the sewers. After a few days he had a little congregation of different people. All of them seemed to be non mutants except for him. Abel ended up being the one risking himself to go up to the surface for food. For a while he sustained the group and they became close as they weathered the storm together. They kept moving from place to place underneath the surface and guarded the area only stealing enough to survive but not enough to be noticed. Still on April 12th Abel was left speechless as chaos took over the world completely. They had to run on the surface and had been successfully dodging the hordes when the eye of horus had been unleashed. Massive tornadoes came down scattering the group. Abel was thrown by multiple earthquakes. He was knocked unconscious underneath a pile of rubble when he came to and got out he found one family dead. The other was mostly turned and the the mother lay dead killed by the son. Abel was shocked but had no time to think on it as they came after him. He managed to knock the son out before taking off. Now with no where to go Abel was ready to accept defeat but for some reason found himself holding onto the little bit of life he had still. He knew the xmen/brotherhood had an alliance and a shelter one that he was trying to lead his group to before the chaos. So carefully Abel tried to make his way over there. Once there though he found that the situation was just as bad if not worse. However not a day after did he get to the shelter did it all seem to end. Everyone was cheering but Abel couldn't bring himself to and instead he walked out of the shelter trying to find an apartment. POST-APOCALYPSE After the apocalypse Abel found himself homeless. He was in no rush to get another house though after all he knew how to live off the streets and with his powers it was easy to get by. No instead his first priority was to bury the family that had died under his care. It was something that wouldn't let him sleep until he did so. He knew it wasn't his fault and didn't blame himself for it but he did feel that he needed to do this for them. He found however they were already having a burial for them and decided to show up. So after borrowing a suit from a store he made his way to their funeral. After this he decided it was time to get an apartment but knew that it was impossible. He knew the climate that was surrounding him was hostile to say the least. It was still chaotic but he had heard of the knew criminal boss that was sweeping the scene. So he knew that he could probably get work and so he went to try to meet him. However he was unsuccessful in actually meeting the man though his associates did take notice of him. He was hired soon after and began work once again. As for an apartment he decided this time to go to the mutant town because of the obvious tension of non mutants and mutants he felt it was easier to just live in mutant town for awhile. PURIFIERS Abel now 20 was getting along fine, he was being hired for more and more missions by kingpin. His standing had risen greatly in the underground and once again he reestablished his reputation. He had also found a new liking to his home mutant town. Though a rather poor name it was a good place with mostly good people. It was also affordable and at the moment it seemed the place to be. During this time Abel had found himself looking over his shoulder every time he went past the border of mutant town. He knew that he wasn't well known as a mutant but he knew that the purifiers had been going after mutants at an increasing rate. However this was all it was to Abel for a long time. Even when the mayor revealed his ultimatum Abel continued on what he was doing. He didn't support it but he figured just like he lived his life before Abel would be able to dodge the authority. However he soon found that he would be caught in the cross fire and eventually have to take action. First it was the slowing of jobs he was able to get. He used to be getting calls all the time now it was sparse at best. When he asked why he got a dodgy answer and then eventually told it was because he was mutant. After this the riots broke out in which Abel stayed in during the time. Soon after while he was out for a night stroll he found himself getting involved in one of the deadliest nights since the apocalypse. It was fast and Abel didn't have much time to think an attack on mutant town people dying all around him. Shots where even fired at him and a bullet scrapped him before he could phase through it. Out of necessity he began to fight his way through trying to help some of the more helpless people. Unable to find a place to hide Abel found himself forced to fight back the mob of purifiers that would see him dead. After the night Abel took more precaution stocking up his pantry and carrying a gun on him where ever he went. Soon he found himself locked up in a dome that even he could not pass through without a shock. Abel decided to just continue doing what he did and began to live his life as normal as possible. He was able to get money doing all sorts of things at this time. It was during this period that Abel was most profitable getting jobs from those who wanted his help to get out to those who wanted something stolen. However the dome fell not without more violence causing Abel to contemplate leaving the nation for another country. It was at this time that he was drawn in to the fight against the sentinels and Nimrod's plans. With not much option but to fight Abel grabbed his guns and took to the street. Trying his best as support and evacuating all those caught in the crossfire. Fighting anyone in his way to get them out he cursed the xmen and brotherhood for getting the innocent people involved in this. After the carnage Abel was left with a bad taste in his mouth for both the brotherhood and xmen coming to hate them for awhile. It would be only when he witnessed both their sacrifices that he would forgive them. And so he after this he went back to the mutant town this time taking odd jobs around the town for a while. SKRULLS After awhile Abel decided to lend out his services once again to the underworld but also to those mutants that needed the help. He set up his own kind of agency that dealt with spying/thieving. Though his main clients where once again the criminal underworld there was a steady stream of mutants who asked for help. Though for small stuff, still he was getting by with this and for once his apartment wasn't under attack. It seemed for once in a long while things seemed to be going normal for him. He was able to walk outside without a gun and conduct buisness nicely. However this was cut short when disappereances began popping up. First it was a few cases here and there a few people came to ask. No matter what he couldn't find them. Then strange reports of people's dead brothers or weird phenomenan. Again his buisness saw a surge of activity people more distrusting since the purifiers incident coming to him make sure the source was telling the truth. And it was at least they looked like it. But it got weirder as Abel was attacked by what was normally a rather docile old woman next door. It was becoming more common