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Andy's words to her mother
Topic Started: Dec 27 2011, 05:55 AM (1,894 Views)
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I can't believe I'm going to post this, but all of this started playing out in my head out of nowhere a few minutes ago. So I needed to get it out before it bugged me to death. I'm not a "writer", I've only written 1 oneshot (not about a couple) in the past. But there were about 2 parts of this that are what made me decide to post it, because I wanted to write out the idea, especially since Andy's mom may appear in S3. I just needed to get it out of my system. lol

So this is not edited or beta'ed. I'm actually writing it right now as I go. It's just a little dialogue that popped into my head, so I'm not gonna write it formally. I had more of a conversation playing in my head, but I'm just writing the part that stuck out to me the most.

Andy to her mother in the middle of the conversation....

"You may be my biological mother because you gave birth to me, but you have never and will never be a mom. A mom doesn't abandon her child."

Later on in the conversation (Andy's last words to her mother)....

"I want you to remember me, but don't you dare remember me as some helpless child you left. I want you to remember me as a woman who took every ounce of your betrayal and used it to become a passionate and independent woman. A woman that you will never know, because you know what, this time, I'm gonna be the one who walks away."

*Andy walks out of the room*
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I think you should build around this. Even if it only ends up being Andy walking in, giving her a piece of her mind and walking out again. There aren't a terribly huge amount of fics where Andy confronts her mother, so it's always good to have more :)
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That means a lot coming from you (someone who is a favorite author of many). I may considering writing a full conversation. I'm not good with descriptions though, so I probably wouldn't have it in a story format, more of just dialogue. But I don't have a FF.net acct, so I'd just post it here anyway. But I may do that, or may want to collaborate with someone on it, if they want to. I'm not sure I could find the voice for Andy's mother.
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You don't really need a lot of descriptions. It can come off as wordy *L* Trust me. And it's a pain. Dialogue interspersed with facial expressions and body positioning goes a long way. Especially if the dialogue is good and true to character.

I'd say, give it a shot, and if you don't like it, you can always chuck it.
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I may see about the collaboration. I appreciate the motivation.
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I love the idea you have and would definately work on it... you could build it into something great, even if you would prefer for it to stay as something more of a dialogue. I really would go for it!
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Thank you!
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The pieces of dialogue you already have I feel are very Andy, they remind me of her talk with her father, so I'd say it's most definitely in character.

I hope you get around to working on it. It has a lot of potential.
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Mar 3 2012, 09:30 PM
The pieces of dialogue you already have I feel are very Andy, they remind me of her talk with her father, so I'd say it's most definitely in character.

I hope you get around to working on it. It has a lot of potential.
That means a lot coming from someone who writes so in character.....thank you so much.
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That seems very in character but it's not just about being in character it's about being in real life. I have three young adult sons (I just revealed I'm old) whose father w
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OK I can't type. Let's try that one again.

That seems very in character but it's not just about being in character it's about being in real life. I have three young adult sons (I just revealed I'm old) whose father walked out on them when they were 7, 5 and 3. They have had almost no contact since. They are well adjusted considering, and refer to him as the "sperm donor" not dad. He is not a father figure to them. He sent a birthday present to the middle one last week. It was the first time he ever acknowledged any of their birthdays and the first time they had any contact in years. He looked at it and said "I guess at least we know he's not dead." Basically with contact at this point, they don't really care. It's one drop in a bucket that should be very full. Andy would probably feel the same

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Mar 4 2012, 09:05 PM
OK I can't type. Let's try that one again.

That seems very in character but it's not just about being in character it's about being in real life. I have three young adult sons (I just revealed I'm old) whose father walked out on them when they were 7, 5 and 3. They have had almost no contact since. They are well adjusted considering, and refer to him as the "sperm donor" not dad. He is not a father figure to them. He sent a birthday present to the middle one last week. It was the first time he ever acknowledged any of their birthdays and the first time they had any contact in years. He looked at it and said "I guess at least we know he's not dead." Basically with contact at this point, they don't really care. It's one drop in a bucket that should be very full. Andy would probably feel the same

Thank you so much. Actually this story will be drawing from some of my own personal feelings that are somewhat similar, so I'm hoping that will help it to be in character and also be an outlet for me.

