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Giles Jaxon
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NAME: Giles Jaxon
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BASIC INFORMATION

CANON OR ORIGINAL: Original
AFFILIATION: Xavier institute student

FULL NAME: Giles Jaxon
CODENAME: None yet
NICKNAMES: None yet

CURRENT AGE: 22
DATE OF BIRTH: 02/02/1991
MARITAL STATUS: Single
SEXUAL ORIENTATION: Bi-curious
BASE OF OPERATIONS: Xavier institute
TIME AT INSTITUTE:
REGISTERED WITH SHIELD? No
HOMETOWN: Rhyl, North Wales
KNOWN RELATIVES: Mother and father and three sisters in Wales.

PHYSICAL APPEARANCE

HEIGHT: 5’10
BUILD: Slim but with a square set frame.
EYES: Hazel
HAIR: brown, though is bald mainly.
DISTINGUISHING MARKS: Tattoo’s (see picture)
CLOTHING STYLE: Leather/denim jackets with patches, black jeans, low cut addidas trainers (gazelles, of varying colours.) Punk, and sometimes hip hop themed style.
UNIFORM: Standard leather one piece suit.

POWERS

GENERAL DESCRIPTION: Rapid Regeneration.
When struck, cut or damaged in any way, Giles’s body automatically kicks into an accelerated healing process that usually does not take long to come into effect and restore his body back to working order. In regards to how long an injury takes to heal depends on the injury. For a bruise from a strike the process would take mere seconds. A deep wound however would take slightly longer, perhaps a few minutes to an hour depending on the damage. If a limb were to be removed Giles could not regenerate it but the wound itself would heal fairly quickly. The only way for Giles to restore a limb would be to have his original appendage taken with him into surgery and re-attached. This way his limbs would re-merge during the healing process and would then be restored. Any damage to the brain, such as a bullet through the skull, would render Giles effectively dead for some time, anywhere between a week to a few months depending; restoration of the brain taking much longer than any other part of the body. Because of the nature of the power when he is in training Giles can reach a physical peak that would be much higher than the average humans, giving him higher reflexes, strength and the like. However this would not contend with any super powered mutant with strength or speed etc. (edit) If drowned or cut off from oxygen, becomes unconcious untill back in an oxygenic environment.

WEAKNESS: Can still die if burnt to death thoroughly. (Incinerated) Can still feel pain, be in shock and become unconscious. Could potentially loose limb. Can be induced into coma like states with severe brain trauma.

PERSONALITY
Giles is a thinker and a doer. Most of his opinions and rational comes from logic and analytic study of the world around him. He is certainly no expert, however his interest in human psychology means that he tends to live his life the way he feels it is meant to be lived, rather than how the mainstream depicts it. He is a learner, still constantly evolving himself mentally. Despite his spiritual past and his internal struggle with it, Giles is not currently spiritual anymore. He believes fully that this life is the only one and thus must be taken seriously. God to him is his consciousness, and the Devil his impulses.

He is a straight forward type, he has no qualms with asking a question that many would consider stupid. He prefers straight talking when in serious conversation and does not easily take offense at peoples opinions or thoughts. Rather than argue Giles prefers to debate, however this often lands him in trouble, as many see this as an argument rather than a discussion. He is unafraid of confrontation, but would rather avoid it, something he has struggled with in the past. It is not necissarily his temperment that gets him into a scrape, more often than not it is his unwillingness to back down in the face of a challange.

He is not scared of the taboo, and would talk on any topic no matter it’s nature. Given all this, Giles is still a pleasant person, he does enjoy laughter and his humour is often quite ridiculous and often begs people to laugh at him and consequently with him. He cares deeply for people, which may in some cases fuel his displeasure with society. In all he is very much a human being, prone to making mistakes just as much as the next person, he’ll just be happier to admit them and learn from them more than most.

HISTORY: PRE-APOCALYPSE
Born in England yet raised in the close by Wales, Giles led a quite typical life since the day his birth. During his childhood he moved around a lot, mainly living in small towns on the coast of north wales. Not from a wealthy family, he grew up without many of the luxuries of his peers, yet did also not go without in regards to clothing and food. The area’s he lived in were typically fringe-sub-urban and fringe-urban areas which were more often than not deprived areas, rather than affluent.

His formal education was slightly jarred by the consistent moving around. He attended 7 schools (primary and secondary schools included) during his time moving around, until his parents settled and he could move on to a collage in the local area. Later on he would progress to Leeds University and then move to Cardiff.