place to. Abel had almost know way of protecting himself when the wave was sent out it hit him affecting him in the same way as it did the others. He found himself trusting and believing in what this previously unknown entity said. Still there was a part of him inside trapped. Deep down it was like a darkness that had overcome him. These next few days where the worst for him as he worked through the nightmares that was given to him. Meanwhile in the real world he was carrying out missions fighting people in the name of something he never even met. But just as he pushed down his demons he was awoken with a dizziness. He had no real recollection of what had happened but he knew that he had overcome something. CURRENT HISTORY Since the Skrull Abel has continued to run his agency accepting any and all requests. As well he is trying to sign up for a college this coming year in order to finally fulfill one of his promises to Tristen. Abel is contemplating helping out in mutant town more but has yet come to a solid decision. For right now he is just remaining neutral taking requests from the underworld, the brotherhood, shield, and even xmen. He is trying as well to attempt to find a girlfriend deciding he has gone through enough stuff he feels that he needs a girlfriend now. SAMPLE RP POST: Abel put his feet up on a oak desk it was old and seemed that it might break at any time. Other then his feet papers were scattered on it though most of no importance. A lamp was on it's right side and a laptop on the other. The desk was a reflection of the room which was small with a red rug in the center. Two chairs were facing Abel on the other side of the desk. On the right side was a couch and a lamp by it. One window on the left side was open to let the spring wind through the room. Abel was very much suited for this room. With a messy appearance. He had a white button up long shirt on tucked in lazy to black pants. His shirt sleeves were rolled up to just above his elbows, the first two buttons on his shirt unbutton and his skinny black tie hung loose on his neck. Cheap black shoes accented the whole outfit. It was an obvious attempt to make him look professional but it was obvious that the person didn't want to be. And why should he after all what was the point in life if he had to feel constrained the whole time? Abel yawned and gave a side ways glance at the window. Man it was a slow day he thought as he watched a bird fly aimlessly outside his window. It was weird nice but weird after all this place usually had something going on. But he guessed it was good, at least it meant he didn't have to repair his wall...again. Abel took his feet off his desk and moved his hands to his laptop. Soon he moved to the dating site he was using no matches again. "Well damn at this rate I'll be single until the next apocalypse...man I wish I had mind control powers." He said to himself before leaning back on his chair and closing his eyes. |
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| Songbird | Mar 23 2013, 03:33 AM Post #2 |
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I have a question just as much as a critique, Abe. How do you plan to use this character? He is not a part of any faction (the way you have him now) and he can not be detected up to "a mile away" and he can become intangible. To me this means that he can not be found no matter who is looking for him and if they do happen to find him (from a mile away?) he can become intangible and basically can't be touched. I think that a mile away is a pretty extreme distance unless he plans on moving along an open plain or something of that nature. In any type of terrain, where there are buildings or hills or what-not, a person would never see him any ways. Another thing is that part of this imperceptibility falls under a banned power, which is telepathic immunity. What I'm saying is, while a character that can never be touched or caught or seen if he doesn't want to be might be loads of fun for you, I don't see how it would fit well into XMR. We have characters that can turn invisible, but they can still be found. We have characters that can turn intangible, but still be touched with telepathy or some other weakness. The power is too untouchable in my opinion. Take it back to formula, please. There are also some issues with your history, such as him searching for missing people during the Skrulls. They were not missing, they were replaced. Also the fact that he is taking clients from all factions is unbelievable to me. I think I answered my first question here, because I believe you intend for him to run some business where he takes contracts from all factions. The Brotherhood, SHIELD and the X-men wouldn't need that and if they did, they wouldn't use the same person. Sorry if this seemed harsh, I didn't mean for it to be. This is a high level site and we intend on maintaining that. However, we can work together on this if you want and turn it into something that will work. If you want to PM or AIM me and talk about ways you can make changes to your powers and other things, then please do. Thanks. |
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| abelnoir | Mar 23 2013, 03:51 AM Post #3 |
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I believe this power is completely in bounds. First off it isn't telepathic immunity because he can still have his thoughts read and he can still be mind controlled. Also didn't you read a person of extra perception i.e telepath's can locate him. I'm just saying a fucking kid who just got their powers couldn't detect him however Xavier, Emma frost and jean gray could very well. A mile may be to long your right I will agree with you on that I was just putting a number down. However he is in no way untouchable. First off only physical things can't touch him, and electronic devices can see him. So a person using a camera can track him if they look through that. Or they just get a telepath that is stronger than an amateur. And I don't appreciate your condescending attitude like you guys are to good for me for some reason. No it's not a 'high level' site. I've been on high level sites they're not impossible to get in this is a close knit site where you guys run on cliques. So no don't patronize me like you did I'm not a fucking kid. Alright, good day. |
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| Alix | Mar 23 2013, 04:46 AM Post #4 |
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Hi Abe! Thanks for taking our feedback into consideration and formulating a response to explain your reasons for not going with our changes. As it seems that perhaps XMR will not be the proper fit for you, I am going to go ahead and move this to denied. If at a future date you are willing to discuss edits and speak respectfully about your character with staff who are only attempting to help ensure integration and XMR's demographics (as we are a welcoming and friendly bunch, despite, perhaps, your current misconceptions), please message a member of staff and this profile will be moved back to application review. Thanks, and have a great day! [denied] |
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