Thank you for sharing that story, I'm sorry that you all have suffered through that. I'm glad to hear they were well adjusted. It means you raised them right despite what happened. I'm also glad they can see it for what it is and are not in denial, which could lead to several issues. I can see where Andy's anger is valid because her mother chose to walk away, and not for some acceptable reason. If she wanted a divorce, she didn't even try to get joint custody, she just left. So yeah, I see where all her emotions are coming from and how valid they are.
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I just agree with the words you wrote for Andy to say. I don't really know that I would use the word suffer in their experience. I've always told my sons that hey your life would probably be better with your father in it, but it's not like it's bad the way it is. You got friends. You got family (including his parents and sisters). You're involved in activities you love. Life overall is good. They seriously have all said half jokingly half serious (like Sam) ... we're awesome! It's his loss. I think by the time most kids in this position get to be adults ... like Andy, they would realize it's the missing parent's loss more than it's theirs. My sons don't have anger like you describe Andy having. They have indifference ... which is probably worse ... and much more difficult for their father to overcome if he ever wanted to (and hey who knows what that birthday present meant ... it was a nice one). I think Andy's words you describe may be more indifference as well. And it should take a lot to overcome. Surely more than one season!
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I just agree with the words you wrote for Andy to say. I don't really know that I would use the word suffer in their experience. I've always told my sons that hey your life would probably be better with your father in it, but it's not like it's bad the way it is. You got friends. You got family (including his parents and sisters). You're involved in activities you love. Life overall is good. They seriously have all said half jokingly half serious (like Sam) ... we're awesome! It's his loss. I think by the time most kids in this position get to be adults ... like Andy, they would realize it's the missing parent's loss more than it's theirs. My sons don't have anger like you describe Andy having. They have indifference ... which is probably worse ... and much more difficult for their father to overcome if he ever wanted to (and hey who knows what that birthday present meant ... it was a nice one). I think Andy's words you describe may be more indifference as well. And it should take a lot to overcome. Surely more than one season!
I think it's a mix of emotions for Andy...anger, frustration, confusion, sadness, hurt....but I think anger would probably be the one she shows most on the outside.

I'm glad you were able to help your sons take some positives from the negatives, I'm sure that's helped them a lot.
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It's finally ready....almost. Full draft is done and sent for final beta'ing. I'll put it up on ff.net & SamandAndy.org sometime tomorrow, hopefully at least a few hours before the party at the very latest.
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Fisrt, not having a ff.net account is not really a problem. You can subscribe whenever you want. So. don't let this little detail stop you ...

I love what you wrote - my cousins went through an experience just like Andy's, their mother went out on them when they were 7, 6 and 5 years old. They went to live with my mother (I was 2 yo at that time) and they NEVER recovered from being abandoned.
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Fisrt, not having a ff.net account is not really a problem. You can subscribe whenever you want. So. don't let this little detail stop you ...

I love what you wrote - my cousins went through an experience just like Andy's, their mother went out on them when they were 7, 6 and 5 years old. They went to live with my mother (I was 2 yo at that time) and they NEVER recovered from being abandoned.
After I registered for a ff.net acct, it wouldn't let me submit anything for like 2 days. So I guess that worked out in the long run since I didn't have it done last Thursday, as was my first intention. It'll be out sometime today.

Thank you so much for that. I'm sorry for what they went through, but one day, I just hope they'll look back and discover the strength and independence that it hopefully has given them.
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I owe some girls here some videos for their help!!! :flower:

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Ok it looks like the changes are now showing to the A/N and to the dashes/italics spacing.

Stupid ff.net messed up my dashes and the spacing around italics. But it looks like the changes are showing now, let me know if I missed a dash or extra space around italics.
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You had issues with this? I totally didn't notice (which just goes to show how good it was because I normally notice those things)
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