His informal education was however, questionable. From birth he was raised as a member of the Mormon church of The Latter Day Saints. Giles’s parents, both young (19) and ill-educated, turned to religion to help raise their son, and consequently his two younger sisters. This played a pivotal role in Giles’s life, shaping his personality and viewpoints on the world. He would continue to be a member until roughly the age of sixteen, when he decided that it was no longer a thing he felt was true or real. This did not bode well with his parents. Both strict and obedient, they mindlessly adhered to the regulations of the Church and would hound Giles about his absence from the church and any activity they deemed sinful or damning.

After enduring two years of battling with a deluded family, Giles broke away from them via university and relocated to Leeds. There he completed a degree in Art, incorporating elements of poetry, and performance work, as well as writing and painting. It would be here however that Giles would develop issues with drugs and depression, issues that still ride with him in the present. It would also be here that he developed his penchant for tattoo’s, covering his body in them and declaring the finished product a work of art. Also during his time in University, as well as the subsequent year after, it should be noted that Giles became somewhat of a bar brawler, fighting frequently with others.

DURING APOCALYPSE (April 7th through April 12th, 2009)
During the apocalypse Giles was residing in Wales and had little first-hand experience with it. He mainly saw news coverage of the events in America (As he had done with many of the major events that had happened in America and elsewhere.) There was an outbreak of a zombie style virus that spread around the south of England, but was quarantined and repelled. Four years later and the country is still recovering from not only the loss, but the damage of the event. However, other than economically the event did not affect Giles directly.

POST-APOCALYPSE
Began his university course in Leeds.

PURIFIERS
Being a largely American ordeal Giles again saw only news coverage of the event. He was also coming towards the end of his University experience.

SKRULLS During the invasion Giles was packing to move to Cardiff. However widespread the invasion seemed, it did not seem to fully impact certain areas such as Britain and other, more northern areas of Europe.

CURRENT HISTORY
It would not be long after his move to Cardiff that Giles discovered his power for the first time. After finding himself in an all too familiar brawl scenario, an unsuspecting Giles was caught unaware of a blade in the mix. He was slashed across the chest and face and left in the street. There were a few who came to his aid, ringing an ambulance and helping to try and stem his blood loss. However, it quickly became apparent that his wounds were beginning to heal, and rapidly. Upon the ambulances arrival, Giles was already awake and renewed. However he was in shock and was still admitted to hospital for treatment and examination.

After some tests Giles was revealed to carry the X gene and was officially sanctioned as a mutant. With no prior major injuries in his memories, the revelation of what he was astounded him and gave him new purpose and curiosity about his life.

Unknown to him, Cerebro had located him and thus sent a representative from the Xavier institute to meet him before any other faction could intervene. A luckily it was so, the subsequent meetings convinced Giles that he should take up stay and education at the academy and learn more of his abilities.

SAMPLE RP POST:

A private plane? Fuck. Giles looked at the aircraft as he approached along the terminal. It was fairly small, yet sleek in its way. A few others walked on in front, some looked like more Academy representatives while others looked like they could be future students. They were young, much younger than he, a fact that made him feel uneasy with himself. He reminded himself that his power had never been as obvious as some of the others which was why it’d taken so long for him to get noticed. It wasn’t like he’d developed lizard skin at the age of thirteen or something. Aside from his slight angst on the issue, Giles figured it was still worth going, even if to just fuck around in America for a time.

He stepped up to the plane stairs and made his way up, taking his hand luggage rucksack with him and leaving his heavy pull cases to the steward at the bottom of the stairs. He managed a quick “Cheers mate.” To the stewards as he passed. After a few long steps Giles made it to the top and entered the plane. “Fuckin hell man.” He whispered as he made his way into the seating area. The interior was of a high standard, one that Giles wasn’t accustomed to. He felt trapped by how clean and neat it was, he felt as though even being in the plane somehow made it dirty. Yet as quickly as that thought had come to his mind the words “fuck it” also sprang to it and he dove into the experience and found himself a nice window seat in the middle of the seating rows. There were already a few others on board, talking and laughing and getting to know one another.

Looking out the window Giles began to contemplate the madness of his position. I can’t believe I’m a fucking mutant man. My power, does it mean I’ll live forever? Do I want that? It seems that so far my life has taken a turn in favour of self-destruction, but nature has contended it. I guess I’m meant for something else then… Sitting here feels pretty weird, in about twelve hours I’m going to have to meet and greet with what most humans would consider Gods. I’m not really sure if I’m ready, jeez. Cutting off his internal monologue, a flight attendant gently demanded his attention.

