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Topic Started: Dec 20 2006, 05:54 PM (94 Views)
Emi Hundia	Dec 20 2006, 05:54 PM Post #1
Begginer Posts: 12 Group: Members Member #77 Joined: December 10, 2006	Name: Emi Hundia Age: 18 Height: 5'7 Weight:95 Race:human Gender: female Affiliations Family: Affiliates: ? Companions:slim but slightly muscular Relationships:Choas (bunny) Appearence Colors: Blue Green Pink And Black Appearence:Perkey Calm Relaxed and happy Clothing: tee and jeans Physical Body composition:? Strengths:lazer fighting and winning wars Weaknesses:rain and snow Mental Personality:kind back to people she likes also very head strong Fears:spiders, roaches, and her adoption mother Dislikes:caterpillers Likes:bugs and whopping butt Stats 20 points Attack:5 Vitality:1 Stamina:1 Magic:1 Defense:4 Speed:5 Scout:3 House Description:5 story w/28 huge rooms all acupied for her stuff Other History: foster child since 4. mother adopted her when she was 5. She ran away from her foster mother when her foster mother killed her dog and her baby brother. Pictures:none



Sharpe	Dec 20 2006, 06:12 PM Post #2
Looking through a glass onion... Posts: 399 Group: Elite Moderator Member #18 Joined: June 27, 2006	The history and appearance are kind of short at the moment. More than a single sentence would be good. Overall being indepth is good. Other than that it looks ok.
	ALBEL'S PROFILE ALBEL'S INVENTORY


Raro	Dec 20 2006, 06:59 PM Post #3
The Creator Posts: 1,515 Group: Admin Member #1 Joined: May 25, 2006	Mainly more on the history okay? body composition is how your character is built like, Is slightly muscualar. OR has a slim build. Or chubby around the waist. Examples.
	Perpetual Islands


Sapphire Flame	Dec 20 2006, 08:19 PM Post #4
Remember that you are unique, just like everyone else. Posts: 587 Group: Admin Member #2 Joined: May 25, 2006	Yeah, what they said. You might wanna fix the CaPiTiLiZaTiOn issues too. Complete sentences would also be helpful, but most definitely you'll need at least a paragraph for history. And no, two four-word sentences is not a paragraph. -._.- Seriously, we need to get inside the head of your character, we need to experience life from your character's perspective. I know it can be a little difficult writing profiles if your character isn't well thought out or you're a newbie RPer (when I look back on Serkane's profile, I think "Gah! What rubbish!) But I digress (whatever that means). Expand, expand, expand! Oh, and make sure your character has realistic flaws. Otherwise, you may be guilty of making a Mary Sue. Trust me, you don't want that.
	Serkane's storage Stormrider's talons- at belt Blue gem Orange gem Melana's storage Modified handgun- at belt Light amulet- around neck Ezkuro's storage Battle axe & sword- around belt Blacksmith's hammer- In pack. Lillith's storage Mage's staff- On back Ice ring- wearing Dagger- Concealed in clothing. Relkor and Shade's storage. Blade of darkness- At belt


numanuma50	Dec 20 2006, 08:25 PM Post #5
Realm Coordinator (fight it up!) Posts: 551 Group: Elite Moderator Member #26 Joined: July 13, 2006	Heh heh. If you want a real example of a Mary Sue, just ask about Kiez's character Chaos. He is completely different when not on the site. If he had put what Chaos was really supposed to be, he'd be completely dissapproved. But yeah, details are always good in a history. I personaly love writing. I can help out if you like!
	Why give up? Why give in? It's not enough! It never is. So I will go on, until the end. -Until the End, Breaking Benjamin (Avi is the album art for Phobia, Breaking Benjamin.)


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