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Grazed Knees; Sequel to 'Just Say Yes'
Topic Started: Nov 28 2011, 01:19 PM (4,414 Views)
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So ermm, I said I'd have the first part of the Just Say Yes sequel up much earlier than this. :ermm: But I have been fussing over it, rewriting and obsessing . I am still not sure I am 100% happy, but I decided to stop fussing and just post the first chapter. :haha:

So the first chapter of Grazed Knees, the JSY sequel, is now up.

Chapter One

I really hope you like it!

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Whaaa, tomorrow! I'll read it tomorrow. Tonight is all about finishing NaNoWriMo
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I'm all Graped up, whoohoohoo :haha:

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I think you've made a great start with this sequel. I don't know if anyone is ever 100% satisfied with their own work, so you'll just have to trust your readers :)
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I just added it to my favorites list and story alert. I will have to read it when I get back from lunch.
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:yahoo: Love it. Great start, I'm looking forward to the next chapter........
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:spaz: :spaz: :spaz:

I haven't even started reading yet, it made my day that you posted the sequel!

I've got some work I HAVE to do today, but it can wait a little longer, cuz I'm gonna go read now :p . Even though it's gonna kill me between updates, I just don't think I can wait til it's done. lol. Though, I probably will never want it to end the way you write. :)

EDIT: I guess it's a good thing I ended up checking a few things before actually starting to read it, cuz now this is exactly what I need after getting ticked off at my montage being removed (of course I just linked to it on another site, but still, ugh)....so this will make me feel better I'm sure. Going to go scan over all of Just Say Yes again right now, then will start this one.
Edited by svugirl, Nov 28 2011, 10:12 PM.
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Awesome! I love how you had them have one night together before their suspension starts. I can't wait to read what you come up with next.
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magicmum and DaniNei, thank you so much. I am so happy to hear you liked it.

SoWritten, thanks! I hope you like it!

svugirl, aw you are very sweet. Thank you, I hope you like it! Bummer about your montage being removed, super annoying!

Margie, thanks! Yes, you are probably right.
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Thanks for your support, all. I have quite a few reviews saying 'good start', which I know is meant well, I hope! But kind of makes me feel like I need to do better next time. Almost like when a teacher gave you a 'good effort' sticker, it's good, but it's not an 'excellent work' sticker.

Anyways, I am being silly. Thank you all and I will get onto the next chapter ASAP.
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Ok well I kinda ended up reading all of JSY again instead of just scanning it. Once I started, I couldn't stop. lol. Anyways, just finished Chapter 1 of Grazed Knees. You've got me hooked again! I'm really interested to see how you write the suspension, as I think you and I probably have a similar opinion on what would happen, but we'll see. Whatever you do, just don't keep them apart during the whole thing. LOL!

Yes, PLEASE update ASAP! I beg of you.

As for the "good start" comments....those people are probably not fully expressing themselves, notice the people here have even said "great" start. :D Also, people are probably just anxious for chapter 2, to see what happens with the suspension.

Trust me, it was perfect. You felt like you were there. You were descriptive of everything, you captured her hesitancy, you wrote detailed kisses, and it was all in character. So you have nothing to worry about. You writing just sucks the reader in like a magnet.
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marap
Nov 28 2011, 11:03 PM
Thanks for your support, all. I have quite a few reviews saying 'good start', which I know is meant well, I hope! But kind of makes me feel like I need to do better next time. Almost like when a teacher gave you a 'good effort' sticker, it's good, but it's not an 'excellent work' sticker.

Anyways, I am being silly. Thank you all and I will get onto the next chapter ASAP.
Don't worry about the "good start" comments. Most of the time it means the person took time out to review your story and wants to see where the story goes. A lot of times the first chapter or two get the "good start" comments because readers like it but are unsure of where you are going to take the story.
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Your first chapter was very nicely written marap! I wouldn't worry about the good start comments either. If I ever say it, it's usually because I'm honestly saying the first chapter was good and I want to see where the story goes :D
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Same here about the good start comment (think I put it in my review too) and I usually write a shorter review for the first chapter because it's harder to have a longer opinion than for the next ones as the story unfolds.

I apologize if you took it the wrong way but you shouldn't, I love how you write :)
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Thank you all so much :hug: I think I was just being oversensitive and paranoid this morning.

I think it was just cause some of the first reviews I got were very brief and just said 'good start', and left me a bit deflated. Anyways, thank you all and I am glad you are liking it. Sorry for being so dramatic, don't want to seem ungrateful or snobby.

Nathy, I was not referring to you at all, no need to apologise. I am sorry if you thought I meant you! You're lovely and your review was lovely. :hug:
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Nov 29 2011, 12:04 PM
Thank you all so much :hug: I think I was just being oversensitive and paranoid this morning.

I think it was just cause some of the first reviews I got were very brief and just said 'good start', and left me a bit deflated. Anyways, thank you all and I am glad you are liking it. Sorry for being so dramatic, don't want to seem ungrateful or snobby.

Nathy, I was not referring to you at all, no need to apologise. I am sorry if you thought I meant you! You're lovely and your review was lovely. :hug:
hehe...don't overthink it.

But seriously don't worry about the paranoia. Ive talked to enough of the other authors to know that we all have a tendency to break down reviews and overanalyze them. It's part of the fun. ;)
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hehe...don't overthink it.

But seriously don't worry about the paranoia. Ive talked to enough of the other authors to know that we all have a tendency to break down reviews and overanalyze them. It's part of the fun. ;)

Ha! I tend to do that a lot, LOL.

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Chapter two is up!

http://www.fanfiction.net/s/7591112/2/Grazed_Knees
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:wub: Awesome. Sam releasing his feelings without waiting for a reply, andy's hesitation, Franck's teasing, the locker room scene..everything is perfect.
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Dec 10 2011, 12:30 PM
:wub: Awesome. Sam releasing his feelings without waiting for a reply, andy's hesitation, Franck's teasing, the locker room scene..everything is perfect.
Thank you so much, I am glad you liked it! :D
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Dec 10 2011, 01:13 PM
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Dec 10 2011, 12:30 PM
:wub: Awesome. Sam releasing his feelings without waiting for a reply, andy's hesitation, Franck's teasing, the locker room scene..everything is perfect.
Thank you so much, I am glad you liked it! :D
marap, please get off this board and write some more!!!!! I'm only kiddin' - sort of, 'cause love your story and can't wait for more! I would post the same message to Margie311, too! :eyeroll:

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