“Would you care for some refreshments sir?” She asked, a pleasant air in her voice. Refreshments? God, I haven’t heard that one since church. She seemed not to notice his tattoos or his scowl like thinking face. It dawned on Giles that she may have seen much more unnerving sights in her time. She may even be a mutant herself. So, matching her pleasant tone he replied, “Yeah sure, what’ve we got?” She turned to the trolley to reveal many snacks, and drinks. “Fuckin hell you don’t go halves on these flights do you? Haha.” He went to the trolley and picked up a few packets of crisps, near the bottom were some cans of lager. “Ey, how much are these cans of beer ere?” The attendant replied on the house. Classy indeed. So without hesitation Giles picked up a few cans and set himself down with a smile. This could be fun after all.
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Betsy Braddock
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Hi Giles (I’m assuming that’s what you want to be known as out of character as well as in character).

I’ll be honest. This needs work. There are several major issues, but I will go through things with you so you are absolutely clear. If I seem blunt, I apologise, but that is just the way I review apps. If you need things explaining, I will talk over AIM or PM.

1. Okay, so the playby. Is there any reason why he NEEDS to be covered in tats? Are these real tattoos, if so you SERIOUSLY need to justify the fact he’s covered in them - ie, how long they took, how he could afford them, etc. He’d have had to sit for weeks to get his body covered like that. Tattoo artists have to sit other clients as well and even one medium sized tattoo can take hours and some need to heal a little before work is continued. Be realistic. Also, if he got slashed/beat up etc, how are his tattoos unspoilt? Tats don’t work like that.

You also only need one (real) picture of the playby, preferably one that does not stretch the page either.

2. How long has he been at the Institute? If he’s just arrived, put that down.

3. What are the names of his family? Does he have two or three sisters, as you’ve said different things.

4. Powers:

Healing is on the banned list, flagged with consideration (meaning we prefer you to ask permission first). Right now, this healing factor of his could be massively overpowered and if you hope to hang on to it, you need to really bring it in, refine it and explain it with a little more clarity.

Basically, surviving a gunshot wound to the head and effectively coming back from the dead a few weeks later? Far too much. If he died, he would rot. Would his healing factor undo the rot?

If you would find it easier to pick a new power, that’s acceptable and we can work with you. But as it stands, the current powers need a bit of work to tone away from the super OPness they currently possess. You will also need to put actual limits on his reflexes, strengths etc and honestly the easiest way to do this is to focus on better defining the weaknesses.

5. Personality:

It’s a little full of cliches and contradictions. He’s so unafraid of taboo, but he doesn’t like confrontations so he won’t argue, but he’ll debate…These elements aren’t bad but you are in danger of over emphasising how open minded and great he is.He’s a little too cool for school but at the same time very needy of approval. It can work as a base, but you need to do a little fleshing or tweaking.

6. History:

Okay, so if he was born in England but moved around N.Wales, what makes Rhyl his hometown exactly? Why do his parents move around? I know this seems nitpicky, but you need to really think about the early history as right now you’re basically projecting a lot of what he is going to do and not much of what he is doing.

With the religious aspect, is this for a specific reason? I think you need to really do your research here, as religion has played a very important part of plots in the past and so even if present in a rather negative light, needs to be handled in such a way it isn’t a gimmick or a way of protesting against the system. For example, why were his parents deluded? Were they poor parents just because of their religion? It seems to be something just to angst over.

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It would be here however that Giles would develop issues with drugs and depression, issues that still ride with him in the present


Why did he develop a drug habit and depression? How does he handle it these days? Don’t toss in things like this only to never mention them again, nor reference them in the personality. Both subjects can be hot button issues, so again, if you need them to shape your character you need to play them with respect and with as much accuracy as possible.

Apocalypse:

London was attacked by the horseman Death. He was very obvious, being a blue guy with metal wings. You seem to make a great emphasis on the American disasters, but sort of shrug off what happened a few hundred miles away. London bounced back in a similar way to NYC, as this is a comic style ‘verse and disasters happen. If there was no recovery, things would be terrible.

There were also storms a few days after the Horsemen’s ride and an EMP caused a worldwide blackout, you may want to mention these.

Post Apoc:

A six word summary of a span of more than a year is unacceptable. Flesh his background out. I don’t need to know what he ate for breakfast or the specifics of his class, but you’re telling us nothing so far.

Purifiers:

Again, flesh it out. If he saw the Purifiers killing mutants and blowing up schools and the sentinels attack NYC, did he have any thoughts?

Skrulls:

The Skrulls turned up, unannounced, assumed rule and imposed a complacency wave, so while there might have been no ships overhead in his immediate vicinity, there was something. The entire population of Brussels also vanished, so don’t say nothing really happened in Northern Europe.

Current History:

This is the tricky part. It isn’t in the site history yet, but you need to make an attempt to get at least some of it into your application.

http://z4.invisionfree.com/Xrevolution/ind...showtopic=13913

http://z4.invisionfree.com/Xrevolution/ind...showtopic=13957

http://z4.invisionfree.com/Xrevolution/ind...showtopic=13881

Pay attention to the information, as the Illuminati was a worldwide plot and attacks happened in the United Kingdom as well as other countries. If you need help, please ask staff and we’ll make things clearer for you.

I get that moving to the Institute (as it is called in game) would be a big move, but why the multiple meetings? That just makes it read like they were so very keen on having him. A lot of mutants are met face to face, but there’s usually a specific reason for going back several times and as Giles is an adult, they’d treat him like one by putting the offer on the table and letting him think about it.

The RP sample is a little strange. His internal voice is at times oddly refined and intelligent, yet he talks and rather acts a bit of a lout. Is this deliberate? I need to see a better balance throughout, as its a similar case to the personality where everything goes back and forth and I’m not quite sure what you’re aiming for - this university educated guy, or a tough act who had a ‘bad’ upbringing.


I appreciate this might be daunting and I am not trying to slam you, but we need to see a greater effort, mostly in the history. Try and read other apps and some in game threads, and things will hopefully make a bit more sense.

If you don’t need help, please work on the app and let me know by posting a response to this once you are done, thanks.
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1. Changed the pic. As for the reason for tattoos and the spoiling of tattoos, I will add them.

2. Will Do.

3. I will explain the family situation clearer.

4. I will amend the powers. I'll get rid of the thing that makes him a bit stronger or whatever. He'll be just like a regular human in that respect. I need him to be able to recover very quickly though, mainly because I'll be putting him in very compromising situations and I don't want him to have to be out of action for too long. Come on though man this concept is from a comic book, there are people that can redistribute energy inflicted on them onto the opponent effectively rendering them impervious to harm, i'm sure it doesn't have to be too real. I just want him to live, and to role play that character who has those experiences. Wait till I re-write to judge.

5. I'll definitely flesh it out a little more that's fair. I'd like it to be slightly vague though just so it gives the character room to breathe and evolve a little. I like developing my characters in character. Cliches and contradictions are in us all we're not perfect. I'm trying to make a real character not a perfect one.

6. I'll flesh this out too no problem. Again though I didn't want his history to be too focused, I know it myself but I want him to reveal it in character. Also I never said he was afraid of a confrontation, I wrote unafraid. There's a few lines after it depicting why.

as for the religion thing it is for a reason. This character is based off my own experiences in life. I've never done this before and I just want to see how it goes. I usually play oddball alien characters that are just weird guys but this time I want to be serious about it. I did over emphasize some parts of the personality in order for him to be more of a character rather than a real person, this is after all a game. With some of these issues I am kinda feeling like you are being overly nitpicky. I fail to see how no other character here has gimmicks or things to angst over etc etc. They all do. As for why the depression and the rest can be revealed in character in conversation with others like in real life when you meet new people.

As for the board event references I'll change those up no problem. Just so you know though London is really far away from Cardiff, if it didn't spread further than that area it wouldn't have effected Giles directly. I will put some thought and feelings on it though.

As for the meetings thing, I didn't know how a fictional thing like cerebro and the x-men really work I had to figure out some way. Reading it back though, you seem to have answered your own question here, the multiple visits were them giving him time to think about it and coming back again to speak about it. These guys have a jet that can get them anywhere, fast. It just seemed an obvious given considering this is a world where they exist.

As for the way he talks, he just talks like me. I swear often. University educated doesn't mean rich, anyone can get in university in Britain. I'll explain what he did though cause that just makes sense, I forgot I didn't put it in sorry. I'll get the most recent events in too someway or another, it may be brief though.

So basically yeah I'll change most of what you want, but some things stay.
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Cyclops
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Ok, before this goes much farther there needs to be something set straight before you decide if you're willing to compromise and comply with our rules here.

There is no "Something's go and something's stay" pick and choosing when it comes to the adaptation of these characters to our rules. You will change what you're asked to change, or you won't play here. Now, if you think Betsy is asking for too much of a change then you're very welcomed to suggest an alternative or a compromise, but keep in mind that this application is how we get to know you. If you're inflexible and argumentative when you're attempting to make a good impression, when you're accepted and you no longer have to impress us, how will you behave?

Powers: Of course, we're aware this is a comic book, but we do insist on limitations in powers, or suddenly, in the middle of a fight, the character can dodge speedsters' attacks, withstand full bore optic blasts, and survive admantium claws to the brain. Don't laugh that off, because it's happened, and we won't be letting it happen again. All mutants, in canon, have some mild form of healing, they have to have, or they wouldn't last long. That's fine, that's acceptable, but full on regeneration is on the banned list for a reason, because it's been abused, and it's no fair to the rest of us. While we do allow banned powers to occasionally be played, it's because they are presented in a way that is unique or interesting. There's nothing in your app that suggests to me we should bend the rules for you.

Personality: Yes, we have other characters with angst, and emo-ness, but we do not allow soapboxing here, not on hot buttons topics. Religion, sexuality, politics, we don't need a lot of flag waving or working out of personal issues. This gets very awkward and comfortable for other players and makes the game no fun. If you plan on that, you'll be asked to stop and adjust your character. If you decide you don't want to adjust, you won't be playing here. This includes his bi-sexuality. These are elements that can be offensive if handled as the sole purpose for the character or as wonky little quirks of little consequence. It is a fine fine line you're going to have to walk, and almost no one has managed to get it right without offending someone else. You're going to have to work to convince us, you're different.

History: Just so you know, the Horseman rides were only the first wave of Apocalypse's attacks. Though Death was taken down, he had infected hundreds, who then infected thousands. Approximately 1/6th of the civilized population was dead by the time Apocalypse was defeated. It's very possible that some of the infected made it all the way to where Giles is. The second half of his attack was to unleash The Eye of Horus, a machine that caused earthquakes, hurricanes, volcanoes, all manner of natural disaster. Every place was affected. Every place in the world. Something happened in Cardiff.

Skrulls, too, had a world wide effect. They replaced people all over the world. Their ships were over every major city. Everyone FREAKED OUT, until they activated the complacency wave, and then everyone without telepathic immunity believed they were our saviors. Only when the X-Men, and etc took down the wave did the world realize they were almost conquered. But every last person on the planet, except those immune or shielded in some way, were affected. Giles included.

As for the meetings, no. We would have visited once unless Giles was in danger from his powers, from humanity, or from another faction. We don't court mutants and make multiple trips as a rule because we just don't have time. When exactly did these meetings take place? You left the Time at the Institute question blank, so I don't know what was happening at that time, but it'll affect the meeting as well. As Giles is an adult currently, it seems odd his powers would just be manifesting now, since it usually hits around puberty, but there's wiggle room in that.

Current history doesn't have to be extremely detailed, as Giles was not involved in most of the main events, but he would definitely have known about them.


Bottom line though, is this. The rules are made for a reason around here. We've been around 6 years, and not all of those years were filled with people who just wanted to play. We've had repeated problems with people wanting to play "too bad ass." Convince us you're not one, because at the moment, you're coming off as a real pain in the rear.
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Alright, well I understand things have been abused before etc etc but I don't feel that my app reflects that I'm too overpowered, I did mention that I'd basically be sacrificing him all the time. It says you're an adult site but I can't be bi-sexual? The world is set in a world with religion, genocide of a people (mutants) and persecution, discrimination, all hot topics raised by the comic on purpose but they're not allowed here? Seems strange to me that in character you can't be this way, if someone gets offended it's usually their problem and should take it up in PM's with the other writer surely?

It's beside the point anyways, I'm not here to offend anyone at all, if my characters actions or thoughts offend someone then so be it. Did you stop to wonder if trying to stop my character from being bi-sexual would not offend me? There are some anti-homosexuality vibes coming from that to me. I'm choosing not to be really offended but I just think it's kind of stupid. You can't not offend some people, if they don't like it just don't role play with that person, it' pretty simple. I find it strange that a character can't have it's own thoughts on something even if they're negative, or seen as negative. It almost seems like you'd prefer most characters to be very similar. I was under the impression that you work with people not just dictate what happens. I don't feel like I've been a dick in anything I've said or been aggressive or argumentative, in fact I did actually say I would change pretty much everything asked for. I'll accept that the last statement of some of the things staying was a bit cheeky, I read it back and it seems a bit provoking but it wasn't meant to be so sorry for that.

What I wanted to stay is the history of church, bi-sexuality, and the regeneration powers and that's it really. Most other things would be changed appropriately and to your liking. To be honest with you though I think I'm going to go elsewhere. I can just see that even if I get approved that I'm not going to be accepted around here so there's just no point to it. If your and betsy's attitudes are anything to go by.
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